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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: aysha_mayur

Fantuuu🤗🤗

Well I can relate to the character Nupur coz ppl like her do exist in this world...Infact extra-good ppl ard hard to find but greedy and selfish ppl are all around us
amazing update🤗...I loved the way mayank teased her and their double-meaning talks😆...and why I think Mayank likes her...being greedy is diff. thing but he genuinely likes her😳
Can't wait for the next part😳...and I M VERY HAPPY THAT U ARE SHOWING ROMANCE FROM THE START ONLY😍...*Ayshu khush hua*..hihihahahooo😈

cudn't help reading n commenting on the last part...hihihihhahahhahooo🤣
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Posted: 13 years ago
this nupur is quite real. i love it.
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Posted: 13 years ago
This one is an absolute delight to read. :)

Mayank and Nupur improved as characters in this chapter, something is very edgy and real about Nupur and even after all the 'greed' Mayank and Nupur are etched out of, Mayank's softer than her. The culmination of this chapter is spectacular, might I add. It is very nicely written too.

Speaking of that, I could see you've made almost no errors, glad you took my advise in account. But well, it is 'overwhelmed' and not 'over whelmed' and also not 'short cut' but 'shortcut'. You could correct those. Apart from these, this is as much a critic's delight as a usual reader's who really appreciates the flow of your story. Both are me, yeah so good show!

Thanks for the PM and I am sorry, I missed commenting on your previous update. :)



-Savage
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Posted: 13 years ago
hope this song for them...
Hum Aapke Hain Kaun
Bechain Hai, Meri Nazar
Hai Pyar Ka, Kaisa Asar
Na Chup Raho, Itna Kaho
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun

Khud Ko Sanam, Roka Bada
Aakhir Mujhe, Kehna Pada
Khwaabon Mein Tum, Aate Ho Kyon
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun

Bechain Hai, Meri Nazar
Hai Pyar Ka, Kaisa Asar
Hain Hosh Gum, Poocho Na Tum
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun

Kaise Kahun, Dil Ki Lagi
Chehra Mera, Padh Lo Kabhi
Yeh Sharm Ki, Surkhi Kahe
Hum Aapke, Aapke Hain Kaun .
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesome chap..😃.. i guess mayu love her frm start...🤔...loved their talks...😆...cont soon...! 😊..
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Posted: 13 years ago


beautiful part kinza
loved both part 3 and 4
so finally mayur got married... hmm though there is an evil intention behind this marriage but i hope soon it work for both of them specially for nups..
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Posted: 13 years ago
hello all!!
so here i am with my update, as i come on alternative days .. 😃\
I know this update is short and kind of a filler, but still there were some important aspects, which had to be covered this way . Hope u all enjoy and thank you for the response .. 🤗

Chapter # 5

Lunch went in silence, only clatter and titter was of the forks and the spoons on the table, and the ride back home also in silence.

"why are we so quiet"?, finally an irritated nupur had to ask.

"umm .. talking to me?", asked a rather surprised mayank.

"what is your problem mayank!", she hit him on the shoulder , as they were climbing up a couple of stairs after the lift, 'who else can I talk to here?', she said in a rather loud voice and mayank giggled,

"sorry, I was just thinking something, didn't realize I was ignoring", he smiled and walked ahead, opening the flat door.

"what were u thinking?", she asked, following him inside,

"none of your business, u tell me what will u eat for dinner, I'll cook", he said loosening his tie.

His blunt "none of your business" hurt her somewhere deep in her heart, a place she still wasn't able to locate, but all she knew was that she was hurt.

"umm, we should order, I don't think u cook well", saying it in an equally blunt tone, she turned to go inside the room and mayank shrugged his shoulders.

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Now why are we quiet?", mayank sat beside her on the sofa, and she passed him a glare, "sorry, I was thinking something, didn't realize I was ignoring", she smiled sweetly and mayank's mouth was left opened.

",don't tell me I hurt you" he asked, getting surprised, and nupur just kept on reading.

