Ss Take My Breath Away, Chapter 7, Pg 34, 1st Aug - Page 3

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: tahera57

hi,there, nice new Ss . it's very different start, pilot nakku, brat dutta let's see who gets smitten with who first. i hope we get quick ud on this one. plz don't stop writing you have so much talent to write a good story. if it gives pleasure to so many people and you can spare some time to write please con. thanks tc

love T

Hey,
Thank a ton babe, yep totally, Naku's a Pilot, and Dutta's the full-on brat! Haha good catch, time will tell this tale soon enough. Well hopefully you'll consider this one quick lol, I'm updating in a while. I won't stop writing babe, I'm just gonna stop writing ff's, but I'm not stopping to the ones I'm writing currently so don't worry hun, it's all good. 😊
Edited by tinkerbe11 - 13 years ago
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Thanks babe, 😊
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Chapter Two

Two Guys and a Girl



"Dutta!! Eh Dutta!! Saale...khol darwaza!" Threatened an unknown voice that broke my sleep, in the morning, well at least I think it was morning. "Duttaaa!" The voice continued yelling. "Saale khol yeh darwaza, main kehta hoon bahar aah!"
What the hell was happening? I ran out only to see the front door shaking, oh my god, I had a drunkard sleeping on the sofa, and a psycho trying to break down the door! What should I do. My best bet was that I should wake the drunkard up. I ran towards this so-called Dutta, but then I stopped, "wait a minute, what if he's too drunk to retaliate, I need some kind of back up of my own, but what..." I wondered. Not having time to think, I ran into my room and grabbed my highest heeled sandal that I hardly every wore, and resorted to that as a handy weapon, okay so it weren't a weapon, but it would surely cause some damage. Okay so I ran up to Dutta again and shook him hard this time, wasting no time, "get up Dutta, get up!" I tried to yell with a whisper, which is probably why it wasn't so effective.
He mumbled something that required subtitles, and went back to sleep. "GET the Hell Up!" I shouted finally getting pissed off.


"What the hell happened?" He woke up startled, "and who are you?" He said holding his head like he had a headache or something.
"You know as much as I'd love the formal type introduction, I really don't think we have time," rolling my eyes and wondering why I was explaining these little things to him so I decided to cut a long story short, "look there's a psycho out there banging on that door, and I am not going to be the one to open that door - and besides it doesn't look like he wants me, so I suggest you surrender" I offered trying very hard to keep calm. His eyes wandered over to my red sandal, and for a moment he looked at me like I was the psycho.

