Shanak OS..'Mere Paas bhi ik chand hain..'(PG2)

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Posted: 12 years ago
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So, here I'm thinking to write an OS on shanak😊'..I'll post it in 2-3 parts'Hope U guys like it😆'please forget the mistakes coz I'm not that much good in writing''

"Mere paas bhi ik chaand hain'."

It was her first birthday after their marriage'.she wanted to spend whole day with him only'.so, made many plans' He too wanted dis birthday to make so much special for her'but, still he didn't wanted to make it big coz he was wishing to spent time alone with her only'..But, he is Shantanu Khandelwal'.he has his own style to celebrate & make days more special for her & them'

In morning, Khanak cums in thr room with chai ka tray in her hand'She wore beautiful Shiffon red colour saari''She wanted to surprise Shan'.but, thing happen totally unexpected to her'.

As she entered their room..she saw Shan was getting ready to go out side'.surprised & shocked, hurt all emotions crossed her face at the same time'still controlling own emotions she asked him,"Aap bahar ja rahe hain??"'Shan turned back towards the direction whr from the voice came'for moment he felt that his heart skipped out of his mouth, he lost his breath'..she was looking stunning in that red saari'he couldn't resist himself from admiring her'but, soon he recover himself n answered,"haan, khanak ik jarrori meeting hain.."'She was sad but can't show it on her face, as she know how much its important for him'"wapas kab aayenge??" '"Pata nahi khanak'jaroori meeting hain, pata nahi kab tak chalegi'.aur usake baad mein seedha studio chala jaaunga'.aaj naye album ki recording bhi karani hain'.agar der hi gayi toh tum khanak kha ke so jana.."'Now, she was abt almost to cry'but she control herself'just agree to him by nodding her head''He gave small kiss on her chick n left their room'.

Heartbroken she fell on their bed..couldn't control her tears..but, after some time she gathered herself.."agar unako meri fikr nahi..toh main kyun rou unake liye..." She went to batroom to clean up her face which was looking like total mess'..

She tried to engulf herself housechores'like cooking in kitchen, then did some gossips with Madhavi & Khushaboo bhabhi'.Both wished her for her birthday & give her some pretty gifts'.she thanked them with her beautiful smile'.though she was smilng, but it wasn't from her heart'. N here her cell beaped once'she took her cell..it was massage from shan'..her face lighten up after reading his name'egarly she opened dat massage'it was.."R u ok?"'quite disappointed she reply," ji, main teekh hun"'.thr again he massaged her,"phir call kyun nahi kiya??'''..now, irritated she replied,"aapako kuch kaam nahi?? Meeting khatm hi gayi??"'.Surprised on her reply he massaged back"kaam toh hain'.par'" She again replied,"toh kaam kijiye'.meri fikr karane koi jaroorat nahi'." He read it n smile appear on his face'then he go back to his work'..after those massage there was no interaction happen between them'.

Its almost 7.30 p.m. neigther he called her nor she call him'though she was desperate to talk to him , to went out all her anger on him'but still she control herself'.She was in their room..reading some books'Harilal cum their n asked her,"dadi wants her to bring some stuff from their tarece'" quite confused on dis she went to the tarece ''it was so much dark there'.the moment she cum thr'.A big screamed out of her mouth as someone grabbed her by her waist'.

Edited by Miss.Wahian - 12 years ago

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Miss.Wahian thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I'm working on next part...ll post it soon😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wohooo neelu you are writing an OS...😃
Very nycc...i liked it...
shaan wanted to surprise khanak...so sweet!!
But i didnt like how he made her sad during the day time...😭
Hope he impresses her now with the surprise😉
awaiting next part...😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wooow!!!😃 Neelu you write stories..🥳Eeeks..😃 Big applause for sharing it with us!!!👏👏👏

Loved it so much!!!😃 It's Khanak's birthday and she is full of expectation of how she and her hubby Shaan 😳 gonna celebrate it..But our burthal Shaan has some other plan..😆 All set to throw her a surprise!!!

