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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sridevi27



Aah... girl, you need to read the one I posted last nite (well, technically at 3 in the morning) - I think I probably couldn't have written it at any other time of the day... and I was going to dedicate it to you (but I thought I would just PM you about that... but, hey here it is... ) 😉



thanks hun...love you for that..i have not had time for anything...
will read...probably tonight..
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Posted: 14 years ago
Ok Maestro , I have updated my comments for the previous update.. pasting it here for ur convenience 😊
Reserved!!!!!!!!! 😆😆
I am the 1st one to reserve and the last one among the regulars to comment!! Wah wah 😡😡
I have given my comments to u verbally, let me put it down in words..
I love how u described LIVING - he saw desire, deep inside a spark, that he has to turn it in to a flame, an inferno that will burn them up and eat them alive, but that would be living and he could not wait for that to happen.
Very true - love, desire and companionship does spark a flame in us which burns the candle of life even brigher than before... here lies the difference between living and existing.
In this episode - you showed playfulness, desire, concern and overall there were play of emotions that veer towards a positive note- I mean even Geet's senses are overwhelmed by passion and love and there was no snake slithering down her spine this time 😆😆....
I like the mark of possession -thats exactly how a deeply passionate soul would behave- I would want the entire world to know SHE is mine and I would want to stamp my mark on her!!
Now coming to the last update:
I loved the mirror scene - Though her mind was in tumult, her eyes and face showed a woman who was in love and revelled in being possessed by her lover!!
I am in love with ur analogies babe- truly - first ray of sun after a dark moonless night. wow- when the light of his life is in his arms, the darkness of fear, rejection vanish to be replaced with pure light of love!! I hope I got it right 😊..
Again butter under hot knife- For me this has a deeper meaning- yes he is hot for her but knife - again in giving in, she would be cutting herself and him to unbearable pain.. Which is better caving in or holding out!! What a quandry - again with few words , u just depicted so much more..
Each and every word that she thought was like thorns on tender skin for us, her agitation and love and agony was sooo clearly portrayed, her pain leaped from the page to our hearts.
Again here in lies the difference between her love and his ---> His giving is more visible, more tangible.. but hers is intangible.. as he does not know her past.
Such powerful writing Vroom.. Truthfully, I am not exaggerating.
Now I am going to compare the writings - U were building a crescendo, the candence moving higher and higher and then the previous update -- For me in shakespearean language- was a comic relief.. An interlude before the tempest!! So Vroom, ur writing was just perfect.. much ado about nothing 😆😆😆( And u know why I said that 😉)..
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Posted: 14 years ago
Ok Vru, I think you have been MIA long enough... Where's all the wishful thinking when we really need it??? Have you seen Friday's episode?? Now, that requires some of your imagination to act as a fill-in 😉
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Posted: 14 years ago

When the Doves Cry

He had been left with mixed feelings about last night. He had seen the signals. He knew he had read them right. He knew her eyes did not lie to him. Why were her lips? Why did she say that she cannot tolerate him near her? Was he the real reason that she wanted to go away? Was he the one keeping her from something that she wanted to do? Or was the hug right? It felt right. She felt right. She had melted in his arms. And he had found heaven. She had responded to him. Why did she hug him like that one minute and say those scathing words the next. His mind had run over and over with her words and he knew he needed the oblivion that drink would give him. He was not a drinker but today he needed the numbness that it brought. He needed to stop the pain, even if momentarily.

He had no recollection of how he landed in Geet's bed. He had another fantasy fulfilled when he found her on him this morning. Wet tendrils swept his face like morning dew. If only he had not drunk so much and had this massive hangover, he would have reacted differently. Today, his movements were sluggish and Geet had escaped his fantasy.

Before he could gather his thoughts, he found himself going behind her and on top the stairs and found not just Geet but Pari as well in the office.

He moved like a panther on a prowl, as he descended those steps, a wounded one who needed to lash out at his hunter. He had eyes only for her. He heard Pari absently and reacted to her words with a whiplash at Geet. He needed to. He needed her to know that even though one part of him told him to take her words at face value, he knew there was something deeper, something he knew in his guts was there but he could not catch the pulse.

He knew instinctively that he had hurt her somehow. He had heard her words but he had not registered them. He was still in shock at being proved wrong. Maan Singh Khurana was never wrong. He had to get to the bottom of this. He wanted Pari to vanish, in thin air, for all he cared. He dismissed her with few words.

Why did she cry? He mulled as he looked at her. Why is she crying still? He went up to her and stood close. He could not help himself. He needed to breathe in her essence. She moved back, a step and then two.

He drove his hands into his hair in frustration. "I am not going to hurt you!" he roared in anger. She looked pained nonetheless. She was much more to him to let a brush off from her make him withdraw. He knew he had lashed out in anger, his famous anger. He was sure; he had not fooled her when he deliberately jibed her. Or had he?

