if wishes were horses ... a one shot

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Gyatri grabbed heer by her arm and dragged her outside the house,heer was dumb founded unable to believe that gyatri had just accussed her of having an affair with rajveer infront of the entire family. No one was able to say a word in her defense because gyatri had showed them the reciept of the hotel room heer and rajveer had booked. Heer was too shocked that gyatri could do this that she couldn't utter a word.

Gyatri threw heer out of the house, it was raining heavily. Heer just lay on ground too astonished to even move. After what seemed like eternity she got up looking lost and started walking in the dark towards a destination unknown.

Prem returned home next morning from a meeting, tired he went straight to his room to be with his angel, his heer. He was a little angry at her as she had not responded his calls last night. For some reason Prem had felt restless about her and so he had tried calling her last night to check if everything is fine but she had not responded.when he called at home number maaa had told him heer is not at home and that she had gone out with rajveer.

As prem walked into his room and saw it empty his restlessness grew many folds. Heer heer heer he called her name several times, little did he know she was no longer there to respond to her love's call.

It was still 7 am in the morning, where could she have gone this early? He ran downstairs to look for her only to find gyatri in the living room. Maaa where is heer? And what gyatri told him shook his world. He looked at his mother in utter disbelief ... He could not believe it was his mother, his god who had done this to his love, his life.

Wothout saying a word taking the car keys, prem ran outside frantically to go search for his heer, his life cord, a piece of his heart.

Six months later:

Its been six months since prem has been looking for her, he had looked every where possible for her but had no luck so far. His life it seemed had come to a stop, his smile had disappeared forever, he felt as if his heart beat was no longer there. He still fulfilled his responsibilities as a son but for him his life had come to a stop that dreadful day.

Prem walked into the asharam he had been supporting for 2 years, they wanted him to visit as everyone in the asharam wanted to meet their savior. Prem although never liked this but something in his heart told him he has to be there.

He was greeted by the staff and residents of the asharam, prem felt restless, his eyes were looking around as if searching for someone, he was himself surprised unable to understand his feeling.

After the small ceremony organised in his honor he thanked everyone and turned to leave.

As he looked up after putting the car key in the door lock to open it... he froze. He could not believe his eyes when he saw her sitting in the small asharam garden. He has had illusions of heer several times in the past ... Could this be one he thought? He closed his eyes and opened them again only to find her still sitting there. Can he believe it? Is she really there, he thoguht? With heavy feer he started walking towards her slowly scared that this time too it would turn out to be his illusion. But when he put his hand on her shoulder he knew this was no illusion she was for real... His heer was finally infront of his eyes. Prem knelt down to sit infront of her ... He cupped her face and said heer in that typical husky way. There was no reaction from her, her eyes looked dead ... Prem was taken a back ... But he continued nonetheless. Heer why did you leave me? Why did you not call me? Did you think I won't believe you? You could have atleast waited? Why heer why did you do it? Prem was now intears he hugged heer and cried uncontrolably.

Heer still didn't react, prem was now frantic he grabbed her by her shoulders and shook her, say something heer are you so mad at me that you won't even talk to me? No reaction still

That is when the caretaker of the asharam, who had witnessed the scene spoke up. You know her? Yes, she is my wife, my love, prem answered back still in tears.

We found her, six months ago, she had been hit by a car injuring her a little. We brought her here but since that day she has not spoken a word ... The doctor told us she has gone in shock due to the accident ... They tried everything to bring her out of it but so far she has not responded... Prem listened to the old lady absorbing every thing she just told him while not taking his eyes of heer even for a moment, he was afraid if he did, she would be gone again.

It is very important for her to come out of the shock as she will be entering the last three months of her pregnancy it can be harmful for the kid.

Pregnant? That is when prem looked down at her stomach and saw the bulge ... He hugged her again and just cried. Prem knew the shock was not due to the accident, it was because of what maaa did to her. He felt immense pain just thinking about what heer had to put up with. Heer I am sorry, I couldn't take care of you, forigve me please, he said cupping her face that is when he saw a lone tear roll down from her dead eyes. Prem picked up the tear with his finger, closed his fist and held it close to his heart, silently promising himself that he would never let her go away now.

Note:so I am again on the road traveling back home sighs I am begining to hate road travels. I was bored and am still in a shock that they are going for a 5 year leap, I mean five year? Why can't they show it to be six months ??? Why why why there are 100 different scenarios to make the story beautiful even after that... But kher who can convince bt they like doing things in their typical way but we can dream can't we?

Oh and this is my first ever piece of writing, I have never written anything except few articles during college and internship time so bear with it... I never thought I can write but the things premeer make you do sighs... Oh and I typed it on my black berry can't reread so sorry for all gramatical and language mistakes..... I named it if wishes were horses not because of story but because its close to what I would have loved to see ;)




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Posted: 16 years ago
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Nadia, it is sooooo beautiful.... How i wish that the creatives chori this idea from you....Yeah it will be soo nice if the leap is only of 6 months.. And youhave predicted an awesome scenario.. I would love this to happen..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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WOW!! soaps its really great...im starting to read one shots noe...thats all that left on the forums now. i love it! i wish the story really did go that way! i can just imagine how theyd look together and how the scene would be portrayed! great job!! lovely

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Nadia....if wishes were horses, u wud b the story writer for Kis Desh!!
Oh My!!! awesome dear
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Nadia.... wht premeer does to us.... we r wishing more tan evr... if wishes were horses.....
PS: tis is a beauty dear....
n if wishes were horses...... premeer wud b there right amidst ur beauty..... 😍
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Posted: 16 years ago
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WOW!! Nadia it's beautifullly written.. and I think everyone here is not very happy abt the 5 years leap... So this is surely wat everyone would want.... Good ya.. it's really nice and I would so love to see it happen on the show.. but as you said "if wishes were horses" "sigh"...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Nice shot Soaps.👏

It was beautiful. But the only thing that I felt bad for was how much pain Heer has to go through again and again. 😔

Wish the creatives would read some stories on this forum and realise the oneness of Prem and Heer.

Love,
Ash



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Posted: 16 years ago
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yeah...its like all the Manns have taken the contract of pain, blame and sorrows...how i wish , it could be reversed!! but yaar Creatives are partial towards Junejas.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ash if it was for me I would never give both of them any pain ever ... But 6 months are tolerable as compared to 5 years ... The thought of it sickens me

Amu I think so far prem and heer have sufered equally but all that is about to change once heer is made to leave :-/

Thanks everyone for the comments
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Soaps1

Ash if it was for me I would never give both of them any pain ever ... But 6 months are tolerable as compared to 5 years ... The thought of it sickens me

Amu I think so far prem and heer have sufered equally but all that is about to change once heer is made to leave :-/

Thanks everyone for the comments

aww...darling....Premu wont allow his Heer to suffer alone...😳
he will suffer with her, but silently...he will put up a brave front in front of the world...like he did the last time he threw her outta the Jzoo...and he will be crying alone.....😭
dun worry....🤗
yesterday's hugging scenes will come to our rescue at that time...Balaji wale flashback dikhane main expert hain.....😡

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