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Posted: 15 years ago

Yipppee...

pls update soon... its past 21
and no problem...its a pleasure reading...
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Posted: 15 years ago

You guys are the best! Already Page 22 in 24 hours. Seems like you were desperate to know what happened next. I just came home from the library so didn't get to post on Page 22. So sorry about that! But here is the last part. Just the way you all requested, nice and romantic. Hope to read another four pages of comments for this one.

p.s. 1: Sorry to everyone who asked for a pm and I didn't. This time I remembered to pm you.
p.s. 2: I have NOT forgotten about my FF::Yaadein:: It's just that I am trying to sort out what I want to write before I actually began. I will try to post once I get it all sorted out.
p.s. 3: If you can, then just make me your buddy list so that I don't forget to pm you.
Thanks! And here's the last part. Hope you all enjoy it!
Tu Hi Re III

For some odd reason, he felt himself approaching her. He watched her intensely and she mixed the contents in the pan. The delicious smell almost made her his stomach growl.

But she suddenly coughed upon adding some chili powder into the rajma. Her cough got him out of his passion filled world and he found himself filling up a glass of water for her.

::

Hearing his footsteps, she turned around. She found him holding out a glass of water to her. His eyes filled with concern and his other hand resting on her shoulder.

"Heer paani pilo." Prem told her.

Heer drank the water and a quick relief ran through her upon seeing his face. She smiled at him.

"Aap kab aaye Prem?" Heer asked with a smile.

"Woh, mai kuch dair pehle aaya." Prem placed the glass aside.

"Aap fresh hoke aayiye, tab tak mai khana ready rakti hu." Heer said. Thank god she was quick enough. Prem had a perfect timing. Prem obliged to it and went to freshen up.

After freshening up, Prem came out of the bathroom and entered his lavish room. He saw that Heer had already brought his dinner up for him. Just the way he liked it. Even though he was in no mood of eating anything, he made his way towards his angel. Heer saw him and gave him a smile.

"Aapka presentation kaisa tha?" Heer asked politely.

Prem settled himself across from her on the sofa that was next to the balcony.

"Bahot accha. Deal bhi mil gayi aur teen aur project ke liye deal bhi sign karli." Prem said.

Heer was really happy to know about her husband's success.

They both ate their dinner together as always. After they were finished, Heer took the dishes downstairs and Prem changed into a casual night time t-shirt and track pants.

::

After cleaning up the dishes, she went back upstairs. But upon entering the room, she was surprised to see Prem standing in the balcony and glancing up at the stars. She walked up to him and stood besides him, glancing at the stars.

They stood there in silence until Prem spoke up.

"Heer. Mai tumse kuch kehna chata hu." Prem let out a sign after saying that.

Upon hearing his voice, she had her full attention on him.

"Kya Prem?" Heer asked him softly, her eyes looking at him. Prem, remain in his same position, looking at the stars in the dark night sky.

"Mai kissi se pyar karta hu." He said it and then it was drop dead silence. He brought his eyes over to her beautiful face and watched her.

Her eyes were like a mirror for him. He could clearly see the pain that his words caused her. His eyes then fell on her lips which were curved into a smile. She was smiling at him but he could see that her heart was crying.

"Yeh toh bahot acchi baat hai." Heer managed to say. A lump had formed in her throat and her eyes were burning in the fear of losing her Prem. But she was happy. Just because he was happy with his new found love.

Prem smiled at her. Deep down, he could feel the questions running around in her head. Unable to see her like that, he switched his gaze back to the dark sky and stared at the glittering stars.

"Mujhe pata hi nahi chala ke mai usse kab pyar karne laga. Uska saaf dil mere dil ko chu gaga. She is the most beautiful girl I have ever seen." Prem said with a smile.

Heer watched his face. He looked so happy. She could sense the true love that he felt for the girl. For as long as she has known him, she thought that at least one day he would accept her as his wife. But maybe he was destined for someone else. Maybe she didn't try hard enough to achieve his love.

