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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nanhi and mohan always make me go awww... So cute, and adorable...in their own world of superheroes
Mohan's curiosity is increasing... And so is mine :-)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 10: Grey Scale

After a long shower and an hour of scrubbing with coconut fibers handed to him by Guru, the mild burn persisted on his skin, making him feel that his skin was smoldering under hot embers and given enough time it would peel off his musculature sooner or later. He walked out of Guru's bachelor pad - with its one room that substituted as a makeshift bedroom, living room and a kitchen that was required of every home, the bathroom squarely having built in the far corner of the terrace - with a towel in his hand and only with his night pants and a black vest. The evening had dimmed down drastically in the time he'd been showering, taking away the lumens of the day to start another perfect grey night.

Taking a few turns about the length of the terrace, he thought about the madness that had taken over him when he'd looked long into Nanhi's eyes. It wasn't an abyss of haunting as he saw in her eyes, but in Nanhi's there had been a certain flicker of a glow that he'd seen beginning to fade. Fading from a long wait, weary from a despairing wanting to have someone whisper strength that everything would be ok one day.

He shook his head, thinking that coming over to Lucknow had incapacitated him from practicing the indifference he'd worked long and hard at mastering all those years and that he was instead resonating with motive and emotion he saw behind everyone's personal reasoning. When he'd identified all that he'd been as a child with Chavanni, he took notice that she was no more than a mirror image of the kind of man he'd become now. Though time scales apart, there were too many of his clones walking around all chasing different ghosts and he decided it was best if he kept to fighting his own battles and not wage their private wars.

Or be heroically sappy and go down man-holes full of shit for that matter.

But things were never just as one wished - particularly him - and he could already hear the little one's grunts, disturbingly painful at whatever it that she was struggling at, reach his ears from all the way downstairs. He once again, for the second time in that evening, leaned over the parapet wall to catch her dragging a big bag up the stairs, seemingly having filled its entire content with rectangular red things that swayed in all directions.

Not again...His head lolled with frustration and with a roll of his eyes, he went around the wall and down the stairs to help her with the bag.

He stopped a few steps away from her where she'd come to a stop and sat down on the concrete footing, hoping that the little sprite would not pass further into whatever that is left of his sanctuary in Lucknow, given that they'd taken over his little haven on the top floor of his Chacha's house. Oh! he wasn't letting that go, at least not without a fight...

"Here..." She said before he could start with his questioning and thrust the rectangular bar into his face making his head jerk back a little, "Lifebuoy...I bought the entire lot they had at the store"

"For me?" Now that was rhetorical at best, he realized.

She gleefully nodded and he thought, whatever it was with mother and daughter to be obsessed with his bathing and hygiene routine, not forgetting the personal remark she'd made through Chavanni the last time he'd visited them.

"Yes..." Her naive mind dignified him with a response, "You can stink, you know, if you fall into a naali...Ma says you bathe with one whole soap everyday until the smell goes..."

A small laugh shook him, his bare shoulders rocking from the tickle of her innocent sense of humor. "Thank you..." He said and left it at that, ignoring everything else that came into his mind. Indeed, her Ma would take over Lucknow and have them all bathe with one whole lifebuoy, if she could.

"But where did you get the money?" He took her bag from her hand and began climbing unto the terrace.

"I killed Dolly" Was her answer and he stilled for a moment feeling the faint rise of bile from his stomach. Another beat passed by as he remembered Ramprasad, Chameli and Bholu and he sighed before began moving again.

"Wait, you are not going to ask who Dolly is?" She squeezed into the gap between his gargantuan legs and the rail and went ahead of him.

"No..." He said matter-of-factly, "Because I'm sure you are going to tell me all about the horror even if I don't want to hear one bit about Dolly"

She ran and perched herself on his cot, a wide smile from the unspoken welcome of not having driven her out already. "Dolly is my piggy bank...Ma gifted it to me last birthday. I had one hundred eighty three rupees and 75 paise...See, I bought two chocolates too for us..."

