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Posted: 14 years ago

#81

awesome updates Jess just loved them!

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Jessica

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Posted: 14 years ago

#82

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I Thank all thos who pressed the like button as well as those who read silently. I appreciate you all taking time to read through. It does wonders to a writer and motivates them so much. Thank you all again

Special thanks coming up...

@vatty : A special thanks to you dear... Sweet Hugs dearie...🤗

Now go and rekindle the Embers!! I love it I hope that it is enough for you to restart. It is a beautiful story Vatty. My sincere request!!😳

@Ramani : Gosh thanks girl!!!😳😳 Am not at all what you claim that I am.. I write simply from my heart. and your replies make me feel exhilerated and honoured!! Awww... thanks and enjoy... Continue reading to find out all the answers.. lol.. abhi bol diya to mazaa nahin aayega... so enjoy.. Will post next part today...😛😃

@Vandu: Hahahaha,😆😆😆😉 I believe you are a person who speaks her mind!! Please I count on you to tell me if it is OTT..😉😃 this filmy type jaw crunching whamie... Sigh, no Natasha that is why was never brought out as a person.. Believe me... Manu is enough to make him see green every time.. But the only dilemma is that our Dr. SK is blind!! He can't read any signals at all and is clueless as to why his heart is not under his command!! Enjoy...😳

@saaaz There are sooo many things I loved about this update...I shall try and list them all...

1. sprinkling of gujrati...huge huge fan of languages..and my dear ms. lingusitics you have done such a great job here in your writing, your mastery over languages shows..

me too.. I love the languages.. each is same yet so different!! That is why I chose this profession...😳

2. The inner turmoil of shanak..loved loved loved the way you put it..so many lines that moved me..Khanak dealing with her unrequited love and Shaan with his lost love..

I am sucker for such pain!! Not being a perv.. but I thrive on such issues!! Glad you liked the way it turned out.. the original I am sure you will fall in love with...😳

3. Mannu...I love him..no I do..to me he is the 'real' character of your FF..shanak being the leads have to be a bit uncompromising, out of the world beautiful with flaws ..but Mannu can be you or me or any one else and I love that about him..I am a sucker for 'realistic'..and Mannu delivers ..don't you dare kill him off or make him dissappear

Yes he is the silver lining of this beautiful cloud... As again I say this, in the originial it is Manu and his counterpart.. (Kahini who Dr. KAS is supposedly to be in love with) solves this issue for the P&P to meet... So relax.. Manu is going to be there till the end.. and is going to be the catalyst in bringing P&P to their senses!! 😃

4. Loved the contrasts you bring out in a Juhu scheme bungalow and Cuffe parade flat..one is expansive within and the latter views the expanse from within...much like Shanak's support system in themselves..

Sigh I can never get bombay out of my mind, heart and soul.. Even if I live here in another mega city, I always feel and shall feel that Toronto does not ahve a heart and soul like Bombay... Thanks again for this compliment😳😳😳

5. The way you wrote Shaan's changing images of his love..is brilliant!!! IMO, it is probably very difficult to 'write' something which you can 'show' with the same intensity and you did it not just beautifully but very convincingly..kudos!!!

Yes it was like I wanted to convey what lies within me. As I wish to percieve. I strive to get better so all the negative feedback is also appreciated.. Thanks ga... aankhin many thanks... dhyameet aatta majhya dolyaat ashru aale... 😭😃😳

6. I must admit I am not a big fan of 'rescue' of the maiden be the turning point of love stories..but hey, I am very very sure that you shall write it beautifully to make me a believer..