"Usse jab bhi dekhta hu, toh aakhen bhar jaati hai. Uske kareeb jab jaata hu toh man karta hai ke usse hamesha ke liye apne paas rakhu. Usse jab chuta hu tab aisa lagta hai ke dil ka adhurapan mit jaata hai."

Each word that came out of his mouth was heartfelt. He felt exactly this way for her, for the girl he loved so so much.

Heer felt the tears trail down her soft cheek. But she quickly wiped them away so that he doesn't notice it. She tried to say something to him but he seemed so lost in thoughts that she decided to leave him alone.

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She turned around to leave him alone and to make sure that she composes herself. She didn't want to breakdown right in front of him. She loved him and she was happy for him. But that didn't mean that she didn't feel hurt. All this time, she tried to gain the love from him. A few times, she thought the he loved her. But still she didn't let her hopes high.

Hearing him confess his love for someone else was a stab in the heart.

She took a step to go inside from the balcony. But before she could go, she felt her wrist being gripped. Of course she knew who it was.

She quickly wiped her tears away and plastered a sweet smile on her face. She turned around to look at him. He was staring at her intensely. But when she saw the serious look on his face, her smile faded. Before she knew it, he gently pushed her against the wall on the extreme right of the balcony.

Heer had never seen Prem like this. He was always smiling at her. But the seriousness was frightening her.

Prem looked into her tearful eyes. Tears instantly brimmed up in his eyes. His face was just inches away from her.

"Kya hua Heer?" Prem whispered to her.

Heer tried to blink back her tears.

"Heer, mai chata hu ke tum us ladki se milo." Prem said. Heer looked at him in a surprised way.

Prem gently pulled her inside the room to make her meet the girl he was in love with. Heer was completely shocked to know that he was taking her to meet the girl that he loved. She continuously kept wiping the tears that uncontrollably sprinted down her cheek.

Prem pulled her infront of the dresser and stood behind her. Heer stared at their reflection in the mirror. She looked at Prem. He pointed towards her reflection in the mirror.

"Yeh hai wo ladki jisse me pyar karta hu." Prem said with a smile.

Heer looked at herself for over a minute. She was trying to seep in what he had just declared in front of her.

He came closer to her and rested his cheek against her forehead.

"Mai tumse bahot pyar karta hu Heer." Prem confessed. He saw the tears that kept escaping her eyes and pierced his heart.

Prem turned her around gently and cupped her face in his hands. Her eyes were closed and she couldn't stop her silent crying.

"Please Heer. Stop crying. I can't stand it." Prem never wanted her to cry like this.

She raised her gaze to look at him. The love that she was witnessing in his eyes was for her. She couldn't believe it!

Before she could react, she felt his lips kissing her tears away. She slowly closed her eyes and lived the moment. One of his hands wrapped around her slender waist while he caressed her cheek with the other hand.

After a second or two, he pulled out to see her calm. That's when his glance fell on the clock. It was exactly one minute before their two year wedding anniversary. He saw her open her eyes and looked at him. He smiled at her and reached into his pocket. He pulled out a small heart shaped, velvet box and handed it to her. Heer smiled at him and took it. She gently opened the box.

It was a heart shaped diamond ring that Prem had gotten for her the day he knew that he was in love with his Heer. But he never got the courage to tell her. Prem took the ring and slipped it into her finger. He pulled her closer to himself and softly wished her.

"Happy Second Wedding Anniversary Heer!" Prem whispered. His lips were near her ear.

She was amazed to know that he remembered. Her heart found no bounds to the joy that she felt at the moment.

"I love you Prem." She whispered. His sweetness was making her feel like jelly.

"I know Heer." Prem said. He walked forward towards the bed while Heer walked backward. The entire time, he had his hand wrapped around her waist and their eyes were completely drowned in love.

