Tutay Huway par updated pt2

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maan.ki.fizz (faiza)

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Posted: 13 years ago

Hiii guysss!!! okkk im starting an FF or SS (not sure) on My beloved 'maaneet' i want to make it something unique.. sooo im pretty sure no one's written alot about maan ,geets baby and when the baby grows up and all the hurdles geet faces ect.. so basically this story revolvs around maaneet and mahii (theire daughter) guys im writing the prologue underneath 😊

Prologue:

Geet: Mahiii ... mahiii geet screamed un top of her lungs .

Mahii just entered the house when she heard her mama scream. She flinched at hearing the fury in her voice.

Mahii: Mamaaa im bakkk . mahi ran towards geet rooms and gave her a huge bear hug. And a quick peck on her cheek.

Geet stood there amused looking at her daughters cute antics, however she will absolutely not fall for it again.

Geet: Mahi tum kya samaji thi ho apne aap ko maine kaha na kit um bahar nahi jaoogii tohh nahi lekin tum !! mein yeh saab aur bardaasht nahi karsakti ti mein apke papa ko saab khuch bataoongi rukoo abhi phone karke athi hoon.

Mahiii tried to protest however she was getting no attention. As geet was about to dial maans number ,the bedroom door turned open... and there he stood the Grreat Business tycoon Maan Singh Khuranna.

Maan: GEET, Mahii mein agayaa. Maan had jsut come back from a Business Trip.

Geet: aacha hua maan u came .. app nahi janti ke jab humne mana kiya apke beti ko ke aaj baar maat nikaliyeh and stay in the house for a few days . yeh mujeh tevaar dekariyah aur bina batiyeh jhanvi (friend) ki ghar gaythee.

Maan shifted his gaze to mahiii. Mahii made a baby face and showed her puppy eyes which instantly melted maans heart.

Maan: mahiii yeh me kya sunra hoon

Mahi: vohhh papa meh ghar me bore horaythi aur koi kaam be nahi that tho meine socha ke me dost ke ghar jao.

Maan: mahiii teekhe tum gaye lekin tumhe appne mama se pooch kart oh jaati haina?? Mahiis head fell and bent down. Maan went towards her and said:

Teek hai iss bhar maaff lekin dobara kahi jaogii tohh batah kar jana .

Mahi eyes lit up instantly.

MAHI: SAACHHH papaaa .. she gave him a tight hug and said ' welcome back! Missed you intnaaa saraaa ' Geet stood there fustratedd her mouth formed a O shape. She stamped her foot . mahii giggled then shut up when maan gave her a glare and signalled her to leave.

Maan came and hugged Geet from the back as he closed his bedroom door. Geet was well frustrated and pushed him of maan was schockedd ! :o

Maan:GEET..

Geet: maan apne kyu kuch nahi kaha app jaante hai ke hum mahi ko kyu bahaar nahi behjre aur app. Maan cut geet of. Instantly

Maan: Geet mein jaanta hoon ke me kya karah hoon.. geet: lekin maan mahiii ke jaan koh khatra hai. A solitary tear trickled down her eyes..aur app Maan cut geet of again and held her tight by the arms "Geet mein mahiii ko khuch nahi hone doonga samjhii tum" maan said angrily.

MAAN: bhas vishvaas rako apne maan per.

GeeT: IM SORRY MAAN voh mein emotional hogay fikar hai...

Maan: aaj no fikar aaj sirf hum aur tum bohot dino ki baad jo mein aya .. abb mujeh treet chayeh

Geet: voh kya maan ??

Maan: mishtyyy mujeh kiss chayeh. Geet blushed and quickly pecked maan on the check and escaped from his grip and ran out of the room.

Maan: Geet yehhh cheating haiii mein tumhe baad mein dekloonga geet...

maan then looked ahead and thought .. geet mujeh be bohot fikar hai mahii ki lekin me tume asai pareshaan nahi deksakta.. isilyeh hume saab normal behave karna chaya .. lekin mujeh jaaldi kuch socha parega...