She is really taken back when Shaan got ready and said he'll be busy the whole day..And he got awestruck by her look..☺️ Of course he has too..😉

Poor girl cried on her birthday..😭 The message exchange was cute..He is such a tease..😆 Asking her whether she is ok..

Wow!!! It's a surprise party..🥳 Shaan must have gone in length to arrange for it..Hope he sings for her with a guitar..😳

Looking forward and thank you for writing an awesome update!!!😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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So happy that you are writing an OS Neelu🤗

Its very cute😊, Khanak in red saree😳 Shaan seems very naughty😆

Ab terrace pe kya hua? Aj hi update karo😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow awesome
i love it
eekkss waiting for shan's surprise
plz update soon i m waiting :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Another awesome writer ...WOW!! ⭐️ Didnt Knew you Write Dear. Thanks a ton for sharing it with us. 😊 the first half was really really Beautiful.

Wow its Khanak's Birthday & Shaan is planning A big surprise for her. She had made plans too but was disappointed when she saw him getting ready. 😛 i loved the way you have written her Emoticons & those cute Expressions. Little Anger & His teasing. 😊 Khanak thought he forgot her Birthday where as he is busy planning for her. Loved the way he teased her with his massages asking she is fine 😛 Truly cute Dear So shaan decorated Terrace for her. how romantic & Khanak had no idea about it she stepped in thinking she is there to Do Dadi's work 😊lekin ab aayega Surprise 😃

This is really cute & Exciting ...Do continue Soon this was Amazing 👏

Love
Pranjal.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanks everyone for ur beautiful relpies...it means alot😊
Edited by Miss.Wahian - 12 years ago
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here is second & last part😊


Part-2

Someone grabbed her by her waist, she tried to shout once again but before she could , lights switched on'shocked to see him there'her big black eyes looked more big ''yes, it was him'.her Shantanu'..

Shocked, surprised, confused or happy she herself doesn't know what she was feeling'she could only say one word ,"Aap?"

In reply, he just said, "Happy Birthday Khanak!!" & then he hugged her.

Still confused, she asked him "Shantanu, aap yaha kab? Kaise ? kyun?"

He smiled n just said,"I luv you Khanak!" & then kissed her.

She pushed him back & questioned him, "Aap toh studio jaane wale the? Aapako toh waha hona chahiye tha?"

"Ji nahi'.main wahi hun , jaha mujhe hona chahiye''.apani biwi ke paas!! Aur waise bhi maine tumase jhoot kaha tha'na toh meri koi meeting thi aur na hi koi recording'main toh yahi tha'tumhare liye surprise plan kar raha tha." He said with his naughty smile on his face.

"Jhoot?? Aapane mujhase jhoot bola? kyun?" she give him angry look.

"kyunki main tumhien surprise dena chahata tha'.look here'isn't it looking beautiful?" he hugged her from back''. There was beautiful set done by lights, heart shaped balloons, white & red coloured curtains '.it was looking so romantic. A small smile appear on her face'he did all this just for her'she knew , he love her so much'n its his style to prove his love for her''.

But, she was not one of those girls , who melt so easily by his charm'sometimes she is more stubborn than him'.though, he made her so happy by his surprise'.but from morning he was testing her patience & now it's her to test his love'..

He was waiting for her response'but there was no response her side'finally, desperately he asked her, "kuch kaho toh?" still holding her from back.

"kya?" she asked back.

Surprised on her reply , he said, "kuch bhi yaar..."

Now, she turned towards him'"kya kuch bhi?"

Now, he is already started loosing his patience, he asked her pleasingly," yahi, ke tumhien mera surprise kaisa l aga?"

By his expressions, she understand..he is annoyed now'..enjoying his situation she just said," accha hain!" by hiding her smile from him.

Shocked, he asked her," bas Acchaaa???? Khanak, maine tumhare liye itana kuch kiya'aur tum sirf accha kah rahi ho?? You are so rude yaar!!" upset by her, he left her from his grip.

She give him stern look and asked back, "Aur joh aap subah se mere sath kar rahe the who kya tha???"

Now, he got it, to convince Khanak is not going to easy task for him''.