He heard her give him the full story while he had his back to her and for a moment he thought he couldn't breathe. He simply wasn't equipped for that kind of boundless attachments. The bag landed close to his feet with a thud as his hand let go of the cloth handle when it had suddenly become heavier with her sentiments, her hopes that she had already coined for them and the purity of her intentions. He knew exactly how this worked. There was no longer anything right or wrong he could do to fall in her eyes. That absolute and limitlessness of her wonder and affections irritated him further. He also knew, he will never be that child again.

Turning after a few seconds and he went to sit by her. She handed him the chocolate and he took it without resistance. They ate, chewing the toffee as its gooey relish filled their mouths slowly and when they were almost done, she twisted around to face him and nodded eagerly with delight.

"Do you know who Dolly is?" She asked, jumping to stand by his side.

He shook his head. Having already spoken more than his usual, he mildly hesitated to let her do all the talking. It was another risk he couldn't afford either, but it was still better than having to find words when he thought they have been avoiding him like the plague off late.

"Dolly is the first sheep that only had a mother and no father..." This caught his attention and he saw her scratch the side of her head. Eventually her face bloomed with recognition and she yelled, "Haan...clone"

He let out a long breath then and nodded approvingly, "Who taught you all this?"

"Ma did...she also told me about Snuppy the puppy...and all about how babies are made" Her cheer drew up a notch.

Lord! He'd not see that one coming. With all those years of writing to his name, he could never do justice to that one topic when he knew only one way to go about it and that was certainly not PG certified. It was more like an A, rated adults only.

"Ok...now its time for you to go home" He said maneuvering her off that topic and he pulled her by her wrist. To his surprise, she wiggled her thin frail arm out of his hold and ran to the far end of the terrace from where the stairs was placed.

"Ma is not home..." She was yelling now, but he wanted to tell her that her voice was pitched shrill to be perfectly audible even from that distance. But soon enough, she cut in with more details about her mom and it only silenced him further. "She has gone to the city and won't come back until late night. I'm sleeping with Dadaji today and he hasn't come back from the shop either"

He'd heard all about her mysterious little trips and escapades to the city that sometimes lasted for two full days. According to the local Guru broadcasting communications, it had all been around the 20th of the month. If this wasn't story material, then what was and he reclined back into his cot, deciding against his initial move to drop her off home.

"So, isn't your Ma going to be mad when she finds out that you have kil...no broken Dolly?"

She came sprinting and fell beside him, creating a small ripple of vibration with her weight which compared to nothing next to him, "No...its mine. Ma said I can do anything with that. And I even brought three soaps for her as gift when she comes back from the trip" She was shaking her head wildly then, the joy of gifting her Ma ruffling her small smile from before and stretched it over her lips as a wide smile "She will use it"

He was laughing then, "Why?..Do they not have bathrooms where your Ma goes?"

"No..." Chavanni's face flushed dark, her eyes turned sullen and her voice had come up with a tinge of disgust as she continued to speak, "I don't know...Ma says she fells into the naali in the city...she bathes with those soaps until the smell goes away..."

Clearly, Chavanni's allusion didn't escape him and the sudden lump that had come up in his throat made him sit up from his lazing posture.

"Ok..." He said, even as his brows knotted from what he'd heard, "let's go find Chacha now. That was enough talking about Naali's for one night" She held onto his hand then more readily and they walked astride to go find his Chacha. It was just his luck, that his Chacha was stranded at the restaurant from a meat order gone bad for the next day's sale. By her dinner time, Guru came by as his saving grace and he let Guru handle her for that time, allowing himself the small reprieve from the heavy talks they had exchanged all evening. But he was once again left to deal with her, alone and defenseless to her charms when Guru left for his Urdu class instructed by Amanat Saab himself.

The things he'd had to endure that night...

