Swaron OS- Repentance

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Alright guys my first attempt at full fledged writing I have written an OS on our very own swaron so plzzz do review like and comment on it and let me know here I go..😊-
Sharon's POV
Pain. That is what I felt deep inside of me and it was so prominent that it made me want to scream out so loud that I would atleast be able to vent out some part of it getting a little relief but I could'nt do that no sound came out of me. I was buried deep down in the quagmire of the painful thoughts that clouded my brain. I simply felt lost and my life worthless after hearing him say," Tum mere liye important nahi ho". I sat in the computer room reminiscing the various words that cut deep gashes in my heart.
"Tum mere liye important nahi ho", "Tumhare liye main ek toy boy hoon for you entertainment" , "Mere liye tumhare paas time nahi hain". Was this how our relationship was to end ?. We shared something so beautiful when our relationship was not clouded by misunderstandings. The secret meetings,the intense hugs and his sweet kisses which drove me over oblivian. I remembered it all, everything had seemed so perfect like nothing could go wrong but one storm came in and broke everything down bringing us back to the basic elements. I sat there remembering the last time we were here it was an outcome of a matter where I had insulted him and his love for me challenging it in front of the entire college and he had raised a question on my character after seeing shivam kiss me on the cheek which was a misunderstanding.
That was it,we both were always a prey to our misunderstandings never conveying our thoughts to each other and I realised how very wrong were we. We both needed to talk and clear our heads and stop hurling taunts at each other. Did we talk though? All we did was taunt each other there was no space for a mature talk. Back then though things were complicated we talked we touched but now it was all gone, gone were the days when he would follow me trying to make it up to me or bear my anger and insults, gone was the swayam who had told me,"Tum mere liye bahut special ho". The swayam who now faced me was strong, not bearing my insults and anger instead he fought back giving me an answer for my insults. His words rang in my eyes," tum mere liye important nahi ho" and kept repeating themselves till I stilled them putting my palms over my ears and screaming out loud in frustration.
Moving my hands from my ears I wrapped them over my knees hugging my knees close to my torso and started weeping bitterly. A torrent of tears leaked out of my orbs and with the tears leaked out the pain. I could let my sobs grow prominently as I knew no one would hear me here and I could let the real Sharon Raiprakash come out who would cry and feel and not hide her feelings behind a mask of anger. I felt good letting my real self take over. This pain would kill me and make me even more hollow then I already was. All of a sudden I felt the insides of my throat and lungs contract and I started finding it painfully difficult to breath. My breath coming out in short gasps as I started coughingly loudly. The emotions I felt and my constant crying had triggered my attack I fished around for the inhaler in my bag. Putting it to my mouth I pressed the pump but to my utter horror I discovered the inhaler to be devoid of any medicine it had depleted. My breathing became laboured as I heard urgent footsteps outside the computer room and then broke down seeing swayam before closing my eyelids.
Swayam's POV
"Tum mere liye important nahi ho". Those words slipped out of my mouth before I could even register what I was speaking and I saw the effects of my words on her. Something inside of her broke the moment she heard these words but no words of apologies and comfort could come out of my mouth. I was still reeling in the shock of speaking the words to sharon the girl whom I loved more then myself, more then life but her words again came to my ears," toh jao ban jao koi aur, tod do sab kuch." I again slipped on the hard mask over myself saying," Main wahi swayam nahi ban sakta sharon. I'm too hurt this time. I want you back too but you will take the first step to renew our relationship this time I cannot always be the peacemaker not me because it has always been me".
With these words I walked out of the store room to get on with my work. After sometime nilesh came to me and told me get some CD's from the computer room. I made my way towards the room looking out for sharon, I had not seen her since then my heart was gripped with worry but I ignored it just as I came close to the room I heard a loud coughing sound just like the one which sharon would have when she got an attack. Panic and agony gripped my being as I ran towards the room and banged open the door to find sharon collapsing on the floor before giving me one last look.
I stood shell shocked for a second before running towards her. I knelt beside her resting her head on my chest I patted her cheek to bring her back to her senses but I could not get any response out of her I saw an empty pump lying there. I took some water in my palm and sprinkled it on her face yet no response. "Sharon" I screamed in despair as loud as I could and tears ran down my face like never before.
"I will not give up like this" I thought. I brought back some of my willpower picking her up in arms I ran at inhuman speed. Everyone looked up at me in shock and alarm as I ran past them with sharon in arms. They flung thousands of questions my way but I cared a damn all I did was run to car safely putting sharon in the back seat I drove to the nearest hospital oblivious of the fact that the rest of the gang followed me.
After reaching the hospital the doctor put on a oxygen mask on sharon & turned telling all of us, "Don't worry she will be fine once she has some oxygen in her body I have sedated her with some antibiotics already but make sure not to put her through any stress though.'". I sat there looking at her not blinking an eye clasping her small hand in my big one's. Time passed I did not move an inch from there. He was burning in the fire of regret and fury. Fury at having hurt sharon like this not caring about her health for a moment. No words could soothe the fire that burned in him. Tears again started leaking out of his eyes as rey placed a comforting hand on my shoulder
" I love you sharon, I really really do. You're much more important than breathing in oxygen. I need you please come back to me please." With these words I slept by her holding her hand. It was morning when I felt her stir and open her eyes, I looked up to see her already staring at me. I saw her raising her hand and then she comfortingly put her palm on my cheek releasing me of all the agony and wiping my tears away. I leaned in and pressed a soft kiss on her palm. We sat there lost in our thoughts finally realising the intensity of our love and repented even saying hurtful words to each other..
Sharon's POV
I was discharged from the hospital a little while later and after coming home I took a quick shower wearing my white dress giving a quick glance in the mirror I left for swayam's home though weak internally to claim my love, my swayam back. She finally got his point even he was a human he had emotions and would like to be felt wanted and loved by someone. He could not be the peacemaker everytime "I will take the step to renew our relationship this time." With these thoughts I rang the bell and when swayam opened the door I immediately took him in a tight and comforting hug if I felt pain he felt double pain seeing me hurt. He hugged me back with the same intensity never wanting to let go scared that if he left me he would lose me for a lifetime.
"I am sorry swayam for all the pain I have given you by breaking up with you and then with all the harsh words I spoke and not making it up to you soon it was all my fault.. I signed the contract out of anger because you refused to talk to me and I had to lie to come to college from our camping date as you were very happy and content that day I did'nt want you to be sad and unhappy all over again. I swear I did not disclose a word to rey about us, what happened was I broke down after seeing you & aashi dance together on the song that was special for us it was "our" song and rey happened to call me that time and hearing me sob on the call he assumed you fought with me and all this mess happened.. I burned in jealousy that day and everytime I saw you with her. I can't stand the though of you with someone else and away from me I die a thousand deaths the moment such a thought comes in my mind.
The moment he heard the word death slip out of my mouth he pulled back out of the hug filled with agony again and said," Never say that again sharon please never again the thought of something happening to you makes me want kill myself please don't talk about separation now. I am tired of this distance please let's just-". I did'nt let him complete his sentence as I took his lips in the most passionate and soul searing kiss and swayam responded back pulling me closer by my waist leaving no space between us. I ran my fingers through his soft silky hair and he drew patterns all over my waist, our tongues fighting for victory. He bit me on my lower lip and sucked on it to soothe away the pain. He moved down placing urgent open mouth kisses down the curve of my neck biting me leaving his marks there as i moaned in pain and pleasure.
He went down pressing kisses all over my shoulder pulling my sleeve down and was sucking on my collarbone when I said with a content smile, " Please come back to me swayam life feels void and empty without you. Come back baby come back to me. I love you more then life, more then life, more then anything in this world. I swear to never let my anger & ego overpower me. I swear to keep you happy. Please swayam please.
Swayam looked at me while I said all this he felt his heart warm up with my words and all he could manage was," I love you sharon I love you more than before and will love you endlessly." Smiling he again placed his lips on mine taking me to the world where only we existed to swaron dreamland.. 😊.
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Okayy, yes I agree it was tooo long and some of you are probably going to sue me for boring you all like this and for taking so much time.😛 So yes I am ready to accept all the rotten eggs and tomatoes and sandals but stilletos's mat fekna guys please bahut dard hoga..😆.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow I loved this one shot!
Writing in one's point of view makes the story even better and interesting because it depicts his/ her true emotions and feelings. I myself enjoy reading in POVs rather than in some third person's point of view.