CHARCTER SKETCH BELOW:

Index:

Prologue: page 1

part1: page 2

part 2: page 2

Ok guys how is it ?? i know terrible riteee *shuts eyes tightly* and its wayyy to longgg i should have cut it a bit ..if i get good response i will continue will update character sketch in a bit ... so u guys get a jist of whats happning 😃muwahhh

Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago

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kkiddoo

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Posted: 13 years ago

its interesting dear but give a Character Sketch about all the characters and their age

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maan.ki.fizz (faiza)

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Posted: 13 years ago

CHARACTER SKETCH:
maan singh khuranna:

age 37

Famous business tycoon, geet maan singh Khurannas husband and mahis papa. He is angry and ruthless to the world however loves his family to bits. verry possesive over mahi and geet.

Mahi singh khurana :

Age:16 loves her mama papa allot never would do anything to cause them pain. She is very bubbly and quiet outspoken like her mother. All the guys in her school are besotted by her beauty. girls are enviouous of her beauty.

IMRAN ABBAS NAQVI:

same age as mahiii... hes (pakistani( hes in mahi's shchool and secretly likes her

Jhanvi rathore :

mahis bestest friend just like sister maan treats her like her second daughter :D

geet maan singh khuranna

age: 34. loves mahi and maan allot can sacrafice her life for their saftey. very bubbly in nature. and outspoken.

Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago

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kkiddoo

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Posted: 13 years ago

hey dear geet's age is 24 how can that be if mahii's age is 16 ?

check it and correct it dear ...

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abinash079

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Posted: 13 years ago

dear it nice

but geet's age is 24 and mahii 16 plz changee the age

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Dona

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Posted: 13 years ago

nice continue soon

bt mahii 16 and geet 24????

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Posted: 13 years ago

heey nice concept dear...

continue soon ...& add me...

& wat is the mystery abt mahhi & geets age differences...??

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maan.ki.fizz (faiza)

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Posted: 13 years ago

Ok guys im sooo sorry for the age differnce thing i wasnt thinking 😳😳anyways here's part 1 im sooo sorry cant post links cause i dont knw how too :$:$

PART 1

Maan sat rocking his chair which was situated in his home office.scrutinizing the anonymous letter ,which his wife recived 1-2 weeks back. He wondered who could have sent it any previous enemies ??he definatly had a multitude, though all are just buissness related. he then picked up his mobile and called Adi.

Maan: Adi..

Adi: Ji sir

Maan: mujeh apne sare dushmano ki list chayeh, buisness deels ki list , project ki files saab clients ki naam chaye jis jis ki saath humne associate kiya samjeh aur mujeh yeh caam 48 hours me chayeh aacha.

Adi Ji ss..iii..rrr

Maan:hummm... maan put the phone down and as soon as he raised his head his beloved wife stood before him.

Geet: Maan mein apke liyeh coffee leh kar ayi. Geet then went forward and and put the coffee on the table .. and turned to leave when maan jerked her towards him and she landed up on his lap. 😲

Maan: kaha jahrahi ho geet, intne dino ki baad tumhara maan ayaa... aur tum mere saath khuch paal be nahi beetna chaathi, mujeh miss nahi kiya kya??

Geet: Vohhh.. maan anticipated for her reply... Vohhh Maan aise nahiii maine apko miss kiya

Maan: voh kya geet... aacha miss kiya

Geet.. hummm... 😳 The roof of geets astonishingly long eyelashes fell down automatically.And her cheeks turned scarlet red...maan raised her chin and with a smirk and said

Maan: Aacha geet toh agar tumne mujeh miss kiya to show me how much u missed me.

Geet penetrated her eyes into his pulchritudinous black glaze. deeply and could see sparks of mischeif that it held. Geet tried to release from his hard grip however she forgot he was a sher and shes supposedly the shrni however today the case is opposite she is to vulnerable too escape she knew exactly what he desired.

Geet: mein samjhi nahi *making an innocent face

Maan: Aacha toh mein samjah tah hoon... Maan came close too geet his gaze intensly looking at her luscious red -rosy plump lips which just looked irrisistible. he was about to give her a smackerr whennn mahiii bargedd into the room excitedleyyy. geet hurridley got up from maan and starightned her self up. what would her daughter think??

