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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Sookie-



Thanks! It would be wonderful if you leave a next time...its little weird to address you as 'ucompleteme', no? :-)

Glad you liked it...yes, I am consciously not very verbose in these death talkies one shots or vignettes because they aren't really meant for that reason... over the years I have appreciated acting without lots of dialogues, stories without lots of conversation and short stories which make a massive impact without being too verbose about it...the effort is in creating ambiance which I believe is very difficult and little words that you put on top of it would change the complete context...

Now I end my rant 😆

Its Ashavi, or Avi if that is too long for you. I had to take a technical writing class as a requisite at university and somehow from then on I do appreciate such people in real life too. I am the complete opposite of this, meaning I am a mile a minute talker so for me the contrast is very appealing. This piece is on my mind since I read it and I am truly glad to have read it.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: ucompleteme

Its Ashavi, or Avi if that is too long for you. I had to take a technical writing class as a requisite at university and somehow from then on I do appreciate such people in real life too. I am the complete opposite of this, meaning I am a mile a minute talker so for me the contrast is very appealing. This piece is on my mind since I read it and I am truly glad to have read it.



Okay, now I feel little stupid after reading your comment.

Infinity in the palm of your hands - my first ever FF was terribly verbose. It had two people talking all the time 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Sookie-



Okay, now I feel little stupid after reading your comment.

Infinity in the palm of your hands - my first ever FF was terribly verbose. It had two people talking all the time 😆

I loved that one, except I am not so knowledgeable about Frost so I had to copy all the poems on the updates, then read them as I went along with the chapters to get the context. I understand when you are writing a piece such as this that you have to be precise with your words yet I always felt that when it comes to one on one relationships like the one in Inf it needs words. Words whether as self thoughts or dialogues is the only way in those type of stories that connects the reader to the experience of the character at that time. Again novice with a big mouth or sorry fast fingers so don't mind OK.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: --Ratna--

Sookie 🤗...thank u for giving us this wonderful update...made me speechless...had to read it again and again before commenting...even now i am unable to put into words how i am feeling...i am still all 😍...how do u write so beautifully ?...there is some pure magic in the words u use...each word feels like a flawless pearl...each sentence as if they are strung together with a delicate and fine gold thread...,..what a magnificent piece of work 👏...truly fitting for the king and queen of the universe...Shiva and Parvati...simply loved your way of depicting their eternal love story ❤️...i am so grateful to our friend H for recommending this ...plz do PM me your next update...would really appreciate it...TC 😊




Thanks a lot Ratna, for your comment! Man, you are quite generous in your words! :-) I am glad that this short piece evoked a response from you...writing this was a much delayed reaction from couple of years...had been on my mind but never wrote it down...finally managed to pen it down :-)

Thanks again!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -Sookie-



Thanks a lot Ratna, for your comment! Man, you are quite generous in your words! :-) I am glad that this short piece evoked a response from you...writing this was a much delayed reaction from couple of years...had been on my mind but never wrote it down...finally managed to pen it down :-)

Thanks again!


Sookie 🤗...it is a short piece...but what an awesome short piece 👍🏼...so glad u finally wrote it...it really touched my heart...i was so overwhelmed after reading it i had trouble putting my thoughts into words...hope i was able to convey my appreciation 😳...thank u once again...plz keep writing...TC 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
that was a wonderful piece! It didnt seem like death talkies. It was divine and i could picture whatever i was reading in my mind. Do you follow that Mahadev series which comes on tv, or you wrote this just like that?

Anu
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: -MeNe-

Ordo ab chao deus jus..
If Frost could put it any other way...

In order to be vague one has to be clear,
because when one is clear, one can chose not to be.

In order to brave, one has to fear,
because when there is fear, it can be taken over.

In order to avoid, one has to master,
because when one masters, avoidance is there.

In order to have order, there must be chaos,
because when there's chaos, order can take action.

So what came first, choa or ordo...Sati or Parvati



Does it matter who or what does?

They co-exist. One is a form of another. One cancels out another. But they cannot live without one another.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: ammygurl

Hello S


When I read the line- The smell of ash on his skin... I first thought it's about a phoenix, Then i realized that a Pheonix is not blue-grey :D

The animal skin print thing gave it away, This piece of writing goes deep into Mythology.

Amazing work. Somehow, Of all the wonderful lines written, I liked this the best- Yet, it was something that had to be done; for mankind, for himself and for her. He owed her that.

I like such stuff, if you write more, Please send me a link ;)

Thanks
A



Thanks Ananya. Will surely let you know.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Poornahuti

Only now she understands that extra-long minute he spent holding her at the gates of his kingdom.

Only now she understands the melancholic smile behind heavily curtained agony that he sent in her direction when she turned to look back at him after crossing a hundred yards.

Only now she understands why he said "good-bye" but not "I'll see you soon".

She knows this is the end – of her own existence and also of her father. It didn't take a divine entity to predict that.

A spark ignites in her and the anger that courses through her veins adds fuel to that spark turning it to a roaring fire. Words hurl in her direction; words which are like poisoned thorns.

"What virtue does that husband of yours have?" Question floats in a limbo of hung words and aggravated pride.

Her answer comes out in a jaded whisper, "He is virtue". The silence that follows her answer is only momentary.

"Do you think he fits in being on par with the Gods, my daughter? With his ash covered skin and his waist adorning skin of an animal and wandering amongst the dead, do you think he can be one of the bearers of poornahuti?

She chuckles mirthlessly and says, "He is poorna. He consumes everything this world doesn't want, cannot afford to have; even your pride."

Her words are now just above whisper and she is deaf to the debate and commotion surrounding her. A hum settles around her and she realizes that it's the hum of crackling fire. Its heat warms her arms as she finds herself walking towards the sacred pyre. The decision was sealed the moment she set foot in the palace. It wasn't a matter of why but a mere matter of when she would end her life.

She hears a cry of a woman, her mother probably, as she urges the spark in her to roar to a fire. She closes her eyes and the tears that she withheld for several moments finally spill.

I am sorry. Her heart wrenches in pain at the thought of leaving him.

And then she walks into the holy pyre.

She doesn't know if it was the light from the pyre or the shine from the stars. Or was that heaven? She remembers only him as she feels dissolving into pure energy leaving her human form behind to burn. She was consumed by the consciousness that defined and shaped him.

It was now only a matter of time till chaos descended upon earth. One who brought order also brought chaos when the world needed a cleansing.

~~o00o~~

The collective consciousness of Bramha, Saraswati, Vishnu and Lakshmi reverberated at the moment of her immolation. They braced themselves at the aftermath that they knew was going to come.

He wouldn't take his beloved's sacrifice lightly.

He wouldn't be Shiva.

He would be Rudra.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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500th Post on this thread YaY!!

Reserving my space for now. Will be back to edit.

A
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