MayUr FF: Rishtey Part 13 @ Page 143 - Page 15

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Posted: 15 years ago
awesome update..!!!
waiting for the next part..
cont soon..
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hey Daksha..
Nice part... lol imagine gangster Mayank trying to keep his mouth shut and talk normally.. haha.. but he did a good job in convincing Adi he is a good person... well done him..
Mayank only had Samrat in his baraat party? 😆
So finally the marriage is done but i am feelin bad for Nupur as she thinks this is gonna be real and she is gonna be happy little does she know she is part of a plan and nothing more.. yet..
Now the real story is gonna begin.. looking forward to it..
Continue soon.. 😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
nice one daksha...i hope mayank falls in luv vit her....looking forward to read d next part....😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
Great part Daksha ...

shaadi ho gayi....par aage kya .....

do cont soon yaar

luv
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Posted: 15 years ago
nice update daksha...... i hope nupur's love changes mayank into good.... do continue sooooooon......
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Posted: 15 years ago
story is getting even more interesting....loving it very much..totally different storyline..update soon. dear.looking forward to the progress.😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
waho!! this story is soo grasping .......the way u write so realistic..👏......Cant wait now😳....update soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hey....first of all really SORRY daksha for commenting so late dear.....

And my heartiest congratulations to u on your new FF dear......



I loved the concept dear.....😊

its amazing......very different n fresh....!!

loved CS......but I hate DD....😡


Mayank became a thug...cruel....but only because he's an orphan...and sufferings n pain made him so...😭

the VM is awesum....superb....i loved it !! the song n the scenes both were perfect.... n perfectly suits your concept !! 😉😉

loved both the parts.......😊

I hate Suhaani.....how rude n cruel is she...😡😡

woh Nupur ko bojh samajhti hai.....😭😭..... n bechari Nupur ghar ka saara kaam karti hai....😭

Mayank is really different here.....total tapori....😆

Ohh....mayank goes to marriage bureau......n likes Nupur's photo.....i knew it.....aakhir use nupur hi pasand aani thi....😉😉

loved Nupur-Adhiraj convo in second part.....it was lovely....very touching.....

I'm glad that atleast Adhiraj loves his sister....n is concerned about her....thats why he goes to meet Mayank.....

but bechara.....he doesn't know the truth about mayank's identity....😔

Nupur is really very innocent....n sweet yaar....😊

woh kitni khush hai..........but she doesn't know shaadi ke baad uske saath kya hone wala hai....😭

chalo....lets see...what happens next......

but you have written this FF very beautifully dear....n described Mayank's character...that of a gangster...fabulously....effortlessly......loved it !!

the updates were superb....brilliant.....mindblowing !! 👏👏👏👏

keep it up......👍🏼👍🏼

and update soon.....

love u...
varsha







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Posted: 15 years ago
Heyyyy daksha
Nice update
Do continue soon
N thanx for pm
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Posted: 15 years ago
"Aao bhabhi welcome to aapka ghar" Samrat said to Nupur who was walking quietly with her head down......Mayank was walking beside her....

Mayank then opened the lock of his flat and firstly Nupur entered into the house....Mayank was about to enter when Samrat pulled him.....Nupur turned and looked back.......

"Bhabhi abhi aate hain" Samrat said to Nupur and he pulled Mayank....

Before Nupur could speak up anything they were just moving out from the corridor....

Mayank and Samrat went out.......Nupur didn't spoke up anything but she just looked out of the door and then downed her face and moved inside the house.......

The house was new to her and she was a stranger to it.......she sneaked into every room....she always thought about a beautiful house like this.....a house where she can think of her family with her husband Mayank...... she was standing there all alone waiting in the empty house....she moved inside into a room thinking it to be Mayank's bedroom.....She placed her bag on one corner and moved out into the balcony enjoying the beautiful night of her wedding.....waiting for her groom.....

She then came inside and sat on the bed.....she was first sitting looking at the wall clock.....one hour passed she went out and quietly sneaked out from the door no one could be seen.....it was 12 in the midnight.....she was feeling uneasy in those heavy jewellery and lehnga... she came back to the room and removed those heavy necklace and then she pinned off her duppatta from her head........ she was just doing this when Mayank entered into the room.....Nupur became frightened and looked back.....

When she saw that it was Mayank she took a deep breath..... it was only Mayank on whom she can rely.... infact they still hadn't had a conversation but for a girl her husband is her whole world.... the moment he tied the mangalsutra round her neck they were tied together..... but she didn't knew what the fate has decided for her......

Mayank's eyes were red....he was drunk but he was able to control himself he was used to it.....he moved towards Nupur who was standing in front of him in her red choli and lehnga...... she was shy, looking down, trying to hide herself behind her hands....... Mayank stepped closer to her just staring at her attracted by her charm and beauty...... Nupur was feeling more awkward and she moved back a bit.....Mayank stepped closer to her..... and she was stopped by the almirah behind her......

She then looked up at Mayank's face very innocently and Mayank's hand slowly reached up to Nupur's arm...... A chill ran down her spine on Mayank's touch and in a moment Mayank's hand grasped her more tightly, more passionately...... Nupur looked at his face.....her husband was holding her.....his hand slowly reached to Nupur's back......Nupur was feeling very embarrassed......she tried to get away from Mayank's grip....but Mayank was grasping her very tightly.....

His hand slowly reached to Nupur's back.....and he slowly opened up the dori of Nupur's choli......