Maan closed his eyes ufff mahiii ko be abhi aana tha kyaa he whisperd which was audible enough for geet to hear .😆 mahi *giggledd*

Mahi: Ufff mama .. papa kaab fursaat milegii romance karne mein hamesha yahi haal hai kaabi kamre mein , kaabi office mein , kabii kitchen mein .. mahii kept chiding away and maan and geet looked down way to embarassed. maan then said "Enough" maan gave mahi a deadly glare

Mahi: looked at maan innocently kya papa meh toh mazaak karhi hoon hehe

Maan: Aach batao app intni uchaal koot kyu karhi ho kuch baat hai

Mahi: Haannn papaaa aaj school mein letter aya and its a for camping for 2 weeks mahi talked sooo fast."kya mein jaasakti hoon papa"before maan could reply geet intervened and said "Bilkul nahi samjhii"

Mahi: kyuuu mama?? mein kyu kahi bahaar nahi jaasaktii kyunn papa aap kuch bolye nah...

Maan had no response he could not at all agree to send mahi for this trip knowing the ramifications of this outing.he tried putting her off

Maan: dekho mahii mama sahi keh rahi hai aap nahi jasakti *mahii made a baby face and made cute puppy gestures through her eyes. it amused maan to the core, mahi was a replica of geet, however he knew that she was stuborn like him. he smiled and began "mahii pls hum tumhe baad mein lejayenge abhi ki liye aap nahi jaaskti agaar apko khuch aur chaye tho mujeh batao tumhari hukoom mere siir aako par babyyy..

Mahi: angrily said nahi khuch nahi chaye joh chayeh mujhe voh nahi mil raha hai. apko pata hai mere sareee class mates jare hai aur jhanvii be me kya karoongii akeleh doh hafto keeliyeh. *pouts*

Maan: aachaaa jhanvii jahrahi hai abhi fone milao meh usse keh that hoon ki ruk jao aur humre ghar aake rejayeh ok

Mahi looked at maan and said "nahiii papa vohh jaana chaathi hai maat rok yeh" she then looked down gutted. she was walking out when maan said ruko. she halted and turned around.

Maan: are u crying. one thing maan couldnt see was geet or mahi's tears.mahi noded her head sideways. maan took several steps towards her and grabbed her chin and he saw a solitary tear trickle down her left eye. it pained him ... he wiped it.

Maan: tum jah sakti ho

Mahi: nahi mujeh nahi jana

Maan: maine kaha tum jah sakti hoo.. abb asoon bahana baad karo samjhi. mahi wiped her tears.

went up to maan and huged him maan heuged her back mahi said "thanks papa" Geet stood there fuming and interupted the father daughter scene and screeched "Kya!! mahi nahi jasakti aur akeli kaabi bhi nahi ! maan mein use jane nahi doongi"

Maan: meine kaab kaha ki yeh akeleh jayegi mahi looked up with questioning eyes

Mahi and geet together: "Matlab"

Maan in his maan singh khuranna attitude said : " Mahi aur jhanvi dono bodgaurds ki saath jayegee aur ek nahi 5 honge aur voh haar vaqat tum logo ke saath hee rehenge samjhi"

Mahii eyes widened

mahi: nahiii papa mujhe bodygaurds nahi chayeh saab log kya sochenge. maan cut her of inbetween " mujhe koi farak nahi partha ki kon kya soch tha hai agar tumhe jaana hai toh jao leking BG hi saath varna nahi jaoogi.

Mahi: Nahi papa mujhe janaa hai!! kya sirf 2 BD asakthe.

Maan: Nahi varna mein baradoonga 5 yaah dus chayeh ??

Mahi: teeke sirf paanch lekin..

Maan: MAHIII... mahi gulped looking at her fatherfull on infuriated she didnt want to aggitate him more she gave him a quick peck on his cheeks ran out and said i loveee uuu papaaa...

maan smiled inside looking at her cute antics, however kept a staright face when he saw geet giving him a gaze filled with fury...

PRECAP: Mahi leaves for camping. she encounters with someone. who ???

more insight into the letter. Geet, maan worried.

Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago

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maan.ki.fizz (faiza)

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Posted: 13 years ago

Heyyy guyss!! sorry for the late update. heres the next part:

PART 2

Geet sat in her room. Her face was contorted in fury. She was as angry as a bull. Her cheeks flushed and her eyes sparkled with ferocity. Maan entered the room and hugged Geet from the back trying to tranquil her anger. Geet pushed him back and said "apne kyu ijazaat di mahi ko kyu" maan was silent "javaab doh maan"

Maan: "Geet mahi meri bhi beti hai or meim janta hu ki joh mein karahoon voh sahi hai. Hum mahi ko intna restrict nahi karsakte. Situation ko calmly suljna chaye. Mujh per bharosa karo geet.

