Potential storyline for HD

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Posted: 13 years ago
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I just read article here on writers filmon ke idea lete hain because ideas katam ho jatey hain.

I feel writers have no imagination or any significant real life experience...bahut sare stories ban saktey hain Indira aur us ki family par...jahan pey Rishi pehley wala rishi tha

For example...

Indira is now married...Indira deeth hai...wo apnee family ke abuse ko sahey jatee hai...rishi usko samjhata hai par wo nahi manti...rishi aur wo paisa kama kar latey hain aur SF par lutatey hain...

Rishi sey bhi Sharmas ka waisa hi behavior hai jaisey Indira key saath...paisa kamaney wali machine...par Sharmas bahut insecure hain...unhein rishi sey khatra hai...kahin Rishi Indira ko ley na jaye...aur apne family na shuru karney ki sochey

Wo har baat per jealous ho jatey hain...Rishi aur Indira ke choti choti khushiyon mein bhang dal detein hain...never letting rishi buy his wife a saree...going out on a date...if rishi brings something for Indira...they take it away from her...Indira kuch nahin kehtee...

Then Sharmas try to create misunderstandings between them...fights...Indira believes them over Rishi...Indira gives taney to Rishi like she has done recently...she is so caught up in the drama that she forgets ki Rishi us ka husband hai...usey us key pyaar ki zaroorat hai...

She is unaware ki wo rishi sey bhi waisey hi behave kar rahi hey jaisey Sharmas us key saath.

Rishi gets fedup...wants to leave sharmas...asks his wife to leave with him so that they can get on their own feet...Indira nahi manti...rishi rooth kar chala jata hai...

dono apni apni duniya mein alag rahene lagtey hain...rishi ko apney family sey samjhota karna pardta hai...wo pphir Indira key paas aata hai aur usey lekar janey ki baat karta hey...sharmas koi naya drama shuru kar detey hain...aur Indira phir Rishi ko tyaag detee hai...Rishi key dil mein ab nafrat hai...sharmas key liye aur Indira key liye...

Indira jab phir akelee reh jatee hai...aur sharmas apney rang mein mast hain...khush hein ki wo duki hey...usey bar bar Rishi ki bateiin yaad aatein hein where he tried to give her advice...

Kam per bhi thokrein khatee hai...and her good meaning boos or friend or a peon try to tell her that has become bitter...needs to leave anger behind and start respecting people...honey attracts more flies...

Ghar per Ishaan bhi Munna ke rastey per chalney laga hai...he is talking back to her...no respect...jab wo dantee hai to usey kahta hai "you are not my mother ...you cannot tell me what to do"...aur Sharmas us ka saath detein hein.

Indira then realizes that no matter what Munna and Sunaina will always be parents to him and she is not his mother...she should be mother to her won kids...even though Ishaan aa kar mafi mangta hai usse...

Aise incidents shatter Indira...usey realize hota ha ki us ko apnee family be ab dhayan dena chahiye...

Roz roz Sharmas kahtein hein ki wo yeh kar lenge...wo kar lenge...ab wo unko ultimatum dey detee hai ki wo 1 month key baad ja rahee hai...Rishi key paas ya kahin aur...

yeh bhi sho kar saktey hein ki Inder Jhumpa ki baaton mein aa kar Indira ko marne ki koshish karta hain...so that he and Munna can sell teh house...


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phir second half begins where wo Rishi ko manatee hai...per phir bhi Sharams usko nahi chodtey...kaisey they create trouble for her here...etc



bottom line that first part of the story is that through Rishi, we the audience tell her to change...per wo mantee nahi aur apnee zindagi mein khud kantey bijtee hay...
second part she realizes that people were right...takes steps...has to show tremendous courage to stick to her guns...jaisey body ko bachaney key liye infected part kaat diya jata hai...
...she cannot fullly...aur yeh poison use kitna bhari pardta hai



There are many many ways writers can show impact of abuse - chahey husband ka ho...inlaws ka...ya parents and brother sisters ka...abuse sahtey sahtey aadmi apney aap ko kho deta hai...and abused become abusers...

Indira ka foundation bahut accha hai...but needs a lot of work to shine...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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I liked this. I the story takes this line it would be good.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice track yaar...vaise bhi indira ki struggle nd etc etc...ke is show mein bahut saare naye tracks banaye jaa sakte hain...but cvs ka record toh unke all time favourite .."SHARMA NIVAAS BACHAAO MISSION.."...pe hi atka hua hai...usse aage nahi badhte ye log...bhagwaan humein sehenshakti nd cvs ko sadbuddhi de...!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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ye kya sad story hai? let indira laugh . indira and rishi aik aik family member ko sudharte hai achha banate hai. pahale bhabi .then she joins inshi and three of them teach lesson to munna. then munna impproves and joins inshi and bhabi .then four of them make straight to madira and so on last indar .in between inshi also get child some celebrations and outside calamities. no separation of inshi please. small miss understanding will be ok

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