"Dutta!"
"Oh man not him" he got up taking his time.
Not him, did that mean he knew him, he knew him, that was a good sign right, but how could he possibly know this guy, he sounded like he was out to kill him. While I was on my knee beside the sofa still trying to figure things out, Dutta had already gotten up 'unprotected' and headed to open the door. I followed his footsteps quickly keeping my sandal prepared and ready for attack. But before I could say 'watch out' the psycho had already punched Dutta in the gut and he'd flexed forward, only to be hit again in his face with a blow that took him by surprise, and this time he'd gone flying back.
"Oh my god" I yelped at the fight.
The guy had now come into our apartment, and he was attacking Dutta full on, and all I could do was watch, and then I remembered the sandal in my hand, well now would definitely be a good time to use it I thought, but for some reason I didn't want to. While he was making a mess of the whole room tipping and tossing over the furniture, Dutta had finally fought back. I know I'll call the police, I lit up and ran off to find my phone.
"You traitor, you traitor!" Was all that guy was shouting, and Dutta was only telling him to "wait"!
What for so he can beat you black and blue, "stop!" I shouted, and for a second they both listened, and that's when I realised that I didn't actually have nothing to say. "Er, I...er...I, I have a sandal, and I'm not afraid to use it!" I threatened, I'd heard similar lines like that in films loads of times, but for some reason I don't think I had quite the same affect.
"You are joking right?" Questioned the intruder.
Was that my cue to say something, 'cause I was certainly lost for words, "erm" I gulped and cleared my throat, "no" was all I let out. God I should just jump out of the window and kill myself now. Without bothering to pay any attention to me, both of them got back to fighting again, what was this like some kind of freak hobby of theirs?
"Look wait...just wait Baji!" Dutta addressed finally giving me some proof that he actually knew this guy. "I know, but it just happened by mistake, I swear." He said backing off from him with his hands up like he'd actually surrendered.
"A mistake, my girlfriend calls you to drop her off to the location we were supposed to be meeting at, and guess what...she didn't arrive!" He said with surprise, and telling it to me like I was interested. Well actually I was, but I still didn't get it, so I guess I waited around to hear more, this was better than TV soaps, where's the popcorn, okay forget I said that, wow sometimes I surprise myself, I wonder if I'd be eligible to get the role of the vamps.
"I couldn't say no to her, she was alone and cold...and...alone...and cold..." attempted Dutta very very poorly.
"What?! You just said that. Twice" Baji shouted back.
"No I didn't, okay fine, maybe I did. But look she really was alone and cold man, so I offered her a ride, and let's just say she got a little too cosy, so I hated to let her out in the cold."
Okay so now I was mega confused, 'cold', was that Baji really going to believe that. I simply had to intervene "But it's Summer, I had to sleep with the windows open all night to get any little breeze, so why on earth was she cold?" I couldn't help asking with a frown clearly indicating, that either you're friend's chatting shit dude, or either I ain't living in the same world as you, and I think option
A seemed much more appropriate.
"Good point" cheered Baji.
So now this psycho was on my side, or was I like on his side.
"Hey but out, and who are you anyway?" Dutta asked me, again.
"Will you stop saying that!" I said, "it's very annoying, I feel like I'm talking to that fish 'Dory' from Nemo."
"You mean stop asking that..." he tried to correct, just to get back at me.
"Yeah yeah, whatever, it still doesn't change anything." I said rudely.
"And you still haven't told me who you are," he said again through gritted teeth.
I sighed heavily to show my agitation, "fine" I said overlapping my teeth on my bottom lip, "my name is Nakusha and I'm your roommate unfortunately."
"Well you hardly left me any choice to say 'nice to meet you' because as you can see, it's clearly not" he answered back equally rude.
"Consider this your lucky day! Because the feeling's mutual" I replied plastering a fake smile over my face and crossing my arms across my chest.
"Sooo, now that you guys have met. Allow me to introduce myself" said the physco turning to me to shake my hand, I looked down forced to wonder where they'd been. "I'm Baji, your second roommate" he added.
"What!!!!!" No way, this freak was not living here too! This was outrageous, no way, I am not living here with these two zombies for the rest of my Summer, I've barely lived here a night, and I've faced god knows what! This can't be happening, I can't even trust myself to pass out, what's the guarantee these two would call for professional help, they'd probably leave me to rot there and die, or worse maybe they'd bury me alive somewhere. Oh my god, what the hell am I thinking, pull yourself together Naku, I'm sure it ain't all that bad. I was breathing more faster than I could imagine, I felt like exploding! There's a girl that also lives here, she'll be back soon, to share your share of the stress, so until then Naku just keep calm. You can get through this.
"So I guess that must mean you're happy to see me" said a clearly confused Baji.
"Something like that" I answered trying to act kind.


I had to get away after that I so needed to breathe. I left for the Cafe, and used the Cafe facilities to freshen up and brush my teeth, after breakfast I'll go home, clean out that grotty bathroom and have a nice long soak. I already had a headache, since I'd landed in that apartment with two roommates from hell. I hadn't even changed from my baggy sweats and I already looked like I was a disaster. Not even having an appetite I forced my breakfast down my gob, but taking my time. I ordered two cups of tea, just to make sure that they'd left by the time I got home. I groaned out loud, not caring what people thought of me, and placed my head on the dining table, but really hoping to bang my head on it.

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When I got home, it was silent, I couldn't hear anything, but I'd gotten too happy too fast. I could hear them playing on the Xbox in one of the rooms, and the lounge was back to square one, in fact it was even worse then before. Wrappers, empty bottles, Pizza boxes left open, it was pathetic. I tried to avoid them from knowing that I was home, and went to my room and tied my greasy and messy hair up, and went to the bathroom with all the domestic detergents I'd just purchased to make that bathroom fit enough for a lady.


"What are you doing?" Asked Baji catching me off guard.
"Nothing, I'm just over the bloody moon, that I get to clean all your crap out of this bathroom, that's all" I said as pleasantly as I could.
"Well don't let me stop you" He answered.
God, did these guys actually have any kind of concern for anyone, I mean I was being sarcastic but surely he got it, right? Otherwise why would he reply like that, maybe because men are dogs, I finally decided.