Hmmm.. arre naahin ga.. this is just to ahem.. make him realise something... tehehehe.. I like putting such masala stuff in between... 😛😉😃

Jess...I cannot believe you took this long to showcase your talent here..you are a fabulous writer..and I mean this from the bottom of my heart..Please update soon!!

mwaa.. loved your responses!! Makes me feel so honoured and I value your opinions so much!!! thanks ga!!😳🤗

@sweetvidisha : thanks so much.. enjoy the rest...😊

@angel_9 : hahaha.. enjoy.. Shall thank you for your comments in advance.😃

@simi.. aww.. thanks honey.. No worries enjoy at your pace.. love to read your comments and Ff too.. grass is always greener on the other side... enjoy the rest.. manu is till the end.. so have fun..😳

@minnu345 Enjoy and keep reading...😃

@aditee.. Sigh yes manu is like a catalyst to their coming together... so enjoy the Green Dr. SK... while I choose subtle conventional shades... enjoy re...😃

@Roshni_M Hey how dare you whack my bacchas!?😡 Chalo say sorry to Rosh!! 😒Humph phir kabhi whackie diya to dekhna!! baap I will call bhai!! Jokes apart..😆😆😆 Rosh, its okay.. Read whenever you can and enjoy... Thanks for liking..😃😳

@dishban : hahahaha, 😆😉😛as I said earlier i love putting such masalas once in a while... oh sure daant toota..😃 but am not following the types of Vansh. I like the name Vansh, I should have put another more common one..🤔 anywyas... enjoy.. Yes Radha is a girl's mother.. they always worry.. Mine always did even if I was 18!!! sigh enjoy girl.. thanks for liking it...😳

@Ankita Thanks for naming me hila... lol... I know re.. tpyo tha.. anyways. Thanks for your PM for the font. appreciate it. Phir se nahin hoga... enjoy...😳

@purvi : Haila, did you get to read it all? Joking yaar.. Glad that you liked it and enjoy another one...😲😉😆

@Mani...Jess''.*hugs*🤗

Sorry for responding late !!

Hey kya sorry.. No sorry vorry.. This is for you.. so anytime...😳

I am just stuck and I suck'''..badly !! I am tightly packed with work at clinic and home''''read your update during lunch.The update thrilled me ''..👏👏👏👏👏👏 !!!!

Awww... am honoured!!😳😳

The writing style keeps on overwhelming me, every time I read your update, filling me all over with the emotions and feelings your protagonists go through.

I try.. Vaise I feel for your ShaNak.. they move me the most!!!😳😛

She keeps his photograph in the diary given by him, treasures it in fact, and keeps wondering about the hollows under his eyes''

He keeps remembering her dark smoldering eyes'...I am bowled by his responses to her, subconsciously''..the way you have written about his dream reflecting his inner turmoil, Natasha's image getting blurred and he holding on to Khanak. But they have just met, after years, still she has that effect on him !

Sigh they have just met, but he has been with her all her life.. as for him she was something else.. this Khanak has left her mark on him and he can't see it yet... So strap on your seat belt and enjoy... this journey of love...

I like Manu''what a friend !! He is 😳a strong pillar of support to her '..understanding and pro-active. Friends should be like that I have always believed '.extending hands without asking for support'..loved him actually; loved the trust and giving in their relationship; utterly selfless'..

Yes friends.. true ones are so difficult to find.. in thsi day and age.. And then when one truly does come, you sit back and think.. wow am I lucky.. to have them hold my hand and last me a lifetime maybe more... It is just like true love... Sigh I love you for this mani.. As saaaz and so many others pointed out.. they love Manu.. and rest assured he will be there till the very end... SR chod ke!!! hehehehehe... enjoy re... all for you...🤗

The names of her parents ' Radha-Govind'..aptly chosen !! wow !! and their relationship'.leaves warmth behind, long after you have read.

I have this something with names... they have to co-ordinate for me... teheheh glad that you liked them😃

Both Shantanu and Khanak are endearing in your FF, vulnerable, lost''.fighting with themselves, their emotions'''.. confused at their response to each other ''. trying to avoid the other but unable to resist.

I love their characterization and expression of their emotions'.I can sooo feel it, at the bottom of my heart !!

I am so addicted to it already''.

And me to your FF... Sigh...😍😳

@Yumna : hahahaha.. I never give up on any one.. Chill and enjoy whenever you can...👍🏼

@Sonali : Loved your comments too... Enjoy...😃

Look out for the next part.. Am posting it some time now...

