Need to build up momentum in story

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Posted: 12 years ago
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You have a young fresh pair/its a love story/ main point is Kashmir and the love birds
Instead of cramming the third angle with a vamp( heard new vamp is being introduced who will love raghu) and running here and there build up the young couple first that urgency that element of stolen love agaist all odds and Kashmir can take you very high up but muddling through the story going the vamp way and ignoring kashmir back ground you are just churning out a soap think out of box story needs to be fast paced direction has to be crisp love birds need to occupy more time work on expressions.
too much rona dhoa and cut down on too much mamaji becomes a bore rest is in your hands
you killed off farook too early should have shown couple in love and how farook gets killed and raghu is blamed as he is part of gang and how they run togather..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I think I can understand what ur trying to say here, & I agree ki sometimes scenes ko kuch zyada he lamba taan dete hai, which becomes quite boring & is constantly testing our patience! 🤔
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ritu_MusicTanHa

I think I can understand what ur trying to say here, & I agree ki sometimes scenes ko kuch zyada he lamba taan dete hai, which becomes quite boring & is constantly testing our patience! 🤔



Agree...even i m very frusted in antara mom and mamaji scene 🤢

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