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Posted: 14 years ago
Part 3:

Wallah

Wht a part

Loved it

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Posted: 14 years ago
Amazing Amazing Lovely and Perfect update
Hmmma
Lots Of blushes and beautiful feelings were define perfectly
I loved it
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cont soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
The lunch date was amazingly written 👏 i loved the way you described nupur's hesitation and fear 👍🏼 reminds me so so much of my mum.😆 she has the same respect for my dad.😛 I am nothing like her at all when it comes to this and I seriously feel that husbands need to treat their wives as equals👍🏼 the ice cream bit was really sweet. He is such a perfect gentleman👍🏼 and he doesn't seem to be effected by her complexion. I'm guessing it's no big deal for him that she isn't fair😃 I'm sure you'll deffo include a talk between them regarding the way people treat her😛 the Convo with gunjan were really cute😍
thanks for the pm🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
Luved this update 😛
Mayu is such a gentleman...😳..esp luved the ice cream part..he must have got very embarrassed😆
Waiting for this relationship to bloom..😛
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Posted: 14 years ago
thank u people!! ..
and for all of your concern regarding mayank .. I AM VERY HAPPY!! .. because the character is creating impact just like i wanted it too . so MOI IS HAPPY! ..

Chapter # 4:

Nupur woke up the next morning to an unusually busy atmosphere, she could hear her dad ordering and she could even hear gunjan. Immediately getting out of her bed, she rushed down stairs to see the atmosphere all charged up.

"uncle ap gari main chezain dobara check kar lena ik baar", gunjan said, as she saw her father going out.

"gunjan!", she said, coming down the stairs and gunjan was ecstatic, "good morning would be bride!!", she rushed towards and hugged her tight.

"gunji dad inti subha kahan gaye hain?, wo bhi itna tyaar ho key?', she asked worried and gunjan smiled, "Uncle Mrs Pallavi Sharma se milne gaye hain ", she stressed on every word and nupur felt her heat yet again pumping hard.

"Mtlb dad ..

"gi , mtlb uncle ap ki in laws k ghr gaye hain .. to fix your marriage date!", she exclaimed joyfully and nupur just stared as she was awarded with another hug from gunjan.

"achanak?", she was still shocked,

"arey achanak kahan?, aunty tu kab se keh rahin thi, but uncle wanted you to meet jiju once, so as now he was very happy with your rosy cheeks yesterday so today he is just off to fix your marriage date!", she told him elaborately and nupur just smiled shyly.

"haye main sadqe .. tumhari blushes key tu kiya kehne hain, by the way how about you start narrating me yesterday's events from the start!", she said winking and nupur smirked,

"Sure Mrs Gunjan Mehta, but how about you cook me a yummy breakfast first, till then I go change my PJs", she smiled and without waiting for her answer, she was on her way back to her room, leaving a huffing gunjan,

'very funny!!", gunjan said on her way to kitchen.

**

"15th September"

Said Pallavi Sharma and Mr Bhushan nodded, although inwardly already counting days, that it was just a month left in 15th September.

"okay then, 15th September is perfect,", Pallavi made a note and extended the bowl of sweets towards Mr Bhushan, who took one piece , with already teary eyes.

**

Gunjan had just left and nupur was now impatiently waiting for her father to return. She could feel her pulse rise and cheeks boiling, but then getting fed up of this wait, She sat down with her book .. GONE WITH THE WIND. She loved the book, although she was reading it very slow, much much slower than her previous books, but still she loved the book but now again opening the book, led her to frown because she had no bookmarks!. URGH!. Yes, being a literature student and an obsessive freak about books, Nupur Bhushan didn't have bookmarks, all she had were folded useless papers placed in books. SHAME. She knew it was SHAME, but it was just fate that she was never able to buy bookmarks.

Yet again frowning on this strange and wired happening of her life, she started reading, but as expected, her mind was too occupied, so just closing the book, she lied down on the couch, hugging the cushion close to her.

She had re-called yesterday's meeting about a 100 times and had no problem in re-calling it a 101th time, when she heard the car horn!.

"dad!!", she jumped up and rushed towards the door but stopped right at the door. Her cheeks started boiling and taking a deep breath and controlling her smile, she opened the door, "dad, ap subha subha chale gaye they?", she asked taking his coat and Mr Bhushan placed his arms around her shoulder, "ap ko gunjan ne bataya nahi?", he asked , rather plainly

"dad,!!,", she whined and Mr Bhushan chuckled, "acha acha, pehle zara pani tu pilao", he said and nupur rushed towards the kitchen.

When she came back with a glass of water , she saw her father sitting on the sofa, his head leaning back and eyes closed and nupur felt her heart caught in a fist, "dad!", she sat beside him and he opened his eyes smiling,

"ap ki tabiyat tu thek hai na?", she asked placing her hand over his forehead and he held her hands, "haan gi main thek hon, bus thora udaas hon, meri beti door chali jaye gi na", he said affectionately and nupur stared blankly,

'we have decided 15th September as your wedding date", he said with teary eyes and nupur felt flutters, "tu si liye main thora udaas tha, per koi baat nahi , jab chali jao gi tab tu khsuh hi hon ga, no restrictions", he said grinning, but seeing those tears forming in her eyes , he hugged her, "oho beta, abhi se rona shori kar diya hai", he patted her head and nupur's hiccups started.

"dad mujhe kahin nahi jana", she snuggled close to him , feeling the warmth of her father. In that moment, all her dreams and desires were held aback, all she knew was that she loved her dad very much, and couldn't even think of staying away from him.

"arey aisey nahi kehtey", he said strictly and nupur cried further, "acha chalo, ab gunjan ko nahi batana, phir wo larai kare gi, mujh se bhi aur ap se bhi, chalo jao gunjan ko batao ja k"

"baad main bata don gi, pehle ap lunch kar lo", she raised her head, wiping her tears and went to the kitchen.

Entering the kitchen, she tried to distract herself by taking out food, but her tears were constant, but she knew her dad was a heart patient and her behavior would increase his tension, so she had to control and yet being successful, they had lunch in a normal environment.

It was in the evening when Mr Bhushan was off to jewelers and nupur was yet again alone when she decided to tell gunjan.

She dialed the number and as always, it was not attended, "urgh, gunjan never picks up phone in one go", frowning she dialed again and waiting through the tones, finally it was gunjan's voice, "nupur ka phone a hai wo phir ghusa kare gi k nahi uthaya .."

It was gunjan;s voice, indicating blush, maybe she didn't know she had attended the call and nupur felt warm all over ' It's surely romance going on between Mr & Mrs Mehta.

'Tu kiya hua?, nupur tu wasie bhi meri side pe hoti hai, she'll understand",

It was her jiju's voice and chuckling she disconnected the phone.

"Wrong timings nupur!!", she giggled to herself and was about to place the phone away, when it flashed GUNJAN.

"ahem!, sorry gunjaaan!", she giggled and gunjan on the other side went dark red ' she was red already.

"Shut up nupur!, bolo kyun phone kar rahi thi?", gunjan tried being strict but failed.

"hum baad main baat karte hain na ", she was still giggling, being an addition to the red color on gunjan's cheeks, the first being her snuggling husband.

"nupur!", this time she didn't failed being strict and nupur guessed it, "acha okay no mazak, main phn is liye kar rahi thi bcz my marriage date is fixed, 15th September", she said it all in one go and gunjan screamed!

"realllyyy?, OMGGG!!", she jumped and her husband had to move away, going in a doubt maybe her wife needed some help, "kia hua?", he asked slowly.

"nupur's gonna get married on 15th September, isn't it great!", she told him jubilantly and got back to phone, "that is so great nups, you know it's not even a month left, we should start shopping and ..

"CONRTAULATIONS NUPUR!!", her husband shouted from behind and nupur chuckled, "thank u jijuuu!!"

"nupur dekho ..

"relax gunjan, ab hum subha baat Karen gey", she said and gunjan was about to protest but she disconnected the phone, thinking that her jiju must be very happy on her move.

She loved Gunjan and her husband Samrat. They were just the best and the perfect. So much in love and so ..

and before she could add further adjectives, her phone flashed again.

Being sure that it was gunjan, she held the phone but frowned on an unknown number. She had always ignored unknown numbers, but today on an impulse she attended the call,

"hello?"

"Nupur .."

And her heart yet again skipped beats, it was .

"mayank here ..",

His voice felt much more husky on the phone and nupur did what she always used to do ' fumble.

"ummm .. ap .. ap ..

"gi main .. Mayank Sharma, I hope u remember me", he said giggling and nupur felt her heart fluttering beyond limits,

"helloo , there?", he asked after a silence of a couple of seconds and nupur came back to the real world, "gi , wo . sorry ..

"Koi baat nahi, I expected this nervousness, I did know you well in one day", he exclaimed proudly and nupur took a deep breath.

" um .. wo ..

"okay moving on from ye and wo, we will need to go out again, actually mom wants you to shop every thing for our new home, and I did try to explain her that it's okay if she does, but she didn't listen, so all we have to do is go shopping, so when are u free?", he said it all in one breath, and controlling her blush, flutter and nervousness, she managed a proper reply,

"I am free, are you?", she said and breathed relief, thank God for once she didn't behave silly.

"ahh , me!, I am free, from today my office has been declared no entry zone for me for the next three months, of which I don't understand the logic, I mean the wedding is for only three days and my mom wants me to sit at home for 3 months .. okay after marriage holiday I understand, but why should I sit at home a month before my marriage, urgh anyways leaving that. When should I come to pick you up?", again he spoke fluently and nupur started longing the confidence he had in his voice,

"in an hour or so ..", she said slowly ,

"cool, I'll be there ,, see you!",

".. suniyeee ..", she said immediately, sensing that he was about to disconnect and this suniye brought a smile on his face, "gi sunaiye..", he said, imitating her shy voice and nupur felt herself going warm,

"umm, wo actually, I have a best frnd, and she wanted to meet you, tu hum dinner pe us sey mil sakte hain?", she managed to say ' properly! .. ahh sigh!

"sure, mil len gey!, no problems!:, his voice was steady as before and nupur smiled, "thank you, I'll inform her,", she said gratefully.

"okay then, ab phone rakhon"?, he asked playfully and yet again nupur smiled, "gi .."

"kuch aur tu nahi kehna hai/", he said , enjoying her blush,

"nahi ,", she said slowly and mayank giggled, "okay then nupur, good bye, see you in an hour", saying all this sweetly, the phone was disconnected and nupur was left blushing.

She kept on gazing at the phone and blushing, when she was reminded that she had many works!.

Inform dad

Tell gunjan that today she'll meet her jiju

Get ready

Make a list of shopping!

MAN! - Life became busy all of a sudden!.

Chapter 5 - Page 22

Edited by Fantasia. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

firstly i had no ideas about all these fears!!!😕

mein to like Gunjan have full faith in Mayank jiju!!😛 ahem ahem!! i just realsied the number of hugs Gunjan gives Nupur!! rings a bell!! 😆 but m happy Nupur doesnt mind it!!😳 the first scene was adorable!!!! awww... so Uncle is off!!! hayeee!!! and Nupur is all blushing and excited!!! so well understand her feelings!!! <3 but the bets part of first scene was:

"Sure Mrs Gunjan Mehta, but how about you cook me a yummy breakfast first, till then I go change my PJs", she smiled and without waiting for her answer, she was on her way back to her room, leaving a huffing gunjan,

'very funny!!", gunjan said on her way to kitchen.

hahahah!!!!! so damn suna suna!! although i dnt think Gunjan will huff!! she would love to do that!!! ( which reminds me i was feeling very bad just now!!! i wished i could have gave u that glass of water u wanted! )

"15th September"
hayeee!!! as u already knwo, my first reaction was,*why 15th september?*!!! hehe!!
but well Gunjan have alot of work to do so i guess its justified!!!!😃
GONE WITH THE WIND. She loved the book, although she was reading it very slow, much much slower than her previous books, but still she loved the book but now again opening the book, led her to frown because she had no bookmarks!. URGH!. Yes, being a literature student and an obsessive freak about books, Nupur Bhushan didn't have bookmarks, all she had were folded useless papers placed in books. SHAME. She knew it was SHAME, but it was just fate that she was never able to buy bookmarks.
this part was right through someone's heart and i guess bookmarks are my next target when ever i go out shopping next!!!😆
the dad and daughter scene was just too good for words.. 👏the emotions, the feelinsg, teh confusion whether to be happy or sad to leave her family. everything was right thr... beautifully expressed scene kinzu!!! i had tears in my eyes,, *as expected*!!!😳 but it was extremely heart touching!!! loved it soo much!!! <3
specially when :
Entering the kitchen, she tried to distract herself by taking out food, but her tears were constant, but she knew her dad was a heart patient and her behavior would increase his tension, so she had to control and yet being successful, they had lunch in a normal environment.
ok finally khayal aa gaya Gunjan ko batane ka?
as for her not picking up on first call well silent per bhe to ho sakta hai!!! Nuur shoudl understand na!1😳
atleast she didnt request to throw the mobile in dustbinas Bush does!
errr,mmm.. well yeah m again dragging cause i wanted to skip comenting on the phone call but tm mujhe zinda nahe choro ge!! i know u!! so here it goes!
gunjan's voice, "nupur ka phone a hai wo phir ghusa kare gi k nahi uthaya .."

It was gunjan;s voice, indicating blush, maybe she didn't know she had attended the call and nupur felt warm all over – It's surely romance going on between Mr & Mrs Mehta.

'Tu kiya hua?, nupur tu wasie bhi meri side pe hoti hai, she'll understand",

HAD HAI! ☺️

It was her jiju's voice and chuckling she disconnected the phone.

"Wrong timings nupur!!", she giggled to herself and was about to place the phone away, when it flashed GUNJAN.

i read this line and i was like, no way! Gunjan knew Nupur called so thr could never be any wrng time! *hmph*... and then i saw the next line!!😳
"ahem!, sorry gunjaaan!", she giggled and gunjan on the other side went dark red – she was red already.

"Shut up nupur!, bolo kyun phone kar rahi thi?", gunjan tried being strict but failed.

"hum baad main baat karte hain na ", she was still giggling, being an addition to the red color on gunjan's cheeks, the first being her snuggling husband.

"nupur!", this time she didn't failed being strict and nupur guessed it, "acha okay no mazak, main phn is liye kar rahi thi bcz my marriage date is fixed, 15th September", she said it all in one go and gunjan screamed!

SHUKAR HAI GUNJAN SUCEEDED IN BEING STRICT TOO!!!😆
"realllyyy?, OMGGG!!", she jumped and her husband had to move away, going in a doubt maybe her wife needed some help, "kia hua?", he asked slowly.

"nupur's gonna get married on 15th September, isn't it great!", she told him jubilantly and got back to phone, "that is so great nups, you know it's not even a month left, we should start shopping and ..

"CONRTAULATIONS NUPUR!!", her husband shouted from behind and nupur chuckled, "thank u jijuuu!!" this line was my favrt part of this convo!!!❤️ epitome of cuteness!!!! <3

"nupur dekho ..

"relax gunjan, ab hum subha baat Karen gey", she said and gunjan was about to protest but she disconnected the phone, thinking that her jiju must be very happy on her move.

i mean dost ka koi kahyal he nahe!! bus jiju ke parwa hai! do Nupur have any idea how much Gunjan much be dying to talk? 😳
She loved Gunjan and her husband Samrat. They were just the best and the perfect. So much in love and so ..
i saw the love the three shared and m looking forward to an addition of a fourth person!!!!😳
now comes my fav part!! OMG!!! Mayank called? 😍

"hello?"

"Nupur .."

And her heart yet again skipped beats, it was .

"mayank here ..",

His voice felt much more husky on the phone and nupur did what she always used to do – fumble.

oye hoey!!!! husky voice???😉
"ummm .. ap .. ap ..

"gi main .. Mayank Sharma, I hope u remember me", he said giggling and nupur felt her heart fluttering beyond limits,

I LIKES IT!!! KYA SENSE OF HUMOR HAI!!!!!
"helloo , there?", he asked after a silence of a couple of seconds and nupur came back to the real world, "gi , wo . sorry ..

"Koi baat nahi, I expected this nervousness, I did know you well in one day", he exclaimed proudly and nupur took a deep breath.

hayeee!!!!!!! ka baat hai!!! aik din mein he itna kuch pata chal gaya?
" um .. wo ..

"okay moving on from ye and wo, we will need to go out again, actually mom wants you to shop every thing for our new home, and I did try to explain her that it's okay if she does, but she didn't listen, so all we have to do is go shopping, so when are u free?", he said it all in one breath, and controlling her blush, flutter and nervousness, she managed a proper reply,

"I am free, are you?", she said and breathed relief, thank God for once she didn't behave silly.

awww... i simply love Nupur!!!! <3
"ahh , me!, I am free, from today my office has been declared no entry zone for me for the next three months, of which I don't understand the logic, I mean the wedding is for only three days and my mom wants me to sit at home for 3 months .. okay after marriage holiday I understand, but why should I sit at home a month before my marriage, urgh anyways leaving that. When should I come to pick you up?", again he spoke fluently and nupur started longing the confidence he had in his voice,

"in an hour or so ..", she said slowly ,

"cool, I'll be there ,, see you!",

".. suniyeee ..", she said immediately, sensing that he was about to disconnect and this suniye brought a smile on his face, "gi sunaiye..", he said, imitating her shy voice and nupur felt herself going warm,

hayeee!!!! u know i had my breath held on this point!! uff!! suniye, jee sunayee!!! Gosh!!! can they get any better?
but yes they did when i read the next line!!!!!! yuppieee Gunjan meeting her jijU!!!! aha aha aha!!!!!!
"umm, wo actually, I have a best frnd, and she wanted to meet you, tu hum dinner pe us sey mil sakte hain?", she managed to say – properly! .. ahh sigh!

"sure, mil len gey!, no problems!:, his voice was steady as before and nupur smiled, "thank you, I'll inform her,", she said gratefully.

"okay then, ab phone rakhon"?, he asked playfully and yet again nupur smiled, "gi .."

"kuch aur tu nahi kehna hai/", he said , enjoying her blush,

"nahi ,", she said slowly and mayank giggled, "okay then nupur, good bye, see you in an hour", saying all this sweetly, the phone was disconnected and nupur was left blushing.

blushing kya baat hai!!! jahan Nupur ne blush kia na samjho baat ban gaye!!!!!!!😉
She kept on gazing at the phone and blushing, when she was reminded that she had many works!.

Inform dad

Tell gunjan that today she'll meet her jiju

Get ready

Make a list of shopping!

MAN! – Life became busy all of a sudden!.

hayeee!!!!!!!!!!!! read it!!!!!!!!!! uff!!!!!!!!!! i have already read it twice and m not satisfied!!!!! 😳 kinzu this is soo magical na???😍 everything!!!!!!! oh btw the two scnes we discussed!!!!! ahem ahem!!!😆 m wishing u luck !!!!!😉 love u kinzu!!!!!!! it was such a beautiful, dream like part!!!! too good for words, and too deeply rooted in my heart to ever express through words!! but i tried as u know!!😳 love u kinzu!! now m eagerly waiting for the next part!!!!!! so update soon na plzzz!!!!!1😳 i sooo know u cnat refuse my plzzz!! *evil grin* hehe! love u kinzu!!! and to be honest this was teh best call we ever had!!!!! <3 i love u soo much!!! and had such a great time discussing updtae, talking abt my princess and enjoying the rain together!!! *tight hugs* love u!!!!!!!!!
Edited by mulan. - 14 years ago
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i loved it kinza 👏 👏 👏 very well written... ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

ok the father-daughetr convo made me nostalgic and i still have a lump in my throat...
thora udaas hon, meri beti door chali jaye gi na
awww, i felt ... i dont know.. i cant explain it... 😭 its something.. different ...
anyway, yay 15th september, they are gonna get married 😃
aww loved the conversation between gunjan and nupur... and samrat too... ☺️ argh it does irritate when calls come at the wrong time 😆 😆 😆
okay, so mayank and nupur will be going out again... hmm mayank seemed normal and nice and jovial in this update... but im not saying more...
waiting for the next update... thanks for the PM (although i reached here after u sent a scrap 😃 )
very well written kinzu... brilliant 😊 😊 keep writing more hun...
God bless you, love ya 🤗 take care 😊
Edited by rapunzel_angel - 14 years ago
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edited!!😳 I'm on time after a long time😳

Kinzu... it was a beautiful update..😃..
You portrayed all the aspects of Nupur so beautifully... the blushing would-be-bride☺️, the darling daughter😳, the best friend😃 and the understanding sister-in-law😆... every role was just perfect😃

contiinue soon kinuu!!🤗

~jiya~

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Res b4 ur pm.haha

Edited:

My magical angel..this was such a swit part..the interaction between nupur and her dad rily touched me..

but the best was the mayur phone convo..mayank stuck at home for 3 months..lols..and he is being so playful n sweet to nupur..its cute,hehe..the suniye-sunaiye part made me laugh.lol..now waiting for the shopping bit..update soon k?:)
Edited by AmyArTiMayUr - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

awesome...but still mayank...ummm...sumthng fishy is there..

rest was beautiful..thnx fr the pm...😊 lu tc<333
Edited by Nikita-Sharma - 14 years ago

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