::SEQUEL BOOK 2::ETERNALLY YOURS::June 2013 pg 55 - Page 28

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: arunsunita_gm

Whn r yu gonna update any of yur ff/os/ss plsss updateee fast

I am updating on Iss Pyar ko kya naam doon FF for the time being and then the Madhubala OS. Its based on RK's story only the way i see it fit because we have Madhu's POV only and for some reason i prefer to tell the story from the guys perspective being more interesting than the womans nmely because Madhu is boring me with her Makki affair with Mukku. Its all about RK's Transformation from Ameerzada to ishaqzaada (From rich guy to a lover man)

To write a solid plot it takes preparation, thought process to make the plot sound outstanding and give the readers a real ride than another average read.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: matwamango

I am updating on Iss Pyar ko kya naam doon FF for the time being and then the Madhubala OS. Its based on RK's story only the way i see it fit because we have Madhu's POV only and for some reason i prefer to tell the story from the guys perspective being more interesting than the womans nmely because Madhu is boring me with her Makki affair with Mukku. Its all about RK's Transformation from Ameerzada to ishaqzaada (From rich guy to a lover man)


To write a solid plot it takes preparation, thought process to make the plot sound outstanding and give the readers a real ride than another average read.

yu mean yu will write madhubala os in which we will see dher saree madhu rk scenes and rk turning into ishqzada from amirzada haina ????????
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Posted: 13 years ago
loved it
wonderful update
especially the fact that pia past is so tragic and is related to the old pia.
looking forward to the next update.
thx a lot for the pm
continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: harshnee

loved it

wonderful update
especially the fact that pia past is so tragic and is related to the old pia.
looking forward to the next update.
thx a lot for the pm
continue soon

!!!
I am bringing the update to the present now.
Some teasers... Priya and Chahat kncok someone over with their car who is here to open a can of worms bringing a rift to ABHIYA.
Edited by matwamango - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
:::Part 22::Never say DIE:::

Priya just knew they were going to arrive late. Her brothers were faster than they were and somebody had been on far too many shopping sprees, glaring at her sister, Chahat went OTT in her quest for designers. Unfortunately there was something special they couldn't leave behind for Pia. This was the reason they'd decided to travel by car than on foot. The boys were already there. It was pitch black and not a soul in sight.

Chahat haughtily smirked in a triumphant smile in the drivers seat-I know U think i'm a spoilt brat, an attention seeking little madam, but i'm thinking of Dad. He thrives on drama, he loves playing the hero so let him. (Seeks Khushi's approval) Am right aren't i? As soon as we reach home we'll play the fourteenth wheel in their budding romance. Let them continue on a little longer. The only other person to ...deal with Mom in the correct manner is Jeet bhai. So stop looking so tentative, anxious and quit biting those nails Arohi. Their driving me nuts.
Arohi made a little commotion defending herself-I can't help being nervous. Geet di and Angel aren't here to contain this situation. I'm scared OK.
Priya was not getting into a heated discussion with Chahat. It would only upset the youngest of her sisters. Khushi hated disputes and Arohi clammed up whenever things got unsavory. Keeping calm she aired-Just keep your eyes on the road. (Tries to connect with the others mentally proving futile) Khushi will U connect with the others? I seem to lack focus.

Khushi knew her older sister was right but boys were boys, emotionally they were useless ok she was being a little sexist but for some reason she had a bad feeling about tonight. Khushi knew her sisters sensed this but they would rather cross whatever came their way than let this fear overwhelm them. Chahat di was headstrong and her heart was in the right place. It took their father too long to get off his high horse and accept Pia in his lonely life.

Khushi closed her eyes thinking of only her brothers and then connecting to her elder brother-Where are U?
Jeet gave a brotherly welcome-We've arrived and all set to intervene. U girls don't worry about Mom. She's just a little upset. Nothing i can't deal with. (Jeet reassures Khushi) Dad wasn't the cause of this. So don't go jumping to conclusions.
Khushi let our a relieved look on her face holding Arohi's hand-Its good to know Dad's not the main culprit for the first time.
Jeet confided softly-They are definitely together. I gotta go now. I'll fill U in later.

