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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Guys!! It's me, Hinal, again! 😆

So I've written another OS... and although I'm not completely satisfied with it, I didn't know how to change so I'm just posting it up

I really do hope you like it, and enjoy it (=

Do leave your precious comments, would love to hear from you about what you thought of the OS

So... enjoy! =)

🤗



The Special Day

Today was the special day… The day we confessed… The day I proposed… The day I slid my ring on her finger… The day I gave my heart away, for her to keep forever, and took hers, for me to keep forever

Toasty – Tej!! Why'd you call me here? (she said while looking around) Waise notes hi chahiye the naa tumhe! Woh toh main tumhe scan karke bhi bhej deti!

Me – Woh… Bas aise hi! Socha iss bahane humme studies se ek break mil jaayega! (I was so nervous, the sentence sounded more like a question than a statement)

Luckily, she didn't ask for any clarification for why I called her to a restaurant… She had an idea that I too liked her, much like she liked me, so I had assumed she thought nothing more or less of it… But now that I think back, I can't help but think that she probably knew why I called her there…

Toasty – Umm… theek hai.. Andar chale? (giving me a sweet smile)

Me – Ya, let's go!

I held the door open for Toasty, like a perfect gentleman, as we entered the restaurant

Toasty – Wow! It's a nice restaurant!! (looking around)

I was lost in her enchanting smile…

Me (still lost in his world) – Toasty, haste hue tum bahot khoobsurat lagti ho!

Toasty turned around… - Kuch kaha tumne???

I shook myself out of my *dream* world, and replied – Noo.. nothing at all…

I was sweating now… This was too much… I was confused how to even propose… I couldn't afford to go to a fancy restaurant, so this Chariot Hotel was the best I could manage with all my pocket-money put together and saved for months

We were escorted to a table that faced the outskirts of Mumbai… A busy, yet serene, atmosphere was visible through the windows

I was mentally preparing myself to propose Toasty, whereas Toasty was just observing me and my nervousness… She rested her cheek on her one palm, as she leaned on the table

The waiter then came towards us with 2 plates of garden salad, with some soup and garlic bread… I knew her food preferences, so our menus were already pre-decided

I glanced sideways at Toasty and noticed her expression change… At first, she was overjoyed, then deeply shocked, and finally (if I read her emotions correctly), glad to be here… Her expression was accompanied with a soft and gentle smile at the end... A smile which is still perfectly captured in my heart and mind

It was the first time I saw her smile whole-heartedly… This gave me some confidence, something of which I was in desperate need!

Toasty – Tumhe kaise pata mujhe garden salad, soup, or garlic bread bahot pasand hai??

I looked down, and heard her let out a small giggle, - Woh… Actually hum ek baar college ke first year mein woh excursion pe gaye the tab tumne kaha tha

All this while, I was fiddling with my fingers and avoiding her look…

Toasty – Tumhe yaad hai?? (in pure awe!)

I could hear the kiddish excitement in her voice… She was such a child at times! Purely innocent and nave!

Tej – Tumhaari har baat mujhe yaad hai Toasty! (I said as I finally looked in her eyes)

I definitely felt more confident then I had ever felt before with my feelings… I could sense that she too reciprocated my feelings, and decided to confess them by the end of the night for sure

After that, we talked for a bit more… And I felt less and less reserved… She made me feel comfortable… She knew I was a shy introvert, but with her charming aura, she made me feel at ease… We talked about everything and anything, from family to hobbies… It felt like a *date… Perhaps it was one… And just the thought of it brought a huge smile on my face

Just then, the waiter came to our table with the main course of the night that I had pre-ordered for us

Toasty – Mr. Tejprakash Chaturvedi! Tumhe sach mein sab yaad hai?

