THE LOCKET (4) - Page 12

👏 Take a bow, please, Avi ji. No, wait, take two.

This chapter has really touched me. My heart was breaking at Darji's love, Geet's love, her sacrifice and also her guilt. I'm at a point where I'm having to make decisions which may take me away from my parents. We have very little family around us but our own nuclear one and I feel guilty at thinking of leaving them. I can understand Geet's decision and I respect her a lot after this chapter.

I had a few different things to say about the last few chapters but I swear, after reading this one, they're all gone. The music and Darji and Geet's story has pushed out my other thoughts. I really have to commend you on the music selections, Avi. They have been perfect in creating the mood you wanted.

Oh! I just remembered... I am in love with the First Rain chapter. It's the first time in the course of this story that I felt a real connection to Maan and Geet's tale. It surprised me a little that this is the chapter I love the most (because I'm usually more partial to the teasing and spunky nok-jhok than the romance) but I shouldn't have been. Rain, Maaneet and Avi's beautiful words are a drugging combination.

You told me before to offer constructive criticism as well as compliments and I really cannot come up with anything. The only thing I can mention - and it's not even much of an issue when I'm reading - is that I got a little confused at times wondering whether I'm reading about the past or present. But it usually clears up pretty quickly.

I'm quite glad I'm reading this a few chapters at a time. More to savour and none of the besabri se intezaar! 😆

Originally posted by: kaamchorni

👏 Take a bow, please, Avi ji. No, wait, take two.

This chapter has really touched me. My heart was breaking at Darji's love, Geet's love, her sacrifice and also her guilt. I'm at a point where I'm having to make decisions which may take me away from my parents. We have very little family around us but our own nuclear one and I feel guilty at thinking of leaving them. I can understand Geet's decision and I respect her a lot after this chapter.

I had a few different things to say about the last few chapters but I swear, after reading this one, they're all gone. The music and Darji and Geet's story has pushed out my other thoughts. I really have to commend you on the music selections, Avi. They have been perfect in creating the mood you wanted.

Oh! I just remembered... I am in love with the First Rain chapter. It's the first time in the course of this story that I felt a real connection to Maan and Geet's tale. It surprised me a little that this is the chapter I love the most (because I'm usually more partial to the teasing and spunky nok-jhok than the romance) but I shouldn't have been. Rain, Maaneet and Avi's beautiful words are a drugging combination.

You told me before to offer constructive criticism as well as compliments and I really cannot come up with anything. The only thing I can mention - and it's not even much of an issue when I'm reading - is that I got a little confused at times wondering whether I'm reading about the past or present. But it usually clears up pretty quickly.

I'm quite glad I'm reading this a few chapters at a time. More to savour and none of the besabri se intezaar! 😆

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I wouldn't dare call anything written by you merely an "effort" (strict teacher voice) and don't you dare either! 😆 You may think you're simply putting words together on your end but by the time they're on my screen, they've been moulded into a fully fledged, living, breathing world. Trust me when I say that I'm sucked straight into a different place altogether when I read your chapters and I can see everything happening before my eyes. Such is the power of your words.

I forgot to mention that I loved Ms. Iyer and her astuteness about the umbrella!

Originally posted by: kaamchorni

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I wouldn't dare call anything written by you merely an "effort" (strict teacher voice) and don't you dare either! 😆 You may think you're simply putting words together on your end but by the time they're on my screen, they've been moulded into a fully fledged, living, breathing world. Trust me when I say that I'm sucked straight into a different place altogether when I read your chapters and I can see everything happening before my eyes. Such is the power of your words.

I forgot to mention that I loved Ms. Iyer and her astuteness about the umbrella!

Yes, I had a nice giggle over that! So that's who Shika was! I figured them all out but couldn't find our dqno2. Makes sense now, though! 😆 Mari was spot on. Definitely the mysterious one.
I suggest a piece for every reader, although I wouldn't say no to a slice of Dev 😉 Haha.

I loved Aashu's cameo. I liked the way Aisha explained herself and the dreams attached to her dream house. I felt the pieces falling in place along with them. I'm having so much fun reading this story; it shows that you're really enjoying writing it and that's the best part for me.

Originally posted by: kaamchorni

Yes, I had a nice giggle over that! So that's who Shika was! I figured them all out but couldn't find our dqno2. Makes sense now, though! 😆 Mari was spot on. Definitely the mysterious one.
I suggest a piece for every reader, although I wouldn't say no to a slice of Dev 😉 Haha.

I loved Aashu's cameo. I liked the way Aisha explained herself and the dreams attached to her dream house. I felt the pieces falling in place along with them. I'm having so much fun reading this story; it shows that you're really enjoying writing it and that's the best part for me.

😆 I would love you for life, Drama ji! And fear Ms. Kapoor's wrath a little, too. She's a feisty one. I loved how she also had a go at the woman on the bus as well as the perv.

Originally posted by: kaamchorni

😆 I would love you for life, Drama ji! And fear Ms. Kapoor's wrath a little, too. She's a feisty one. I loved how she also had a go at the woman on the bus as well as the perv.

Lovely darji loved the update waiting 4 next

Originally posted by: Koolsmile

Oversmartness ki height 😛 Tere lye nhi tha, chal nikal 😛 Its Sweet-um not Sweet-y 😛