He made her sit on the jhula'.trying hard to convince her'"khanak maine yeh sab tumhare liye hi toh kiya'kyun ki main tumhare chehare pe khushi dekhana chahata tha'..kya, ab bhi tum mujhase naraz ho?"

She felt bad by seeing his innocent face ,"Nahi'."

Big smile appeared on his face'.he hugged her once again, "thank god tum maan gayi!!...accha, kya tumane mujhe miss kiya? Waise main jaanata hun ke tumane mujhe bahut miss kiya"

She pushed him back, "ji nahi' maine aapako bilkul bhi miss nahi kiya'mere paas aur bhi jaroori kaam hain."

" Accha baba'.par jarasa toh miss kiya hi hoga?" he asked her with teasing tone.

"ji nahi jarasa bhi nahi'bilkul bhi nahi."

Now, really surprised by her reply , he asked her," What? Come on yaar khanak'.tum aisa kaise kar sakati ho'.tumhein mujhe miss karana chahiye tha'aakhir pati hun main tumahara'"

"aur main aapaki patni'.janati hun mein'.toh?"

"toh, tumhein mujhe miss karana chahiye!" he said in authorized tone.

"Aa ha ha'jaise aap bada miss karate hain mujhe , jab main aapake sath nahi rehati?" She asked looking at him.

"haan ' karata main tumhein miss"

She give him stern look,"Shantanu, kitana jhoot bolane lage ho aap aaj kal'.pehale subhah jhoot bola aur ab ek aur jhoot!!"

Confused he asked her, "ab kya jhoot bola maine?" he grabbed her hand.

"Yahi ke aap mujhe bada miss karate hain'..jab main yaha nahi rehati tab yah toh aap apane kam mein busy rehate hain'yah phir ghar pe Angelina Jolie ki filmein dekhate hain'..sab pata hain mujhe'aapako bahut pasand haina who?"

He is back to his anticts said,"nahi pasand nahi mujhe'..I love her so much!!"

Upset , she removed her hand from his "haan toh jayiye, jakar usaki filme dekhiye'yaha kya kar rahe hain mere sath'aap toh ussase bahut pyar karate hain na!!"

Brusted out on dis..he asked,"omg..khanak tum jal rahi ho??"

"jal nahi rahi main'aur waise bhi mujhe jalane ki kya jaroorat hain?"

He hold her face in her palms , said "haan, woh toh hain'kyun ki tum janati ho'ke main tumase kitana pyar karata hun'.Angelina Jolie se bhi bahut jyada" he bent towards her to kiss her.

She blushed on this & looked away'.then asked him, "Shantanu, woh chand dekh rahe ho? Kitana khoobsurat hain na?"

Still lost in her face, he mumered, "haan, bahut khoobsurat hain"

"shantanu, chaand waha aasman pe hota hain!'

"haan, main janata hun'..par tum yeh nahi janati mere paas bhi ek chand hain'aur woh uss chand se kai jyada khoobasurat hi nahi sexy bhi hain" he said naughtly while admiring her every feature of her face'which was glowing in his presence.

Blushing on his compliment'she asked him teasingly,"aapaki filmy baatien kabhi khatm nahi hogi na?"

" kabhi nahi'.waise khanak..maine tumhare liye itana sab kiya'.ek return gift toh banata hain'" he said while aiming for her lips.

Again she pushed him back n said,"pehale cake kaat le?"

Disappointed by his wife unromantic nature he said," bahut unromantic ho tum'chalo cake kaat lete hain"

She smile on this'both cut the cake together'shantanu feed her piece of cake'after that, "she grabbed his collar & pulled him towards her & asked teasingly,"toh aapako return gift chahiye hun?? Aur kya kaha aapane main unromantic hun??" surpreised by her actions , he lost all his words'n before he could say anything she kissed him..

Hope I din't bore you guys and U all like it😊'sorry, for mistakes enjoy it😊, how much I enjoyed while writing it 😆

Edited by Miss.Wahian - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Waah superb update neelu...😃
Loved it...
lol khanak is romantic and she proved it to shaan😆
Nice update...
Waiting for the next part😃

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