New OS: A Love Above Everything!!

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Posted: 11 years ago
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- You still love her! I can see that!

- I will never forget her and to be honest I don't want to forget her.

- But she has moved on. You need to move on too. Go away from her life. You are hurting by staying here. I can see that. Why don't you...

- I told you, her happiness is above anything else and the day she is happy, I will go from here and will never show her my face.

Saras left a flummoxed Kusum outside, amidst the strong winds. The weather was stormy reflecting his inner state. A storm was raging inside him too. He has broken his promise to Kumud. He wanted to kill that worm who pretends to be his husband.

As he walked away, his back facing her, Kusum couldn't help wondering of what mettle that man was made.

Kumud was pacing her room, her heart drumming in her chest. Her eyes were like two broken dams and she was literally sobbing hysterically and having problems to breathe properly still under shock. Pramad had come and announced the death of Saras. For a minute she felt that her heart beat was stopping.

She had run to his room and then outside and...there he was, "mutilating" some dead logs. She had told him finally that his life was precious and his happiness was of utmost important to her even if he had broken her heart. That was true but by saying so she has again unlocked her heart and the look he had given her, she knew that he has understood what she meant.

Kumud sat heavily on the bed and took her head in her hands.

"I thought that I had overcome this. I believed that I got it over and I was going to continue forward. But... how can I forget something that was so important to me? I lost a part of myself when I lost him...

Her thoughts were disrupted by a bang!! She lifted her eyes to the door and... there he was - drunk and unable to hold himself straight. He was looking at her with a strange look. Was he livid? Or did she notice something evil in those eyes??

He closed the distance and grabbed her and suddenly all his weight was on her and looking at her straightly in her eyes, he said with disdain - "you are very keen to be my wife and serve me han! Today you will serve me in all possible ways that a wife is supposed to serve her husband".

He tightened his grip on her arm and laughed drily as kumud tried to resist him. He threw her in the bed and grabbed a bottle of whisky and said - You must be feeling shy. Why don't you drink this? All your shyness will climb up the tree. As he said so, he started forcing it down kumud's throat while she tried to escape his grip.

Finally she succeeded to struggle back and ran out of the room, in the corridor, not knowing where her feet were taking her. Her head was spinning; she had never drink before, she was falling but ...she never landed on the floor. Some familiar and strong arms had grabbed her on time. Those arms which had always made her felt safe.

- Kumud!! What happened?

- I... Pramad...

She started crying and looking at her state, Saras understood what had happened in the room. He had tried to force himself on her! His blood iced in his veins. That man was a scum and he was wrong in believing that he would ever change. He was right in thinking that Pramad would try to punish kumud for his mistake but he didn't know he would stoop so low.

Saras would commit that mistake again, better he would break all his bones before he kill him...His fists and jaw clenched, he turned to go...

- Please Saras!

He stopped. She was frightened and was trembling. She needed to be calmed down. He took her to his room and gave her some water. He bent down to face her and asked:

- Kumud did he ... hurt you?

Kumud's eyes watered and she stuttered: He was saying we were ...hh...husband and wife...and that we should...I cant do that Saras...I never thought of it...I now realized...

Kumud stopped. What was she about to tell him? Was she about to tell him that she can't fathom any other man touching her the way HE has touched her?? Other man? He was not another man. He was Pramad, her husband.

She needed to get away from there before she commits more blunders in her vulnerable state. She put the empty glass on the table and turned to go. He didn't stop her but she did stop when he said behind her back:

- Kumud I am not letting him hurt you. If he doesn't change his ways, YOU ARE LEAVING HIM.

It was neither a request nor an advice. It was an order. Kumud turned to look at him and he reiterated:

- I mean it Kumud. N if you don't leave him, I am taking you away from here by force.

Kumud didn't say a word and walked away. Her entire being was too vulnerable right now. She was succumbing. That ehsaas that she had buried in a very dark corner of her heart is forcing down that locked door and she was afraid. She knew it too well that if it resurfaces she will forget everything, every norm of society, her upbringing...just like she forgot everything one full moon night and became his.

"The time that I spent with him was very precious to me. It was love - tender and passionate, filled with trust and laughter... We have parted from each other but... why do I still miss him especially when pain clutches me and today... I am in so much pain. And I find myself needing him"


My note: Well it's been like ages that i havent written an OS. I am rusted. This is based a bit on precap n spoilers. Hope u like it. Plz pour in ur feedback. I'd like that😳Thank u

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Posted: 11 years ago
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OSJ, this is a wonderful piece of writing. same as our SaMud- mature, honest and passionate. i really really liked it :) thanks for sharing it with us.
am not sure if CV's story will progress on similar lines but ur OS did make me feel content coz i know real SaMud must have feelings similar to what you have described here!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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u have written it so great omi...i loved it to core 👏


one advice omi...btw dont take it ...still that worm of being teacher is killing me so i i give...pls .dont use word literally and ehsaas in ur writing.

literally is somethig we use in daily talks but i feel it mars the essence of beautiful writing

ehassa is hindi word and it kills ur beautiful english.writing hindi english mix in post is good but using one hindi word in whole set of beautiful english ...i felt odd...plus this ehsaas has samud trademark to it...lol...and ur os is more about kumud and saras then just samud

ps. dont take my advice and dont get angry on me for such crap advices...kee kara like saras me too majboor 😆

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Tum Jo Aye mere thread mein thread mein baat ban Gaye😃 thank u
N where is my gift I was supposed to get 2 days back??

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: shana0127

u have written it so great omi...i loved it to core 👏


one advice omi...btw dont take it ...still that worm of being teacher is killing me so i i give...pls .dont use word literally and ehsaas in ur writing.

literally is somethig we use in daily talks but i feel it mars the essence of beautiful writing

ehassa is hindi word and it kills ur beautiful english.writing hindi english mix in post is good but using one hindi word in whole set of beautiful english ...i felt odd...plus this ehsaas has samud trademark to it...lol...and ur os is more about kumud and saras then just samud

ps. dont take my advice and dont get angry on me for such crap advices...kee kara like saras me too majboor 😆


U turn out to be a more kharrooos teacher than me. Feedback noted. I will literally take care teacher ji.😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ad_Mumbai_Girl

OSJ, this is a wonderful piece of writing. same as our SaMud- mature, honest and passionate. i really really liked it :) thanks for sharing it with us.
am not sure if CV's story will progress on similar lines but ur OS did make me feel content coz i know real SaMud must have feelings similar to what you have described here!



Thank u buddy. Fridayz epi gave me some hope so i tried to rekindle the passion in me.😳 I am happy u like it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow wooowww wwwooowww standing ovation for ur OS
no words jaanu diii reading it again n again
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: dasan.divya

wow wooowww wwwooowww standing ovation for ur OS
no words jaanu diii reading it again n again


Thank u divs! U r too sweet. Sorry I didn't get time to pm u. But I was planning to do it in the evening today.😳
But as usual u have already landed ur hand on it
🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: omshreejaanu


Thank u divs! U r too sweet. Sorry I didn't get time to pm u. But I was planning to do it in the evening today.😳
But as usual u have already landed ur hand on it
🤗


no need of pm diii when i come here first i look for ur post
then i read like a mad girl i'm addicted to it...
i'm addicted tour post like prammy addicted to sharab😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I love this jaanu. I am happy to see your write up first thing in the morning. I believe Friday epi has given you hope right?
Keep writing buddy. You are am amazing writer.
Btw you are on a roll today.
Saw your article 😆

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