Nupur felt very uncomfortable within Mayank's hard grip......it was a complete different feeling for Nupur....she wasn't able to decide whether she should leave or should she be with Mayank......

She was blushing very hard as Mayank's hand was moving to and fro on Nupur's back..... Mayank slowly removed Nupur's hair from her shoulders and kissed on her collarbone......Nupur felt a deep shiver in her body and she got away from Mayank's grip blushing very hard......She moved away from Mayank towards the bed....... Mayank didn't liked Nupur's gesture.....he moved towards Nupur and Nupur moved back......Mayank came closer to her......Nupur moved back and was lugged by the bed behind her and fell on it........Mayank moved closer to her.......he removed his sherwaani.....his bare body showing his strong musceles was shining in the light......his charm cannot be resisited by anyone and for Nupur he was her husband.......she slowly tried to get up from the bed but Mayank in a moment was over her.......he held her tightly and started kissing her........Nupur committed herself to Mayank, her husband...... but for Mayank, nothing mattered about marriage......for him Nupur was a girl who was on bed with her that night.......

Next morning.....

Nupur opened up her eyes when sunlight striked on her face......she placed her hand by her side searching for Mayank but he wasn't there......she got up and looked everywhere but Mayank couldn't be seen anywhere......she then went to the bathroom to take a bath...... she wore a sari and placed sindoor in her maang and came to the kitchen......

She opened up the refrigerator and it was stinking badly......filled with rotten food......she firstly closed the refrigerator making a bad face and then she searched for something to cook for the breakfast.....but there was not even a single raw material in the house.....only empty bottles of alcohol could be found.....

She came out of the kitchen to look for something......then only Mayank arrived back to the house.....seeing Nupur he placed the gun to the back of the jeans which he was holding in his hands......

Nupur smiled seeing Mayank.....before she could say anything....

Mayank said "Tu yahaan kya kar rahi hai" and he saw the empty bottles of alcohol in her hand.......

Nupur lifted them up to show them to Mayank "Ye..... wo.... wahaan"

Mayank then snatched them from her hand and started placing them in an empty cartoon......

Nupur firstly was looking at Mayank and then she interrupted "Aap...khaana nahin khaate kya"

Mayank turned and looked at Nupur with his furious eyes and asked "Kyun"

Nupur became a bit afraid from his looks and then she said "Yahaan khaane ke liye kuch bhi nahin hai"

Mayank then said "Wo.....ap...(apun)..mera matlab main aur Samrat bahar hi kha lete hain ghar mein koi nahin hai jisse khaana banana aata ho......tere ko jo khaane ka ho bol main abhi lekar aata hoon"

Then Nupur said "Aap aisa karo kuch aata, dal, sabzi, chaawal le aao bazaar se......ab se main khaana bana diya karungi ghar pe" saying this she looked down and blushed.....

Mayank looked at her astonishingly and then he moved out of the house......

Then Nupur closing her nose with one hand opened the refrigerator.....she then threw all the stuff in the dustbin and cleaned the refrigerator......managed the dining table........

Till then Mayank brought the food material from the market and gave it to Nupur.......

"Aap dus minute ruko..... main abhi kuch banaati hoon" Nupur said while taking the bags from Mayank's hand.....

She took the bags and went to the kitchen..... Mayank sat on the chair and dialled the phone to Samrat.....

S: Abe teri shaadi ho gayi hai tab bhi tujhe chain nahin hai.....

M: Tu chup baith....ye ladki toh kuch zyaada hi acche se baat karti hai......mera dimaag kharaab ho raha hai tu yahaan aa jaa......

S: Abe main kyun aaun.....

M: Bhook lag rahi hai....

S: Haan

M: Aaja.....wo khaana bana rahi hai.....

S: Abe kya keh raha hai.....khaana........ teri toh lag gayi....ab roz uss sade huye dhaabe ka khaana nahin paayega.......tu ruk main abhi aata hoon......

Samrat got up and came to Mayank's house in few minutes......

Nupur was serving the breakfast to Mayank.....

Samrat entered and said "Mere bina hi khaana khaana churu kar diya"

Nupur smiled looking at Samrat and placed another plate on the table and served the breakfast.....

Mayank said "Aa baith"

Samrat sat and started eating......the food was very tasty......

"Waah bhabhi kya khaana banati ho" Samrat said while licking his fingers "Mazaa aa gaya"

Nupur smiled on getting a compliment but she was waiting for someone else's comment but Mayank was busy in eating the food......Samrat looked at Mayank and hitted him with his elbow and mouthed to say something to Nupur....Mayank looked at Samrat and then at his plate and then looked at Nupur and said "Accha bana hai"

Nupur smiled on hearing those two words of praise from Mayank's mouth....

They haven't still finished the food when a phone call came on Mayank's cell......

He picked up the phone and responded to the call "Abhi aa raha hoon....haan Samrat bhi....bas paanch minute mein aa rahe hain"

Samrat looked at Mayank.....then Mayank said "Chal zaroori kaam hai"

They immediately got up from the table and left the food as it is......before Nupur could ask anything that where were they going......they were at the door...

Mayank looked at Nupur and just said "Zyaada bahar ghoomne ki zaroorat nahin hai....darwaaza band karke rakhna" and he banged the door hardly....

Nupur was dazed by the banging of the door and she stood still looking at the close door.......

Please tell me how you liked the part... only I know how I wrote this part....I was red writing this update.....
Please comment/criticise..... your views really help me to write better....do give your comments
Edited by .Daksha. - 15 years ago

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