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Anika

@kalo_megh

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#181

loved the update...loved the affect Arnav has on her..how she gets nervous when talking to him!! and love his eagerness to be with her!! 😊

<3 Barun <3

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indeedisa

@indeedisa

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#182

uh wow.. Just wow. I am flipping amazed at your writing skills, and your creativity.

The Khushi in this story has me kinda confused in a way for some reason. On one side, i feel sorry for her cause she didn't really have much choice on her marriage, but on the other side, i am annoyed at her for hurting Arnav, by blatantly ignoring his tries at pleasing her. In a way, it depends on which side you favor. I have to admit, at the beginning, I actually thought that she was being forced by Arnav, and that was why she was unresponsive, but then that was cleared up further into the story.

Honestly, i want to know more about everything actually, cause you've hidden everything away from us very carefully, and slowly revealing it in small doses, as if we'd explode if you gave us everything in one go!

Waiting eagerly for your next update. (Please do PM me)

Celiza xox

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#183

Originally posted by: indeedisa
uh wow.. Just wow. I am flipping amazed at your writing skills, and your creativity.
The Khushi in this story has me kinda confused in a way for some reason. On one side, i feel sorry for her cause she didn't really have much choice on her marriage, but on the other side, i am annoyed at her for hurting Arnav, by blatantly ignoring his tries at pleasing her. In a way, it depends on which side you favor. I have to admit, at the beginning, I actually thought that she was being forced by Arnav, and that was why she was unresponsive, but then that was cleared up further into the story.
Honestly, i want to know more about everything actually, cause you've hidden everything away from us very carefully, and slowly revealing it in small doses, as if we'd explode if you gave us everything in one go!
Waiting eagerly for your next update. (Please do PM me)
Celiza xox

Thanks…..this is really cute the manner in which you have put together a gist of this story. Yes, all good things in small doses. Read on…hopefully I won't disappoint you.

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Jalebi Jane

@JalebiJane

Inactive

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#184

"thanks for calling Khushi, you can't imagine what I am feeling right now"

You cannot imagine what I'm feeling right now!

I loved-loved-loved the conversation when Khushi calls him--her confusion--his elation--his urging her to say 'yes, come home early!'

Writing like this reminds me that if the characters are fully developed, they don't have to say much. All they have to say is, "come home early"---and that conveys the universe.

I'm enjoying this vulnerable Khushi--and their discovery. I knew from Chapter One that I would love this story.

Maya

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trivedishraddha

@ShraddRajyaguru

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#185

Wow,just read part 1. . .
Its quite interesting. . .
Have dropped a buddy request,do accept it. . .
😳
Moving to the further chapters now. . .
😊

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x.Heena.x

@x.Heena.x

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#186

Just started reading this FF and read all the chapters in one go.

Its such a good concept and obviously very well written. I loved how the characters are the same but situation reversed. As In how khushi was in the wrong this time...you always read FF where arnav does something wrong and has to make up to her...but its nice to see it sort of the other way...i am looking forward to her realising that actually, though her mind hated/disliked him - her heart had fallen...at least thats how it seems. Also want to see her running after him a bit...poor guy doesnt know how to display or say his feeling yet all this time its been so obvious...I guess she was just too angry at the situation that she never saw it or gave herself a chance to see it...so would love to see her go after him now and slowly realise her father couldnt have chosen anyone better for her :)

Continue soon - I really enjoyed it so far. Its different and very well written :)

Heena

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trivedishraddha

@ShraddRajyaguru

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#187

Just read part 2. . .
You give great descriptions!
It was awesome. .
Will read the remaining parts later,as its 5.10am in India,and i better go to sleep. . .
😊

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#188

Originally posted by: Inked
"thanks for calling Khushi, you can't imagine what I am feeling right now"

You cannot imagine what I'm feeling right now!
I loved-loved-loved the conversation when Khushi calls him--her confusion--his elation--his urging her to say 'yes, come home early!'
Writing like this reminds me that if the characters are fully developed, they don't have to say much. All they have to say is, "come home early"---and that conveys the universe.
I'm enjoying this vulnerable Khushi--and their discovery. I knew from Chapter One that I would love this story.
Maya

Thanks Maya….I am glad this is going the way I thought it would….Khushi is vulnerable like hell…..that girl is going to drive poor Arnav crazy…..not that she hasn't thus far……

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Anamika100

@Anamika100

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#189

Awww...I found the budding trust, love and attraction on Khushi's part so adorable. Poor thing, she is so tentative and unsure of herself. Neither a full fledged wife...nor a new girlfriend...IPKKND?

The scene of her sitting on the bed, surrounded by gifts that she had not opened all this time and crying just tugged at my heart strings.

You are a good storyteller!!!!!!