Geet spoke with a catch in her voice, "I am fine!"

Maan asked with concern laced with frustration, "Why are you crying? Why were you crying last night? I want to know Geet, what rights don't you have. I give you the right, Geet, to say what you feel, really feel. I can see it in your eyes. They don't lie to me. Why are you lying?"

"keh do Geet, Keh do, tumhein faraq padta hai. Mujhe pata hai. tumhein bhi pata hai. Tum kyon door rehna chahti ho mujhse." He hoarsely repeated.Translation - Tell me, Geet, Tell me that it makes a difference to you. I know it. You know it too. Why do you want to stay away?

Geet tried to turn, to run away from him but he held her wrist.

"Tum kab tak bhagogi Geet. Mujhse, apne aap se. Thak nahi gayee ho?" Maan asked irritated. "Tum kyon dekhna nahi chahti jo hai hamare beech,Ye ehsaas, jo tum mujhe deti ho, jo mein tumhein deta hoon. Ye kya hai Geet?" he questions. "Kyun mein tumhare nazdeek aata hoon, Kyon tum mujhe aane deti ho!" Translation - How long will you run Geet, from me, from yourself. Aren't you tired of running away? he asked irritated. "Why don't you want to see thing we have, this feeling, which you evoke in me, which i evoke in you. What is this feeling Geet? he questions. "Why do i want to come near you and why do you let me?"

She gapes. Does he know? Has he really seen it in her eyes? Has she not hidden it well enough? She knows she should stay away from him, but her feet refused to budge. She could see what she was doing to him, but she knew this pain was nothing, compared to what was in store. She knew it may be too late already but had to make the effort. She had to run away.

She answered with steel in her voice, "Tum nahi samjhoge Maan. Tumhein jis baat ka ilm nahi hai, tum uske baare mien kya samjhoge. Ek parchayee hoon mein, kyon bhag rahe ho mere peeche! Mein tumhein kuch nahi de sakti. Kuch nahin. Mujhe akela chor do." Translation - "you wont understand Maan. the things that you dont know about, how would you understand them. I am a shadow, stop chasing me. I have nothing to give you. nothing. leave me alone."

Maan fumes holding her shoulders, "Nahin. Aaj mein sach jaankar rahoonga. Aaj mein jaanana chahta hoon, kyon tum aisa keh rahi ho? Kya hai jo tumhein mujhse door rakhta hai?" Translation - No. Not today. I want answers today. i want to know, why are you saying this? what is it that keeps you away from me?"

"No, Maan, you won't be able to handle the truth. You don't want to know the truth." She averted telling him anything. She just started crying, sobbing her heart out.

Maan gathered her in him arms trying to placate her, soothe her, comfort her, but she felt like stone in his arms; rigid, inflexible standing in his arms without any response. He felt her tears on his shirt, seeping through to his heart.

She stood there for an eternity, drinking from his strength, to take his strength and move away. Far away. She looked up at him, through shimmering eyes, eyes that told him the truth. Eyes that told him he meant the world to her and it was right here in his arms that she wanted to stay.

He gathered her closer, hugging her to him. "Be with me Geet. Always." He asked her to promise him.

She smiled at him not answering but letting him know that how much ever she tried to run away from him, she always will run to him in the end.

When Doves Cry ' Prince - lyrics

Dig if u will the picture
Of u and I engaged in a kiss
The sweat of your body covers me
Can u my darling
Can u picture this?

Dream if u can a courtyard
An ocean of violets in bloom
Animals strike curious poses
They feel the heat
The heat between me and u

How can u just leave me standing?
Alone in a world that's so cold? (So cold)
Maybe I'm just 2 demanding
Maybe I'm just like my father 2 bold
Maybe you're just like my mother
She's never satisfied (She's never satisfied)
Why do we scream at each other
This is what it sounds like
When doves cry

Touch if u will my stomach
Feel how it trembles inside
You've got the butterflies all tied up
Don't make me chase u
Even doves have pride

How can u just leave me standing?
Alone in a world so cold? (World so cold)
Maybe I'm just 2 demanding
Maybe I'm just like my father 2 bold
Maybe you're just like my mother
She's never satisfied (She's never satisfied)
Why do we scream at each other
This is what it sounds like
When doves cry

How can u just leave me standing?
Alone in a world that's so cold? (A world that's so cold)
Maybe I'm just 2 demanding (Maybe, maybe I'm like my father)
Maybe I'm just like my father 2 bold (Ya know he's 2 bold)
Maybe you're just like my mother (Maybe you're just like my mother)
She's never satisfied (She's never, never satisfied)
Why do we scream at each other (Why do we scream, why)
This is what it sounds like

When doves cry
When doves cry (Doves cry, doves cry)
When doves cry (Doves cry, doves cry)

Don't Cry (Don't Cry)

When doves cry
When doves cry
When doves cry

When Doves cry (Doves cry, doves cry, doves cry
Don't cry
Darling don't cry
Don't cry
Don't cry
Don't don't cry

Edited by rushtrip - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Vrush - i hv no words... u describe scenes so well.... i really want to see maan asking her those questions.....
Loved the song.....
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Posted: 14 years ago


Simply beautiful......He know her love and comfort are with him..........maybe that will be enough for now??? I want Mann to have at least this sense of peace that she too feels the same way....she may not verbalize it.......and he will not know of her past for a while...........but he needs to dawdle in the feel of her and her love for him for a while!!

