BLUES- AR FanFic COMPLETE - Page 84

Whaaat?! It's finished...and I've not updated a single reserved box yet?!

Heyy Hannah..

ohk. You're probably wondering who the hell is this? And she hasn't commented before and now that I've finished that's when she decides to throw her comment. Thanks but no thanks. Right, that's probably your reaction.. I know it would be mine, so I'm saying, I'm truly, truly, truly sorry for only ever commenting once on this wonderful fanfiction, and then keeping up with it, but never bothering to drop by a comment at all! Truth is, I was just too lazy. Coz I think this piece of work deserves a detailed comment, and I'm sooo lazy to write one, I just kept putting it off till I saw that only a few chapters were left for Blues to finish, so I thought why not let it finish, then I'll comment on the whole thing properly. So here goes.

Firstly, I love, love, love how you've brought in an issue so common in this world which people ignore. Post natal depression. I know my aunt went through it, and I had no idea what so ever! I mean, depression itself has such massive effects on people, yet somehow, it still never renders as a proper disease. People always just under estimate it and ignore it, thinking 'yeah they'll get over it'..but the levels of depression are such that simply 'getting over it' could mean giving up your life! And most tend to ignore it. So I applaud you for taking a concept so different and basing your wonderful writing about it! And I'm not sucking up. It's true.

Secondly, I love how you show the way Armaan has handled the whole thing. Right from the start, where he's alone with Aria, and looking after her, up to the time he finally really accepts Riddhima in his life. There's not much growth in his character, because it was there already. He was the one constant in the whole fanfiction who kept his emotions in check (almost all the times) thought of his daughter before anyone else like a real father would, adored his wife enough to accept her back, without questions at first even though she'd been gone for two years, and kept his friendship with the others despite having every reason to fall, break and lose hope in life. You shaped his character so splendidly that when I look back, I'm honestly speechless because he's basically the epitome of the perfect guy.

I think it was a really touching moment when you put in the part of him breaking down in Riddhima's arms after she joked about running away with Aria. It was needed. He needed to let it out. Coz if he didn't, he would never truly forgive her. It's amazing the way you show his insecurities edging away, regarding Riddhima and Aria. The time at the picnic was probably the first time it hit him, that Riddhima could leave with Aria, and he'd be left all alone. And you can't even blame him for thinking like that! But then slowly, he trusted her more and more until obviously that day when she tried to get him to speak. I don't think anyone could really ever understand what Armaan went through when Riddhima left, unless they've been in his exact position. What with pity from people around you, sasurjee playing the blame game with you because he's never really liked you too much, a baby to look after, feed, dress, stay awake for and hospital duties! I've been helping out with babies, and I know, looking after them can be a hell lot of work (especially if they're twins..though I do adore the twins I look after). But the way you've shown him balance everything out is quite a stroke of genius, I must say.

I don't blame him in the slightest for almost taking six months to fully trust Riddhima with himself again. Obviously, going through all the things I mentioned above, all alone, is trying. And maybe he might forgive her completely eventually, but forgetting it will take a much, much longer time. And I'm not saying that people are bad writers. But it's very tempting to give in, and make your main characters fall in love again, and have everything peachy and dandy. So the fact that you waited until the very end for all that ' hats off to you for that ' shows how you had crafted the story beautifully. I'm not sure if the every chapter was written on impulse or not, but I had a feeling you'd planned out certain events to occur at certain times, hence the smooth flow of the fanfiction as a whole.

Oh, one more thing that was marvellously kept constant about Armaan was his love for Riddhima. Beautifully expressed throughout the whole prose. He could have easily gotten married again, and had someone to help look after Aria. I mean with his charms and looks, I think someone would be stupid to reject him! Lol!! But he didn't. Riddhima was the only person he loved so much, and the way you portrayed it from his side was amazing!

