Heaven in Hell (AR FF) pt 2 pg 13 20/8

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Hello people'.i am back with another ff'I know I have two ff still going and I do update on time😛'anyways I am not here to talk about them..i am here to share with you my third ff'as lucky is about to be finished in few parts' i took a break today and as it's so hot outside with nowhere to go.. so what better way than to write something'

So here's the intro'hope you all will enjoy it'

Intro

"Good girls go to heaven bad girls go everywhere"


I don't know what should I call myself..good or bad'I mean am I good enough to go to heaven or bad enough to go anywhere I want'looking back at the past 10 yrs..i can say I did everything which according to "normal people" differentiate from other girls of my age'it started with pick pocketing..i was 11 at that time..you can say it was my first task..my first assignment'my so called was dad was so proud of me..although I knew that he never really loved me ..coz for him I was just a hen which lays golden eggs' "sona ka anda dene wali murgi"'but still I wanted to keep him happy coz he took me with him when my real dad threw me out of the house'till the time my mom was alive my real dad used to love me to the core which you all can say was fake and it changed as soon as she died 'as my mom used to run the house he had no other option but to love me..but I guess destiny had some other plans for me'so the day she died the real me also died'he threw me out'I was just 9 'but then he came into my life..and my whole life changed'he gave me a house to live'food to eat..clothes to wear' what more could I asked for'and in return I did whatever he asked me too'for 1 year he taught me everything..and when he felt that I was ready..i was given my first assignment' I got ready with a sense of nervousness as well as excitement'I looked at the man he was in his mid 50s.. Composing myself I moved closer to him as I felt my heart beating faster'I stood closer to him and next thing I know I had his purse in my hand.. I felt so proud of myself .. I had successfully completed my first assignment'as soon as I gave dad the purse he took out a 500 rupee note and gave it to me as my prize'my first salary'I was so happy that day..i took the note danced, sang'jumped with joy'but could never spend it'I believed it was my lucky charm'every person has some kind of lucky charm and I am no different..so it is my lucky charm and is still with me'.

But that was just the start'the beginning'and from that day onwards I did everything..Sometimes he wanted me to and sometimes coz I needed the money'I pick pocketed..robbed people at knife point'as I am scared of pistols'don't know why?... even sold drugs'and if that wasn't enough I even worked as an escort for sometime'as I needed money to buy drugs..i was a drug addict'but it all changed one day..day when I saw him for the first time'I was returning home from work'I opened the door to see him killing my dad'he fired shots after shots as I stood rooted to the spot'looking at him brutally murdering him' I was so scared that even after opening my mouth I couldn't scream'and when he wasn't satisfied he took out the knife as I heard my dad voice for the last time' he turned and saw me standing at the door'I could just see his eyes as he was wearing a mask'those big blue eyes'there was something about his eyes'couldn't figure out that time.. I looked at his face to see him approaching '.i looked at his hand holding the knife which was covered with blood'seeing him running towards me I ran as I could but he got hold of me'and pinned me against the wall'I closed my eyes as i was scared to death'as I felt his hand on my mouth'hearing the police siren I tried releasing myself but the more I tried the more he tightened his grip'.not feeling anything after few seconds.. I opened my eyes to see him staring at me..his one hand on my waist and the other holding the knife'

"please leave me'" I whispered as tears rolled down my eyes'.my body trembling as I was fully drenched with sweat...i was even finding it difficult to breathe...

"sorry baby..but I have to kill you'." He whispered coming closer to me'this was the first time I heard his voice'. I felt the knife on my stomach'closing my eyes I prayed to god as I felt his hand moving on my arms'which slowly trailed to my neck'then to my lips'.breathing heavily I opened my for the last time to see him taking out the pistol from his pocket'..

"Noooooo''" I shouted closing my eyes as I saw not one or two but three fire shots'not feeling anything I opened my eyes as I saw the police standing at the door'I looked around but he was no were in sight 'and the last thing I know' the police running towards me as I slowly slid down the wall and closed my eyes'.

It's been two weeks since that incident happened and from that day I am locked in this room.'when I opened my eyes I saw doctors looking at me'talking between themselves with machines attached to my body'I tried moving but I was too weak to even move my hand'gaining some conscious I tried hearing them but all I could hear was "sir make sure no one enters the room..we need her'"' I had no idea why they were saying this' I tried asking the nurse but all I could hear was "mam please take rest'"'.the police officials used to come to my room and question me for hours and I even cooperated them..i told them whatever I knew..but still not satisfied they used to torture me ..i was living in a hell'but when day I heard his name..the guy who killed my father and that day I realized why I was locked here'.i was nothing but a bait for them'they had locked me here coz they wanted to grab him...my dad had told me about him..he is nothing but a cold blooded murderer'having no emotions..he is known as the "king" of the bad world' and how much the police tries I know that my end is near'and if my calculation is correct tomorrow is my last day'.

End Of Intro'

So people this was the intro'it may not be up to the mark as i am still an amateur as compared to the other wonderful writers'.but still tried 'experimenting with different ideas whenever I am free.

Feel free to criticize'I haven't tied you guys😆'

If you feel this is a "not so good" ff .. not upto the mark..then it's my sincere request please do tell me' I'll just shut this down'as it takes time to type the story'

stopping my small speech....before my net hangs again..and have to catch up with my sleep too...

Will be waiting for you response'

Loads of love..

Caramel'.


Index

part1 :page 5

part2:page 13

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gujunpyo thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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😲..quite a unique intro...lovet it..very interesting..cont soon...pm me...😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Caramel,
The intro is really nice, the concept is really different.
And I loved it.
I am really looking forward for the next parts.
So I guess the guy is Armaan and the girl is Ridhima.
Please continue soon and if possible do PM me.

Luv u<333
Kashish
Edited by kashishk - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Heya..
that seemed like a perfect start..
SO many questions nd so much more to know..
I'm looking forward to the updates..
how can you say you've not tied us..
You've tied us to ur fantastic FFs..

Plz update ur other New FF soon too..

Rucha
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Posted: 16 years ago
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WOW this waz a really wonderful intro...
dear do continue and plz pm if u can thanx- misha =]
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hey its really nice
n hav a very gud intro
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wooooow amezing intro really good plss continue sooon
pls pm me
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wow great start..
a very different concept and liking it soo far.. i cant wait till u continue..
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loved the intro soooooooo pls add me to the pm list of this ff pls
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hey cont soon n gr8 concept! plz PM me!

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