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Roshni

@Roshni_M

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#83

oh god jess di...

i still dint read...

i read the first 3 parts...

they were awesome...

dr. shantanu khandelwal... wow!!!!!!!!!!

today pakka i'll read it... pakka...

p.s. dont worry i'll not whack rosh again...😆😆😆😆

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Jessica

@jparker

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#84

Pride and Prejudice - Part 1 : https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1666662&TPN=2
Pride and Prejudice - Part 2&3 : https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/rang-badalti-odhani/1666662/ff-p-and-p-epilogue-pg-138-thank-u-note-pg-140?pn=4
Pride and Prejudice - Part 4 : https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/rang-badalti-odhani/1666662/ff-p-and-p-epilogue-pg-138-thank-u-note-pg-140?pn=6
Pride and Prejudice - Part 5 & 6: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/rang-badalti-odhani/1666662/ff-p-and-p-epilogue-pg-138-thank-u-note-pg-140?pn=9

Pride and Prejudice - Part 8 & 9: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/rang-badalti-odhani/1666662/ff-p-and-p-epilogue-pg-138-thank-u-note-pg-140?pn=15

Part 7

Shantanu glared at the retreating back of the drunk man as he ran down the stairs on his way out...intending to burn him... Khanak trembled as she still sat there on the edge of the bed in shock... her hands over her mouth... shaking from the whole situation in shocked disbelief... freezing her to the spot and not realising that her kurta lay gaping at her neck where in the tussle a few buttons had been undone... her chest heaved from her shocked breathing... His eyes encompassed the whole scene as he felt a raw rage within him.. He wanted to lay his hands on that scoundrel and knock his teeth out. A frown dressed his handsome face as he slowly let the door close behind him and walked to the middle and stooped down to grab her odhani. Carefully he came to stand a little distance from where she was seated on the bed... shivering her hand still clasped over her mouth, tears flowing from glassy eyes... He knew she was in shock... grimly without a word, he took her odhani and gently placed it around her shoulders... tentatively he judged her and deciding it was okay, he very gently held her somewhere between her shoulders and upper arms.. making sure his touch was clinical... he did not want to scare or upset her further after this traumatic happening.

She did not move or react as he gently made her rise. Profusely crying not at all realising anything else... He closed his eyes once as her tears did strange things to his heart. Frowning even more deeply, a muscle beat rapidly in his jaws as he spoke gruffly.. "Jingles.. its.. its okay.. you are safe.. nothing happened.. You listening!!?" When he got no reaction from her, he gently shook her "Jingles!! Listen to me.. are you listening?!!" And as if that broke the shock she started to see through her tears as they spilled out of her doe shaped eyes... and she suddenly broke down on seeing him.. relief replacing the raw fear from moments ago... "Doc.. he.. doc he he tr.. tried.. to.. " Sheer aversion from thinking about it made her shudder as at the same time her hands rose and she grabbed a handful of his shirt lapels and bunching them in her fists slowly dipped her head to rest it against his chest which felt like a solid rock wall... unheeding, unawares of the series of emotions that caused a storm within his heart...

All he did was to gather her slowly in his assuring embrace and soothe her as she hiccuped and tittered through her tears as he softly spoke assuring her it was alright now... His jaw grazing the soft silk of her hair her cheeks soaking his shirt front.. and he caring less wanted only to stop those damned tears which were causing him more pain and damage than his shirt... "Dammit Jingles, listen to me.. are you listening..?" His hands had now left her to cup her face to prise it out as he spoke roughly... "Jingles.. look at me.. look please.. stop crying.. are you listening" He shook her in a little frustration as slowly she heeded to his soft voice... between hiccups she looked one eye opening and then the other.. as slowly she realised her surrounding.. but most of all her heart rejoiced as it found that she was in his arms.. the only place that she ever wanted to be in...

