sobia.k thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
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no seriouly im gonna faint if i hafta rite 1 more poem...but i hafta rite more....4 more!!!!! i hate eng...stupid poemz...here r the 2 i got so far tell me wat u guiz think....wat i can add tak out etc...plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz and tell me wat u think its bout

The One Out There

The One Out There

Can be

Our friend

Our guardian

Our keeper

Our maker

If remembered

The One Out There

Can be

Our enemy

Our avenger

Our gambler

Our destroyer

If forgotten

The One Out There

When remembered

Is all ears when you and I recite our problems

Yet

When forgotten

Has no soothing voice to comfort us

The One Out There

When remembered

Sees everything wrong that is happening to you and I

Yet

When forgotten

Does nothing to correct the wrong

The One Out There

When remembered

Is everywhere you are

Yet

When forgotten

Is nowhere to be seen

The One Out there

Is forgotten

To be thanked

In happy times

Yet

Is remembered

To be blamed

In sad times

The One Out There

Can be

Our friend

If remembered

Our enemy

If forgotten

Our guardian

If remembered

Our avenger

If forgotten

Our keeper

If remembered

Our gambler

If forgotten

Our maker

If remembered

Our destroyer

If forgotten

The One Out There

(this one is suppose 2 b modeled afta a diff poem so dnt think im krazi cuz im rittin bout bread)

The Moldy Bread

The moldy slice of white bread with a brown crust

in the clear packet

could have been eaten by a whole body,

but another whole body

left the packet open

and the enemies invaded.

Slowly and silently the air

creped into the packet and

the enemy grew.

As the enemy grew the dark shadow of death came closer and

The slice of white bread with a brown crust suffered.

It is in the nature of a slice of bread

to be fragile,

soft and tender.

How unlucky, slice of bread with mold now growing on it,

to have been left alone in an open packet,

to have no caregiver.

At this ripe age,

one must be careful.

As one suffers in silence and grieve,

the enemy brings the dark shadow of death closer.

The aging bones ache.

The greying hair becomes more and more.

The wrinkly skin becomes wrinkly as the seconds pass.

The yellowing teeth fall every time a bite is taken.

As the enemy grows the pain continues,

for this ripe age is the age where care needs to be given.

If no care is given this ripe age is,

the age of rejections.

Sobia

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~~RaZ~~ thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
#2
wwooooowwwwww

u got awesomee talent 👏

but i aint got dat talent 2 take out fault..

but i read da 1st one nd i liked ut betta😛
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sobia.k thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
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turst me raz i aint tht gud...creative juices just seem 2 flow sum times....and rite now it aint flowin....

4 more.....it hurts just thinkin bout it

Sobia
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Posted: 19 years ago
#4
the 1st one is great 👏
you've got great talent
CuteFairy91 thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
#5
Omg urz r so gud.. N guess wat I hate English too.. I cant stand dat class.. Its like my worst subject but I still do gud.. But I hate it.. N I so know how u feel.
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Posted: 19 years ago
#6
Cool poem..
I really liked it...
I have always ran away from my english classes 😆 😆
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Posted: 19 years ago
#7
thats kool
i hate english as well lol 🤢
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Posted: 19 years ago
#8
Awesome poems hun!!!! 👏 👏 👏 Keep up da good work!! 👍🏼

Maddz xxx
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Posted: 19 years ago
#9
awesome job!!
im not too good with poems but just try making the poem flow together 😛 like match with words and things like that 😛

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