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Bas Itni Si Baat - A VirMan OS

Hello VirManians.

Depressed? Angry? Shouting at CVs mentally? Hunting for the lost Viraat?

Don't worry. When Viraat's deewaani Ankita is here, not to fear.

Here's a scene that was running in my head, one that I would really like to see this week.

Concept: Maanvi finds out it was J who is planning to donate the bone-marrow by aborting her kid, and also that Viraat knew about it. This is what should follow (according to my dream)

Warning: This is my first shot at hindi. So kindly bear with me.


***


He followed her into her room and tried to reason with her.


'Maanvi'

'Mujhe akele chhod do Viraat'

'Ek baar meri baat toh sun lo. Please Maanvi'

'Kya sunu Viraat? Yehi ki meri di kitni patthar dil hai na? Yehi ki unhone meri jaan bachaane ke liye meri chhutki ko maar daala?'

'Unke paas aur koi raasta nahi tha'

'Is raaste se toh meri mout ke raaste chalna aasaan hota'

'MAANVI'

She felt her arms getting twisted. Viraat had crushed both his arms into hers and was shaking her.


'Tum aisi baatein kyun kar rahi ho?'

'Viraat, mujhe chhodo. Dard ho raha hai Viraat'

'Aur bhabhi ka dard? Bhai ka dard? MERA dard? Who sab toh kuch nahi na, tumhare dard ke muqaable?'

'Tumhe kis baat ka dard hoga Viraat? Tumhe toh sab kuch pata tha. Jaante the tum sab kuch!'

'Jaanta tha. Jaanta tha ki mera bhai, meri jaan ko bachane ke liye, apne bacche ki jaan ko kurbaan kar raha hai. Jaanta tha, ki meri bhabhi apni behen ki zindagi ke liye apni pehli baby ki zindagi mitaane jaa rahi thi.'

'Toh phir tumne unhe aisa kyun karne diya Viraat? Kya tum mujhse pyaar nahi karte? Kya tum meri khushi nahi chahte?'

She turned away from him, tears laced in her eyes. He tried to convince her.


'Maanvi, main'

'Aaj tumne saabit kar diya ki tumhara pyaar kitna khudgarz hai. Aaj dikha diya tumne ki tumhe apne alawa kisi aur ki parwaah nahi hai.'

'Tumne aaj saabit kar diya ki tum mujhe sirf chaahte ho, mujhse pyaar nahi karte. Tumhe sirf apni khushi chahiye, meri khushi nahi? Meri emotions ki koi kadr nahi tumhe'

'Aisa nahi hai Maanvi'

'Toh phir kaisa hai Viraat? Batao mujhe. Kyun chhupayi mujhse yeh baat? Kyun karne diya Di aur Jiju ko yeh paap, haan?'

He told what he had told her a million times. A simple fact she just could not understand.


'Kyunki main tumhe khona nahi chahta Maanvi. Tum itni si baat kyun nahi samajh paa rahi?'

'Aur tum itni si baat kyun nahi samajh paa rahe ki meri Di meri khushi hai. Meri Di hi meri zindagi hai. Saansein hai who meri, dhadkan hai who meri. Tum mera dard kaise nahi samajh sakte?'

'Tum mera dard kyun samajh sakti Maanvi?'

'Kyunki mere liye sirf meri di ki khushiyaan maainey rakhti hain. Socho, kya beet rahi hogi unpe apni khushiyon ki qurbaani deke?'

'Tumhe bhabhi ka dard nazar aa raha hai, par mera dard? Kabhi socha ki agar main tumhe kho dunga, toh mujhpe kya beetegi?

'Kya fark padta hai Viraat.'

She knew in that moment that she had gone too far. She felt his grip loosen and she looked up at him tentatively. He looked at her with a blank expression and said,


'Sahi baat hai. Kya fark padta hai?'


Saying so, he walked away.

***

It had been 4 hours since then. She was starting to get worried. He hadn't even taken his cell-phone. It was past 9, and he still hadn't returned. She was pacing around the dining hall when he finally walked in.


'Kahaan the tum itni der se? Aur tumne kya haal banaa rakhi apni? Yeh sab kya hai Viraat?'

'Chalo mere saath'

'Viraat par'

'Chalo'


He dragged her out of the Vadhera house and into their garden. They halted in front of a bed of roses. Viraat pointed out to a rose that have been pulled away by its root.


'Dekho us phool ko. Kya haal ban gai hai uski? Ek dum murjha gai hai na'

'Murjha toh jaegi na. Iski jadein jo use alag ho gai hain'

'Toh kya fark padta hai?'

'Kya fark padta hai? Poudha apni jado ke bagaer kaise jee sakta hai? Itni simple si baat tum kaise nahi samajhte?'

'Yehi toh main tumse kehne ki koshis kar raha hun'


She looked at him , bewildered about the relation between the roots of a rose and her.


'Tum meri jadein ho Maanvi. Mere jeene ki wajah tum ho. Tumhaara saath ho, to iss duniya mein kuch impossible nahi. Tumhaara saath nahi, to iss duniya mein kuch possible nahi.'

'Tum ho, toh sab hai. Tum nahi, toh kuch nahi.'

'Bas itni si toh baat hai.'


She stood there silently, absorbing the depth of the love that he claimed. Impossible, but true.


'I love you Maanvi'


'I love you too Viraat'


***


So guys, that's it for the Viraat dose for tonight.

How was it? Good? Bad? Lame?

Honest comments please.

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preetipc thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wanted to see a intense virmaan scene today but was just disappointed.😡Thank god after readin ur OS i feel a little better before goin to sleep😊. Its so lovely . short but lovely .Thank you🤗
Edited by preetipc - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it's just beautiful VD 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#4
goood...

u relieved me from cvs torture...

loved it to the core...happy virat reading
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Posted: 13 years ago
#5
its lovelyyy
for today it is a enough dose for me to sleep
thank uuu for a lovely OS😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
#6
Thank you so much for the pm!!!!!
OMG thanku thanku thanku a million times😃 Thank you for your daily dose of VirMan or else this suffering would have been unbearable😭😭😭😭😭
I just loved the example you used❤️ The rose and in its' roots..sweeet😃
Manvi really needs a good telling off..I mean doesn't Virat mean anything. Well how can we blame Manvi yeh tho CVs ka nayee soch hai
Loved the OS darling⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Please continue to give us VirMan in huge doses daily!!!!
Mwwwaaah❤️
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Posted: 13 years ago
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omg ankita ur os is like a breathe of relief for me..loved it.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow its just amazing! Loved the way how u compared the roots of rose with Virman👏 such a sweet OS!! loved it to the core

ShivRajput thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Want smthng like dis yaar... Bt u knw u cant trust cv's... Brilliant.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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this was a master piece ankita...
u brought back our virman which the cvs are unable to do nowadays...

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