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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hi guys,

Umm... Yeah it's me.

So this is some freakishly weird thing I just wrote.

I'd place it sometime between the start of season two and JJ's entry.

It's RanSh because it can be either... it's all upto you.

Sorry to NonComposMentis, for stealing.

Ummm... So... Read on.

***

Unsound Mind

He didn't understand himself anymore. What he was in Imperial, was what he should be, but what he was around them, was what he was - scared, hurt and jumbled. He said things he didn't mean, he talked like someone possessed, and yet hoped people will understand him.

There were old grudges that were too old to even be a bother. There were new duties that needed him to be a lot more than he was being. There were old and new relationships that just needed him.

Yet he was hollow... too hollow to sleep at night. Not because something, or rather someone haunted him. But because, it was tough to understand why, why now, why him... and then there was the little voice in his head that asked, why not.

Staring at the moon was the dumbest pastime. Somehow, his mind had no capacity for anything else. He needed those hours of coldness, coldness of his own heart to understand why he had to dispel from himself the warmth for others again the next day, and the day after, and the day after that; everyday till he could.

What he needed was not support or understanding, what he needed was clarity. He didn't mind how it came. He was just that desperate.

And yet he felt impervious to everything. Felt that there was a saturation that he had reached. Something that kept him mindless, hollow... a vacuum that just didn't let anything echo. Maybe that was what he needed, an echo... to bring down the avalanche building up inside him.

He knew that once it came down there would be no backing away from it, no running till it couldn't chase you, no mask that could hide the quite drama one's inner self faces. But the wait was exhausting. Draining the life out of him.

From the shackles of his void, all he could do was hope.

What he didn't know was, his one hope would lead to a chain reaction. And that reaction to a plethora of emotions... that he never knew he had the capacity to hold. The vacuity had made him ignorant for too long.

What he didn't know was that fate wasn't done with him. It wasn't rock bottom yet, just another glass ceiling.

Falling from among the stars has its major folly - it's a very long way down.


***


Umm, Yeah i know it's short. Couldn't get into it too much... or i'd never stop.

Luv,

Pree.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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"Falling from among the stars has its major folly - it's a very long way down."

THIS! This was what I was talking about - the perfect closure! 👏 You know Biwi, this time round I imagined my man RV in it and he perfectly fit. This seems all the more real because I know the words are direct from your heart.

And all this, the OS, the situation, the feelings; they all fit so perfectly in the time frame which you mentioned. There's angst, there's longing and there's this period of confusion all around - brilliantly written! Who would guess that this was written while going having a WB? The basic and sheer humanity of this OS makes this stand apart despite being a really short piece of work. And I'm not just saying this because this one really did blow me away!

If I make you proud then you mesmerize me. You are awesome in humor and then you churn out little angsty pieces like this and I'm always left in awe of it all.

Love ya Biwi! <3

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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice os girl
wish it would have been little bigger
but i m always into ransh os
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Posted: 12 years ago
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'Perfect'
jst perfect , gosh i could never ever think of writing like this😲
damn this was jst fantabulous 👏
the emotions potrayed were so damn perfect!!!!!!
i imagined KD in this whole OS and the emotions and feelings fitted perfectly <3
jst awesome!!!!!!
love,
Razz
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow. . . loved every bit of it. . suits RanSh sooo welll .. .this is a master piece . . . Thanks for writing this
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome work
it a treat to read your work
do continue your works on ransh
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Posted: 12 years ago
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It feels so good to see that familiar purple & bold font again<3 Miss you Pree🤗
I don't even know how on Earth I'm supposed to comment on a oneshot like THIS. Words fail me after reading it. Because YOU weaved magic with yours<3<3 Honestly, I was mesmerised while reading this. The feelings . the change in emotions from confusion, to finally hope, I imagined them to be KD's & it was PERFECT!!!!

What he didn't know was that fate wasn't done with him. It wasn't rock bottom yet, just another glass ceiling.

Falling from among the stars has its major folly - it's a very long way down.

THIS was so beautifully ironic<3 And such an amazing finish, perfectly wrapping up the actual current situation in these two lines. Outstanding Pree. Truly outstanding👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Oh, words fail me when it comes to your works.
As it is, I suck at comments.
All I can do is try my best...
...No, sorry...my best won't be enough for this.
This is, in short...just...magical.
I wish I could have quoted the whole of the OS, but that's seemingly impossible...to comment on each and every line.
Being a KD fan, I imagined it on him...and it fit so bloody well!

He needed those hours of coldness, coldness of his own heart to understand why he had to dispel from himself the warmth for others again the next day, and the day after, and the day after that; everyday till he could.

I have a thing for humor and angst, and drabbles too...all three of which I can never manage.

Falling from among the stars has its major folly - it's a very long way down.

The end, oh! Brilliant!
I wish I had the right words...but I don't.
Thank you for writing this.
Mugdhaa.
PS: And you stole what, exactly?

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Mais

"Falling from among the stars has its major folly - it's a very long way down."

THIS! This was what I was talking about - the perfect closure! 👏 You know Biwi, this time round I imagined my man RV in it and he perfectly fit. This seems all the more real because I know the words are direct from your heart.

And all this, the OS, the situation, the feelings; they all fit so perfectly in the time frame which you mentioned. There's angst, there's longing and there's this period of confusion all around - brilliantly written! Who would guess that this was written while going having a WB? The basic and sheer humanity of this OS makes this stand apart despite being a really short piece of work. And I'm not just saying this because this one really did blow me away!

If I make you proud then you mesmerize me. You are awesome in humor and then you churn out little angsty pieces like this and I'm always left in awe of it all.

Love ya Biwi! <3


Yeah even I thought the earlier ending was abrupt, I was brain dead last night when I wrote this, you know that...

You can imagine both of them in it somehow... That's why I didn't give a name.

The Writer's Block it bad. It's still raging in my head. I'm still unsure about this since I wrote this in a WB with a dead brain.

Biwi when it comes you, the words of the comment don't matter... You like it, it makes me feel it was worth the attempt.

Atleast I mesmerize someone. 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: tiara_magic

nice os girl

wish it would have been little bigger
but i m always into ransh os


Thanks.

I could make it longer but the end seemed fitting where it was...

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