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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: IPK007


Teaser for chapter 3.

Arnab was exhausted after a long day at the medical college, where he had stayed back after the classes to study in the library. It was dark now, with the dark, velvety sky studded with bright sparking stars. The rhythmic canter of the horse changed into a slow trot, before the carriage came to a stop in the grand portico of the haveli, lit by scores of lamps. A servant came running to greet him reverently before taking his bag from him.

He climbed upstairs with a solemn expression as the final exams were drawing near and he still had a lot of preparing to do. Pushing the double doors of his room open, he stepped inside and began to unbutton his shirt, absentmindedly.

He started, when totally unexpectedly, a cheerful voice called his name.

"Arnab ji", said Khushi sitting perched up on his bed, looking totally at home.

"What are you doing here?, said Arnav with a frown.

"Ma sent me here", Khushi said happily.


Coming on Friday( Not tomorrow)

Love,

Jenny :)


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Waiting...its Friday...
Please?
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Posted: 12 years ago
is the update this friday or the next...b'cos the teaser was up last week thursday i think...so " next friday " must be today ... is it really...gosh this "next friday not this friday " business is quite confusing ... hope it is today ...waiting

jenny dear pls dont tease us 😭
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Posted: 12 years ago
Jenny... Updatiya kar do na
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Posted: 12 years ago
Oh dear lord - poor Arnab!

Poor Khushi the little lass...completely innocent. Which she kind of should be at that age. 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
Dear are you updating? ? ? ?😭 😭


Dear please please update 😭 😭
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Posted: 12 years ago
Next Friday!!!!!!! Looks tooo far 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
Really fond of this story.
Hope you get time to update it regularly.
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Posted: 12 years ago
Lol is this the Friday version of tomorrow never comes
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Posted: 12 years ago
ur writing makes me forget my laziness and want to comment :D..
coming to the point, a period fic..i approached it tentatively and was drawn in in no time.. and the way in which u mentioned the bengali culture, weather and the words, i thought that u either are a bengali, or have stayed here( in west bengal), or u have some bengali friends..it felt as if u are intimately acquainted with the bengali culture..
just for the record, the spelling of grandmother is "thaMMi"..the M is stressed on while pronouncing the word..
and no, i am not a bengali.. :D..i just happen to stay in WB..
happy writing!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I feel like I'm living in a different world altogether these days. I've been reading a book set in the same period as your story,... and by now, I believe I understand the actions of people from that age so much more. And Jenny, It's crazy how true to facts you keep the characters. Their thought process and actions are insanely real. I'm assuming, either you've read so extensively, that you know the period so well OR you've done an amazing research on it. Either way, I'm amazed.

This chapter was brilliant in terms of how you spread it over time and shown how Khushi was slowly growing up and how Arnav was becoming aware of her. Felt very real as it happened over a period of time. I like the fact that Khushi found a friend in the household - Pranab... brother in law, he may be... but I'm glad she doesn't feel displaced or out of place anymore.

The father-son relationship you've shown is quite understandable. Arnav's ideas are exactly opposite to his fathers.. yet he found himself (by the end of the chapter) following his footsteps and going to visit beautiful "women" for physical satisfaction. Of course...he's visiting the place to keep Khushi and his going attraction towards her out of his mind. And I don't know if he'll go ahead with it or not...but her face and her innocent eyes would definitely come to haunt him.

Great chapter, Jen. Waiting for the next chapter eagerly!
Edited by Anarocksick - 12 years ago

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