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Posted: 13 years ago

beautiful update...

i m toh speechless... wat to say n wat to not..don't knw... this 1 part made me remember the whole journey of WWU... all the parts came in front of mine eyes while reading this update.. loved it if every girl gets a husband like mayank toh every girl will feel special herself.. n whosoever will get a wife like nupur ...wo toh luckiest person hoga...
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loved ur all updates..
thanks 4 writing this part...
LAIBA thanks di ko yeh part likhne ke liye bolne ke liye
loved it
thanks 4 the pm
may god bless u
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Posted: 13 years ago
amazing one fiza
thanks for the os & pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
this os have every thing fiza
a complete story
well written fiza👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
It ws magical dii...
The journey of this ff ws amazing...
The way u portrayed a true arranged marriage, then the responsibilities, difficulties of a woman in her in-laws all ws so realistic and well written...
And i loved both mayank and nupur equally in ur ff...the way nupur took care of her family and mayank took for nupur it ws an example of perfect couple...
And this epilogue ws cherry in the cake...Im so happy to see mayur as parents now...
Really that ws an amazing ff...
Thanks dii for this and keep writing...
Love uu...<3
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Posted: 13 years ago

Beautifully written Fiza😃

Edited by Payal-15 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
It was an awesome os i must say.Cant describe how much i loved it.Beautifully written Fiza.:D
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Posted: 13 years ago
Its beautiful di...ab kya kahe...aapne itna acha likha hai...
can't find right words to appreciate...lost while reding it.
I loved it❤️
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Posted: 13 years ago
beautifully written Fiza 😊 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Seems like after ages I felt like writing an OS, this concept came as I was making a VM.. so thought pehly OS than VM…hope u like it..

Is Qadar Pyar hai..

PArt: 1

Sitting here in my college auditorium I went back in those time when my life actually started. Yes from a normal routine life it become a life every moment, a living every second…this mere place has given me a lifetime. Everything I never desire yet came in my life as God's blessings.

Being from a small town the excitement of getting enrolled in huge city college was amazing yet I was bit nervous to, I need to cope with the expectation I have set for myself, yet I never thought that my all ambitious views and desires will change just in few days.

Reaching the bus stand I was looking at a girl, shouting on someone, nah it isn't like me to notice a girl yet her voice, by god, and her punch lines…

"kasay ghanchakar admi ho tum dekhi nhi dayta mein apan samny rekh rahi hoon"..

Ji tu ap rekh lya na

Han han behas keralo… ji ap rekh layna..tu hato tu..jan poch ker asy kharay ho tak touch ker sako…hato yaha se…

Uff.. I was wondering wht will happen when she will enter the bus, and to my luck( that time bad luck today bested fortune) her seat was next to me, and I was lost, hay khuda mjhy bachna.. the bus was mostly crowded with males, and her nervousness to share it with one of us was shown on her face so clearly. Yet she didn't show to anyone. She was just about to sit on her seat when the bus suddenly started and wht.. I was numb or actually did nt knew wht to do. She fall on me, in my arms so closed to me and I, was lost completely. She struggled and tried to stood up, yet could'nt, how could… I was, ahm m..ya…I was actually holding her. The struggled made me realized and I made her get back to her place.

The think that made me feel so sorry was the slight teary eyes I saw of her, and little chuckles of the back seater..she was already feeling so insecure and this actually made her embarrassed and more worried about her journey further…

I am sorry.. I said and she looked at me with surprised..and noded her head and get back to her self..

The journey began and we didn't talked, I was stealing glance at her, and she was trying to get her self calm.. I think she was still in tht moment.

Dash…

To our luck, the bus stoped , why, it was now out of order…

Crap.. man.. was only thing I said, and we were asked to move down and find something else..

Moving down I went to near by dahaba, almost all of us did, including her, she was now hell nervous and worried. She was all alone and soon evry one strted to move towards there ways..she covered her head, and covered herself to with her duptata, she was wondering what she will do…

That was it I have to talk to her..

Hey.. I said and she looked up to me,

I am mayank.. mein Mumbai jaraha hoon.. can I help u…ap ko kaha jana hai..

She glared at me actually scaring me..

Yeah bus shayd Mumbai hi jarahi thi..tu mjhy bhi wahi jana hoga…

Mayank: ya I know.. I was just… ap akeli hai..if u think its right u can accompany me.. mein next stop thak walk kerny wala hoon, as private transport kafi expensive paray ga..

Nupur: tu kya yaha se koi bus nhi jay gi….she asked and lines of worries were so visible on her face..

Mayank: nhi.. yeah stop nhi hai… u have to walk till there..

