very nice....u kno....jus a few days back i was thinking of starting a fanfic of my own like this....u kno....harshiti falling for each other on the sets of kis desh mein hai mera dil....lol...but i'm glad u started this....i wont be able to start my fic until i go on summer break which wont be in another month and a 1/2....lol...but i'm really looking forward to reading this fic....is it ok if i give u a tip?....when u write ur story...try to avoid writing in 1 long paragraph....it gets kinda confusing for me to read...i mean keep you dialogues seperate from ur discriptions....
for example:
I quickly grabbed my car keys and headed off to work, but before I could go I decided to call mom and take her blessings. The phone was picked on the first ring.
"Hello..." I said.
"Oh swetty it's you how are you beta, are you seetled? Did you eat enough? Is your health okay? Sweety why aren't you answering me?" mom spoke rapidly.
"Mom you didn't even let me talk." heer answered.
"Oh yes you could talk now." mom replied.
when u seperate the dialogues it makes it easier to read and less confusing on who is saying wat...its jus a word of advise...i dont mean to critisize...i jus thought it might be helpful...đ
Udne Ki Aasha
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