He looked at her bending just a little as he towered over her a good few inches.. his eyes looking down into hers, his breath mixing with her short gasps resulting from her sobbing... she could breathe in his after shave which blissfully erased the vile stench of the drunkard, as her senses took another battering of their own... being so close to him, she could see the dark evening stubble already making its shadows on his jaw, her heart raced as her brain tried to analyse what he was saying... She heard him urgently speak again, his hands still cupping her face and hers still bunching his shirt front... "Jingles dammit, if you don't listen I will get everyone here.. did you her me?!" That got to her and she trembled anew.. this time for all the different reasons... and with a sigh as she shuddered once more as she felt his breath he spoke to reassure her mistaking the shudder.. "Look, its safe now.. he.. he is gone.. whoever he was. You.. okay? He.. he errmm.." The assurance changing to an subtle question... She again shuddered visibly with the memory but managed to shake her head and he in relief breathed out again she again felt the bliss of feeling his reassuring breath.. Collecting beautiful memories for later...

But then he did the unexpected as gently with the pads of his thumbs, he wiped one trail and then another.. till the tears felt threatened by his very thumbs and stopped flowing. In awe she saw as he laboriously and very carefully did his task as if it were like dressing a wound or performing an expert cautery with dedication... And then her heart skivvied again as it thudded with his words.. "Jingles, thank God he did not.. and you are okay... who the hell was he?" She swallowed, her face still in his strong reassuring grasp.. her hands now were softly clutching over his hold as she stuttered softly... "M.. Me.. Mehra uncle's distant ne.. nephew.. he.. err.. wanted to .. to... us..use the ww..washroom.. and..." The rest was conveyed as a shudder and he tightened his hold... making her look into his chiding gaze...

Oblivious to the two, from the doorway, there was a soft gasp as Radha saw the two in this close embrace. From where she stood, she could only see Shantanu gently cupping her face and tilting his head, giving an onlooker the feeling of him kissing her... Feeling that it was not her place to witness, she respected their privacy and gently closed the door back but feeling elation.. Something had formed in her heart already but she decided to let destiny do its own work... She remembered that it was just yesterday she had learned of this shocking news that Natasha was no more from Shantanu himself when she had invited him as well as Natasha for dinner tonight. He had gone silent suddenly and then had softly told her of how Natasha had passed away... But the scene that she had encountered now... brought many questions as well as maternal concern to the fore.. But she trusted them both and was confident that as mature individuals they were capable of handling situations. She hoped to hear some good news... and feeling this excitement, she returned back to a handful of her guests.. Surprisingly, Mehra's had left as they got an urgent call apologising profusely... she walked with a happy shine on her face as she encountered Govind's enquiring look and she shook her head as if replying.. 'Nothing..'

Back in the room, Shantanu gently wiped the last trail as her eyes shone with a strange uncomprehending look... as his eyes reassured her that she was safe.. and there was nothing to worry about till suddenly they both realised how close they were physically to each other... For what seemed like eternity they gazed into the other's eyes, least realising that they were separated by mere inches.. their hearts racing, their breaths mingling into one... till suddenly a noise in the distance maybe someone laughing jerked them both... as he let her go and she gathered her odhani closer to herself as she tucked her errant lock of hair behind her ear... and he looked away as his eyes fell on the movement of her hands near her neck... clearing his throat he hoarsely murmured.. "Errr.. I.. I will go and greet aunty and.. uncle... I.. " He stopped at the doorway to pick up his jacket that had dropped earlier and suddenly walked away leaving her standing there like a shaking leaf... a mass of emotions and nerves...

She bit her lip and then raised her hand to her head as she sat down with a thud.. thinking if she had given herself away in any way... then her second track spoke 'So he is here.. so that means even she is here... and you.. are you stupid.. or what!! Swell... what did you call him.. yes.. fourth time.. this is the fourth time you gave away yourself.. god girl are you nuts or what!!?? I would say plain stupid. so the only intelligent thing to do now is to pack your bags and leave!!' She shook her head as if to stop her inner voice... to shut it up... as she needed to think clearly... she then sat upright as what she had just thought.. and biting he lip closed her eyes in dismay.. 'When did Ma invite him?! That means of course even Natasha must have accompanied him.. oh no...' thinking of her further dilemma as only moments ago she had clung to him and had cried loads over his now completely drenched shirt front!! "Oh no.. how on earth will he explain that to Natasha now..." More importantly how will she face him now!! Dropping her head in her hands she completely forgot of the earlier horrible situation... as she heard her Ma's soft voice speak... "Khanakdi!! Where are you?" She suddenly rose and straightened her clothes and swallowing rushed out to meet Ma at he landing and murmured.. "I.. I am here Ma, will be there in a moment.. Have to use the washroom.." She thanked the soft lighting at the landing and her hair covered her face wrecked by the recent deluge... and Ma smiled nodding as she made a beeline for the kitchen to check on something...