Chahat felt her control over the car slip out of no where inadvertently hitting something, she'd hit the brakes hard but it was pointless. It was as if this thing had a mind of its own. There was nobody there. Her powers would never failed her. Chahat switched the engine off and got out in a hurried rish to see what it was she'd hit.

Priya got out to check the damage out putting one hand in her sisters shoulder-This is not your fault. Chahat loook at me!
Chahat was shaking-I swear i didn't...I...the car...
Priya had a gut feeling foul play was the cause of this-I know!!! U don't have to answer to anyone. (Holds her sister) Girls go check for animals or humans, anything U can find.
Arohi got out sniffing the air for blood trails. It was human-There!!!
Chahat saw a body using her powers to follow the slope down whizzing fast towards him-He's hurt.
Priya was cautious-Be careful this person might be dangerous. (Aimed at the youngest sisters) Khushi U stay away. Let us deal with this situation.

Arohi read her sisters minds as they probed his mind. Nothing. It was a devoid pitch of emptiness-Di!! (Alarmed by their findings) he's, he can avoid our powers...what is he??? (Sounding frightened by the prospect of getting found out.)
Priya and Chahat picked the stranger up and got him in the car-Take him with us. The others will know what to do.

Jeet had Pooja in his arms. She was adamant on tagging along with him looking him straight in the eyes-Pia's never reacted this way before. I'm worried she'll crack under pressure.
Jeet kept his cool, he'd be damned if this would destroy his families happiness-I'll take care of it. (Pooja took Jeets word for it. Pia had been through far too many trials to face another setback) Grams is livid. She has a lot to answer for.

Pia channels her discord with grave difficulty at her current affairs with the past. Grams stood tall unwavering by her granddaughter's anger hoping to diffuse or extinguish this fire burning in her. While Abhay stayed in the background allowing Pia time to let out some steam. He understood what lies did to people. Abhay knew Pia required closure and some assurance from her loved ones.

Pia's heart was hammering away while her brain kept storing more questions to bombard the lady with all the answers. Pia roared out the brewing emotions to the fore filled with desparity-Is this all U can do???
Grams displayed no signs of weakness nor showed any emotion on her poker face preferring to sit down in a calm manner-What would U like me to say? U set the ball rolling and i shall do my best to answer your questions.
Pia pushed her hair back in anguished cry-All of this has been a lie, a deception to bury a secret, why did U cover this up? For whose benefit? Who are my parents? What are they and why is my Mum cum Aunt locked away for something beyond her control? ...(Stops her Grams from answering by holding her hand in the air. In a broken voice she'd managed to emote) I can't believe all these years. i was kept in the dark. U made me believe my Mother was crazy when really she was just my Aunt controlled by my birth mother. How screwed up is this? This legacy i was born into, this scandal around us, has changed my perception of what i am. This treachery, this chaos, this duplicity, this betrayal has left me with an emptiness, a guilt, i'll always be suspicious of everyone's true intent. This charade has gone long enough. Why could U not trust me with the truth? Did U think i am that weak to go all psycho on U like my aunt? (Through fits of sobs) Look at me Grams. Am i such a danger to U all that U hid this? Are U scared of me??
Grams had anticipated Pia to be doubtful and reprehensible, her eyes flew to Pia's enraged look of pure powers to the surface evoked by this wretched night. It was heartbreaking to see Pia this flustered-Pia! I did what i had to for my family. To protect my grandchild from the evil eyes of others even if it meant going up against my flesh and blood. My own daughter was nothing but a disappointment. She used her gifts to destroy her coven. (With a heavy heart she faltered) Elizabeth bore U with that evil man to gain your powers so they'd reign supreme, hoping it would harness what they needed to gain full control over all of our kind. I was ashamed of my own bloodline. Elizabeth used black magic on her own sister. On Sonia. All we ever wanted was for U to grow up in a stable environment without the added pressure of being born into this craft. I never feared U my sweet child. I feared for U. I banished Elizabeth, Beth, your mother, severing all ties to her, enabling us a way out. (Holds Pia's attention extending her hand forward, inviting Pia to take it) Pia, i will not apologize or make excuses for my actions because as the matriarch of this family i did what any mother would do. I just wished i'd have taken Elizabeth out of the equation for good but my maternal extincts had weakened my resolve and for this i am truly sorry. It is because of my Failure as your guardian is why i lost both my daughters and now maybe even losing U might prove to be the nail in my coffin.
Pia finally caves in moving slowly to her Grandmother-Please don't!!! I'm not here to fight nor am i here to go over old wounds. All i want is whats due to me. My ugly truth. Why am i being hunted by these people and why am i in the middle of some obscene tug of war with my past? Its like its trying to show me something but i'm just not listening to my soul. (Grams wipes away Pia's tears) I really hurt U didn't i? I'm losing myself to whatever is out there.
Grams refusing to let an ounce of doubt seep through Pia cupping her face-U are the bravest, the most strong willed girl i have ever seen Pia Petrove and don't U ever doubt in your true worth. Don't let anyone tell U what to do or allow anyone to pull your strings least of all those who wish to harm U. I am proud of the woman U are turning out to be and nothing U say or do can hurt me. Lies can tear a family apart but some truths are impossible to disclose. I hid the truth so this generation could live without the fear of the dark past threatening to take away your childhood. Do U understand why i did this? Have U seen what your mother did to Sonia and to Nathanial? They were innocent and they were her family. Don't go looking for Beth. She is not worth it.
Pia wanted to know about her Father blinking back the tears-What about my Father?
Grams grew apprehensive now almost withdrawing away from Pia-He is the root of all of our troubles. U mustn't name him. I am petrified of him getting his hands on U Pia. If he gets close he'll strip away everything U love. Leaving U with an emptiness. For now he can't find U but he is so close. I'm scared Pia. And nothings scares me but of losing U.

Pia got up blasting out a wide range of colourful profanities, cussing her father and at her fate. When i get my hands on that SOB he'll wish i was never born. A few more expletives used making Abhay take note of this spunky side to Pia.

Pia could never hate her Grandmother-Beth will pay for what she did to Mom and to Dad. (To Abhay and back to Grams looking guilty) Sorry about the lingo but i am going to hurl some mighty slick fire balls at those douche bags. If they think they can rule us then i will stop them at all costs. Nobody messes with my family and gets away with it. (Hold's gram's hand promising her) You'll never lose me Grandma. I happen to like who i am.
Grams wasn't so sure-Pia, listen to me, U think U can control who U are but sometimes our emotions rule us. For a witch this is dangerous.

Jeet got in the main door looking a little embarrassed-Ok tragedy averted. No casualties here. I can leave now.
Pia had to see her Mother but in her heart she felt she'd she'd abandoned her when she needed help-There's something i have to do on my own. I'm stoked we got this black cloud over us and i understand why U did this but it still kinda stings U know. I need my space and my own way to deal with my issues.
Jeet and Abhay had their reservations on letting Pia go (In unison)-I don't think...
Pia had an inkling her bodyguards would have problem with her going anywhere WITHOUT THEM fixing her posture-I am not a child who needs a babysitter when things don't go my way. Pooja tell them i don't want a fuss.
Pooja knew better than to get involved with Pia and Jeet preferring to remain on the fence shielding her body with her arms-This is between U and your boys.
Jeet gave his Father a quick nod to signal he would blockade Pia if he had to-Pia, i think we should all go together. U aren't thinking straight. (The temper in her eyes made Jeet want to laugh. He knew where Chahat got her angry traits from) U want to visit Sonia.
Pia was flabbergasted by Jeet. He always seemed to read her mind but nobody could even impede through the brick walls she'd put up around her-I don't need to ask for your permission...
Abhay stepped in-Maybe we need to go and talk about this.
Pia screamed out-I'm done with talking. (Folding her arms sulking like a child) She's been in there for years. Time to face up to the harsh realities of my past. Mom deserves more than being locked away. She needs help. Its my duty to look out for her like she's done for me.
Grams tried to explain-I know but Sonia is protected there. Sonia's dead in the brain Pia
Pia yelled out angrily-She's been in seclusion this whole time. She's your daughter and you'd let her rot in there? I know i can cure her. Mum isn't dead in her mind. And i refuse to leave her in a zombified state(To Jeet threatening to hurl him out of her way) Don't make me regret this!!
Prem beamed in walking through the doors-Chilli flakes, U are looking extra hot today!!! (Got a shock) Something i said??? (Gestures with his hands) Dad??? Bro??? Anyone care to enlighten me on the happenings???
Pia had already walked out.
Urvi hit Prem with her elbow-U just don't know when to be serious do U?
Preet and Vedhant already chasing after Pia while Abhay had already taken off behind Pia.

