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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#251

Res. And Kanks - 😛

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Nice work with the chapter name. How unusual and innovative. 😛😆

No seriously though I liked it. I like all your Chapter names.

This has to be the first time I've read a Chapter beginning with a head massage. And oddly enough I liked it. Whattay way to start a read!! 👏

I loved the way you described the sky.

I loved the little conversation they had. Though it didn't, in any way, shed light on Swayam's character. I wonder why? 😳

Swayam seems to have quite a hold over Sharon. Sharon on the other hand tries to get a hold over Swayam. And this over here defines the distance between them, even more than the fact that Swayam is never there, where Sharon wants him to be. What amazes me is that even through all these distances they seem to come together. They somehow seem comfortable with it.

The entire Rey-Sharon interaction was immensely well written, with your sarcasm and humour playing vital roles. Sharon's assessment of what Rey thinks about her is highly self-deprecating, for Sharon I mean.

I was walking in the wake of my doppelganger in the waters accumulated in the niches on the road.

^^This right here is I guess the classiest way of describing a pothole. 😲 Kudos on that!👏

I liked Sharon's take on the beach including the description of the sea. One of my favorite parts in this Chapter.

a sixteen year old pink couch potato

^^I wonder who you might be talking about. 😆

Sharon's indignation on Swayam's behalf was well-brought out. And I consider it romantic because Sharon completely disregarded the offense directed towards her. She is more concerned about Swayam. How romantic, I tell you! 😃

Here Rey is being extremely instrumental in riling up all those suppressed feelings that she has inside her. She may very well be his first case of clinical depression. 😳 He is making her open up and face all those repressed feelings that she has accumulated inside of her. And that is quite a task. Nobody wants to face their weaknesses and fears.

She is beginning to notice this distance that they share, which had been lingering in the background somewhere till now.

And then the romantic note happens, quelling her perplexity for the time being. 🤔

All in all a brilliant chapter but an extremely frustrating one. When will we know more about Swayam, woman! WHEN?!? 😳

Love,

En.

P.S. I really didn't intend for this comment to be this long. I hate you!

P.P.S. And I'm going to give minuscule comments from now on. You hear that? MINUSCULE!!!!😳

Edited by Sawyer_Tom - 12 years ago

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ABI

@ABBY92

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#252

I like how Swayam urges Sharon to go out and cheer herself up !! Thank God, finally Sharon has realised that there is this awkward distance between Swayam and her even if they love each other a lot !! Looking forward to seeing what this new discovery is going to do to Swayam and Sharon's relationship and also the equation she shares with Rey !!!

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Meera

@MirageSwaron

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#253

Your sanity everyone suspects at all times of year, Sharon - culdnt b said better...mutual admiration society of Rey and Swayam😉 - Rey as u indicated is her alter ego, sounding board, her reality check...so this for me was a stable update, a reassurance of sorts...was a bit more clearer than vague abt Sharon and the turmoils of her mind thru the eyes of a luver and a buddy, pepl who hav seen her at close range and in their own ways dissected thru the enigma of the lady in question...the part where she defends Swayam to Rey's assumptions really appealed to me - a facet of Sharon's affection I thought she wuld never display so unabashedly to a supposedly third person

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Madhura

@Madhura..

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#254

This is fantastically penned down with deep thoughts...and the complex and a darker and mysterious swaron bond.
Rey's role here is kinda filler which kind of brings out the swaron bond and making sharon see things in his way which r true.
This chap is my fav..love the title.
I love almost all but cant write as it will b an essay..
I loved the way u compared the white sky with her contrasting blue jeans, well done.
Great job..
Thanks for pm.
You cant throw me out now as its not a res. You too stop resing..go upd ur shop girl.

Madhura.

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Anika Rajgaria

@AnnieR

Beginner

Posted: 12 years ago

#255

The more and more I'm reading your written stuffs,the more I'm getting addicted to it 😊
The way the stories of each character Swayum,Sharon & Rey are shaping up,I'm really loving it 👍🏼
Waiting to read further.. All the best!! 😃

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Shalini

@lyfisbeautiful

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#256

Res! pls dnt banish me from the thread! i'l unres soon..🤗

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#257

RES

Beautifully written update Kanks, unlike the previous updates i found this one on a lighter side and had me smiling more often. Loved the title and how it started with the SwaRon conversation.

i truly believe, that our perception to life and circumstances are influenced with the people around. Sharon's life turns positive with just Swayam's presence.

Still wondering the equation they share, you are giving us so much about Swayam in each update but the mystery still surrounds his character. So he wants her to spend time with Rey, Loved the conversation between Sharon and Rey and how he replied with the same tone to her almost each time. The best part for me though was when Sharon least offended by his remarks towards her, jumped in to defend Swayam. Its clear that SwaRon share a great bond of love, but why the distance between them, still remains a mystery. the ending with the lil note from Swayam, had me thinking how ever different scenarios may be, he is bound to show is love to her in the most romantic way and how well he knows her.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Edited by Sudha-SK - 12 years ago

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Shishir Darsh

@marauder

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#258

*Edited*

This update was like a breath of fresh air. Not because it shade some light on Swayam's character and his relation with Sharon ( I wonder when it will happen) but because in this update we finally get to see Sharon too realising there is something wrong between her and Swayam's relationship.

Rey and Sharon equation keeps on getting better. And I had seriously liked Rey's character in ths FF so far. He brings a completely different approach with him. And makes us look at Sharon from completely different angle. He is indeed a reality check for Sharon. And yeah their conversation is always amusing to read.

Swayam and Sharon relationship is still a mystery and eventhough I loved the way you have described their love for each other till now but still their have been a fear of something major coming toward us always. I wonder when that mystery will be revealed.

Over all quite a pleasing chapter. Waiting for the next update :)

Edited by marauder - 12 years ago

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Gargi

@gargicool

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#259

That was really great Kankshita !! I loved it. Thankfully, Sharon realised his distance, his absence. I was beginning to wonder when will you pen down her realization but yup, here it is. I seriouly think there is some depth to Swayam which you haven't revealed, some mystery. But I guess, we have to be patient. I really liked the part where Swayam urges her to go out with Rey and clear out her 'long-faced' mood!

P.S- I loved Rey in this update, he was really sweet.

P.P.S - Ah, I finally received a PM!! 😳