Now that's what you call a spic and span bathroom, I was so proud of myself, that I was able to cut through all that grime within...oh two hours, and I thought I'd done it within half an hour or something. Well it didn't matter now anyway, I ran the bath with hot water and added all my therapy bubble baths and salts, and waited for it to fill while I got my clothes and towel ready to finally soak.


I could hear someone whistling just outside my door, I couldn't tell which out of the two disasters it was. I ran out with my stuff to go to the bathroom, and quickly shut the door behind me, and smiling at my victory, at least I got into the bathroom before they could ruin it again.
I dipped a finger into the water to see if the temperature was okay. "Perfect." Just as I was about to remove my baggy top, I heard a voice, that same voice! I knew I'd heard him before, he was that guy that was speaking over the counter like he wanted to tell his life story to the world, all of a sudden his name ringed a bell too, 'Dutta Patil' was the same guy that was behind me in the queue, the vodka and Red Bull guy, no wonder, it all made sense, he obviously enjoyed socialising.
"Just in case you think I'm a pervert, I'm warning you beforehand that I didn't see anything..." his voice trailed off.
"What the hell do you think you're doing?!" I gasped, and quickly tried to get my clothes back on.
"Okay fine, I admit maybe I saw a little bit of skin, but that's all I swear" He joked sarcastically. "And what the hell am I doing?" He repeated in my tone. "What the hell are you doing? Undressing like that while two hot guys are in the house." He carried on further without any shame.
"Hot guys..." I said flatly.
"Fine, I confess, 'hot guy', I won't tell Baji that you don't find him hot" replied Dutta.
Was he for real, he just carries on putting words in my mouth without me actually thinking those kinds of things, "eerggh" I thought I locked the door. "How did you get in?" I asked instead, refusing to pay attention to anything else he said. "Cause I locked the door" I said reassured.
"Or did you?" He said flipping on the other side of the door, to show me the broken hinge and lock. The whole door had to be replaced before a lock could actually be of some use here. This was a joke right, I couldn't believe this, "I can't bath like this, what am I supposed to do now?" I shrugged my shoulders in disbelief.
"Why not?" He asked like I was the weirdo to ask the question.
"Because I'm a girl" I said like in the 'duh' tone, but he didn't react.
"Really now what makes you think that" he said trying to be funny.
"Very funny, but seriously I ain't getting in that bath without a lock on that door" I warned.
"It don't make no difference to me, and besides you would never have noticed if I didn't tell you, doesn't that prove to you that I'm a true gentleman." Good point actually, but I still couldn't strip with two unknown guys in the flat.
"Well Madhu don't seem to have a problem - hey we ain't no perverts you know" he convinced. I so badly wanted to believe him, but I couldn't afford to take the risk, I was way too shy to be able to take one risk. I looked back at the bath like it was a long lost relative that I couldn't meet before we parted and bid farewell, "what a waste" I sighed in definite defeat.
"Oh don't worry babe it won't go to waste" he said as though I should have been happy by this news, and he slipped his t-shirt off in front of me.
"Oh god...do you mind...I didn't book for a stripper you know!" I shouted while covering my eyes "and don't call me babe!"
"What...girls die to get one glimpse of me like this, so you better take a good look, and don't act like you don't want to" He smirked while deliberately turning his upper body to my direction, although I did manage to see his ripped body and I could understand what he was talking about, but I still played dumb. Girls never tell.


I left unable to bear the torture any longer, and just headed to the gym instead and taking a shower there. My lovely bath had gone down the drain literally, my apartment was hell to live in, and I had to put up with this all Summer. The water felt good on my head, I took my time to drain out the tiredness in me, and then I knew I should call home and tell them just how good everything is here, and how perfect the start of my Summer was, and what great roomies' I had, and blah blah blah...
I felt terrible lying to my family, but it was for their own benefit, otherwise they'd just stress, and this way everyone would be happy, except me of course.