I liked how you depicted their emotions and feelings and at the end the beautifully portrayed patch up was no less than a happy dream!

Really good job for a first attempt. 😳👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: tanha29

Wow I loved this one shot!

Writing in one's point of view makes the story even better and interesting because it depicts his/ her true emotions and feelings. I myself enjoy reading in POVs rather than in some third person's point of view.

I liked how you depicted their emotions and feelings and at the end the beautifully portrayed patch up was no less than a happy dream!

Really good job for a first attempt.😳👍🏼

Thank you so much mihika I'm glad you liked my work I was pretty apprehensive of it because it was the first time I wrote an OS but I'm glad my hardwork paid off..😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank you dear..😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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one wrd ...awesum ...really damn gd writer u r ...!
cv's don use sharon's astama in proper place ...u used it...😉
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Originally posted by: fanista

one wrd ...awesum ...really damn gd writer u r ...!
cv's don use sharon's astama in proper place ...u used it...😉

Yea I thought so using the asthama track will be nice since the CV's aren't using it..😃. Thank you for the appreciation..😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome os
Continue it will be great
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Originally posted by: zk456789

Awesome os
Continue it will be great

Thank you so much will think of continuing it..😊.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Aap Kuch likh rahe ro and you did not even tell me ? 😭
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Okayyy!!! i mean dii are you aure that this is your first attempt? 😉
kahi ais atoh nai ki aapne kuch likha ho aur post nahi kiya ho? cuz you are a gem of a writer ! 😳
i sooo LOVED ittt
The blend of emotions was just marvelous!
i had tears in my eyes when i read sharon's POV ! 😭
Just awesome!!!
loved ittt ! 😳😃😛
Love yaa ! '
do write more!!! 😛
Edited by --MiNi-- - 12 years ago

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