Abhay hoped Pia was mentally ready for this. Grams had showed him a little insight into his daughters mashed up mind. It wasn't a pleasant sight. If he knew one thing about Pia when she set her mind on something she did it. Abhay had other pressing matters to contend with. His daughters needed him and he was busy trying to manage Pia. Abhay mentally commanded his sons Karan and Arjun go over to their sisters in need of some help.

Abhay let Pia lead the way. It wasn't very difficult tracking his angry witch. She'd made it easy which troubled him. The old lady was right to be afraid. Emotionally a witch was truly a danger. Trust him to fall for strong willed women. Pia rarely ever listened to anyones advice.

Abhay used his powers to guide him past the mental blocks Pia was now placing around her-U think U can play me like this huh???

Prem had timing issues as usual. Ever since he met Urvi he was on the wrong side of time itself. Chili flakes was now a new woman altogether. Prem blamed his Dad for this change in her.
Edited by matwamango - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

YAY Am first

Ayshu honestly u wrote such an amazing update n u felt it was crappy? 😔 Wow! I loved the revelation šŸ‘ Beautifully penned.
Coming to the starting part I smell something fishy šŸ˜• Who did Chahat crash into? He spells bad news šŸ˜›
Coming to the best part, Pia Grams confrontation - was FANTASTIC šŸ‘ Loved the way u portrayed Pia's outburst n Grams standing tall n proud n not wavering for a moment before she gave the truth to her. Was power packed šŸ‘ Pia's dad seems to be another version of U-know-Who(hamara Voldy šŸ˜†) So Pia is all set to destroy her parents for ruining her foster parents lives? Go gal 🄳 But yes Grams is also right. Nothing can be more dangerous than a vengeful emotionally hurt witch n boy will her dad pay bigtime now šŸ˜† Wow Ayshu! Love Prem Urvi tit bits šŸ˜† U sure r one helluva story teller n dont u dare quit on us, OK? 😔
It was awesome n u better remove that note of yours now šŸ˜›
Edited by mandy1024 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Please try to understand this is going to be my last update
more pressure. With so many people gone i am finding out for personal reasons it is bet i hang up my writing for goodI know some people will be disappointed with my note but i am hearing a lot of deprecating news
I am venting Nobody should make another person feel bad
I an saddened by so many bashers out there. "
I have taken this break to read on others work)
My head hurts (This is becoming a regular occurance)2)Maybe i will feel different in a months time or maybe not
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: matwamango

Please try to understand this is going to be my last update
more pressure. With so many people gone i am finding out for personal reasons it is bet i hang up my writing for goodI know some people will be disappointed with my note but i am hearing a lot of deprecating news
I am venting Nobody should make another person feel bad
I an saddened by so many bashers out there. "
I have taken this break to read on others work)
My head hurts (This is becoming a regular occurance)2)Maybe i will feel different in a months time or maybe not

Ayshu please dont think of quitting on my account dear 😭 U r the best writer of this forum ā­ļø Loads of them will miss ur FFs n I just started few months back n I am pretty sure it won't matter to anyone if I continue or not U r my inspiration Ayshu n for a mediocre writer like me u shouldn't quit, PLEASE! 😭 The reason I don't wish to write anymore is bcoz I am not happy with what I write. They are below average Whatever I am writing looks like gibberish to me. Please Ayshu dont quit 😭
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Posted: 13 years ago
dat was an gr8 update..
loved it,
thanxx for d pm.
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Posted: 13 years ago
wow great story plz update soon
i really love your story's plz do continue
i will really miss u reading your story's
thanks for the pm

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