Story CID under Fire

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

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Suhaani/Drilabh (CID/MJHT)

@Drilabh_Suhaani

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Posted: 15 years ago

Sunny, U tooooo gud yaar!!! Really a ⭐️ 👏 Lekin... just tell me, what does d last line, Acp's dialogue, mean? D Hindi....U know ,mere prob hote hai!! But u r really creative!!

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SAGNIKA

@Shagnika

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

Wonderful story yaar!! 👏 Different from all other stories! Had everything bit of suspense!! Last scene among the trio was wonderful!! Short simple yet touching! Really a wonderdul work!
The title is appropriate !! Wah wah.... Wonderdully written yaar! Thoda confusing tha at times... But the suspense was alive ay every moment!

Whatever doubts i had, i hav already pmed u abt them n got my ans!! 😉

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

This is what call Dhamaka 👏 Superb Logical, Emotionally written Story.. Every Scene is very well connected and well explained... No loops... This is the way I was expecting friday "CID Under Fire" to be.. i is a very well justic to title name.. mind blowing work yar.. Just keep it up!!! 👏

Edited by bhinder.kamboj - 15 years ago

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

Wow....good one yaar....much much better than the CID under fire that they showed.

And yeah....do write Theek instead of Dhik....it's a bit confusing.

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SAGNIKA

@Shagnika

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: visrom

Wow....good one yaar....much much better than the CID under fire that they showed.

And yeah....do write Theek instead of Dhik....it's a bit confusing.

Ya that dhik thing even i got confused for a sec! 😆Told u sunny, spellings!!!! 😉 (i suffe a lot from such typo mistakes!)

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

Next time will write taking care of spelling mistake. I just didn't get enough time packing up stuff leaving time so. will edit it soon.

Thanks everyone for liking it.

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neelambari

@Chiinnu

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

and finally i completed my mission....story is complete within half hour....so let me comment....the story was brilliant,with nice spark of suspense ,thrill and all...its one of the best stories in forum i ever read...good if you conc. more on situation description....its very imp. in thrillers...nice sketch,accurate chara arrangement,script can be more readable if you do not write 'scene' bec.it will carry the suspence away...write it without pause....am not a hindi wrtr but experienced reader....thats y i suggest....pls dont care if these r wrong....once again very well done....

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

^^ Did you find story lengthy?

Edited by sunnyp1414 - 15 years ago

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Ravi

@Jurassic_Shark

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#10

Great story, sunny! The plot was really well-built, I especially liked the illusion pic. 😃 This is what the official "CID Under Fire" should've been like. Great work.

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