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Shantanu smiled at Verma uncle, who he remembered from yester years... and then uncle walked up to him offering him a drink. Shantanu being a very responsible doctor hardly ever drank.. but if at all he did, it never would exceed a couple.. and for some reason he usually avoided parties especially after Natasha passed away... but he still did not realise the reason of his presence here... He smiled his thanks to uncle, obviously clueless of what had occurred in the house.. He was intelligent enough than to reveal it to them.. Aunty walked over to him offering him some tit bits to munch on saying.. "Shantanu, you must try this.. I remember it was your favourite once upon a time.. and you need to be fed!! Just look at you.." Shantanu smiled endearingly at this sweet lady.. always got to his heart she did... and then looked up raising his glass to his lips and felt a raw nerve in his jaw ticking as she came onto the terrace... calm and composed... her soft makeup excellently covering up the signs of deluge and trauma from earlier... His eyes spoke with hers as she pleaded silently and his reassured her.. safe it will be.. they seemed to say... as she breathed in relief smiling a little as she approached them... Just then Verma uncle's daughter walked up to them as well greeting him and spoke in a soft contrite apology.. "Shaan.. how are you? And I am so sorry to hear.. about Natasha passing away..."

Khanak stood still.. mid way.. a stunned expression in her eyes... tears springing there... as she could only look... He murmured gently to Verma uncle's daughter thanking her for her sympathy... all was a blur to her as she made a soft turn to move to the food table as if to check on something and furtively wiped her eyes feeling numb with shock... 'what.. Natasha is no more.. When.. How... oh my god.. no wonder he looked like he did... Oh ... God.. he must be in such pain... Oh My God... No...' Her Ma's soft voice called out to her to join them and she breathed again this time even more deeply as she turned but he was not there.. he had moved on with Verma uncle and Papa to chat about something else... she walked to her Ma and Verma uncle's daughter... smiling with an effort, but her heart felt hollow.. for him.. for the pain that he must be in...

After an hour or so, she looked around as she did not see him around... Some were at the table inside sitting and chatting with laden plate full of food.. she bit her lip and looked around. She walked to the other end of the terrace which was a bit secluded from this side with a frown and saw him standing there with a glass half full by his side on the parapet.. looking into the distance...the soft wind ruffling the silk of his hair as he looked into emptiness.. Tears sprang again in her eyes as she bit her lip and slowly walked close to him and gently placed her hand on his hard unmoving shoulder... She felt him stiffening but without turning he spoke and hse shuddered at the racking pain in his voice... "She.. she left me.. Jingles.. before I could even.. enjoy her company.. share with ehr any happiness.. she just.. left.. me.." Her hand squeezed his shoulder in empathy.. words stuck in her throat as the tears just slipped.. and then she felt his slight shudder.. Slowly he turned and her hand dropped to her side as she took in his white face.. and bit her lip and sobbed softly for his loss... her sympathy writ on her face... He too was too full of emotions as he shook his head trying not let his pain escape... and the most natural thing they could do was to wind their arms around each other in comfort... Once again she sobbed her sympathy into his chest as he tried to stop his at her shoulder.. almost in the soft inviting curve of her neck...