Nupur: thik hai mein mange kerlo gi…

Mayank: dekho I know u donot know me, neither u can trust me, per is tarah se akely jana thik nhi hai..tum chaho tum mera ID card rekh lo..

She actually chuckled and I wonder wht was so funny..mein yaha itna help ker raha hoon uper yeah mera mazak urahi hai

Nupur: tum mjhy zinda hi na choro tu ..tumahra ID card kya qabar per latkaoo gi…

Mayank: tu aur tu kuch kern nhi sakta mein..wasy tumhain mein marny wala lagta hoo….anyways.. I am walking u can cum if u want.. I request u to join as ab yaha bhi koi nhi hai….

I strted walking and she was still sitting there thinking what to do and wht not to. and than after sometime I found some step following me, it was nice to fell a stranger actually believed me, she actually did..

Nupur: nupur.. she said as she strt walking with me…

Mayank: ji?

Nupur: mera naam..

Mayank: oh…okay…

And than whom I thought is quiet sweet little girl came as a full on atom bomb for me…

Nupur: tum Mumbai kyun jarahy hoo…

Mayank: parhny…

Nupur: tu parh tu tum yaah bhi sakty hoo

Mayank: han but woh college zayda barha hai

Nupur: tumhain pata hai mein kyun jarahi hoo…

Mayank: mjhy kasay pata hoga…

Nupur: mein tu waha films join kero gi…han thik hai parhna bhi hai yet ultimately tu mjhy shahrukh k sath kam kerna hai By god..

I looked at her and couldn't hold my smile…

Nupur: tumhain mazak lag raha hai… dekhna ek din mein film mein aao gi aur tum apany dosto ko batana k tum ny meray sath travel kiya tha…tumahri bhi thori value parh jay gi..she said as she now here a huge celebrity and I my friends will actually faint knowing so…

Mayank: excuse me mjhy apni value tumhari wajah se nhi bharni…aur actually meri wasy hi bht hai..huh…

The journey was fun, dam fun, we fought, we laughed , I was quiet and she was loud… screaming and crying on little twist at ankle and when I asked laughed at me saying she was just joking wht I was so worried for…. Caughting me off guard yes actually why I was so worried…forget… yet she is a girl of substance I so knew htat.. she didn't let anything tht she is weak or need someone, yet the other second she was so fragile , so much that u have sudden urge to guard her…break Mr mayank why are u behave like hero of QSQT… u also donot know QSQT..dekha mein sirf bhodhu nhi hoo

Mayank: tummy mjhy budhu kaha

Nupur: aur nhi tu kya….tum ny QSQT nhi dekhi

Mayank: aby yeah kis bala k naam hai QSQT…

Nupur: ohh….yeah bala nhi film hai…qayamat se qayamet tak…huh…

Mayank: uffu…dekhi hai… per mjhy achi nhi lagi…fasool film

Nupur: us mein fasool kiya tha huh….

Mayank: buht kuch…

Nupur: sadu.. bekar insaan…

Mayank: flop film…

Nupur: dhoki atimaa..

Mayank: nautanki..

Nupur: uncle

Mayank: kya tum ny mjhy kay kaha….

Nupur: kuch nhi…she flip her eyes with innocent and walk away

we kept walking when I realize its not the correct way…something is wrong..as it was getting darker and we haven't even found a place..

Nupur: mayank hum kaha jarahy hain..

Mayank: pata nhi..

Nupur: KYA..tum ny kaha tha tum ko rasta pata hai…ab hum kho gay tu…humaray tu ghar per bhi kis ko pata nhi hai k hum kaha hai… tum koi kam thik se nhi kertay

Mayank: tum mjhy bachpan se janti ho jo bol rahi ho k mein koi kam thik se nhi kerskta….tumhara asar hai yeah…warna aj tak mein ny koi ka galat nhi kiya….ab asi shakal maat bano..kuch kertay hain.. woh samny dhaba hai..waha chalo…pochty hain..wasy bhi raat horahi hai…

Nupur: aur mjhy bht pyass lagi hai…chalo

Mayank: yaha bus kal subha aay gi..so its better we stay here..

Nupur: kya mein tumhary sath..

Mayank: nhi woh samny jo truck wala hai na us k pass chali jao…mein arm se kuch dair so jao ga…

Nupur: kitny beshram larky ho tum..akali larki ko sahara bhi nhi daysaktay..

Mayank: is akelii larki ny meray kaanoo ko beshehara kerdiya aur deemgh ki tu bati hi gul kerdi hai

Nupur: us k circuit wasy bhi fuse tha…

Mayank: nupur pls mera deemgh maat kaho..

Nupur: mjhy kuch pinay aur kahany ko nhi mila na tu mein tumhai bhi kah jao gi.. mein khana lay ny jarahi hoo

Mayank: jao..

