SwaRon/TanHa SS ~Married By Mistake~ COMPLETE

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ananya randhawa

@Ananya.SwaRon

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#391

**EDITED**

Baz,you are a star. the update was oh-so-awesome. the notorious Swayam and his shy wife Sharon were a treat to read and with you writing it was like a cheery on the cake. the romance which you wrote about could be felt. it was an intermediate attempt to their Official-first-night. god knows what would have happened if it had continued further 😳. loved the role which Swayam's sister Kriya played here, she very-well knows how to make her Sister-in-law/Bhabi go pink in just one go on the mention of her brother's name. seeing Sharon in her brother's shirt was enough for Kriya to understand what happened between her beloved brother and his wife,her sister-in law/ Bhabi. the way you penned down the whole part is commendable including all the small mischievous portions and also,the paras where you wrote about their stubbornness regarding being vocal about their emotions and speak up whatever was there in their heart. loved the portion where they had a tiff considering who would say i luv you, first. all in-all it was a AWESOME update.

looking forward to more such works from your side.

thanks for the PM.

P.S.: i'm waiting for your next update of your FF. 😳

Edited by swaron_d3 - 13 years ago

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Radioactive.

@Radioactive.

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#392

Res

Yes, I'm lazy and you'll get the comment within a day or two, but not today. :P

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A day late, but here's the comment as I promised. :)

Baz, awesome update. Way to end an awesome SS!

I really like how you wrote this chapter. Sharon reminiscing all the moments and completely list in Swayam. You made me smile.! :)

The Sharon-Kriya conversation was really cute. Poor Sharon, the only thing she has time for these days is blushing. She should paint her cheeks red, that'll help. 🤣 (I know it's lame joke, but you know I'm an expert at cracking jokes that make you cry 😆)

It's so like them to want the other to say it first. They residing the word "Ziddi". 😆
Okay, Sharon seems to be fully prepared to knock the living daylights out of Swayam. And me likey.

You are the master at writing romance, you know that right. I mean, where do you get such ideas from. The rain part was so nice.
And my favourite part of the entire update was the part where they were standing on either side of the glass door. That was so cute. <3

In short the entire update was really good. I loved it.! It was so much fun reading it. :)

Thank you for the PM.

Edited by Srishti_SwaRon - 13 years ago

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#393

BAZ 🤗

RES

Will edit soon enough 😳

I know i am late but i promised to edit my comment on tuesday and its me keeping my promise to you. I am sorry that i am late but this SS deserves a comment its worthy of and i was short of both time and right frame of mind to comment earlier.

Now where do i start from, let me tell you that you are a master in writing romance and i wonder from where you get these awesome ideas and execute them so nicely. Loved the title you gave and one can visualize what was coming our way.

Starting from how you showed Swayam's liking towards Sharon and how they always ended up arguing on who was the best at dance and how he always teased her.

The dance face off and how both Swayam and Sharon got lost in to each other was clear a indication of what chemistry they shared.

The part where you showed how they were tricked in to a contract marriage and their respective reactions were super fun to read.

In particular Swayam's future dream about kids was hilarious.

Few of the dialogues were beautifully penned keeping the comic angle intact and leaving us readers in laughters.

The bit where Rey and Kriya tease Sharon and she tells them she was busy looking for her cloths 😆

And then comes the part where Rey,Kriya Swayam's mom all join and tease Swayam and he realizes what that feels like was cool.

Then came the honeymoon part and thanks to a poor cockroach we got some super hot and romantic swaron moments, i liked how you have shown Sharon falling for Swayam slowly and how she could not keep her hands and thoughts to herself. Loved the lil jealousy angle you showed us on the later updates. The beach part the dance part the teasing angle all done masterly. The proposal from Swayam was the best and i could not stop but eeep at how awesome SwaRon together are. The ending part of the SS the best. I still wonder your inspiration for these awesome ideas the pallu romance though read many times before was still different with a touch of your magnificence. The Kriya Sharon conversation was real cute and Sharon blushing and finally hearing her inner self of her feelings for Swayam was nice. The hot Sharon and what it did to her husband Swayam was nicely shown the rain part was awesome and the best was the glass door part i loved how Swayam knew best to wait for her to come out by herself and all she needed was a lil push, to me it felt more then just words could convey it had a more inner meaning and ring to it. IT was Sharon loosing herself to Swayam and coming as just one soul for a life ahead.

Loved this SS to the core and i am sure i will be coming back to it and read it anytime i want a swaron dose 😳

Okay i guess i made sense and you got the point on how much i loved the OS and how well you write.