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As I stared outside the open window from my bed, at the night sky, everything seemed so perfect. Dutta and Baji had gone out during the night and I had the apartment to myself, the rest of the place was a tip, but I gave up with that already with trying to keep anything clean except for my bedroom. I couldn't believe it Dutta and Baji were both Aerobatic Pilots, that was amazing! I could never even dream of doing that, I would be scared out of my wits. But I did have a general liking to the fact that they had a unique talent. Baji had a likable personality, and Dutta well it was like he was an open book, except he was undiscovered. Like a e-book, that was a better way of putting it, he was like a e-book up-to-date and modern with today, but his originality was left behind on some paperback book sitting on a shelf gathering dust somewhere. Yeah that sounded better, I thought as I felt my eyelids gaining in on me, while I drifted off.

Thanks for reading guys, really appreciate all the feedback, quite surprising really as I didn't realise how active this forum still was, so thanks everyone for keeping this place alive and rocking!
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Tink
Edited by tinkerbe11 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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aahaa so it is baji...lol...haha naku thrt she wud attack the psycho with a sandal...😆 wow tht wud surely do wonders wudnt it...lol.. haha n dutta stil didnt knw who she was...lol... haha naku is a trouble maker... dutta had actually gt baji believing tht his gf was cold in summer...🤣goes 2 shw hw intelligent baji is??and wow madhu is in dis ff 2... she's da other roomie tht lives with thm... bt she's nt baji's gf😲😭 u no hw much i love thm... hw cum she doesnt keep the house clean, or is it becos she's away the house is tht way...

poor naku man, doing the cleaning job agen bt finally chose 2 giv up...
the bathroom scene was funi...esp da part wer he says ok 1 hot guy i wnt tel baji u dnt find him hot...is he like 1 of those typical guys? full of himself..thinks he's al tht... i knw he is bt stil im sure naku's made it clear tht she doesnt think he's al tht bt cudnt help bt admit he's gt the body 2 drool over😳😍😆😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
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^ ^ ^
Not just yet, but that is the next ff I'll be updating after this 😉
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lovely ud ,they say comedy is harder to do than serious acting. must be same for writing .but so far funny scenes youv'e written are very good. i laughed at nakku holding a sandle to hit baji. also good to have all three as room-mates. dutta so cheeky stripping in front of her, found ud to be a tad short wanted to keep on reading. thanks for ud. hope next one soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMG! Tink, this is amazing yaar!
You write so beautifully! Really enjoyed it, it's so different and refreshing ever so unique! aur kya kahu???? Man you are just tooo good!!!!!
luv ya!
tc
xoxoxo
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsem update tinkupdate ff dewani also






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heyyy! Tinks you most certainly took hammie's breathe away! abhi tak hperventilating...Jadoo hai naasha hai!...no really as soon as sat I in the car with Naku ,with her ray bans on...I was complelled to sing..."in the summer time ,when the weather is fine...de ..de..".It's interesting you should start this FF now..for it is, as you and I are aware the beginnings of summer...welll spring in UK...had a at home feeling as soon as Essex was mentioned...
The setting, her social status and her vocation,are all wow factors to keep me hooked on, and then her character,the determined Naku...with a mind of her own! yes says a lot that she has a mind! and she is hell bent on using it! love it!
The complete description of the Cessna was throughly enjoyable,along side the take off and the airborne views...fantastically described in words, in particular loved how you described the take off..readers delight! enjoyed too the discussion between her and Paul regarding being "free" up in heavnly space..
Listen Tink ,chuckled at the tongue and cheek,cultural references to Asians and gorre ,haaa ,it was very much from how we see it ..laughing with, rather than laughing at satirical element!
I could not read both the chapters without out being over whelmed by the comic and light hearted way you handled, the events, the reactions of the characters...😆 pure entertainment every word you penned and how well you write mate! how blessed we are to have a fantastic writer like you, along with others on this forum!
So , the Batasha trio huddled together as roomies!..great! beginning to make connections with the original Dutta,Naku,Baji..characters from LTL1...already .So now waiting for more to unfold..Peronally I reckon she's already in charge of them two! now waiting for her to wield her power over them!
many thanks mate!...and oh how daft of me ..oye congratulations and many thanks for taking us on board this plane ride...looking forward to having a jolly with you!
much love xx hammie
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey Tink. 🤗

I loved what I have read so far..light, humorous and breezy but with an exciting bite to it. There seems to be more beneath Dutta's nonchalance.

Batasha as flatmates..WOW...Its a dream come true without having to put up with the other

Looking forward to the next update 😃 members of Pagaal Niwas.

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