Though I said it to get some peace but as soon as she left I was wondering wht must be happening where she is, sigh I got up from the chairpai..and went there and I was hell shocked… oh god.yeah is ko kiya hua..

She was laughing and doing ridiculous thinks, and I slammed my head…is ko akela chorna ..she is definitely drunk..

I went near her and grip her hand

Mayank: tum kya ker rahi hoo…tum asay pyass bhojahati hoo

She came near me a grip my collar..

Nupur: tum kasay bhojatay ho…

I swallowed a lump and was looking at her in shock..aj tu apni izaat gai beta..woh bhi ek larki k hatho..

Mayank: yeah yeah kya ker rahi hoo

Nupur: tumhain kya lagta hai..

And next she burst in to laughter…

She was so close to be that I actually can se evry curve her face broke into while she showed the best expression suits her face…

A man came and asked to leave her when I have to say she is my wife any problems, they went back as thank to God even nupur recognized me and was looking at me keenly…

No other options I had so I took her in arms and went to near cottage to spend the night…

That night was most precious of all, I was actually moving to some other world. Her innocent, her beauty, her eyes all were making me loss myself. Forcefully as she wants to talk about me, to tell me something, and they way it started it was horrifying….I asked her its not a good time go to sleep, I made her ly closing her eyes, she went to sleep. I kept looking at her, it was a beautiful sight to watch.

She was frowning in irritation as her hairs were disturbing her sleep, she moved them back they came back, again she did and again it happen, she winced in her sleep, and I chukled looking at her, moving my hand forward I placed them back.

It was strange the way I was feeling pulled towards her, it was strange I was feeling falling for her. I shrugged all those though and cursed myself, she trusted me and here wht I am thinking…

Moving quite away from her I my self slept..

Moring was there yet princes was still sleeping gosh this girl we have to catch the bus, I went near her and woke her up, but she pulled my hand I was beside her, with this her eyes opened finding me so near she was shocked, yet she saw her hand wch was still griping mine, I didn't protest ..i was already going nuts..

She hurriedly remove her hand and I got up..and asked her to get ready she said her head is spinning

Mayank: han really kal tum mera ghoom raha tha…zaroorat kya thi tum ko kuch bhi kisi se layny ki…

Nupur: mein ny tu pani manga tha…mjhy kya pata us mein kya tha..

Mayank: pani aur us k taste mein koi farak nhi hota kya…stupid.. mein ny ata tu pata nhi kya kerti tumm..ab utho..aur chalo..

I supported her with my hand and kept holding her, she was feeling dizzy still, so didn't want her to hurt her self..i saw her looking at our enterwinged hands and than to me, I ignore it, as neither I want to make her feel uncomfortable nor I want to let her go..

As we came to bus stand there was a bus there we smiled and rushed to it, yet to our luck it only had one seat..i sigh..

I don't want to let her go, no pls no.. yet I have to..i know we cant risk to stay here.. atleast she isn't safe like this..

Mayank: tum jao mein next lay lo ga

Nupur: tu mein bhi wait kerti hoon nah

Mayank: nupur nhi tum jao…nhi pata k next mein koi seat hogi nhi hogai…plus ise mein kafi sari ladies hai ..tum jasakti ho.. mein ajao ga…go..

Nupur: per mayank..

Mayank: nupur.. pls… jao..warna phir se raat hojay gi…

She took my hand to thank me yet wht I did was completely shock myself, I pulled her in my arms and slightly hugged her.. and than left her with jerk..donot know wht came in my mind ..donot know wht was it.. I fear, I desire or something deeper than that..

Mayank: bye..take care..

Nupur: bye.. becarfull..cya soon

I smile and gave her things.. and saw her going away from, cya soon..oh god… I even didn't ask were she is gona live, where I can meet her again.. her number, her college's name ..i know nothing nothing at all…

The bus disappear in thin air, and so as I saw her too going away from me, maybe forever, yet she left so much inside me..i could feel my heart ached thinking this was the last time I saw her, thank god my heart asked me to touch her, else I wouldn't have felt her so close to me…I wouldn't felt so as I m feeling this moment….

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome OS API...
loved it lodsss
Beautifully written...
i sooo adore dis Track on "MayUr" in MJHT
its my d most fav
n i sooo loved it ke apne iss ff mein uss ko use kiya bt in my API's way...😉
awww...
Mayank was sooo Damn CUTE here...hayeee😍
i loved d way he felt for Nupur n awww...
i loved it to d coreee...
loved d first part lodsss...
love u API...🤗🤗🤗


Edited by -Anila- - 13 years ago

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