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Posted: 13 years ago
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Today's episode has left me really confused. I just don't get where the writers are taking this story.


Personally I don't see much consistency in the characters, they've either realised or not realised that they're attracted to each other but the CVs seem to change their mind from one episode to the next and all this to-ing and fro-ing is giving me a headache.


And yes I understand the whole 'Khushi is the only one who can understand and take Arnav's anger' but at this point I'm starting to lose any respect for her because she seems to have no respect for herself. Seriously Khushi, just leave him and move on! (Not with Shyam obviously)


Anyway this is my first attempt at writing a poem so be nice! :P I hope you'll like it xx.


I Release You


The sight of you hypnotises me.

The sight of you with her repulses me.

My head refuses to turn, my eyes refuse to close.

My heart aches, my eyes water. But still I stare.

Contradictions seize my thoughts.

I want you to notice me. I want to leave before you do.

My eyes which refused to close, now refuse to believe.

My heart attempts to disguise its pain. But my head knows.

And so I release you. I release you of all obligations.

I release you because I care,

Not because I do not.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Ahhh I love the title! And you definitely need to write more poems! You're a natural when it comes to writing :D
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Originally posted by: sushipie01

Ahhh I love the title! And you definitely need to write more poems! You're a natural when it comes to writing :D



Thank you Shreya! Haha I hadn't picked a title until you told me which your favourite lines were so I just went with that :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice poem Nayika!! You should try more on this!!
I loved it and i shoud say this concept is much better than current track of the show!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Loved it Nayika! Perfectly suits the contradictions and confusions of todays episode! This is youre first poem? Really? You should definitely write manyy moreee 😊

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its really goood..u should write more
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Originally posted by: Sivaranjani

Nice poem Nayika!! You should try more on this!!
I loved it and i shoud say this concept is much better than current track of the show!



Thank you so much! I was anxious about posting it because I've never really written poetry before so I'm glad you like it.

Yeah the current track just makes me want to scream in frustration!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: tinsel

A Touching poem,Thanks👏



Glad you liked it :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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beautful...i lykd it... m not a poems person though
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Absolutely beautifully written poem! And it couldn't be more true.

I read that line over and over again,Loved It ! Very Insightful,feisty and painful.

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