Before she knew it, she fell back onto the bed and Prem fell right on top of her. Prem smiled at her, his naughtiness clearly glittering in his eyes. Heer couldn't make herself believe that this was really happening.

He couldn't control himself anymore. This was the limit. He gently took out the clip that held her silky hair. His lips placed a gentle kiss on her forehead. His right hand slid beneath her velvety saree and caressed her stomach. The fingers on his left hand traced all the way up to her shoulder and unpinned the pleats of the saree.

He kissed her cheeks and trailed his lips down her fragile throat. He sensed her shiver under his touch. But he couldn't get enough of her. His fingers unfolded the pleats and he slid down the saree to expose her body. He felt her fingers grip his arm tightly while her other hand pulled on the sheets.

He saw her lips quiver in desperation. That was it. He completely lost it. He molded his lips over her soft lip and kissed her passionately. His desire for her increasing every second. She completely surrendered herself to his love. Their consummation was natural and pure. It was full on sincerity, full of honesty, full of abundant love.

At last he fulfilled the promise that he made to his brother as well as himself. Their life would start afresh.

They became one for the society two years ago but today, they became one in front of God.

Desperately waiting to read comments!!!

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Posted: 15 years ago

that was soooo cute................first i got angry on prem for saying all those things to heer......couldn't he have chosen a better way to express his feelings to her than making her cry?............preet is sooo adorable....i could just imagine him asking prem all those questions with an innocent face........he too like his brother loves his heer tooo much........towards the end i was blushing like hell.......my sis is asking me why i am grinning like a fool sitting in front of the computer....now how can i say her what i am reading and y i am blushing like an idiot here.............do write more parts for this pls.........make it extra hot...............😳 😳iknow ki am asking for more naughtiness from prem but i can't help it...........😳😳....do continue soon.....thanks for the pm...........

Edited by sweetanu2314 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
heyy Kali,
oh myy goodness!!!!!! this was one of the bestest OS i've ever read!!!! i'm serious!!! and i seriously wish u'd extend this into more parts....altho i know u gave this OS a well deserved and perfect ending......but i'd love to read more!!!! i simply adores the concept of their choti si family, and pre and heer's love towards each other!!
the reason behind prem not believing in love was soo realistic!! and preet was just the cutest thing ever!!!!!!
amazingg OS!!!!! in fact i have been a fan of all ur OS, but this one beats all records!!!! u shud really consider writing an SS or an FF...i would definitely love to read one!!!!
brilliant story, brilliantly described...and simply perfect over all!!
i am truly speechless!!!!! i was soo angry after i saw part two tht i read it at least five times hoping for part 3 to be posted sooner! :P
thanks for the pm
and please keep me posted whenever u write more!
loveee
Samra :) <3
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Posted: 15 years ago
That was beautifully written 👏👏👏
Loved the ending line
Thanx for the PM
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Posted: 15 years ago

Hey, awesomeeeeeeee update!!!

Loved the whole piece!!!.....
-Luv Pari
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Posted: 15 years ago
heyy!!!
omgosh kali!!! you left me speechless once again! the update was just amazing, superb, outstanding!!!!! it was simply perfect...yaay! he confessed to her....haii premeer are just perfect! (no doubt about it!) i can't believe that it's over....i luved this OS soo much! premeer and preet were soo cute! and preet was tooo adorable! pleasee continue soon...i'm a big fan of your writing!😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
AWWWWWW.... that was shhhooooo shhhwwwweeeetttt....
I was smiling as Prem was playing with heer and unintentionally hurting her by saying he liked some1...
but i could feel the prem...
Very romantic update...
Thnks for this OS...
Yes. please continue with Yaadein... waiting for it...
Thnks again :)
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Posted: 15 years ago
tht was sweet........1st he made her cry thn wiped those with his lips.............
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Posted: 15 years ago
awesome update again. Totally enjoyed reading it. It was full of romance and sadness.

Thanx alot for the PM. Will be waiting for more OSS

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