I nodded… As she jumped a little in joy

Toasty – That's sooo sweeet of you!!! (her expression melting)

Saying this, she pinched my cheek… I honestly felt as if I was in heaven! I responded with a quick thank you, and we began to eat…

We had dinner, and conversed with each other… this time a little more personal stuff like our goals, and our preferences in terms of… erm… well.. life-partners… I was shocked, to be honest! I didn't know I'd feel so comfortable sharing all those details with her, but to my surprise, it felt so natural! I felt at complete ease talking to her… It was a new feeling, a good one…

And lastly, we were going to have dessert… I was a bit tensed at this point, because the time to propose her was nearing… I excused myself politely, as I went to calm myself in the restroom… I was panicking… Though deep inside, I knew there was nothing to fear, I couldn't help but be a little pessimistic as I imagined Toasty slapping me and saying a big, fat NO!

I let out a groan of frustration… I needed to stop being such a pessimist!!!!!!

I splashed some water on my face, and patted it dry with some tissue… I was going through a perspiration issue because of how nervous I was… In fact, I was so nervous that I couldn't help but wonder whether I was suffering from an anxiety disorder…

I closed my eyes, breathed in and out slowly, and had a quick conversation with Maa…

Every time I get nervous or scared or anything for that matter, talking to her always helped… Despite not having her around us, she and I shared a relationship that was not distant at all

I was able to calm myself, as I walked carefully to our table… With the dessert plate in my hand

I twisted my hand and placed the serving dish in front of Toasty in a fashionable manner…

She was definitely surprised at my presence… The dish was covered with another dome shaped lid… I signaled her to take the lid off… Her eyes widened as she discovered the ring that lay in the plate, surrounded by rose petals

I strode in front of her from the side, and knelt down beside her… I took her hand in mine, as I decided to pour my heart out in front of her and let her know how special she was to me

Me – Toasty! (taking a quick breath here to prepare myself for the coming proposal) Main jaanta hu ki hum ek duusre ko itni acchi tarike se nahi jaante… Lekin main itna zaroor janta hu ki tum mere liye bahot khaas ho… Tumhe dekh kar mujhe pata nahi kya ho jaata hai… Subah hote hi mein bechaan ho jaata hu tumse milne ke liye, aur raat ko toh main sirf subeh ka intezaar karta hu… Sochta hu kab tumse phirse baat hogi… Toasty… Kehne ko toh main bahot kuch keh sakta hu tumhaare baare mein lekin ek baat main tumse abhi kehna chahta hu Toasty… I really love you Toasty! Do you…. (and my voice faltered in the end)

I said all this while looking in her eyes, hoping my eyes would convey the feelings that I couldn't express in my words! After the last bit, I closed my eyes and waited for her response… Waited for her angelic voice to enrich my heart with happiness and joy that only she could bring me!

And then the wait was over…

Toasty – Tej! I love you too!

She had spoken in an almost-inaudible voice, but it was as loud as any fire alarm for me! The bells in my heart started ringing, as I was still kneeling there beside her, unaware of how to react to the events or even register them for that matter

Her infectious smile caught on to me, as I finally began absorbing the happiness that was flooding inside of me at the moment

She squeezed my hand as another response to what I had asked her… As I sat there, unable to look in her eyes… Once again, she rested her cheek on her palm, as I felt her gaze on me

Now that I think back to it… I was acting like a girl who just got proposed, and Toasty like the guy who just proposed the girl! Unique Jodi thi… hai humaari

I took the ring in my hand, and finally looked at her in the eyes… She forwarded her hand, as I placed it on her ring finger, in the right hand of course

Me – I promise you Toasty, soon enough, aisi hi ek aur ring tum apni left hand ki ring finger mein pehnogi

She laughed, and I too joined her

Toasty – Tumhe kitni der lagi yeh kehne mein Tej!

I smiled back…

We both talked less after the confession, and spent more time just looking in each other's' eyes… Yes I know… Sounds cheesy and sappy… But that's what we did… We could somehow figure out what the other was trying to say without them actually saying it… It was just a mutual connection we felt!

We had our dessert, and then I paid the bill

Me – I'll drop you home? (I was sure Toasty knew I was hoping she replied with a yes)

And to my luck, she did agree

We were about to get on my bike, when she stopped me

Toasty – Waise ek cheez main tumhaare confession mein edit karna chahungi

Me – Boliye English Teacherji!