Woh to pani ki boond hai jo ankho se beh jaye,
Aansu to woh hai jo aankho mei hi reh jaye,
Woh pyar kya jo lafzo mei byaan ho,
Pyar to woh hai joa ankhoan main nazar aaye'.

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Posted: 14 years ago

Love is a battlefield

She wanted him to leave her alone. She wanted to go away. Well, she can have her wish, he thought, as he held her to him. She lied to him and he needed to catch her at her own game. He released her as she smiled at him. Letting her go was not easy but he knew if he had to make her admit with those lying lips of hers what she told with her eyes, he had to play her game.

He stepped back. "Theek hai." he muttered, "Tum jaao jahan jaana chahti ho. Kahan jaaogi Geet? Tum is shaher mein akeli ho. Aur tum hoshiyarpur bhi nahi jaa sakti. Wahan to Brij hai na tumhein marne ke liye!" he countered as an argument. "Okay" he muttered. "you go wherever you want to. Where will you go Geet? You are new to this city and alone. you cant go back to hoshiarpur. there's Brij there ready to kill you."

She recoiled at this change in behavior. He had just held her in his arms, as if he will never let go and now he wanted to push her away? Well, it was good for him. She nodded in agreement. But she wanted to get the Pari situation sorted.

"Maan, tum Pari ka kya karoge?" she asked tentatively. "Kuch nahin! Woh to mere liye naukri kar hi rahi hai. She will continue, jab tak Daadima theek nahi ho jaati." He answered evenly not letting her onto his plan. translation - Maan what will you do about Pari? she asked tentatively. "Nothing! She works for me. She will continue till Daadima does not recover completely."

He then went in search of Pari. Once he found her, she ranted at him for being rude to her and she did not like that he paid more attention to his secretary than her, who was supposed to be his "fiance". Maan made it amply clear to her that she was just doing a job and not to weave any fantasy about him. What happened between him and his secretary was none of her business. Pari did not like the tone and she had also realized that there was more between the boss and secretary than they let on. She could have cut the atmosphere with a knife this morning. She had seen that Maan seemed to have eyes only for her. She knew, her mission to get Maan was failing miserably and even if he wanted to make her his "fiancee" he was not falling into her plan of making him fall for her.

She knew it was time to cut her losses and move on. She told him as much that she was not ready to work for him.

Maan was happy with his plan working. Now the next step had to be put in motion. He went back to the office. He found Geet staring out of the window, looking as if she was trying to find the loophole in what he had said earlier.

He went up to her and asked, "where is Pari? Geet find her and tell her I want to talk to her. I had met her earlier and now want to discuss something further."

Geet looked unhappy with his request, but silently dialed Pari's number. Pari picked and Geet heard as she said something. Geet looked at Maan and then cut the call.

"What happened?" he queried innocently. Geet replied, "Woh to chali gayee wapis Mumbai Maan, bol rahi thi mein aise khadoos ke saath kaam nahi kar sakti, mujhe unki jhooti kya sachchi fiance bhi banaye to bhi nahi chahiye." Translation - She went back to mumbai, Maan, she was mumbling about how can she work with such a harsh man who never smiles, i dont even want to be a real fiancee let alone this charade he is paying me for. i thought i could change him but no."

Maan looked appropriately shocked and lamented, "Kya? Ab mein kya karoon? Meine to Daadima ko bol diya ki mein aaj hi unhein milwaaoonga unki bahu se!" "Geet, ab koi aur dhoodho larki aaj sham tak!" he demanded.Translation - What? Now what do i do? I just told Daadima that i would bring her daughter in law to meet her this evening. Geet, now go and find another one who work for me as a contract fiancee by this evening." he demanded.

"Mein?" she asked shocked. "mein kahan se laaon? Woh bhi char ghante mein? Nahin, nahin, ye mujhse nahi hoga, saara delhi to chaan mara mein pehle hi. Aap ne sab ko to reject kar diya. Ab aap hi sambhaliye Daadi ko. Unhe sacch bol dijiye ki koi nahi hai." she gave as an explanation.Translation - Me? she asked shocked "where will i find one? That too in four hours? No, no, I cant do that. You rejected all the girls in Delhi already. Now go handle Daadi yourself. go tell her the truth."

