'Qayenaat' a MaYur FF - Completed

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#421

Originally posted by: koolwaters_poo
awesum update yaar
yeh part padh ke achha laga bt nupur rana ka naam sunke pata nahi lyu lekin bimag me ghanti baj rahi hai........kuch to hai

Pooja...you're smart 😉

-Neela

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kirti123

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Posted: 15 years ago

#422

gr8 part but new nupur
hope we get the real nupur back
very nicely written
thanks for the pm
continue soon 😊

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#423

Originally posted by: myownarea
I found myself feeling slightly uncomfortable at the new nupur..i loved the new nupur, but somehow it created worry in my mind...what do u have in mind neela ? 😆 I wish i cud read ur mind...u write very well, needless to say :)

Divz..so you're having one hack of a combustion of various feelings..eyyy! uncomfortable yet you love the new Nupur??? So what are you worried about? Is it about the khichdi that is cooking in my mind or Nupur itself!! Wonder whats going in your mind 😆 But keep reading...I can see the various reactions from readers about N.Nupur. Dunno why anyone is thinking that Mayank will fall for her...or anyone at all. I mean look at the state of the poor dude...how can anyone think that he can replace his Nupur. I tell u yaar...yeh public hai na...yeh na jaane kya kya sochti hai 😆. anyways...lets see what happens!