She laughed at my remark… And continued..

Toasty – Tumne kaha ki hum ek duusre ke baare mein itna kuch nahi jaante, but I disagree with that

I looked at her, confusion slightly masking my face…

Toasty – Bilkul buddhu ho tum… Arrey baba… Hum ek dono ko acchi tareeke se jaante hai! Jaise tum mere pasand, naa pasand ko jaante ho… Tumhe pata chal jaata hai jab mein naraaz hoti hu! Agar ek duusre ko hum nahi jaante toh yeh sab kaise pata hota??

Me – Haan… Woh toh hai… (But then curiosity got the better of me) Aur tum mere baare mein kya jaanti ho Toasty?

She came near me, and folded her hands on her chest…

Me – Kya?

Toasty – Main tumhe itni acchi tareeke se jaanti hu Mr. Tejprakash Chaturvedi, ki mujhe yeh bhi pata hai ke tumhaare shirt ka pehla aur duusra button hamesha toota hua hota hai!

Tej – That's not true!!

I looked down at my shirt in denial, trying to prove that she wasn't right… But that was of no use… I turned to Toasty, who was trying very hard to supress her laughter… I pretended to throw her an angry look, but she was looking too sweet… I didn't bother argue, as I joined her and laughed along… Soon enough, we were clutching our stomachs, gasping for air!

Toasty – (still laughing) Tej.. Waha garden mein chalo… We'll go home after a little while

She held my hand, as we walked to the garden that was right next to the restaurant

We sat on the bench, absorbing the coolness of the breezing wind… As she spoke up

Toasty – Khade ho jaao!

Me – Huh?? Kya?? (And then I noticed that she was standing up) Kya hua?

Toasty was rummaging through her purse

Me – Arrey kya hua Toasty? Kya dhuund rahi ho?

Toasty – Mil gaya!

Lo and behold, she fished out a needle, a button and a spool of thread...

My eyes widened…. Is She For Real??? I couldn't help but wonder… A small smile escaped from my face

She put the thread through the needle, took the button, and began sewing it on my shirt… The proximity seemed perfect to me… Neither was she uncomfortable, nor was I… I felt her hands brush against my chest… I felt goosebumps come up on my skin… The overwhelming amount of senses seemed to have paralyzed me

Tej – I really love you Toasty!

Toasty – I really love you too Tej! I've loved you since the time we became best friends! In fact tab se aaj tak maine har roz mere purse me yeh sui aur dhaga rakha hai… Socha tha jab tum mujhe propose karoge toh main tab hi tumhaare button sew kar dungi!

Tej – Accha bacchu… Toh tumhe pata tha ki main tumhe chahta hu?

Toasty – Of course! (she said in her high-pitched voice)

She sewed the button on, and we sat down again…

I was still not satisfied with how the evening went… I wanted to tell her so much… So much was in my heart, but to express those, I didn't have the courage… I thought I'd sound too sappy… But I really did want to tell her how much she meant to me!

I was lost in my thoughts, and I guess Toasty figured it out, because when she shook me out of my thoughts, I noticed that she was smiling at me…

Toasty – Itna over-think mat karo! The evening was perfect!

My lips parted slightly… Tej – Tumhe kaise… kaise pata main kya soch raha tha??

Toasty's voice became gentle, almost sounding musical to my ears…

Toasty – Tej… Main jaanti hu tum kya feel kar rahe ho… Tumhe yehi lagta hai na ki yeh sham aur acchi jaa sakti thi? Tumhe aur bahot saari baatein share karni thi… (She took my hand in hers) But Tej, mere liye yeh evening sabse best evening thi! I don't want anything fancy! I just want you! I'm telling you, today was the most special evening ever and I will never forget it!

She placed a soft kiss on my cheek, as she whispered in my ear, "I love you my Buddhu Ram!"

I love you too Toasty!