Crushed to his chest she shuddered with her racking sobs as he rocked her and tried get control over his emotions... He did not realise why today of all the days he felt so much pain at Natasha's loss... He did not know why he was in Khanak's arms for the second time.. and he did not know why.. his heart jerked at the sight of her tears... why did he feel this tearing emotion as if he wanted to tear down the world apart.. at the mere sight of her tears.. why... After a long time.. they slowly moved apart.. feeling conscious all of a sudden.. He found the strength to thank her for her expressing her sympathy and she found her voice as she murmured... "Please Shantanu.. don't say thanks.. I.. I .. My bad.. that.. I.. did not know.. I thought.." He laughed as if cynical now... "That we must be happily married with children... yes.. I wish so much... but well wishes are certainly no horses..." the last part made her cringe as she did not want to picture children.. especially his and Natasha's... But she smiled wanly and murmured.. "Its.. getting late.. you.. you must eat something.." She was about to turn and leave when he grabbed her wrist clad with golden bangles...the colour matching the champagne in his hand... as she shuddered anew...

Slowly she turned and he turned as he spoke softly... "I know Jingles.. that I should not say thanks, but I don't like debt, and I thank you for being here today... It was a long time ago.. she passed away so many years ago.. but today for some reason I felt like it was just yesterday.. but your understanding helped me go through this.. Thanks..." Khanak felt more numbness.. realising that he still loved Natasha too much, merely smiled and nodded.. "Yes.. I know that feeling.. Well you helped with papa.. so I guess that makes us equal.. No.. actually I am in debt now... you.. you helped .. earlier..." She shuddered not able to complete as the memory flashed and he suddenly let go of her hand thankfully but only for her heart to stop completely as he gently cupped her face and murmured.. "I thought we cleared that earlier... No more remembering.. Promise me now..." All she could do was look up mesmerised into his shining eyes now.. warm chocolate... and nodded.. As he smiled then condoning even more agony for her poor racing heart... as he gently tucked a strand of her silky hair behind her ear... they were interrupted by her ma's voice who appeared just as he let her go... "Ah.. there you are... I was looking for you both... come now.. dinner is getting cold..."

All throughout dinner she was aware of him like a live wire was near her... her nerves too a bad battering every time he moved near her... She hardly ate anything and at one time she almost spilled a glass of juice on the table.. he saved it in the nick of time enquiring with his quirked brow.. "Hey.. watch out Jingles.. you okay?" She had smiled and nodded not trusting her voice to speak anything... just then his cell had rung and he answered.. "Hello..." After a brief pause his face turned into an unreadable mask as he spoke.. "Mom.. no I am not at home no.. no at the hospital.. in fact.. I.. I am here at the K-uncle.. Remember Khanna uncle.. Govind Khanna, their house.. ... ... Yes.. .. yes dinner... of course.. yes... hang on..." He looked at her.. "do you know where aunty is.. Mom would like to speak to her..." Khanak smiled and pointed behind him as he smiled and walked over to Ma and handed her his cell whispering something to her, as Ma smiled a surprised happy look shining in her face as she softly spoke.. "Madhavi.. hi.. how are you?"

Edited by jparker - 14 years ago

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angel_9

@angel_9

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#85

Hey Jess

sorry for commenting late was bit busy...

i have updated my comment...

loved ur FF & amazing writing style...

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Jessica

@jparker

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: angel_9
Hey Jess

sorry for commenting late was bit busy...

i have updated my comment...

loved ur FF & amazing writing style...

Hey angel.. no sorry yaar... Hugs to you... Read whenever... at your ease.. Love your comments always.. so no worries... 😳 Thanks... enjoy this one too...😃

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Sonali

@adventure_gurl

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#87

awesome update Jess it was amazing!

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priya

@priya_cool_123

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#88

Beautiful !!!

The emotions well potrayed !!!

hats off !!!

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dishbhan

@dishbhan

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#89

Wow ... what an update dear!!!

Had tears in my eyes at one point, when Shaan broke down in her arms. Too emotionally saddening, but I guess once past this there will be better scenarios to come...

Her mom and his mom talking ... hmmm ...

lets see what the outcome is 😊

Please update soon.

~Cheers,
Dish

Edited by dishbhan - 14 years ago