VirIka SS: Love Hurts.. | Note on Page 9 |

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey All!
This is my first story on VirIka!
Well, this is my first story in the forum..
Hope you all like it!:D
I am really sorry if I have done any mistake..

This SS is a continuation from yesterday's Maha Episode on 19th Jan 2013.

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VirIka SS: Love Hurts..
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Part 1: The Sadness..


Jeevika and Maanvi watched on as Swamini bua fell on the floor and fainted!
They were in shock!
Just then, Viren entered the room..
Seeing his Badi Maa in that state, his heart skipped a beat!
He ran towards his badi Maa and cried his lungs out!!
Upon hearing his cries, the family gathered and Swamini bua was brought to the hospital..

---- In the Ambulance ----

The family was worried looking at Swamini bua.
Virat, Viren, Jeevika and Maanvi came in a different car..
Viren was all worried for his bua..

" NO!! Its a lie! My son won't do such a thing! Its a lie!! "

" When I say Don't means Don't! You are not supposed to tell anything to Bua! "

Both Viren's and Swamini's words echoed in Jeevika.
Tears rolled down her cheeks..
She decided to tell everything to Viren at the hospital..
Because she knew Viren woukd eventually find out what happened..

---- At hospital ----

The family was distressed as Swamini bua was brought to the ICU.
Viren couldn't control him..
Tears gushed out of his eyes..

Jeevika could not see her husband crying like that!
She went towards him..
Maanvi found out what her Di was doing and held her arm..
But, Jeevika just shoved her off!

Jeevika stood in front of Viren.
Upon seeing his wife, Viren hugged Jeevika tightly!
Both their eyes were watery!
Jeevika decided to tell him everything at that time..
She wanted her husband to know it!
She broke the hug and opened up.

" I am sorry Viren Ji.. I am sorry.."

Maanvi decided to not let her Di do it! She knew it would be the worst end..

" Di! NO!! You are not telling anything! Jiju, its nothing! Don't worry! "

" No Mannu! I did the mistake and I have to tell my husband! Don't stop me! "

" Viren Ji! I broke your trust! I am sorry Viren Ji.. I did something you asked me not to.. Sorry! " Jeevika continued..

" What Jeevika?? Tell me clearly! I don't understand!! " asked a confused Viren..

" Viren Ji! I...I...I..."

" What I Jeevika? Tell me! "

" Viren Ji! I told Bua whatever happened on the night! I told Bua why I shot Karan! I know you told me not to but I had to Viren Ji.. I am sorry.. I couldn't control myself when Bua talked bad about my parents! I couldn't Viren Ji! After all, I am a daughter! But, I am really sorry Viren Ji! I broke your trust! Sorry Viren Ji" She said as tears rolled down her cheeks..

Maanvi went and hugged her Di.. Both the sisters were crying!:(

Virat went towards his brother.. " Bhai? "

But there was no response!

Everyone turned and saw Viren as he stood rooted to the ground in shock and disbelief...

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That's All!
I know it was weird and stuff!
Hope you all liked it!
But, this is the first time I am writing something..
Both chappals and tomatoes are welcome!
I am sorry if I have done any mistake or didn't make any sense.
Feel free to comment!:D

Thank you:)

Preetha..

Link to my Another SS: VirIka SS: A Broken Mirror..

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Part 1: The Sadness

Note 1 (5th post) : Buddy please.


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sanjana_cool thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#2
res
me first yippe!
*runs to read*

unres
superb preetha
i told u na...u will rock!
excellent job👏
loved jeevika's determination
u portrayed her exactly the same way!
viren n the hug!
loved that
perfect preetha
the way viren reacted!!
everything was mindblowing!
continue soon
👏
Edited by sanjana_cool - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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#UNRES#

Preetz, You're writing an SS. 😃 Yayy!


The way you portrayed everything was just WOW!

It didn't seem that you're writing for the first time.

It was fab. Especially, the end. Viren's reaction. I could actually picture everything happening.

Great job, Preetz 👍🏼

Continue soon and scrap me. ;)

🤗
Edited by -Deeps- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey!
is this your first attempt?
it doesnt appear so,
it felt so awesome
liked it a lot, specially jeevika's will to tell the truth!
she is so pure sometimes, and the way viren hugged her tightly!
awe struck!
waiting for the next part eagerly, please pm me!😊

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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice start preetz waiting for viren's reaction & dont worry dear no one will throw chappal/tomato on u its damn superb continue soon
Edited by amritaluvskryan - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey its simply amazing story plz continue and pm me
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Loved it its amazing it doesn't look like its your first time writing plz continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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res
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Unres!!
I'm late! 😒 No worries! 😉

Bestieee! 🤗 I jst loved it!!
To be frank.. This is the 1st story of VirIka, I'm reading!
Till now only VirMan!!
But, I'm enjoying it sooo much yr!! ❤️
Loved it to the core! Mwah :*
U rock! ⭐️
Edited by simar_virMan - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I can't believe this is your first attempt.
Well this was just fantastic.
amazingly portrayed the emotions.
Loved it.
Please continue this for sure.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Really nice start!:)

Pls continue soon

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