I wiped my face clean from the tears that had unknowingly escaped my eyes…

I grabbed Toasty's collage… Caressed our pictures, and gave her a kiss

Me – Happy 10th Anniversary Toasty <3

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Throught the entire OS, I was just smiling <3
From the beginning till the end, I loved it <3
I absolutely loved this line: A smile which is still perfectly captured in my heart and mind <3
And this one too: Unique Jodi thi…hai humaari <3
It's just so cute how Tej remembers all that she likes <3
I love how you brought out Tej's nervousness <3
And his feelings, you captured it perfectly. I love how even a small tiny action/gesture of hers affects him so much <3
One thing I really love about TejYa is how there is some kind of 'comic' even in their romance and you have brought out that too <3
And the button romance <3 That's what makes TejYa unique <3 And you have written that so beautifully <3 I love you for adding that <3
I was in tears when I read the last line because that's when I realized that Toasty isn't with him <3
This OS was way beyond FABULOUS! <3
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Arch.Archu

Throught the entire OS, I was just smiling <3

From the beginning till the end, I loved it <3
I absolutely loved this line: A smile which is still perfectly captured in my heart and mind <3
And this one too: Unique Jodi thi'hai humaari <3
It's just so cute how Tej remembers all that she likes <3
I love how you brought out Tej's nervousness <3
And his feelings, you captured it perfectly. I love how even a small tiny action/gesture of hers affects him so much <3
One thing I really love about TejYa is how there is some kind of 'comic' even in their romance and you have brought out that too <3
And the button romance <3 That's what makes TejYa unique <3 And you have written that so beautifully <3 I love you for adding that <3
I was in tears when I read the last line because that's when I realized that Toasty isn't with him <3
This OS was way beyond FABULOUS! <3


Omg Archu... I'm not lying, but your comments make feel like I'm on cloud 9!!
Thank you so much for such a hearty comment <3
Much like how you were smiling throughout the whole OS, I was smiling throughout your response!!
<3 <3
And yes.. those lines are my favourite <3 I just wanted to add a little more depth to their relationship using those lines 😳
The comic... I am a fan of that!! It makes them special <3 So thought why not to add it in 😊
Aur uff.. Woh button waala scene toh main tha!! Waise bhi i wanted Toasty to talk about her feelings too.. But not in the usual manner.. So came up with this 😳
I love you for appreciating that just the way I did =D 😃

And Aawww!! Har baar mein rulaa deti hu tumhe,.. Next one is very happy happy!
Pakka promise!! 😃

Thanks SOOO much Archu for such a beautiful comment!
It really means a lot to me <3
Love you Archanaa =D 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@ AWS_2012
Thanks for the response!
Glad to know you liked it =)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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heyy hinal ;)
blackmailing girl :P
u finally made me come on IF and then on this forum :P
ahahah
i absolutely love the OS
it was sooo cuteee <3
specially the button sewing part :$
cont writing more
with ur new ideas ;)
n no thanks for pm :P

luv
sleepyhead ;)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: dhruvikaluvsKSG

heyy hinal ;)

blackmailing girl :P
u finally made me come on IF and then on this forum :P
ahahah
i absolutely love the OS
it was sooo cuteee <3
specially the button sewing part :$
cont writing more
with ur new ideas ;)
n no thanks for pm :P

luv
sleepyhead ;)


Sleeepyheaddd <3 =D
You made it!!
I thought tujhe aur thoda blackmail karna padega 😆
Main toh thanks bolungi.. for the comment =D
You should really watch SBS from the beginning yaar... You'll see how the sewing button scene is so symbolic n significant <3
And as you know.. Already have an idea in mind 😆
FF chodo.. aur OS' likho.. that's my motto these days 😉 Loool
Love you too sleepyhead 😃
<3
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I'm commenting again because I just love what you have written and I haven't completely expressed it <3

It was really cute how Tej saved all his pocket money just to take Toasty out for a date <3

Tumhaari har baat mujhe yaad hai Toasty! I don't know why but I love that line <3

It was really nice how they slowly became comfortable with each other :) I like the way you slowly showed that transition :D

And you know what was super cute? The fact that both of them knew what the other was doing and thinking. In the sense, both of them knew that the other liked them <3

The bathroom scene was really sweet <3 I was laughing when he was being pessimistic and imagining Toasty slapping him :P And the talk he had with Vimla Maa was heart warming <3 In the beginning days of SBS, I loved how Tej used to talk to his mom about his problems <3

The confession was just fab <3

Main tumhe itni acchi tareeke se jaanti hu Mr. Tejprakash Chaturvedi, ki mujhe yeh bhi pata hai ke tumhaare shirt ka pehla aur duusra button hamesha toota hua hota hai!

She put the thread through the needle, took the button, and began sewing it on my shirt… The proximity seemed perfect to me… Neither was she uncomfortable, nor was I… I felt her hands brush against my chest… I felt goosebumps come up on my skin… The overwhelming amount of senses seemed to have paralyzed me

In fact tab se aaj tak maine har roz mere purse me yeh sui aur dhaga rakha hai… Socha tha jab tum mujhe propose karoge toh main tab hi tumhaare button sew kar dungi!

Tej – Accha bacchu… Toh tumhe pata tha ki main tumhe chahta hu?

All those lines brought such a huge smile on my face <3

And the ending where Toasty interprets perfectly what Tej is thinking is so lovely <3

Keep writing more Buddhu Ram because I LOVE WHAT YOU WRITE! <3 <3

Love you <3

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Posted: 12 years ago
#8
This post is in reply to your reply to my comment ;) :P

I'm not lying either, your comments make me jump straight way to cloud 9 <3
Awww <3

And you did a fantastic job by adding those lines <3 It really did highlight the depth of their love <3
Toasty has her own way of telling Tej that she loves him <3 And you did that by adding that button scene was brilliant <3

Lol :P So I can definitely expect another OS from you eh? ;) <3

Love you too Buddhu Ram <3
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@ Archu

Firstly... I was surprised to see that you commented again, not as a reply to my reply of ur comment (hope ur not confused 😆) but because you wanted to say more about it <3 <3
You are a sweetheart!! Seriously!! ❤️

I'm soo glad that you liked the transition =D It took me a couple of edits to bring that in
I didn't want them to be comfortable with each other at once, especially because I don't see Tej as someone who is so open with everyone... So I used his personality to show how their relationship was shaping up to.. <3

And the Vimla Maa scene.. Yep.. That was me too! I find it very nice in the show.. And also very, you know, cultured! I loved Tej because of that! So I knew I had to include that in it too <3

To be honest, writing the confession was the hardest 😆
I rewrote it so many times just because I had no clue how he would've said it
I know he wouldn't get all mushy.. Especially because he would be afraid of opening up like that.. But it had to be meaningful... And then I thought of writing it in English.. But then the essence of it would be lost... And then I wanted to write something, but didn't know how to say it in Hindi 🤣 So this is what I ended up with... I'm glad you loved it <3 Hard work definitely pays off! 😃

I shall totally keep writing if you keep giving me such warm and encouraging comments <3 <3 <3
😳

Love you too!!


And now... 2nd response 😆

@ Archu again 😉

Aaaww <3 😃

Hehee.. The button scene is so symbolic!! Usse add nahi kiya toh phir TejYa story incomplete rahegi <3 😉
😆 Isliye I already knew in my mind that I would include a button scene in the OS 😃

And yep!! For sure!
And this time, it is a Tej and Toasty OS... so neither is Toasty leaving the house, nor is she dealing with brain tumour! 😃

Love you a lot Archu! <3 <3
Thanks for such a feedback!!
It made me smile so much <3 =)
Appreciate the time you took out to comment <3 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awww, you are a sweetheart too <3
Yeah, Tej isn't exactly a person who opens up but Toasty is and you brought out that difference with the gradual increase in their comfort level with each other. Excellent work! <3
Lmao! :P Confession part is always the toughest part. To say it in real life and for writing it also :P
Because how much ever you write or say, you feel it's incomplete <3 And you included that feeling of Tej at the end too <3
Awww <3
Yes, it's very symbolic <3 It's is an essential part of them <3
I'm waiting to read your next OS ;)
Awww, I love you too re <3 <3

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