"Daadima, aur bimaar ho gayee to?" he quipped in mock horror. "Nahin, kuch to karna padega." He paced on the floor as if he was thinking of a plan. Geet joined behind him, trying to think of something. Just as she looked on the floor moving behind him step for step, he turned and almost bumped into her.Translation - What if Daadima falls even more ill? he quipped in mock horror. "No something must be done."

"Idea!" he interjected " tum" You.

"Mein? Mein kya Maan" she quizzed trying to unravel the mystery he was trying to create. Translation - Me? what me, Maan?

"tum kar sakti ho!" he looked as if the idea had some credence. Geet looked even more puzzled. Translation - "You can do it"

"Mein kya kar sakti hoon?" she interrogated frowning and getting tide bit annoyed at his delaying tactic. Translation - "What can I do?

"Tum ban sakti ho meri mangetaar!" He put light on his thoughts and as if the ideas seemed to make even more sense, he added "Daadima, tumhein pasand bhi karti hai," looking at her with the corner of an eye to see her reaction and she seemed to nod, finding agreement, he pushed, "tum perfect rahogi, na jhanjhat, na problem. Tumhein pata hai mein shaadi karna nahi chahta. Tum thodi acting kar loggi na, Geet?" he asked her as if he was just thinking if she can pull it off. Translation "You can become my fiancee!" "Daadima likes you already." "you will be perfect, no issues, no problems. You already know i dont want to get married. you can act a little, right Geet?"

Geet was speechless. He mouth gaped open, she said, "mein, woh'" me..uh...that.."

Maan not giving any inch, put a hand on her shoulder and said, "Good, to theek hai, mein Daadima se keh deta hoon, ki mein unki bahu ko unse milwane laa raha hoon." Translation - "Good, okay then, i am going to daadima to tell her that i will bring her bahu to meet her."

He said this, turned, gave a smile to himself and walked out of the office thinking to himself, "I will do everything Geet, everything to keep you near me. I have now understood what you don't want and what you want and I will beat you to your game."

Geet stunned at being made to agree to play his "fiance" just slumped in the chair nearby wondering if she will ever be able to go away from Maan. And if she stayed, will this pretense break her or lose control that was so thinly held anyway. She knew by agreeing she had opened herself to heartache but then even he will be hurt in the process, once the truth is out.

Love Is A Battlefield lyrics ' Pat Benatar


We are young
heartache to heartache we stand
No promises no demands
Love is a battlefield.


We are strong
no-one can tell us we're wrong
Searching our hearts for so long
Both of us knowing
Love is a battlefield.


You're begging me to go
then making me stay -
Why do you hurt me so bad?
It would help me to know
do I stand in your way
Or am I the best thing you've had?
Believe me
believe me
I can't tell you why


But I'm trapped by your love
and I'm chained to your side.
We are young
heartache to heartache we stand
no promises, no demads
love is a battlefeild

When I'm losing control
will you turn me away or touch me deep inside'
And when all this gets old
will it still feel the same?
There's no way this will die

But if we get much closer
I could lose control

And if your heart surrenders you'll need me to hold.
We are young
heartache to heartache we stand

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: deniac

Vrush - i hv no words... u describe scenes so well.... i really want to see maan asking her those questions.....

Loved the song.....



thanks gouri...

i try....hope they get answered..too..tho..looks like the CVs still want the romance to become a full fledged love affair..before any truth comes out...


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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: --Nargis--



Simply beautiful......He know her love and comfort are with him..........maybe that will be enough for now??? I want Mann to have at least this sense of peace that she too feels the same way....she may not verbalize it.......and he will not know of her past for a while...........but he needs to dawdle in the feel of her and her love for him for a while!!

Woh to pani ki boond hai jo ankho se beh jaye,
Aansu to woh hai jo aankho mei hi reh jaye,
Woh pyar kya jo lafzo mei byaan ho,
Pyar to woh hai joa ankhoan main nazar aaye'.



oh nags..so true... he sees it.. it knows..and yes she needs to let him know...some indication of what she feels..and may be if he knows she asked him to be put in her room so that he can be saved from daadi knowing about his binge..they say actions speak louder than words..she has seen his actions and knows...that he loves her..that why she stopped him from verbalising it for it would mean the ball has landed in her court and she will have to respond...

this way..she can..say things without saying a word...hope he starts understanding her actions better...and he did say..bas ek baar...mein sirf itna jaanana chahta hoon....

and yes..i think it will happen...the confession will be torn from her...
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Posted: 14 years ago
Just blown away .. floating away from my keyboard so i might not be away to type more ....
fab fab fab !!! thanks soooo much!!!
Uzma xx

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