"umm, well, now this comes as a surprise, the cold nupur gets hurt also", he giggled and nupur breathed deep, "get lost mayank, if you have to behave this insensitive then just get lost", she closed the file and was about to get up when mayank held her wrist and pulled her back.

She fell on the sofa, back to her previous position and previous expression - glare.

"what happened?", he asked, this time with genuine sincerity, which penetrated across nupur's heart.

"I am tensed", she sighed.

"regarding?", he leaned in close and held her hands. It was on very few occasions that he actually held her hands, rest of the time, he could just fascinate about them. They were beautiful, fluffy and white, with a beautiful diamond ring on the index finger, she wore that always, once she told him that she loved that ring so wore it always. Her fingers were long and slender, there slight press, showing her anxiety was hurting him somewhere, he held them tight, "regarding what nupur?"

"property transfer", she sighed and placed her head on his shoulder and mayank was left stunned for a micro second.

Why did he even expect something else from her. It was always about money for nupur. Always about money.

"relax nupur, you just need signatures and that's all", he said, slowly trying to remove his hands from her grip, but this time she was holding hem tight.

"you don't understand mayank, his children will never sign !, they hate me!", she took some more deep breaths.

"nupur you want me to be honest?", he inquired, rather asked permission. She raised her head and looked in his eyes, "you've always been honest mayank, why are u asking, go ahead", she sat straight now.

"it's not difficult to hate you", he stated and although, the already hurt part of her heart felt another wound, she smiled, "I know that"

"it's rather difficult to love you", he smiled back and nupur swallowed a lump in her throat, "maybe, that is why I have haters all around and not even a single lover", she giggled and got up, "btw I am going to order fagita, what flavor do u want?"

"I'll eat homemade, you go ahead", he sighed and got up from the sofa, heading to change and nupur went to order.

Both of them ate different dinner, nupur ate the expensive fagita, while mayank drank the simple homemade corn soup.

Later at night, when maynak was in the bed, revising his schedule and nupur after changing was about to step out of the room, mayank interrupted.

"did I mention, this flat is rumored to be haunted", he said casually, and nupur's feet froze.

'haunted?", her voice already conveying the shake.

"yeah, my sweeper, he says he has seen ghosts here, silly boy", he laughed but nupur felt her nerves contracting.

"why are u laughing, the sweeper can be right, why do u live here then?", she walked to him and asked in desperation.

"umm, well, because this is my home and I am not afraid of such things, just told u casually", he shrugged his shoulder and lied down.

"btw do switch off the lights before u go out, ", he smiled, "good night nupur", and with this, he closed his eyes.

Nupur wanted to protest but he already felt breathing deeply. She kept on sitting by his side for a while and looked around. There was no way she could sleep out there alone. She glanced at the side of the bed, it was enough for her, without any risk of physical contact. She glanced at mayank. The aura of security and protectiveness he had around him made her long for it's feel. Without thinking anything more, she walked to her side of the bed.

For a moment, she kept observing him, there was no movement, he felt sleeping soundly. She took a deep breath and sat on the bed. She was so light weight , then how come the bed shifted so much due to her. She sighed and slowly lied down, holding her breath and observing mayank carefully. He was asleep, she carefully took the blanket over and turned towards him, the talk of ghosts made her shiver, moving on the edge of the pillow she closed her eyes, with making her hand crossing the imaginary division of the bed and placing it near his hand, but what she was unaware of that, mayank moved his hand more close to her, not in sleep, but in senses. He smiled inwardly, sensing her close to her. He knew it was wrong to trick her to come close to him like this, but patience wasn't his virtue.

Chapter 6 - Page 31

Edited by Fantasia. - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
So Mr. Sharma is trying to trick Mrs Sharma close😉🤣

btw this Nupur is so cute, why is she so then😕

n Mayank really really likes her i guess😳😆

i know next update is gonna be super fun😆😉😍
Edited by Payal-15 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
beautiful part kinza :)
and very real too :)
thanks for the pm🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesomee!!
cant wait for their love story to start😍

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