He walked her to their room and tucked her in her bed and waited by the foot of the mattress for her to fully fall asleep, until what seemed like the makings of a snore rattled the air in the room. It felt as if he was burdened with not just his own soul then, but her secrets too and also unable to bear with Chavanni's breach into his fortress, he walked out needing that rush of fresh night air into his lungs. For the rest of the slow passing of time, he waited on the outside cot and much later stretched himself on the thread bare arrangement which threatened to give up on his weight any moment and stared blankly at the random assortment of the stars in the greying night sky.

Ma says she fells into the naali in the city...she bathes with those soaps until the smell goes away...

He pictured her then from the previous evening, her eyes that shade of brown with its share of secrets which, he realized now, so artfully belied whatever it is she washed away with those whole bars of soap. Strangely, he was unable to shake off the stillness around him and he twisted around to lie on his side. His eyes took in the darkness that floated around and he couldn't help but appreciate the uniformity of black that the night spread thin. For it was always bearable when there was only light or when it went dark altogether. But there were times when those revealing thin beams of light descended into the black of the night, giving away whoever that was sheltering there. It was just the same when darkness swirled within the vast stretches of light and the two equally exposing events always took away the perceived armors that the solidarity of the untarnished day or the night offered.

And then there were those who lurked in the corners where the contrast blended and life happened on a grey scale. It wasn't all lost on him that he was one such being and he couldn't just tell yet, if she was one too...

Edited by 6th.Element - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Would nanhi really grow up to be another mohan? I wonder... The thought of her shouldering his burdens seems so scary... All we can wish is that some people would just remain etched in time as they are
megha, where do you go? I wonder when it is that he rips apart the veils off her (both literally and metamorphically)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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amazing hasini ..eagerly waiting for next part and thanx for pm 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMG!! Nanhi and Mohan manage to create magic for me everytime.

Chapter 9
sooo cute+++++ , really a laughfest 😆 all full of Ramprasad and Chameli's bholu and Nanhi's knowledge of the respective undercurrents in their relations with eachother. 😆

Chapter 10
1) Mohan's dilemma of resisting forming any emotional ties written superbly and comes across beautifully. Can almost relate to it; that moment when you consciously tell yourself to be aware and keep away but your subconscious takes control, pushing you towards the very thing which you are trying to resist.
2) Oh Megha is ultra intriguing in this FF. I almost feel like shadowing her and finding out for myself what is that thing, that aura of mystery that surrounds her. If I had been Mohan, I wouldn't have been able to resist myself doing exactly this, to satisfy my curiosity if nothing else. No doubt and hopefully we shall find Mohan doing the same in the coming chapters for the sake of curiosity and even more 😛

Well done Hasini👏, i am loving it Thanks🤗
Edited by Fmani - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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So folks from NBT forum, I'm not sure how to put this, but I'm going to try my best...

Do NOT picture the demure Megha from the soap. Because her characterization in the FF is not canon and her past in the soap is not leading to the air of mystery around her in the FF...

This Megha is entirely something else.

Also what I write for Mohan and Megha might not fit their physical characteristics or be in character with what is expected of them. Mainly because I write for other leads in my head and so I ask you to overlook those inconsistencies.

Another piece: I have already revealed in the other thread that Megha is a telugian in the story...So do bear with a small telugu song that will be coming up in Part 22. Otherwise there isn't patronizing the south indian ethnicity in any other part of the story. That is a sheer indulgence on my part.

Hoping that you will all enjoy the rest of what is to come, just the same.