Geet: bharso hai maan lekin'

Maan: Ab baas geet no tension aur mahi ke pass jao aur uske saat thori batte karo. Geet nodded her head. As soon as geet exited the room. Maan strode towards their cupboard and took out the letter which they received 1-2 weeks back..

Dear Mr and Mrs Khuranna

Maine diya khubsoorat moti , maine diya shamkta hua moti

maine diya aap logo ko, lekin jab humne apni chees vapaas maangliy taaab hume nahi mily'. Geet Aur Maan mein vapaas arah hoon tum logo ko barbaad karne.. tum logo ko khoon ke asson rolaoonga yeh vada hai! Khoshyaar rehna tum kya jano havaa ke joke se hum ayeenge sari sukk oradenge.. humnee sunaa ki tumhariii mahiii barhiii sundar haiii.. faristah ki tarah hai. Me uskii zindigiii tabaa karoonga jaise tum logo nehh kiya hamare saath ... intezaar karna mein arah hoon

PS: mahi kah kyaal rakhna bhaar maat gommne dene kya pata kya hojaye.

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Maan held the letter tight in his hand and scrunched it up and threw it. " tum khon ho mujeh Jald pata chalega aur jab hoga to mein tume chodoonga nahi aur yeh maan singh Khuranna ka vada hai" maan said aloud.

Next morning

Geet: mahii tumne apne saari cheese leliya khuch bhuliy tho nahi nah

Mahi: uff mama don't wory saab khuch leliya chinta khu kati hai aap

Geet: maa hoon nah to isliyeh' maan butted in

Maan: uf hooo geet abh rona dona maat choroo karo sirf don hafto ke liyeh jaraahi hai 2 saal nahi. Mahi *giggled

Mahii: haan mama papa sahi keh reh hai. Geet pouted.

Maan: aacha parii... jaanviii kaha rehgayyy fone milao aur use pooch kaha hai.. mahi was about to enter when jhanvi ran In and collided into maan.

Jhanvi: Maan papaaa mein agayyy

Maan: meinm janta hoon tum agayy .. aur inti der kyu laga

Jhanvii: hehe vohhh kya haii nah mujeh make up lagana tha fir dress bhi aur.. maan cut her of

Maan: agar tum logo ko nahi jana hgai tum hum betkaar bate bhi karsate maan teased

Both jhanvi and mahi screeched nahiii.

Maan and geet laughed. Maan hugged mahi and jhanvi and said:

Kayal rakna akele kahi maat goomna aur body gaurds ke saat rehna ok

Mahi: papaaa hum baache nahi hai kyal rakenge

Jhanvii: lekinn bodgaurdss?

Mahi: chup kaar jaanv varna papa firse lecture denge. Maan gave maahi a deathly glare.

Maan: aab tum log jao bus agaay. Mahi hugged geet and gave her a peck on the cheek. Geet smiled.

geet and maan gazed at mahi and jhanvis retreating figures
Geet: maan khuch boora toh nahi hoga nah??
Maan: held geets hand reasuringly and said.. "geet khuch boora nahi hoga agar sochogii ki boora hoga tho kya pata hoga tho positive raho vaise bodyguards be hai.
Geet: hummm
Maan: Acha geet mujeh coffee chayeh
Geet: abhi banakar ateey hoon, aap fresh hojayeh
Maan nodedded his head siddeways and said "Geet mujhe coffee chayeh maan said admantly.
Geet: Haiii babajiii mein coffee larrahi hoon lekin meri pati dev ko shayaad mushkil hori hai sunne main.

Maan: GEETTT ' mein sunsakta hoon lekin shayed tum kuch nahi samaj rahi. Mujhe tum chayhe geet maan said huskily near geet ears.

Geet shivered.

Geet:mm..maannn

Maan: chup geet bilkul chup. Tumhe nahi lagta ki mahi ko company chayeh. He then grabbed geet in his arms. Geet hid in his embrace feeling shy. He then lay her on the bed. (scence fades) '

Ok guysss im sorry I couldn't include much. and so sorry if the storry is going slow.. it will be like this for now i promise the story will defo pik up in the next few updates. will try to update tonight. :D

Precap: Mahi encounters with someone who??

Maan and geet worried. Why ??

mahi dissapears 😲

Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago