This was such an inspired idea! People have long since been using clips of shows to illuminate themes into vms BUT you took poems and did the same. Wonderful! Your poem is just exceptional! You took the form and substance of daffodils and reaper and combined their hearts. Just skillfully done!
That opening Behold, grabbing our attention and focusing our minds, as you throw us in rather than ease us in, like the cold icy wind of winter that runs through your poem against the warmth of that winter's sun!
I loved how you cast Arnav as the reaper to Khushi's daffodil. Just an inspired notion!
Behold the solitary Reaper!
Reaping and harvesting
His carefully cultivated sows.
This verse was just excellently written! The solitary enhancing his loneliness, whereas in the original it added to her charm. That reaping and harvesting concisely and poetically implying his scrupulous ways, upon which you add the detailing of carefully cultivated. That hint of a life planned to the smallest detail, as you set up that collision with desitny's intricate encompassing of that plan that he is truly oblivious to and most unprepared!
These two line are just skillfully written! The 'cutting' carrying on the theme of the reaper whilst layering on his harshness whilst the last line elucidating the 'worth' or rather the 'price' of his life! Excellently done!
Then the best part of your poem, as you merged the two poems together, the point of their intersecting, that as the titles engender, reaper and daffodils, we can not help but be wary at their meeting. Cometh the Reaper sighting the Daffodil Just most skillfully done!
Mistakes and misunderstandings
Beautifully written verse. The first line succinctly summarizing their differences and the reason behind the next two lines, chapters of their lives.
Then hearts pleasure fills atlast I loved how you bring this in last, for this love story is not about the love that eye alone brings BUT rather an understanding of two soul's. Love found through kindred needs, despite their diverse forms.
I have always loved the last line, 'and dances with the daffodils' for it is inspiring and heart warming, AND I loved your embroidering of it in your poem. It's the dances of Reaper and Daffodil. We can just imagine their interaction as a dance, like two fireflies or butterflies whose movements look like war and yet love too, as the softness of their wings touch, caress whilst their proximity brings forth ever increasing closeness. Truly just like Arnav and Khushi, whose warring ways will not bring forth distance but propinquity! Flowing and brimming, uniting and binding. Indeed!
Maris, just an exceptional and skillfully written poem. I am most impressed, although I doubt that was your sole motivation. Beautifully done! With much love, Sabah
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