reena1984 thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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My First OS --- Please let me know what you think!!!
In the morning everybody does aarti Gopi is singing her aarti ''Hey Gopal krishna mein'' when she gets to the gopi part she stops. Koki '' Gopi Vau tum teek ho'' Gopi '' Ji Maaji'' she starts again singing at the same time she is thinking about the pervious days mishaps 'Ahem & Anita' she stops and runs away from the Mandhir. 😭
Koki- GOPI VAHU, Yeh Gopi nu ki hua?
Hetal- Jaava di Koki,
Koki- Kisse jaava du mota bhabi, mere Gopi Vahu. is upset!😭
Poor Gopi is crying in the storeroom behind the atta and daal. remembering what she saw, and cursing herself in coming in between Ahem and Anita.
All of a sudden the door opens. She say sorry Maaji. And a voice comes saying its not maaji its me Ahem. Gopi looks in shock and wipes her tears away.
Gopi explains and apologies to Ahem for ruining his life and she knew he loved Anita but somewhere in her heart she thought one day she might be able to change yr love for me.
Ahem is silenty listening and all of a sudden he says '' Gopi hogya tera mein kuch karu''
Gopi hods her head
Ahem - Gopi you did ruin my life when you came into my life and i hurt you and hated you aswell. but it changed into friendship and now and long pause...
Gopi- Ab Ahem Ji
Ahem - Aab I love you and cannot live without you and now I have realised that and I love you more anyone in this world. 👏
❤️Gopi goes shy and both have a tight hug... Ahem gives her a kiss on the head..❤️
And Rashi is listening to all of this and is shocked to death and she falls on the floor...😆
And falls into a Kalakari Coma...👏
Edited by reena1984 - 13 years ago

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Arnisha thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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very nyce, nyce sweet n short great one... love it..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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lovely reena...loved rashi falling down...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Short ...Sweet...aand to the point... lovely.❤️By any chance did did Rashie die.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Well thats up to you what you want to do with her!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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i loved the part of rashi fainting, can she pls go to coma
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Posted: 13 years ago
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just want to say my hindi is not that good when typing hope you know what i mean!!
And Rashi she goes into a Coma!!! Kalakari Coma!!!!🤢
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Posted: 13 years ago
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First of a wonderful OS, and hard to believe this is your first one...A job well done Reena...I liked how shattered Gopi was at singing the aarti. Another thing I liked is how she left the aarti, I want Gopi to show her anger and sadness instead of hiding it always...Good going, but the best part for me was the last two lines...the last line in particular...I would love to see her fall flat on her face 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you Dhabu!! really touched with yr comments!!
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