should i write?pls comment,i am waiting...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey guys am riya,to bohot sare frnds ariya k bare mein likh rahe hai,to maine v socha behti ganga mei haat dho loo,i mean ku6 ghatiya,wahiyat likhu.i am jst giving outlines of my story,if u lyk my idea thn i will post it. story is abt raina,riya's sis,who is a replacement of her.she hates her as she is always better than her in everything.how will she know how wonderful was riya,its d plot.raina-asr,socha nhi.agar likhungi thn sochungi.aur raina is jst lyk asr.always angry,full of attitude. pls comment and reply if i should write??

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Posted: 13 years ago
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go ahead and write 😊
best of luck
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome concept...
i'm sure the story will be interesting.
😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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thnks yaar.. i will sure write if more generous lyk u encourage me
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Posted: 13 years ago
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raina character sketch: c nd riya were sis, raina is mr.mukherjee's daughter 4m 2nd marriage.riya was best in everything,looks,brain,caring.all loved her.so raina is always jealous of her.and uski mom always aag mein ghee dalne ka kam krti.so c bcame arrogant,spoiled.riya always loved her lyk an elder sis,bt raina always pushed her away.now c hv 2 join that team which was ri's world.now how will c deal with it and discover how wonderful person was her sis is d story.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey I was thinking almost like you... Come on keep it up... Plzz do write it... It will be awesome ... :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey ,1 st chapter.pls bear.aur koi gaali deni ho to man mein hi dena,reply mein nhi. agar a6a lage to pls is story ka koi a6a sa naam sochna.



Raina,there is an letter for u. her mom shouts at her while watching tv serial.

She rose from her study table,with a what the look.she reached the door and saw the post man.

Yes? She asked the post man.

Mam,there is an letter.he gave him the letter.she looked at it quickly and signed the paper.she was abt to close the door when the post-man interrupted,mam,is mr.devesh mukherjee here?

No,he is not.she answered curtly.what is it?

A letter for him too.

Ok,you can give it to me.i am his daughter.she replied.the postman nodded and gave her the letter .

what letter is it dear?her mom asked her sweetly.

Let me check it first mom.she tear the envelope and started to read the letter.its her joining letter.

Raina??? Her mom asked again.she got up from the sofa and took the letter from her.after reading it,she hugged her,congratulation dear.i know one day you will be part of etf.its the best crime investigation department,and my daughter is the best.she broke the hug,I am so happy.

Raina was numb.she should be happy,and she is,but she doesn't show anything she feels.she just said thank you mom,and left the room.

She closed the door of her room,and again read the whole letter.research analysist of etf,her dream job.was nt she trying for it from 2 yrs?at last she succeed.she sighed and suddenly saw the other letter in her hand,the letter for her father.she opened it.she went on reading it,and suddenly,she threw the letter away..she was burning from inside with anger.

Again,she is stealing my happiness.phir se,meri khusi ko baat<dividing> rahi hai woh.uske jaane k baad v.damn it.kyun? She threw the pillow on the floor and lie on the bed restlessly and closed her eyes.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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2nd chapter... dnt beat me...

My first day in the office,and I am more excited than nervous.

I reached in front of my new office building in my bike.yeah I ride a bike.big deal.main bike se utri,helmet khola,aur apnea as paas ko achhi tarah se dekhne lagi.tabhi,ek car agayi aur bilkul uski bike k paas mein ruk gayi.ek aadmi us gaari se niche utra.

Who are you?anyone is not allowed here except team members. He asked her.

And who r u to ask me this? i asked him with a irritating tone.

I am acp arjun suryakant rawte,2nd in command of etf.now if you like to give me ans.he asked her sarcastingly.

I checked out the man from head to toe.looks lyk a cop.chehre pe 2 much arrogance and attitude.he irritated me the moment I heard his voice.

I will ,sir.but I should first me chief of the etf,mr.rathore.thn you will know everything.

Whatever,jst stay away from the office.he warned her,showing how angry he is.

Aye aye sir.she salute him,mockingly.and acp asr is pissed off and went to the building cursing her.she was amused at him.

After 10 mins,she entered the office with her boss,sameer rathore.they entered the conference room,where all were sitting .rathore called them.guys,one moment pls.