P.S - Sorry again dear 🤗

Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago

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Deepika

@_Deepika_

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#394

Sorry swthrt for commenting late...though i was one of the 1st few to read this part...as i told u ...u r one of my fav writers on IF...i just love ur work ❤️...u r awesome 👍🏼

coming to the update ...the way ur words captivated me throughout the update i couldn't even blink my eyes...its just A-M-A-Z-I-N-G...blushing sharon...hugging the teddy ...thinking of swayam...how sweeet...

The way he would slightly blush and just smile at her when caught starring at him sent butterflies in her stomach.❤️

Loved the KRISHA part...kriya teasing sharon over swayam...can't get better than that

The shirt smelled so much of him and she didn't want to take it off so she just pulled on her jeans and kept wearing the shirt as it was her official night suite now.

I asked him so many times to give it to me but he never even allowed me to touch'and now u r wearing it!...he gave it to you...WOW

When kria tells it to sharon that she is in love ...it was the cutest moment...

he knew she was in love with him but didn't want to admit it to herself. She needed someone to say it on her face and kria did just that one thing.

And than she says she will make him admit first...wooo...open challenge ...😲

Loved swayam blackmailing Rey over sharon 😆😆...

Than comes the GAME OF SEDUCTION(ur OS name😉) ...who will confess first...she is wearing saree to seduce him and he is seducing her back...it was oh-so-sensuous ...😳😳...loved sharon's dilemma ...his effect on her making her crazyy...

"no'I just wore it for you" she felt him smirk against her ear as he was nibbling her ear lobe and then he suddenly turned her around and pressed her body against his saying 'trust me I like u better without the sari"😳naughty & hotty SWARON

The teasing part was amusing...these two are magical...breath-taking

"did not'and don't change the topic'just say it" Sharon "why don't u use ur own mouth and say it urself" both of them were glaring at each other and then yelled more like threw at each other's faces "FINE! I LOVE YOU" then both of them stopped to look in each other's eyes their anger melting away.😆

this is the funniest and unique confession scene ever...ladte ladte confession wo bhi shout karte huye ...loved it ...the rain romance...awww... heavenly ...blushing sharon...teasing romantic swayam...can't ask for more ...

So he bent forward and pressed his lips against the glass wall she lowered her gaze but followed his actions and pressed her lips against his on the opposite side of the glass wall. ❤️☺️❤️

Hot,sensuous,romantic,heavenly...in short MAGICAL ...

thanx swthrt ...for giving this adorable OS ...a perfect magical ending ... loved it ...m still dreaming ...luv u for writing this dreamy SS 🤗 ...keep writing 😊

Edited by dips098 - 13 years ago

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Asma

@-FrozenRain-

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#395

Amazing Update..Loved it...

I'm short of words..

the love was expresed gr8..i dnt know y but i kinda get attached to the kisha bong and yup here to it happened...

Thansk for writting such a amazing work Bazz..

Hoping to read a lot more from you

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#396

Res

Un Res here now...

Hey Baz u crazy lil creature of naughtiness filled around in your mind... you damm arghhh what was this?????👏👏 i mean itni hotness...to much to handle for me in one go yar😳...ek to itna romance bhar diya tha isme ke puri halat kharab karke rakh di hai...aur update ka msg padke khushi bhi hui aur dukh bhi hua ki damm shit sala last part aa gaya...but whatever ab itna outstandigly mindblossoming hottty update maine kabhi nahin padha kahin pe bhi...tera dimag hai ya koi research lab hai jaha pe aise hotty naughty idea's manufacture hote rahete hai...i so cannot control my sweating...mere dad ko seriously mere AC ka use dekhke bahot hi bada jhatka lagne wala hai, pata nahi ye aise hotness personafied update kaha se nikal ke late ho aur yaha pe usko padne ke bad mera band baj jata hai sweating se...ok now enough of this lets go to update ab itna mindblowing likh dala hai ke words to as usual muje mil hi nahi rahe pata nahi ye muje time pe correct words kyu nahi milte😡😡...arghhh ab niche dekh sirf update hi discuss karunga...😆😆

so now the update started with where it ended last time as usual...but it was real sweet to see both of them feeling comfortable sleeping with eachother...but sharon using teddy to hide her blush was super cute re...i thought uski blushing se bechara teddy bhi satak gaya hoga...and damm lucky the teddy i tell you aise moment mein bhi vahi pe tha...he he he...

ok after they returned home you showed a changed sharon and fair enough ab uska dimag kam nahi kar raha tha and heart pumping chodke swayam ko yad kar raha the damm sweetly explained everything re and liked everything about it...lekin uske baad kriya entered in the frame...and man what a rocking convo they had...has has ke pet ki puri nabs phat gayi meri toh damm hilarious...aur kya one liners mar rahi thi kriya oner after one poor sharon use swayam ko yad karke blush karne ke alava koi rasta hi nahi choda tha kriya ne...you know what i liked this naughty side of kriya (mujse inspire ho gayi thi kya teri kriya re😛😉)...and blushing sharon way to cool yar...specially kriya ne jo sharon ke now became special night suit pe jo comment di " he used wash this shirt himself never allowed us touch even once aur tumhe puri k puri shirt aise hi dedi" and uspe sharon ka reaction just super perfect and super cute yar...you can say that sone pe suhaga tha sharon ka reaction...