-H




Edited by 6th.Element - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank u so much for updating...was missing this FF badly...M badly addicted to ur FF...one suggestion rather a sincere request from ur loyal fan: PLZ KEEP UPDATING REGULARLY OR ATLEAST ON WEEKENDS!!!!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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i am sooo immensely sorry...for being late in replying...

but no harm done...

i really dont believe ur claims dat ur characters r different dan our NBT ones...at least dere very core is not...nanhi is d way u envisage in ur creative world...innocent yet soo vulnerable...Mohan of course d guy whu hates being tied down...but keeps getting entangled...of course megha is still a mystery...but sumwhere her motherly instincts r exactly d way it is on screen...

cumg 2 d story...it has a beautiful flow...& d best thng about ur writing is d simplicity...d ways certain words just maintain d flow while sum key words jump up 2 ur attention...making d description more visualizable & characters more tangible...

thank you soo much for d pm...& apologies for d lateness...
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Part 11: A morning of many firsts

When the first drop of the morning rain plopped on his forehead, he still didn't know that it was a dawn with many firsts in his life...

Sometime between waiting for either his Chacha or Guru to show up and getting lost in the nightly spread of the starry sky he'd dozed off and now, as he shifted on the cot, while his eyes adjusted to the light and the daze melted away, he felt a brush of the back of her hand against his cheek. It was the first time he woke up to find himself sleeping next to someone he didn't find a will to run from. Chavanni and her entourage of a fluffy pink blanket, a rag doll and a pillow in the shape of Dora's face lay next to him and he smiled, realizing she'd survived the night without being crushed to death by him.

There had been that one drop of rain that had come as an empty threat from nature, not nearly followed through and he stayed on the cot, languid and assured, without hurrying them inside. In the quiet of the morning, he absorbed the details he'd never before paid attention to: the dark spread of her lashes that fanned outwards and the stubby nails that refused grow past her fingers. Then there was the dent on the bridge of her nose from the thick gross pink glasses she wore. Most of all, it was the first time he took in the perpetual crinkle of her lips that never seem to fade even as she was in the depths of her dream bound sleep.

Oh! Hell...Why did the most beautiful things in life come in such annoying little packages?, he thought getting to his feet and deciding to put her back in her bed before those moments he'd watched her sleep strike him with any significance at all, without wanting to gain clarity that they already had.

Throwing her over his shoulders, he walked towards the room and he turned back to find the edge of her blanket mopping the trail they'd taken to reach the door; Chavanni having tied one corner of the blanket to her thumb and he couldn't help the smile that floated up to his face, seeing the small ways in which she still remained a child.

He lazily pushed on one of the double doors and his sleep dissolved away as he caught on that it was locked from the inside. Shit! He shook the lever harder and the door rattled, not relenting to the growing force of his thrust. Chavanni sniffled in the crook of his neck and he gave up and waited for a while until she settled back into the comforts of her slumber. When he was about to walk down to find a help or Guru to solve the puzzle of the closed door, the doors creaked, shrieking as the lever was pulled back on the inside and jerked open to have her leaning onto one side.

He went very still then, the image her of in bed hair and a ruffled sari permeating a defined awareness even amidst the last haze of his sleep. If that hadn't done it, her smudge of dark kohl under her half-lidded eyes had made him suck in his breath for that long moment.

"One minute..." She yawned covering her mouth. "I will be right back" She said, pushing a lock of hair that slid over her face and he watched her fingers take them back and continuing to hold them there while she turned and staggered her way to the back of the house.

He blinked and stayed where he was, thinking it was the first time he was entering the bedroom of a woman at this hour when he had nothing to do with her unkempt hair, the smear of kohl below her eyes or the loose folds of her sari. Again, there was her daughter sleeping over his shoulders and yet in light of everything inconvenient and objectionable he couldn't deny that she still appeared more agreeable than most women he'd seen in that state.

He wished he was still dreaming...or ardently hoped she'd only been a nightmare. Either ways, he reckoned he had some waking up to do.

Edited by 6th.Element - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Though I should b whining about the short part, this somehow seems to be the perfect end... Am amazed how Nanhi never fails to amaze him, catch him off gaurd, push him through the crevices of his thoughts and memories
Something about a sleepy Megha, with her smudged kohl, losse sari sounds so alluring... :)
edit- me first :D
Edited by ivre - 13 years ago

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