They all got up ,except that arrogant ,2nd in command acp.rathore again shouted,all of you,and rawte ,I mean you too.he got up from the chair and give us both a damn look.mostly me,I guess.this man is really making me amused.

Guys,she is raina.our new research analyst.she will join us from today.

The 3 men acted defensively,lyk they are protecting something.thats weird.rathore sir introduced us.

Raina,he is shree,technical head and he is chandrakant aka chotu,our commando.and he is acp rawte.

Yeah we hv met before. Acp asr shouted from his place.i shouted too,yes sir,we did.

rathore sir gave us some paper work and went to his cabin.we all sat in the conference room and working on our subjects.may be I am jst imagining,bt all the 4 men was nt so happy abt my arrival.of course,I wonder why?its 3 months after her….

There is a new case guys,we hv to move.

We went down,the four men went to the suv,and I took my bike.of course,I reached fast and started to gather info.it was an murder of a maid in a bunglow.the owner of the house is away for a trip.the team arrived and I gave all infos to rathore sir.he said gd job,and went to interrogate the guard of the house.i was checking my notes,when chotu came near me,

Raina,we hv nt met properly.i am chandrakat aka chotu.he gave his hand for handshake.i smile a little and said,hi Chandra..

Hey ,call me chotu.btw ,nice bike.

Thnx.

How is the first day?hum log tumhe pasand to aa rahe hain na? he smiled.

Gd,pretty gd.i looked amusingly at acp asr and he saw me.we both glared at each other.chotu sensed the underground volcano connection and tried to distract me.hey,don't mind rawte sir,he is little rude.

And arrogant and badtamiz.

And sharp and intelligent.he added.we both laughed.after some time,I asked him,I guess main tum logo ko pasand nhi ayi.i looked directly at his eyes,and he started to mumble and tried to look away.arey nhi nhi.its jst the awkwardness.ku6 din bad dkna sb thk hoga.hey,frnds?

Sure.and we hi 5 .

We came back to office,and discussed the case.a chaiwala entered and gave cutting chai to d gr8 acp.what is that?i hv never heard of that.and eww,how cn he hav that??? Its nt any hygienic nonsense,bt this beautiful , compact office and this stupid glass of tea,does not go with each other.i was disgusted.chotu give me a aaadat pr jayegi look.i rolled my eyes and concentrated on the file.the chaiwala took our order and left.

It was 8 pm,and rathore sir called it for a day.he was almost gone,when I ran behind him and asked aby shifting my things to my new locker.he told me to ask abt it to shree.shree,that guy who was weirdo than all,than that acp too.i entered the conference room and heard a new voice.must be shree.

Dk chotu,kaise bikhr ke rakha hai sare papers.so untidy.aur ek ri thi,jo hamesha saaf suthri rehti thi.pata nhi kaise ye ri ki jagah pr aa gyi? Shree was talking to chotu.

Anger boiled through my head to toe.i so wanted to break something.i entered the room,banged the door behind,and stood directly in front of shree.he was shocked at my action.i replied him,sorry to disappoint you mr.sen,bt I am like this.you better start to tolerate it and my presence.and nxt time,try to complain me instead of bitching behind my back .samjhe ya samjhaun?and another thing,mujhe 2nd hand cheese pasand nhi.main apne khud ki jagah banana ke liye ayi hoo,kisi ki jagah lene nhi.

I took my phone and prepared to leave when,I remembered something.

Mr.sen,kindly kal mere liye jo locker rakha gaya hai uski key leke aiyega.mujhe baatein repeat krna bhi pasand nhi hai.and started to leave,when I remember something again.

Aur ek aur baat,my name is raina,you better call me that instead of ye.

. And finally I left the place

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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow that Raina is a volcano, and she even used Arjun's dialogue😆
she's not scared of Arjun
and baap re baap the way she talked with Shree
I dont know about her past and how her mum has been instigating her against Riya, but sorry i dont really like her at all😡, so brilliant job done by you👏, you did an awesome job...
Perhaps with further updates i'd start to relate to her character and appreciate her more...
please continue😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice ff
go ahead
waiitng to read

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