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Dark-Hues

@Dark-Hues

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Posted: 13 years ago

#271

I seriously Loved the Version Of ' When Cupid Tucked Me ' . Its really commendable and the Tale which you've put into strings altogether is just Beautiful! Enjoyed reading the Whole Essence! ❤️

Thanks for the PM! 🤗

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Geeta singh

@sweetdesire

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#272

Missing you Amal...😭

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hiraethhearts.

@hiraethhearts.

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#273

Comment finally edited on page 11 ! Sorry for being so late ! 😭

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abandoned

@abandoned

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#274

Author's Note : Can't say it's my first poem. But it is the first that I am posting for a group to read. It's a simple attempt to show my love for my daddy. Love ya daddy (Mommy, no saddy business I already wrote one for you😆 and yeah I know you like me doing things for Daddy more than for you. You are so ishweet Mamma) [MAJOR POINT TO BE NOTED : Both of them have not read this and will not also in the near future 😆] I suck at writing poems. My poems are tiny lines and nothing like the actual poems. So bear with me. As a writer, I hate it but as a daughter I think I will always keep this close to me. [And the daughter part of me rules the former anyday :) ]

p o e m #1 : i n m e m o r y

The golden dots trickling my senses beneath,

My ears hearing the sound of the waves,

Every speck of air splashing into my face,

Fulfilled were my deepest craves.

I relished the joy of seeing far beyond,

Where nothing meets infinity,

My tiny finger wrapped around dad's aging one,

Astounding was the magic of those memories' honesty.

Fresh, it was when I let go of his touch

And ran miles,

But today, I stand coming back to him

To see him awaiting me in smiles.

To My beloved father,

From his ever-loving Daughter.

Edited by SmokingDreams - 13 years ago

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Geeta singh

@sweetdesire

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#275

Wow Amal...what a poem yaar...too good...I myself love Poems like anything...This one is toh just So Simple yet heart -touching...The way you show the love and care of father and daughter...superb...u have a lot of potential too write poems also my love...so do write more ...Take care

Lots of love

Geet

Edited by sweetdesire - 13 years ago

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abandoned

@abandoned

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#276

Not sending PMs for the poem. Sholly.

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Hahaha! As if I'm going to tell you that!

@rahmona_pakswe

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#277

Minblowingly beautiful Amal!

You have a way with words that makes it hard for me to breath. Hope you post more poems because this one was sighworthy. If your other poems are anything like this then you don't suck.

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497410

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Posted: 13 years ago

#278

Wonderful Poem Amal! 🤗

Fabulously written! . . .

My tiny finger wrapped around dad's aging one,

Astounding was the magic of those memories' honesty.

Fresh, it was when I let go of his touch

And ran miles,

But today, I stand coming back to him

To see him awaiting me in smiles.

Those lines there are amazing! You've depicted the whole father-daughter thing in there... how we grow up under his protective and caring shield and how we venture out in the world. . . but its always him we look forward to, when we are in trouble or even if we are just looking for a safe haven!

Beautiful thought! I'm proud of you for writing that! 🤗

-Sharmi