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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Barbie-19

Happy Diwali :)

lovely piece of writing Kiran 👍🏼
loved the 1st part..ahh PH
Meet's 1st meeting was cute 😆
eager to know more abt it
update soon

thanks tooba for reading and commenting 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: MariaArHiholic

what a diwali treat Kiran this is such a superb os 😳 and i'll wait for your update... all the best with studies baby 🤗


I loved Prem Heer Preet Meher meeting I mean Preet hahaha 🤣 PB... only me have the right to call Prem like PB 🤣 and then Meher way to go girl 😎
Premeer scene ahhh so beautiful !😳 he didn't wanted to leave her hand aahhh 😳
can't wait for the next part!

thank u so much darling...i'll update soon 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago


Originally posted by: Hcsee17

KIRAN PLSS UPDATE NEXT

WAITING DEAR...



i'd starting writing next..will try to update soon 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
will be updating next part of my OS today or may be tomorrow 😊
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Hello Deshians finally i completed the last past of my OS-Meri Jaan.
And if by any chance you forget about the OS, so for that here is the first part link of OS

First Part:-
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/95166919

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Recap

Prem:- Prem juneja ne yeh hath chordne ke liye nahi pakarda...lekin abhi ke liye agar tum chahati ho to chord deta hun...but only for the time being...

Prem smirk and winked at her and left from there leaving a shocked Heer...

--Flashback End--

OS-Meri Jaan

Part-2 (last part)

---Present---

Prem stopped kissing heer when he realized that she is not responding..He looked up from her neck..and saw that she was lost in her thoughts...He smiled and gently tucked a strand that was falling on her beautiful face..

Prem (softly):- Heer

But she didn't listen

Again Prem called but this time little louder

Prem:- Heer!!!

Heer (coming out of her thoughts):- huh..kya..kya hua Prem???

Prem:- yahi to main tumse pochna chahata hun..ki kya hua?? Yahan main tumhare sath romance karne ki koshish kar raha hun or tum ho ki..muje pe dhyan dene ki bajaye tum soch mein doobi ho...not fair!!!

Prem pouted and Heer smiled

Heer:- I am sorry..main to bus uss din ke bare mein soch rahi thi jab main tumse pehli baar mili thi..

She chuckled:- kya impression parda tha tumhara mere upar us time..muje laga tha ki tum wo jo cheapest Romeo nahi hote jo har waqt flirt karta rehata hai bilkul waisa hi lage the...

Prem (surprised):- really tumne sach mein mere bare mein aisa socha tha??

Heer:- han to or kya sochti...ab humari pehli meeting mein tumne mera haath pakard liya tha...muje laga ki tum mere sath flirt kar rahe ho..muje kya pata tha ki uss time tumhare dimang mein kya chal raha hai..

Prem smiled: - hmm lekin sabse zyada gussa to tumhe tab aya tha jab maine tumhe propose kiya tha..yaad hai

Heer:- off course how can I forget that day..muje bohot hi ache se yaad hai wo di.

--Flashback"

Heer Maan was standing on terrace looking at the moon...

It has been a month since juneja's shifted to Maan house...Gayatri juneja and Lalit juneja are lovable as her mon-dad..Preet the biggest prankster the world just like Meher..He always manages to keep the environment joyful in the house...But one person is getting on her nerve that is The great Prem Juneja.

Whenever he was near her he always try to get her attention by doing stupid things..and never leave a chance to irritate her..He always kept looking at her intensely making her dam nervous...Always tries to get close to her when they are alone.

But deeply in her heart she liked his antics, the way he tries to get her attention on him. The way he makes fun of him. The way he irritates her...She liked it...but she was too stubborn to admit it that she like Prem...No way she never gonna admit the fact that she LIKE him..Her ego was coming in between.

Just then she felt his presence...she felt that he came near her and stood behind her so close.

Prem (huskily):- Heer..

Heer closed eyes as she felt the butterflies were flying here and there in her stomach..But before he could see her reaction she immediately opened her eyes and mask up an attitude on her face

Heer (try to being irritating):- Ab kya hai Prem..ab kis baat ko leke muje pareshan karne aye ho..

Prem smiled:- Nahi pareshan nahi..main tumse kuch kehne aya tha..

Heer:- kya

Prem:- Heer...um..I LOVE YOU!!!

Heer got shocked

Prem:- I love you Heer..main tumse bohot pyar karta hun..or tumahre sath apni poori zindagi bitana chahata hun...marry me!!!

Heer was still in the state of shock..Did Prem Juneja just proposed her for marriage..But why me, thought Heer

There are many beautiful girls in his life who were his friends...so why, or is he just trying to play with me..to make fun me..oh ya what can I expect from a N.R.I...although I like him..But i am dam sure right now he's trying to play with my emotions. But I won't let him do that, thought an angry Heer.

Seeing the anger flashing in her beautiful eyes..Prem tried to talk to her but she didn't let him

Heer (angrily):- What the hell do you think of me Mr.Prem Juneja!! Ab yeh konsa naya natak ya koi naya prank hai tumhara...tum jaise lardko ko mein bohot achi tarha se janti hun...

Prem:- muj jaise lardke matlab??

Heer:- han tum jaise lardke..tum to Canada mein palle barde ho..lardkiyon ko apne age piche kaise ghumana hai yeh tum achi se jante hoge na...sacha pyar..shadi..ghar pariwar yeh sab tumhare liye sirf ek mazak hoga na..tumhe in sab cheezon ki value kyun pata hogi...canada mein lardkiyan patane se furast kahan mili hogi..tumhare liye to yeh sab sirf ek time pass haina

Prem:- heer tum mer...

But Heer again stopped him

Heer (angrily):- or kya keh rahe the tum...tum mujhse pyar karte ho...pyar ka matlab bhi jante ho tum..abhi ek mahina hi hua hume mile hue..or ek mahine mein tumhe mujhse pyar bhi hogya..itna, itna ki tum mujhse shadi karna chahte ho...wah prem wah..manna pardega tumhari fast forwardness ko...but u know what mein tumhare is khel mein shamil nahi hone wali...so you better stay away from me..dor raho mujhse..warna main bhul jaoungi ki tum humare ghar pe meheman ho...samjhe!!

And with this Heer angrily left from there leaving a hurt Prem alone

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Prem came in his room sit on the bed...His eyes were red due to tears..He was hurt..hurt for what Heer said to him..He took his phone and see heer's pics which he had taken secretly without her knowledge..

Prem:- mujhe is baat ka dukh nahi heer..ki tumne mere pyar ko thukra diya..dukh to muje is baat ka hai ki tum mere bare mein aisa sochti ho..in ek mahine mein hum larde jhagre lekin kahin na kahin mere dil mein yeh umeed thi ki tum bhi muje pasand karti ho..lekin maine kabhi yeh nahi socha tha ki tumne muje apni nazaro mein itna gira diya hai...

Prem wiped his tears, still looking at her pic

PRem:- abhi tumne mujhse pocha tha na ki is ek mahine mein mujhse tum se pyar kaise ho gya...is ek mahine mein nahi heer...pyaar to mein tumse bachpan se karta hun..tabse jabse bauji ne muje humare rishtey ke bare mein bataya..tabse meine ek ek pal tumhare intazar mein kaisa kata hai...tumhe dekhne ke liye meri ankhen kitni tarasi hai...yeh sirf mera dil janta hai...or tum mujhse itni nafrat karti ho heer..itni nafrat!!!

--Flashback End"

Prem looked at his angel wrapped in white sheet sleeping and cuddling peacefully on his bare chest..Prem admire her and placed a caring kiss on her forehead. He gently lifted her head off his chest placed on puffy pillow caringly. He loosens her tight grip on him and got out of the bed without disturbing her sleep.

Wearing only his track pant he went towards the window and started thinking about the day when heer Heer accepted his love, when Heer confesses her love..That day!!!

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--Flashback--

The party was going on Juneja Hotel because of the great success of Junejas in their business. And also in the happy occasion of Prem taking full charge of the juneja business

Prem was standing in full black attire..Guests are coming to him and congratulating him..And but he was continuously glancing at Heer in light green chiffon saree and was standing with Preet and Meher and some of other Preet's friends.From past 2 weeks he has being trying to talk to her..To give her clarification..But she kept on ignoring him.

Heer was talking to meher but she can feel his passionate gaze on her..And now it's being hard to ignore that gaze as it was that much powerful..Just then gayatri came there and she asked her to go Prem's private room and bring her purse as she forgets to bring it

Heer:- lekin aunty main kaise???

Gayatri:- kyun?? Tu meri beti nahi hai kya???

Heer:- ji aunty hun lekin mein prem ke room mein..

Gayatri:- dekh beta prem ka jo private room haina wo 2nd floor pe hai or lift abhi under construction hai. subha itni mushkil se mein gai thi seediyan chardke..ab dobara mujhse nahi chala jayega or yeh preet to kahin dikhai nahi de raha or prem bhi mahemaano ke sath busy hai..warna main un dono ko hi bol deti or waiter ko bhi nahi bol sakti kyun mere purse mein kuch kimti saman bhi parde hain..isilye beta main tuje keh rhai hun..aj le ana..

Heer:- thik hai aunty mein leke ati hun

Gayatri gave keys to and she went away

Prem saw Heer going towards the staircase and he was about go after her but his luck was not in his favor. Some of the guest came to him and started talking.

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Heer entered Prem's private room..She switch on the lights...the room was beautiful. The decorative candle were light everywhere..

Itne saare candles kyun jalayen hue hain yahan..She wondered

Heer (to herself):- muje kya karna hai..main gayatri aunty ka purse lena hai..

She was about to move towards the cupboard but she stumble on her heels and about fall but she held the side table and balance herself but one thing she didn't notice is that candles on the table fall down near the curtains of the door..

She went towards the cupboard but she notices the picture frame on the wall. Prem was standing in the pic in his business suit putted both hands in his pocket..

True gentlemen, Heer thought

Just then she felt smoke behind her. She turned around and saw fire everywhere...

[Ab fire pori jagha kaise lagi...IMAGINE YOURSELF😆]

Heer (shocked):- oh my god!! Ye..yeh aag kaise lagi...

She immediately went towards the door but she couldn't opened the as the door catches the fire.

Heer (shouted):- koi hai!! Bachao!! Help

Heer started crying

Meanwhile in the party...everyone was busy just then a waiter came running to Prem.

Waiter:- sir sir

Now everyone's attention is on waiter

Prem:- Kya hua tumhe..itna gharbraye hue kyun ho??

Waiter:- Sir apke private room aag lag gai hai sir

Prem:- kya aag kaise lagi??

Everyone got shocked. Gayatri worriedly came towards Prem

Gayatri:- Prem private room mein to maine Heer ko bheja tha..kahin wo aag mein to nahi phas gai..

Prem got shocked. He felt like someone is piercing his heart..the thought of losing Heer made him shiver like hell

Waiter:-han han mam..andar kisi lardki ke chilane ki awaze bhi arahi thi..

Now teji and Meher started crying.. Balraj was trying to console them as Prem blast that waiter

Prem (angrily):- or tum yahan aake time waste kar rahe ..jaake aag bhujhate..

Saying this both Prem and Preet ran towards Prem's private room along with Meher and elders.

Preet:- PB ap tab tak jao..tab tak mein fire brigade ko call karta hun

Prem:- han thik hai

Prem stood outside of his private room and saw the dangerous flame through window as the door was closed

Prem:- Heer!!! Heer!!!

But no response

Just then Meher, Preet and elders came there and saw the fire inside the room and Prem was trying to open the door..As the door got jammed

Teji (crying):- Hey bhagwan meri bachi ki raksha karna

Meher (crying) Di!! Di!!!

Prem looked toward family members

Prem:- darwaza khul nahi raha hai jam ho gaya hai..isse tordna pardega..

Lalit:- Han to what are you waiting for?? Tordo darwaza!!

Preet:- PB mein apki madad karta hun

Now Prem and Preet banged on the door with great force and the door broke

And all of them saw the fire all around the room..and due to smoke they aren't able to see Heer

Prem:- heer!!! Heer!!

Meher:- Di!! Di kahan ho ap..

Preet was about to enter the room with Prem but Prem stopped him

Preet:- lekin kyun PB.. main bhi apke sath andar chalunga

Prem:- Nahi Preet..mere hote hue main teri jaan khartre mein nahi ane dunga..

Preet:- or PB apki jaan...

Prem:- APNI JAAN ko bachane ke liye hi to mein ja raha hun andar..

Preet looked at Prem

Prem:- pls preet..tuje meri kasam hai tu andar nahi ayega.

Saying this Prem entered the room crossing the fire..

Prem:- Heer!! Heer!! Kahan ho tum ??

Just then he saw her lying on the floor unconscious

For a second got numb seeing his Heer in this state. He ran towards her, sits on the floor, took her on his lap, patting her cheeks

Prem:- Heer!! Heer ankhe kholo...dekho mein agaya..Main tumhe kuch nahi hone dunga Heer

Heer was still in unconscious state

Prem looked around and saw the whole room catched fire

Prem:- Ab kya karun..

Prem ran towards the cupboard but he fall down near the shelf case and his head got hurt. The blood started oozing out of his head..but still he manage to stand and went towards the cupboard and took out blanket..There was only one blanket.

He covered her with that blanket still not caring about himself

He lifted her in his arms...and went towards the door..

Prem (to himself):- darwaze ke charo taraf to aag aag lagi hui hain..ab mein Heer ko bahar kaise leke jaoun???

He looked at Heer for some time and then with determination on his face, he held her tightly close to his heart..Making sure that she is fully covered with blanket..His was head was still hurting like anything, but the only thing which was coming into his mind was that he had to keep his heer safe..

He started walking towards the door

Everyone saw Prem lifted unconscious Heer in his hand coming towards the door

Preet (shouted):- PB yeh ap kya kar rahe ho...ap darwaze ki taraf mat aao..PB apko chot lag jayegi ap jal jaoge..

But Prem was not listening to him...he stood near the door and saw the fire around it..He closed his eyes held Heer closed and started to walk across the door..his right arm caught fire..And when he came out of the room he immediately put heer on the couch in the lobby of the hotel..and continuously patting her cheeks..not caring about his burning arm

Preet took out his coat putted around the arm of Prem that caught fire.

Prem:- Heer!! Ankhen kholo...

Preet:- PB apka hath jal gaya hai..apke sar se kitna khoon beh raha hai..

Prem still not listening to him

Prem (in tears):- Preet dekhna Heer ankhen nahi khol rahi hai..Heer...ankhe kholo

Balraj came to Prem made him stand as Teji sit beside heer

Balraj:- Prem..Prem dekho meri taraf...Heer thik hai..wo sirf behoosh ho gai hai..beta tum dekho khudko..kitni chot lagi hai tumhe

Prem's eyes were still glued to Heer. But suddenly he felt that all things are spinning around...He become unconscious and fell down.

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At Hospital

Heer opened her eyes..Looking around..Trying to identify where she was?? Just then she saw her mother sitting beside her

Heer:- maa.

Teji:- Heer..meri bachi tu thik hai..

Heer:- Maa..wo aag..main aag mein..

Teji:- shhh shant hoja beta tu bilkul thik hai..kuch nahi hua tujhe..tu hospital mein hai

Heer sit on the bed and looked at herself not even a single scratch..

Heer:- ma..muje chot kaise nahi lagi..main to aag mein phas gai thi na..to phir..

Teji:- Han tu aag mein phas gai thi or tu behosh ho gai thi ..or tuje ek bhi chot nahi aai..sirf or sirf Prem ki waje se.

Heer (confused) Prem ki waje se matlab??

Then Teji narrated the whole story how Prem saved her

Heer (In tears):- Prem ne meri jaan bachai...maa muje prem se milna hai..

Teji:- beta abhi nahi..abhi teri tabiyat thik nahi hai..tu aram kar..

Heer cried:- nahi maa muje prem se abhi milna hai...kitna galat samjha maine use..ap use bula dijiyena..

Teji:- wo abhi yahan nahi asakta

Heer:- kyun??

Teji (hesitantly):- beta wo umm

Heer:- maa kya hua??

Teji:- beta Prem abhi behosh hai..usse kafi chote aai hain

Heer shocked:- kya!! Or ap yeh baat muje ab bata rahe ho maa..

Heer immediately got out of the bed and ran out side

Teji followed her saying:- Heer! Ruk ja beta!!

Heer went to reception

Heer:- ap please muje bata sakti hain yeh Prem Juneja konse room mein hai

Nurse:- wait a minute mam...han Mr Prem Juneja room no-103 ..aage se left

Heer:- Thank u so much

Heer ran towards room no-103

Gayatri, lalit and balraj was sitting on the bench outside Prem's room as doctor was checking him.

Gayatri saw Heer was running towards Prem's room

Gayatri came in between and held her in her arms

Gayatri:- Heer beta yeh kya kar rahi ho tum..tumhari tabiyat thik nahi hai..

Just then teji also came there

Teji:- maine bhi isse yahi kaha..lekin yeh zidd leke baithi hai ki muje Prem se milna hai muje prem se milna hai

Heer tried to go inside Prem's room but Balraj stopped him

Balraj:- Heer beta abhi tum Prem se nahi mil sakti

Heer:- lekin kyun papa..aj wo is halat mein sirf or sirf meri waje se hain..muje use milna hai papa please..

She cried

Balraj:- beta samjne ki koshish karo..doctors abhi abhi andar hai use check kar rahe hai..tum chinta mat karo wo bilkul thik hai..

Just then doctors came ouside

Heer:- doctor..pr..prem kaisa hai wo thik to haina..usse zyada chot to nahi aai na..

Doctor:- relax Miss maan..ap bilkul chinta mat kijiye Mr.Juneja bilkul thik hai..bas thordi bohot chote hain..jo ki bohot jaldi hi thik ho jayegi..

Heer:- doctor pls muje prem se milna hai..pls doctor

Doctor:- umm lekin..

Heer cried:- pls doctor..

Doctor:- acha thik hai..but make sure that he won't get disturb

Heer wiped her tears and nodded and went inside his room

Heer saw him lying lifelessly on the hospital bed..There was a bandage on his head..Sleeping peacefully.

Heer went near him and sit beside him..Took his hand in her's.

Heer (whispered):-I am sorry prem..muje maaf kardo..maine tumhe kitna galat samjha..kitna kuch bura kaha tumhe..or tumne meri jaan bachane ke liye..apni jaan ki fikar tak nahi ki..kyun Prem..

Just then she felt Prem's fingers putted little pressure on her palm. She looked towards him and saw him staring at her..she was about go from there but he held her wrist..

Prem:- mat jao..please!!

Heer looked at Prem and simply get back on the same position

Prem:- tum thik to hona..

Heer (in tears):- tumhare hote hue muje kuch ho sakta hai kya..kyn Prem..Kyun kiya tumne aisa..agar tumhe kuch ho jata to..mere liye tumne apni jaan khatre mein kyun dali..

Prem gave a week smile to her

Prem:- APNI JAAN bachane ke liye hi to yeh jaan khatre mein dali thi maine..

Heer looked at him for a second

Heer:- maine tumse kitna kuch kaha..kitni buri baatien kahi..in kuch dino mein..kitni buri tarha se behave kiya tumhare sath..uske baad bhi tum mujhse itna pyar karte ho??

Prem smiled and wiped her tear and signal her to came near him..Heer came near him bring her face close to his

Prem (whispered):- han..kyunki main janta hun..wo sari baatien tumne apne dil nahi kahi thi..wo tumhara darr ki kahin mein tumhe thoka na de dun haina heer..

Heer looked at him shocked how does he know that??

Prem:- jab tum muje wo sari baatien bol rahi thi to wo darr tumhari ankhon mein saaf dikhai de raha tha muje...or main yeh bhi bohot ache se janta hun ki tum bhi mujhse utna hi pyar karti ho jitna ki main tumse karta haun..haina

Heer in tears nodded hear up and down and putted her head on his chest and started sobbing and continuously saying I am sorry I am sorry!!

Prem smiled and hugged her with his left arm

Prem (teasingly):- agar muje pata hota ki aag mein kudne se tum mere pas ajaogi to main to bohot pehle hi tumahre kamre mein aag laga deta..

Prem let out a small laugh while hugging her...Heer hit him slightly on his right arm

Prem:- ouch!!

Heer immediately looked up from his chest

Heer:- i..am sorry Prem!!

Prem:- shh..

He cupped her face and caressing her cheeks

Prem:- I LOVE YOU!!

Heer took his hand and kissed it

Heer:- I LOVE YOU TOO!!

Saying this they both hugged each other

--Flashback End"

Prem smiled widely remembering their confession scenes..just then he heard

Prem!!

He turned around and saw that his wife Heer was murmuring his name in her sleep..Trying to find him on the bed stretching her hand his side.

Prem walked towards her and get into the bed pulled her on his chest gently..Kissed on her forehead and stroking her hairs lovely

Prem:- I am her MERI JAAN..and I promise I won't' let you be alone

Heer too smiled in her sleep snuggling closed to him never wanted to leave him ever!!!

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THE END


Edited by kiran_28 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
aww... such cute ending for such a cute story.. just like premeer...
loved this os kiran..
thanks for pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
That was a lovely ending <3
Awesome update <3
Loved it <3 <3 <3 <3
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hey Kiran 😃

pg 70 wow cute ch
Lovely scenes. Sigh fire in office huh. That was sad, especially on celebration.
The title is cute like your story. Love the dialogues and masti in btw.
G3 was sweet.
So Prem knows Heer from childhood but Heer wasn't really aware of him.
Ok cool.
Ty so much. Lovely update.
Keep rocking!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Woww Its SUPERB... Love it... Thanks for the pm...

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