than our mr. majnu yaha pe apni khud ki hi tricks plan kar rahe the 😉and poor rey uski torture ka sikar ban raha tha😭...but it was as funny kriya sharon convi bhale hi chota tha..but impact wise mota tha...👏👏

and than mr.majnu ghar pe aaye aur room ka darwaza kholte hi gir gaye and fir jo sharon ki shadi ke sath jo kuch bhi harkatien ki it was just awesome😆😆😆😆😆😆...aur meri sweating start ho rahi thi...

thank god sharon bhagi yaha se aur humien thoda saans lene ka mauka mila toh sahi varna ye hot scenes bap re bolti band karvadi thi meri bhi aur SwaRon ki bhi dekha nahi kaise dono ek dusre ke patience unbearable test le rahe the aur yaha pe main soch raha tha ke swayam mard ka bacha ban uthake patak de bed pe...😳😳

fir sharon in rain part aaya🥱🥱🥱...aur kya amazing description diya yar...maine aaj hi chandani film dekhi aur ab tera sharon in rain aaya main imagine karne laga sharon in same position as sri devi...oh god meri sweating gone out of control and ye gaya mera ac temprature down...finally tune mere ac ka load badha ke hi choda aisa description dekarke...and how i think ke agar muje naya ac lena pada to bill main tuje bhejunga for sure...bechara swayam cutely khada hokar dekh raha tha man i can understand ke kya guzar rahi hogi uspe jab ki ek hot ladki aise sadi pehanke bhig rahi ho aapke samne...and specially vo aapki biwi ho oh so hot damm...

than heading to inside the house swayam and sharon were about to kiss and ye kya sharon ne firse rok diya hath dal ke...and ye kya ab kaha bhagi...oh my god room lock kardiya...yaha pe baz you got one point for defining hesitant sharon too well and equally using excellence by making swayam do the things that can just relax sharon...and vo glass ke dono side wala sequence was buzzing hot re and finally sharon gave up excellently portyed everything here and from starying the update...

ab tu soch rahi hogi ke ye dianosor firse bula ke confession part ka kuch bola hi nahi but as usual had saved the best part to comment last...ab confession se thodi der pehle sharon ki ek line jo ki my favt line of the update hai "saadi maine ise sequce karke bulwane ke liye pehni thi khud seduce hone nahi...superbly written part that...and finally the confession part sabse happening part of update tha...the idea of both of them seducing each other and confessing together and that to casually was just awsome...it was funny,sweet,cute, hot and happening , and the ending was just superb...

baz have loved the ss it was just awesome...will really miss it...but i agree with the idea of yours that u mentioned in the p.s. and loved the way. you ended it...👏👏👏👏

Regards

pratik

p.s. baz really enjoyed ss...pehle aaj comment na karke tuje satane idea par than gave up...and enjoy the holidays at home...

Edited by pratik54000 - 13 years ago

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beeny

@beeny

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#397

hey Baz
agn d update was amazing sara update romance se bhara pada tha & kriya ka sharon ka teasing convo loke it soo much & d feeling of love expressed😳 soo cutely
d perfect end .
bt plz write something abt swaron don't stop😊😃
Thanx for PM😃

Edited by beeny - 13 years ago

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manasi

@manasie23

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#398

Wonderful ending for an awesome SS... keep it up...

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#399

RES😳

Gimme some time to unres this haan.

UNRES(with a sheepish smile for being late)

Firstly you kept your promise, the update was definitely gushing with sweet romantic moments and the best part about it you didn't rush up with the update, you described the minute moments so beautifully. Baz! Love you for that🤗

Love it where your mentioned about how Swayam despite being a naughty boy didn't tease Sharon about the kiss, that's Swayam for us!

As you mentioned Sharon has definitely changed in this update, from being scornful initially to now being a girl who is deeply in love the boy who loves her the most. The Kriya and Sharon part was adorable and in the last when Sharon said that she is going to make Swayam confess first, was so Sharon like!

The next part with in detail description, gal you are the best when it comes to writing romantic moments.Lol when Sharon thought she was suppose to seduce him and not the other way round.And how they both blurted out I love you at once😆

Well Sharon blushes too much in your update, but no complains we as readers as well as Swayam enjoys it the most!

So to sum up this SS has been one of my favourite works on SwaRon by you.Hope we get LOADS of this Baz!😳

Edited by Rutu - 13 years ago