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--Iqra--

@--Iqra--

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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Whoa! That was amazing! Beautiful! So many emotions at once, I could feel her pain! Great Job!

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Inkpen4877

@Inkpen4877

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Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Such a great start!!! I am looking forward to more!!!!

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Kesha_H.

@Kesha_H.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Woah I'm sppechless don't knw wht to say all I can manage rite now is tht it was a gr8 OS totally felt 4 Aarti and cud actually c Yash panicking trying to help her but she just refuses him.

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desi chic

@desi chic

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Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Hello everyone,

My gratitude extends to all of you for such kindness. I am floored by your generosity! I have been around IF for a long time, and have always referred to myself as a "rambler." It amazes me how some of you have the patience for some of the things I ramble on about. Regardless, your time and comments are much appreciated:)

Originally posted by: Kittya_Cullen
Damn!!! My dear, I was lost in the haze of emotions rolling off my screen. In her thoughts, in her actions, all coming at me one after the other. It was absolutely fantastic!!!

Hi! I'm glad I was able to relay something through the chaos of words:) Thanks for the time.

Originally posted by: Pearl_27
It was fantastic!!!! I was in awe of the emotions...you put them through...superb piece of writing.

Thank you Pearl, that is very kind of you!

Originally posted by: gcluv
excellent wrtting dear
lovely os
emotion was just awesome
loved it
do write more os / ss / ff on our arya

Hi gcluv, thanks a bunch yaar. I often get lost in details, and afraid I might be endorsing snores. Lol. Thanks! I started another one, which is not nearly finished. But, I've decided on one shots - no long term commitments. I am notorious for never finishing them!

Originally posted by: -ZsterMG-
My goodness!!!! You write SO well .. so descriptive.. so different and unique ... LOVED this OS! Wish you'd continue .. the way you bring out Aarti's dilemma and pain through your words is just amazing <3 Superb =)

Z

Hi Z! Thanks dude:) I think much of the experience is your own doing - the imagination is one of man's most powerful posessions!

Originally posted by: cynthiagem
Thank you for the emotionally packed OS. It seems time stood still as she was experiencing that earthquake inside of her and the pain that she is going through. Since I don't understand the Hindi language,I tried to read between the lines though I would request for a translation of this line since I think this is part of his realization of her importance in his life. Thanks.

"Aartiji, aapko humaare bache ki kasam..."

Heya! Thank you for the words, much appreciated. My apologies for the inconsideration. I will be more mindful of it in the future. The translations are as follows:

"Aapko jhoot se nafrat hai" - You hate lies.
"Aarti ji pe peela rang zyada acha lagta hai" - Yellow looks best on Aarti.
"Aartiji, aapko humaare bache ki kasam" - This is a little difficult to translate directly, but it has to do with Yash putting her on oath of their unborn child. He is trying to help her, but she is firmly against it. His oath is a plea towards his duties perhaps as a husband and father... You decide.

Hope that helps!

Originally posted by: villager00
goodygoodness! that was enthralling! can we have more OS every weekend, pretty pls?👏

Whoa there! What did I get myself into! Haha. I can't guarantee that even after such makhan. But, I will try to get something up here and there. It's a mood and timing thing. Ideas come all at once, or sometimes the well is completely dry. Thanks for the time!

Originally posted by: Nandiniraizaada
Wow/ Amazing OS. I was lost in it.

tiu have a lovely writing style. Keep it up👏

Thanks Nandini! Much appreciated:)

Originally posted by: padmavar
Excellent writing, Aarti's dilemma and pain came through with your writing!! Great job.

Padmavar - thank you for your graciousness and time!

Originally posted by: freya123
awesome

Thank you!

Originally posted by: jabirnou
fantastic update loved each and every single line

Thanks yaar!

Originally posted by: --Iqra--
Whoa! That was amazing! Beautiful! So many emotions at once, I could feel her pain! Great Job!

Thanks Iqra! Much appreciated.

Originally posted by: Inkpen4877
Such a great start!!! I am looking forward to more!!!!

Hi! Thank you:)... The start here my friend, is the end. I don't intend on continuing this OS further. But, I might throw in a few rambles here and there on the forum otherwise😉

Originally posted by: swaggerchick16
Woah I'm sppechless don't knw wht to say all I can manage rite now is tht it was a gr8 OS totally felt 4 Aarti and cud actually c Yash panicking trying to help her but she just refuses him.

Hi there,
Thanks for the sweetness. Both individuals are equally stubborn - Aarti is serving him a taste of his own medicine😉

Cheers,
dc

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BSwan

@BSwan

Explorer

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Posted: 13 years ago

#15

please continue this i would love to read more

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Mamta Singh

@Piku_S

Alumni

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Hi DC
Beautiful unique OS describing the dilemma that Aarti feels😭👏
I wish you wrote another part to this OS😛
Keep up the excellent work😊

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Ashwatha

@ashGC_arja

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#17

what an extraordinary piece of writing... OMG!!!!!!1 that was really superb, fantastic👏👏.

i could clearly imagine her emotions, her feelings😳...

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desi chic

@desi chic

Sparkler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: 123mitul
it was great😊

Thank you😊

Originally posted by: BSwan
please continue this i would love to read more

Hi there - thank you so much. I'm sorry, this was only a one shot, so I will not be continuing it. But, I appreciate your time😊

Originally posted by: *Piku*
Hi DC
Beautiful unique OS describing the dilemma that Aarti feels😭👏
I wish you wrote another part to this OS😛
Keep up the excellent work😊

Somebody pinch me - Mamta, is that you? I mean THE Piku? How are you keeping girl? I haven't heard from you since the JB days... Erm, I just realized that you could potentially not be the person I think you are. Regardless, thank you for your precious time and generosity. It is a one shot, so no additions. But, the other one I've come up with seems to be on a similar track...

Originally posted by: ash_arja
what an extraordinary piece of writing... OMG!!!!!!1 that was really superb, fantastic👏👏.
i could clearly imagine her emotions, her feelings😳...

Hi Ash, thank you! I'm glad it was worth your time😊