The second main Character, Riddhima. She's someone that you have seen grow ever since she was introduced, up to the end. She's been through insecurities, she's been through jealousy, she's been through eons of hurt, depression and yet she remained strong, grew stronger and stood by, taking it all in her stride, not having an ounce of self pity ' which many, many people probably would ' until she finally got back her husband and her daughter. Sure it took her long to bond with Aria. And probably even longer to bond again with Armaan. When writing fanfictions, we writers almost ignore the smallest details, probably in our hurry to get our favourite couple back together. But you've paid attention even to the littlest details like how Riddhima feels when her sister acts like Aria's mother. Like how Riddhima tries to bond with her daughter, but people just keep suspecting her. For crying out loud, yes she left! But she had to! It's not like we choose depression. It's not like we choose our hormonal balances to go haywire at specific times. I'm pretty sure she didn't WANT to leave Armaan and her Daughter. Btw I'm directing this specifically to Nikki, lol! But I love how you put that one friend there who still frowned upon Riddhima's actions. Because, lo and behold, we all have that one friend who's the pessimist and always looks at the negative side of things. Lol!!! So yeah, something else that's really thoughtful from you.

While I was reading Ridz's 'outburst' (inverted commas because she sort of planned the whole thing..) I couldn't help thinking how right she is. She has reason to be self pitying. She has reason to be a bit angry, maybe at herself, maybe at others, maybe at fate. Because really, it's not fair that your daughter looks up at someone else like their mother figure. And it's not fair on Armaan either for that matter. But the way she accepted it, understood, and remained silent just makes me admire her for the inner strength she had to endure all that. I'd probably break down in seconds. Or go away again, thinking I'm not needed. But she stood by and did what was right. And honestly, if someone goes through all that, and suffers silently, it's about time she's forgiven. And to be fair, I don't think she did anything wrong to not be forgiven. Yes, it'll take time to forgive. But once you see it's not her fault, then forgiving becomes so much easier.

The way AR's relationship grew over time once she came back was portrayed beautifully (forgive me if I've used this before, other descriptive words fail me..) !! From not talking at all, and having strained silences, to finally sleeping in the same room, on the same bed. And thank you again for not succumbing under writer's/reader's pressure and bringing AR back together again ASAP. The story wouldn't have had as much desperation and reality in it otherwise!! So bravo for all that :D

I think you did the supporting characters, Rahul, Muski, Anjali, Shanky and Nikki full justice! True, Shanky was a bit irritating, and so was Nikki, but they were right in their places. I mean, All sasurjee was doing was looking out for his daughter, and all Nikki was doing was looking out for her best friend. That said, I would love to have a friend like Nikki sometime, and a dad like Shanky (although I think mine comes quite close..and even if he doesn't I wouldn't swap him for anything in the world!!) You know you've always got someone who has your back. And you justified their views on the whole situation quite accurately as well. You can't really hate a person. Well, you can, but regardless, there's always a dark and light side to everyone!! And you've shown that really well through those two characters specially. I'm not saying they're grey or negative. I'm just saying they're too over protective of the people they love, which could potentially cause strain in people's lives. And it does at times! You hit the nail on the head with this one. And so even though when I get slightly miffed at how Nikki acts, or how Shanky has a go at Armaan regarding Riddhima, I can't hate them. Ever. And that's all thanks to the way you reasoned out every action of theirs.

Aria. Well bless her. Pivota role but I can still not find the right words for her. I think the words 'ball of adorability' sum her up quite well!! LOL.. the whole fanfiction was based around her, well not reallly'but she did play a vital role. I think you've displayed her whole babyishness very accurately! So hi five for that! :D

Finally, I'd just like to comment on your writing. You write beautifully. Again, I'm not sucking up. Ever since the first chapter, you just drew me into the whole story, mainly because your writing just captured every essence of each character, and all my attention in a moment!! I mean, yes, the story also drew me in, but I can name so many stories that have drawn me in, which I just haven't wanted to keep up with because the writing was appalling! Similarly, in other stories, the writing and vocabulary used are really amazing, but the story is just so boring or the writer gives in to theirs and the readers' desires of having the couple together asap, that your interest just zaps out. Nothing of that sort with Blues. Nothing at all. Every chapter, long, short, medium, kept me enticed and wrapped in the storyline, because I kept wanting to know how the characters will react to one thing, when exactly AR will get together, and how the small details of their life will work out.

So overall, Blues has been one AMAZING journey! I loved every minute of it! :D And the cherry on the top was that it was on my favourite fictional couple ever!! Hope this suffices for all the times I gave in to my laziness and never commented!! :S

Love,

Sanaa

PS - an epilogue would be awesome!! 😆

aaawww...i didn't want it to finish...;'(

That was such a cute and short FF :) Loved it <33

@nondescript: Awesum n fantastic!!!!😊

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