Zehal-e-Miskeen - A Tale of Lost Love [part 2 link, page 23] - Page 9

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: mayyo

Just out of curiousity, how do you pronounce your username?

Mari its not who I thought it was...😕
@Kalam.:
Sorry for the guessing game dear. No offense meant.
Devi has a private blog. She gives access when you request it on wordpress. She has reposted REEL and now has started The Oldest Story also... both of my fav heroines ever Meera and Gauri in each resp..Here is the link.
http://deviyudethoolika.wordpress.com/
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Very intresting n well written ff, loved it, do cont sooon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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@honeygrape: Updating in a few hours, hopefully.

@mayyo: Kalam is the Urdu word for pen, that is all it means. Nothing overtly complicated.

@dqno1: Please do not apologise, I can understand the curiosity and it is fine by me. Thank you so much for Devi's blog link.

I see I have acquired some new readers. Welcome aboard, I hope you enjoy the story.
Edited by Kalam. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Chapter 8 - Baburn Taskin
My tranquil mind...


"Dev?" Geet called as she threw her keys on the side table beside the door. She wandered inside to the kitchen, leaving Maan stood beside the keys. His fingers lingered on a diamante G keychain.

"He's probably working overtime," she explained as she settled on the couch. Maan moved away and stood still, watching Geet flick through the channels.

"Do you want to watch anything?" she asked, handing the remote control over to him. But he refused, shaking his head.

"Can you show me some of your artwork? That is, if you don't mind."

She fell silent. Something inside of her stirred, eager to show him her paintings. But a voice in her head warned her she was about to cross some kind of blurred line, a line which wasn't yet evident to her.

"I-er, it's not very good..." she feigned a laugh, one hand covering the other, gently applying pressure.

"Why don't you let me be the judge of that?" his mouth curved up into a crooked smile, and she found herself leading the way to her studio upstairs.

***

"Wow."

He was left breathless by the sheer talent displayed in her paintings. Some were laced with intricate details, such as portraits of the beach or the countryside or the view from the bedrooms.

And others were more complex, such as self portraits. Several colours and patterns overlapped the images, reflecting the complicated nature of Earth's human beings.

He turned back to Geet, who had her eyes fixed on a portrait of the sea, the very sea she had taken him to earlier.

"Could you paint me?"

She turned around, her loose bun swivelling behind her. Her face painted an expression of surprise and confusion.

"I've always wanted a self portrait, but I'm no better with paints than a four year old."

"I'm not very good at sketches of people-"

"You painted quite a few self portraits."

"Yes, but they are representations. I wouldn't be able to draw a pencil sketch of yourself."

"So paint a representation then. Use your medium to reveal what you think lies behind this rugged mask."

Geet studied his expressions for a moment, and then she gave a half smile. "You'll need to grab the stool from downstairs, unless you want to stay standing for the entire time."

Edited by Kalam. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#85
I was actually confused if it was the Urdu word for pen or if it was the Urdu word for conversation. Thanks for clearing it! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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:-O suddenly so much change.,, isnt maan trying to revive her memory? or testing her memory ? for himself... ! but its superb!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hmmm err... hi ... hahhaha I might comment... coz I have changed my username...

As I told u earlier... I rarely comment... but I'm very much aware of ur writing... or else... I won't take this much interest... to comment ... or to read...

Hmmm u know laxmi... but u r not her... and u r not Hasini for sure now... bcoz my darling Hasini woot trouble me much :-P :-P :-P ...

Hmmm... well Anamika... the curiosity is building up... and I wish to know you before that bubble burst... :-D :-D

Nice... ur kalam... has some magic...

I need to read 8th part... I'll comment after that... mayyo is praising u... so obviously u have substance ...

@Avi...I do t know about that serial... but .. ur guess is also wrong... rofl... hahahhahahahahHhah :-D :-D :-D O:-)

Kittu hi nahi... avi bhi nahin janti... buhahahhahahah... Awww...
Hmmm

Comments... praises...appreciation... and u... Anamika...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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I realy love d way each one of ur updates uptill nw leave a kind of an echo reverbating even after we finish reading it.
And plzzz dont mind my guessing game bt ur writingdo remind me a very talented writer Kumari who wrote 'For d love of a child'.
Edited by chubzy - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#89
A masterpiece in the making...
Amir Khusro.. Haayee! When I first read the title.. I was like really?! *_* Zehal e Miskeen! Then I read Kalam besides it ...
Aur mujhe lagaa.. The writer has missed the extra 'a' in both the title and name😆😆
Firstly the title because I have known it as Zihaal and your name Kalaam since the name of the title is inspired by the reverent Amir Khusro and his Kalaam
But Alas.. Aap ek 'Kalam' hi ho ..(thats's my guess of who you are 😆😳!)
Yes your writing does have the 'ada'a of all the ever famous writers of ghsp forum: Devi, Sookie, Zarin and more importantly for me Glassdoor... lekin phir kuch hai jo kehta hai ke that you are koi aur!
(an example of why you are koi aur! : glassdoor would never write explanations after her chapter.. she would let us broil over with thoughts then would give us the much awaited answer in the next update or if not the next!😃😆) lol! I do miss her mighty much !

I have been reading since you posted the first chapter... but now I have chapter 7 and 8 to still read.. so my thoughts are a few steps behind the rest..

I noticed you didn't add a title to the first chapter.. but since you so far have had a pattern of Brij and Persian title I take it that the first chapter is Makun Taghaful 😃 -the blankness of her mind reflects its forlorn state when she stares into those un/knowing eyes in the ragged photo..

hmm..I don't know how to describe what I have read so far from you other than that it paints a shades of colours on my mood and thoughts..
Colours of lost love.. Black for its misery and pain.. Grey for the silence and its bitterness in relations.. Red for broken hearts and bleeding tears and yet there is White due to the beauty of the woman.. the object of his love.. the purity of her heart and eyes...
So over all you have successfully kept me drawn to you and this masterpiece of a 'Kalaam' that you have so far portrayed..
I only fear that this may be a short piece since I am on chapter six and you are on the 4th couplet in the verse, just one more to go ...there is so much to expect and yet to know.. I cannot wait to catch up with it all..
Thank you for such a good piece of writing.. really loving it ❤️👏






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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: KittuPratzz

Hmmm err... hi ... hahhaha I might comment... coz I have changed my username...

As I told u earlier... I rarely comment... but I'm very much aware of ur writing... or else... I won't take this much interest... to comment ... or to read...

Hmmm u know laxmi... but u r not her... and u r not Hasini for sure now... bcoz my darling Hasini woot trouble me much :-P :-P :-P ...

Hmmm... well Anamika... the curiosity is building up... and I wish to know you before that bubble burst... :-D :-D

Nice... ur kalam... has some magic...

I need to read 8th part... I'll comment after that... mayyo is praising u... so obviously u have substance ...

@Avi...I do t know about that serial... but .. ur guess is also wrong... rofl... hahahhahahahahHhah :-D :-D :-D O:-)

Kittu hi nahi... avi bhi nahin janti... buhahahhahahah... Awww...
Hmmm

Comments... praises...appreciation... and u... Anamika...


I do know who it is. My guess was wrong but I do know her :P Kittu.


Thanks for pointing us to the poetry Kalam. I have not read any Sufi poetry but am a fan of Sufi songs. It is always a pleasure to learn something wonderful like this.

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