Story:Target CID -II by visrom

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cadbury123

@cadbury123

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Posted: 15 years ago

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prabha.

@prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

You are back!!!! Fantastic. Enjoyed this story, completely. WOW Daya Sir is just superb. Totally in character just like how I see him. There is nothing wrong with the flow, it is not dragging at all. It is awesome. No Taarika, No Forensic, No Faltu Comedy, Edge of the seat stuff, Fantastic. I like how you have mentioned small small incidents from previous cases.

What an episode this would make with our CID Team, I would love to see it.

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cid_rocks

@cid_rocks

Beginner

Posted: 15 years ago

Innovtive story Thank god no Murder but ending was too quick.

End did'nt had the narrative aspect.

Otherwise Wonderfull

👏👏👍🏼

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prabha.

@prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

I love this part the most, Daya Sir's dilemma beautifully expressed.

Originally posted by: cadbury123
Daya sits on a bench, elbows on knees and holds his head with both hands...this had never happened. Everyone gone...never felt so lonely before. Not even when he was kidnapped and put in a glass chamber, because at that time he knew the others were safe. That was a comforting thought. But this time - he was safe and the others' safety was in his hands. One wrong step and...the worst could happen. And how could he save them? By smuggling drugs into the country? What a repelling thought!!! What else could he do? And what would happen if he did it? His colleagues would be saved. And then he would surrender and go to jail for the rest of his life. After all these years of dedicated service...it had to end this way. What would ACP say? Maybe he would think that their lives shouldn't be saved at the cost of breaking the law. What would Abhijit say? He would understand and so would Fredricks.

And what if he did the dirty work and they didn't release them? He could think about that later. For now, he made up his mind.

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

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Posted: 15 years ago

lovely liked every bit of it every scene was just superb Daya sir's dilemma potrayed beautifully waiting to read more from you.Liked this idea of yours giving importance to one CID officer and making him do everything is quite new and the way Daya transports guns to them is so new Abhijeet may have never thought that his aloo alergy would be so useful.hoping to read many more from you keep up the excellent work 👍🏼 👏

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

Excellently written and Daya sir character was superbly written and expressed in your writing. I really enjoy reading it.👏

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Purnima

@-purnima-

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Posted: 15 years ago

👏 👏 👏awesome ..... & gripping story....
daya sir throughout the story rocked......
😃 😃

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prabha.

@prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: didobhav
Liked this idea of yours giving importance to one CID officer and making him do everything is quite new

Me too like the same. Vivek is done, now Daya Sir too. Can't wait to see what you do with Abhi Sir, an Abhijit Centric story from you would be awesome.

Edit: How did I forget to mention this. A BIG THANK YOU for no injuries. Could not imagine Abhi Sir, even Daya Sir on the hospital bed any more. Good you kept all of them safe that way.

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SAGNIKA

@Shagnika

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Posted: 15 years ago

👏Well done!! really a very nicely written story...very different from all other stories..

😊I really liked the last line of the story, where ACP tells that Abhijeet had told them not to have "alu"...shows how well Abhijeet and Daya know each other!! 😃

Also the part in the mall where Daya gives a faint smile on remembering the times when Abhijeet asked for " Alu chaat without Alu"!!

Really liked Daya throughout the story...a Daya centric episode! Anyways, keep up the good work..waiting for ur next!⭐️👏😊

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Ravi

@Jurassic_Shark

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Posted: 15 years ago

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Excellent work! Really enjoyed it. The characters were all aptly written and suspense very well built up. I could almost visualise it all happening. Wish the official CID creative team gave us episodes with quality writing like this.

Keep it up! 👍🏼 👏