-Neela

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Shivani

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Posted: 15 years ago

#424

LITERALLY SORRY OR LATE COMMENT

AND THE UPDATE

IT WAS AS USUAL AWESOME

DO CONTI.............SOON

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-SharNeela-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#425

~~~~~~~~~~Part 16: The Arrival~~~~~~~~~~~

Days pass by and Nupur and Shilpa get closer to each other everyday. Nupur often visits Shilpa aunty and spends a lot of time with her. They talk about girly staff and as much as Shilpa acts in an understanding, guiding motherly manner she is also very frank with Nupur and discusses typical day to day matters like movies, music, latest celebrity gossips. On the other hand, Nupur is finding the warmth and affection of a mother whom she has lost a while ago and loves every bit of the time she spends with her. Mayank, however, is quite oblivious of all this. When Nupur comes, Mayu is in uni and by the time he returns she has left. Also with the current phase he is going through, Shilpa doesn't get a scope or the right time to have this kind of light conversation with him where she can talk about Nupur. But one lovely morning, they meet…..again!

Nupur enters Mayu's house and starts screaming...
N: aunty!! auntyyyy….aap kahan ho!
S: arrre Nupur…itni subha subha!! khaiyriet??
N: aha..khaiyriet hi khaiyriet hai aunty. yeh dekhiye….

..she shows a dish

N: kitna zabardast halwa banaya hai humnain. ab jaldi se isse chakh ke batayye ke kaisa hua?
S: (smiles) to yeh baat hai! isi liye tapak gayi subhe subhe…kyun? koi aur nahi mila iss experiment k liye?
N: aur kahan jaaye aunty? aur yeh halwa banana to aap hi ne sikhaya hai humain…to guruji ko hi pehle bhog charhana chahiye na. (she joins both hands and bows her head down in a prayer mode) hey maatey…iss bhojan ko swikaar kijiye aur batayye aap ki shisshya ne kaisa banaya??
S: (slaps her back slightly) chal shararti larki…wahan table per rakhde aur naashta hamare saath hi karna aaj. main kitchen me hoon..tu ek kaam kar. zara Mayank ko bulaake ley aa
N: aunty hum bulaye? per woh to humain jaante bhi nahi…aise kaise…(she hesitates)
S: arre main tujhe usse bas bulaneko keh rahi hoon…issme jaan pehchan wali kya baat hai? aur tum log pehle to mil chuke na? to?? ab jaa meri maa..kitchen me kahi nashta na jal jaaye

Shilpa runs to the kitchen and Nupur starts walking towards Mayu's room. She knocks on the door…but no response. Again…she calls "excuse me… ahem ahem" but still no response. So she opens the door and for the first time sees his room…its a nice, big room with huge windows. Curtains are open and the bright sun is shining with all its glitters in this room. Nupur steps in and sees no one there. Soon she realises that although its a nicely furnished room but is very messy. There are clothes lying all over the room, the bed is undone, the furnitures have dust all over them. There are papers all over the floor..books thrown here and there. Paintings on the wall are partially hung. Suddenly, a bit of wind blows through the room and all the papers fly towards Nupur and touches her. She tries to hold onto them and picks some up. They are letters! The one in her hand is a letter written by a girl called Nupur! She picks another one…another letter from the same sender. Then there are a few sets of paper in the corner of the room about to be blown away by the wind..she picks them up and these seem to be a combination of letters written by Mayank for Nupur but have never been sent! Some of these are 'shayeri'. She starts reading them…

aankhon ko samjhaya bohat
k aashkon ko yun na bahaaya karo
tanhayi me saath do magar
mehfilon me na inhe laaya karo
aankhon ne kaha khata na koi meri…
yeh ilzaam na mujhpe lagaya karo
har chehre pe dekhte ho chehra unnka
aise to dil ko na rulaya karo

Then she picks up another one…

kisiki chahat ko intezar ka saza na mile
rooh se jism kabhi juda na mile
hum to khak hai.. mil jayenge mitti me
bas meri laash ka naam-o-nishaaN na mile

Nupur gets lost in the words and does not realise that Mayank is standing right behind her..

M: kaun hai aap?
N: (she snaps out of the trance and turns quickly towards Mayank) jee…hum hain
M: aap? yahan?? mere kamre me kya kar rahi hain?
N: woh hum…
M: (stops her) aur yeh aapke haathon me kya hai? (he snatches the papers from her hand and before she could say anything…he explodes on her). Himmat kaise hui aapki? ek to baghair ijaazat mere kamre me ghoons aayi aur phir hamare personal cheezon ko haath lagaya?
N: jee humnain darwaza khatkhataya tha per humain koi jawab nahi mila to…
M: jawab nahi mila to ander chali aayi? kiski marzi se? aur kyun? aur hamare kaghzon ko haath kyun lagaya (his voice goes up a notch)…aapko koi tameez hai ki bhi nahi!!

Nupur is literally in tears and tries to run out of the room when Shilpa enters the room and holds Nupur.

S: kya hua Mayu? itna chilla kyun raha hai?
M: maa yeh larki mere kamre me kaise aayi? in fact yeh hamare ghar me kaise aayi? kisne bulaya isse yahan per?
S: chup kar Mayu…isse maine bulaya hai. aur maine hi kaha tha tujhe nashte k liye bulakar laaye. to kya gunah hogaya issme?
M: maa yeh meri cheezon ko haath laga rahi thee! humain aise log bilkul pasand nahi jo doosron ki zyaati mamle me dakhal andaazi karte hai

Nupur can't hold it anymore and runs from his room. Shilpa gets really mad at Mayank

S: kya hogaya hai tujhe? ghar aaye mehmaan se kaise sulookh kiya jaata hai kya tujhe phir se sikhana parega mujhe?
M: maa aapne iss larki ko mere kamre me aane kyun diya?
S: ghalti hui mujhse…ab kya main maafi maangoo tujhse? iss ghar me meri koi izzat nahi kya? ab tere kamre me kisse kab bheju yeh bhi tujhse bataker karna parega mujhe? bol…
M: nahi maa…maine aisa nahi kaha. per woh anjaan larki aise hamare ghar me ghum phir rahi hai..
S: woh anjaan nahi hai. aur aaj yeh pehlibaar nahi jo woh hamare ghar me aayi hai. aaya din woh aati hai yahan per…maine usse apni beti ki tarha maana hai
M: beti? kab se?
S: jab se tu apni maa ko bhul gaya hai tab se. kabhi agar iss maa ki yaad aaye to usske paas aake do pal baith jaana

She rushes out of the room. After about an hour, Mayank comes to his mum and sits down on the floor holding her legs…

M: maa..mujhe maaf kar do. na jaane ghusse me aake maine tumhe kya kya keh diya. pata nahi mujhe aajkal kya hogaya hai. bas achanak se mood kharab hojata hai.
S: *sighs* maafi mujhse mat maang…jaake Nupur se maang. woh to teri kamre ki taraf jaana hi nahi chahti thee…woh to maine zabardasti ki kyun ki kitchen me khaana charha kar rakkha tha. bechari ne itne pyar se halwa banaker laayi thee…saath me nashta karna tha hum sab ne per teri iss harqat ne uss bechari ka dil tor diya. ab to main khud hi sharminda hogayi hoon…kaise nazrein milake baat karungi uss bacchi se
M: tum fiker mat karo maa. tumhare iss naakara bete ne jo ghalti ki usska bhugtaan bhi wohi karega. main jaaoonga tumhare Nupur ke paas…usse maafi maangoonga aur wapas usse iss ghar me ley aaoonga…thik hai na? (he gives that adorable childish smile to his mum)
S: (smiles back) mujhe tujhse yehi umeed thee beta.

Mayank puts his head on her lap and starts thinking! How on earth is he going to do what he just promised his mum. EIther way, he will have to do this to regain his mother's trust and respect. Mayank decides to meet Nupur in the evening after his return from university.

-Neela

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kulsumd

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Posted: 15 years ago

#426

haey neela di.

Update was Beautiful.

Nupur rana ki entry achi lagi..

Subah subah nupur.r ka mayu ke ghar aake s.a se halwa taste karne ke liye kehna khoob tha...

Kaafi dinaun baad kuch halki pulki scene padhne ko mili.

Phir nupur.r ka mayu ke kamre mein jaake mayu ka shayrana andaaz padhna aur phir mayu se daant khana thoda bura laga.

Par lakh lakh shukr hai mayu ko apni galti ka ehsaas hogaya...shilpa aunty ki alfaaz dard bhare aur sachai ki ek jhalak thi..ke unhe mayu ke haalat se kitni takleef pahunchi hogi.

Mayu ke royye mein choti si tabdeeli dil ko khush kargayi...lagta hai mayu ab ahista ahista apne dukh ki chadar se bhar nikalne ki taraf gaamzan hai...waise bhi qatre qatre se daryaa banta hai...

Ab bas yeh dekhna hai ke mayu nupur se kaise maafi maangta hai...umeed hai ke mayu aur nupur mein dosti ke phul khilenge aur usi phul ki khushbu mayank ko gam ke sukhe phul chodne par madad denge...

P.s:di aapke minimum 25 usool hochuke hai isiliye jaldi se update kijiye ga..

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-Summi-

Edited by kulsumd - 15 years ago

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afsha

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Posted: 15 years ago

#427

Nice update

Well i hate this 1 thg abt love is that jab log pyaar karte hai wo apne Maa baap ya gharwalo se ye nahi puchte ki hum pyaar kare ya nahi lekin jab Dil tooota hai to apna gussa apni nafrat gharwalo pe barsate hai jus hate that thg a lotttttttttttttt

Mayu forget that he has mother he forgot how to behave wit Guests

Mana that gal touched his letters but she didnt did that intentially

Par Mayank ko ye kaun samjhaye

Hop he asks for forgiveness soon frm her