ArHi SS:Shattered #3 *Completed* - Page 45

Where do I even begin J..I cannot believe the turn of events and I dont want to start commenting before reading the whole chapter but I was just reading it all with my mouth hanging wide open (much less attractive than koosie's 'O').

First of all a GREAT job at the writing, the big ass conversations were totally important and effective!!

K and Lava's conversation cleared SO much up. It was just Amazeballs. I could cut, dissect, butcher the crap out of it to discover the 1000hidden meaningz.

And then there was "Anjali" finally used in conversation. Something that Arnav badly needed to hear..oh how grateful I am for Nani, bless her old soul!

One thing this part reminded me of is ASR vs Arnav, the intrinsic turmoil and mood swing that man faces. I have never really seen someone justify these super abrupt changes the way you do. Sometimes its purely pheelz other times its purely devilish calculation. J!! You had me at a lot of things in the past..but the way u do your dichotomies in shattered is just about Perfect.

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Sorry I fell asleep before you posted part 2. But seriously I cannot believe you left us there...there should have been a Warning!

Although it wasn't much of a cliffhanger as it was the much awaited confrontation..a Big one at that. You have written these before in numerous stories, but I have never felt like I need to go back and read it again to fully grasp what happened. There is SO much at play heer, the hate, the not hate, the un-nammed pheelz, the past, the future...juhi you have managed to wonderfully and logically entangle it all in this update to give me the na paas aa sake naa duur ja sake pheelz. (prediction fail hamesha!).

There is so much more I want to say and I will come back for that. But for now thank you for: a honest confrontation, a perceptive ASR, a realistic approach to relationships! Most of all a mohabbat without any (s)action.

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Brace yourself because this might take 50hours to read (well mostly to understand). The list of ILUD because:

1. The different things A pheelz for K! J #let me love u

2. The whole first scene between A+P, the way he has to get the information out of her..the STAR WARS type force that motivated him to make that decision. Wonderful way to set the scene, a nice lead up to the final explanation..this is exactly why I was so so so "cliffhanging" when you hadn't posted part 2.

3. K being upset with her own self at refusing the proposal. It reminds me of the opposite time in scandalous when K did accept shyam's proposal! (I am weird.)

4. Lava is a total phanki in disguise, helping K sort out her emotions systematically..Even if they haven't shared much physical space in the story together, the phone conversations were enough to show the kind of bond they shared.

5. How much this reminds me of IPK! The way K would have felt after Diwali, when a hope she didnt know she harboured would have shattered. (I am weirder.)

6. The title.

"Why do I want to run away, and run towards him , all at once?"

"He should be pushing her away... far, far, away...instead, he was searching for reasons to pull her close."

7. The way Lava explains to K it wasn't her fault. The way Nani explains to A it wasn't her fault. The path of slowly reducing the guilt, the anguish within them...but approached in such different ways! This is what it means to really speak through your characters as TG would say..I bow to thee.

8. I second S in wanting to know Lava + NK's past, present and future tense...it is a Juhi style OS waiting to be written!!! (and read!)

9. K did NOT say no because of moral obligation to family or to exact revenge!!! I thought I'd never ever ever see this day. This was one of my favouritest bits (pliss not to misunderwear when I repeat this sentence again) of the chapter. The way you showed why K really would want to get married..by reminding us of that "glimpse" of K in Sheesh mahal, the one hoping, trusting, believing! And the way you filled in the gap when K suddenly made the "decision" in the rain that day outside Sheesh Mahal. This only affirms my faith that nothing in your story is written inconsequentially, everything comes back, ties itself to the plot.

10. The clothes, the physical appearance is all you have to describe for the sexual pheelz to rabba vey in the air. Aise kyu hota hai? (I am weirdest!)

11. The moment you described he pulled her in the room I went Hallelujah!! And as always I be wrong..and I realised what you were trying to do with this story. Usually (mostly!) the next step that cements the lau is dat first kiss, the touch and when they realise they have such combustible chemistry...they are like EFF IT ALL! But heer I lau that even though the sexual pheelz are important, the mohabbat is much more than that! The need the want to be together isn't limited to that. Kya bolun ab?

13. The Faraq Kostin was asked.

14. Million and 1 things he could have done to exact revenge, if he truly HATED her.

15. The past. The way he began discussing it, something that he couldnt even talk to his own Nani about! The way she replied, and the acceptance of a mistake and then an apology. We have come a full circle.

16. The honesty is such a refreshing change. I really do hope K can be that if she says no to his final kostin. Although in her case there is so much more at stake, and I can understand her need to deny and self-preserve instead of admit the truth. Because he is the one who has the mood swings dominated by the hate, and she will have to bare the brunt of it.

17. The reason for making out with Sheetal. I DIDNT SEE THAT COMING! HoliTellyTubbyLand. That is such an ASR from diwali flashback!! The last effort to fight the "dor" between them.

18. The way he reads into her, just by 1 single object..the self imposed punishment. Even us clue-finding phankis couldn't before you mentioned it in the interlude! And like S said he is always so perceptive when it comes to her, they are so attuned to each other..

19. The hate. You have really really really dwelled deep into that, without making it all dark and emo. Usually people really dwell deep into the love, and the hate only appears on the surface. I think you just explained to me how Nafrat and Mohabbat can exist between two people. J I dont even know how to articulate this point so I am going to leave you to telepathically understand me.

20. LASTLY. past vs future. hatred vs the force. The way you beautifully described that the force between them is beyond all the hatred by the Sheetal scene Or in case of Khushi even when she keeps seeing the constant hate in his eyes. How can you start a future with a person who is the strongest reminder of your hateful past? Well K+NK are still going strong..even if that relationship is different. So maybe just maybe there is a chance..Will the Force be strong enough to overcome all this? It clearly was did the spelunking chapters etc..

Luna

ps. Thank you for staying up until ungodly hours writing this updex while I was snoring into oblivion. Sorry if this makes no sense..I lost the comment from the first time around, and then pretty much wrote it all over again..and ya brain fuze undun.