FF--KHWAISH part 35 &36&epliouge pg 65 july 21

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hi frnds well i write this ff 2 yrs back for some other group but now i planned to post this story here

hope u guys will like it

KHWAISH

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khethey hai ki har kisi ki alag alag khwaish hotey hai .khwaish poora

karna ki liye log bahut kuch karte hai.magar tab kya ho jab do log ki

khwaish ek ho par raaste nahi .manzil ek ho par saath nahi.kehthey ki

bahut se kam log hote hai jo apni khwaisho ke saath manzil pe paa leite

hai.

my story revolves around the lives of two main character PREM & HEER

Character:

Juneja family:

gayatri- prem mother

lalit- prem father a sucessful businessman

prem- rich,handsome young bachelor who achieve everything at a of age 26

preet-prem twin brother yonger to prem by 4 mins help prem in buisness

harman-prem brother a law student

maans:

abhay-heer father a sucessful businessman

heer-a pretty down to earth rich sweet natured girl

meher-heer sister cum best frnd

ash-abhay bro daughter after the death of ash parents ash start living with maans heer meher and ash r like real sister

other character r introduced as the story moves on

prem is a young achiever who spread his business world wide

heer is a fashion designer but now help in family business but continue

as a designer also

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khwaish

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It is a big room in which a man is standing infront of a big mirror .usko dekhkar kar lagta hai ki woh apne mid 20' me hoga .

he is really dressed well as ki woh kahi bahut important place pe za raha ho.he is wearing a Aligator shoes' black Armaani suit' a Rolex watch'
Montex cuffs'

and he has geled his hair and looking very handsome.

the man is PREM JUNEJA he is a suceesful business man and a handsome young bachelor he has won the young achivers award

aur khushi me degayi party me woh ja raha tha

tabhi door khol kar koi andar aata hai..............................................................................................

man:-kya yaar tumhe tayaar hone me kitna waqt lagta hai.pata hai sab ja chuke hai

prem:- harman bus woh ek project dekhna lagya tha chal

harman:-pata hai PB we all r very happy tumne zindagi me jo chaha sab hasil kar liya.

prem just smile magar usko dekhkar koi bhi kha sakta tha ki woh kuch parashan sa ho gaya

{ harman shakes him and ask ki woh theek hai . he say he is fine and they leave for the party }

now in the party!!!

there is large gathering from the business world the party was on the full swing but in the party

every eye notice one girl standing in the corner and chatting with group of people.

the girl wear a black colour evening gown .she has wet curls wear a long earing and a rolex watch

she is looking absolutly beautiful and stunning.

she is HEER MAAN . she excuse herself and go toward a man

heer:-dad me ghar jana chahti ho waise bhi me yeah kisi ko bhi nahi janti and i am a bit tired

abhay:- heer ab tumehe hi to humara business sambhalna hai .aur agar tum abhi se sab se intract nahi karogi

to aage unke saath kaam kaise karogi

heer:-par dad

abhay:- i know u r tired but beta bus thori der or jiski khushi me ye party de gayi hai us ko mil kar wish kardo

waise bhi woh mere sabse acche dost ka beta hai
and we r business associates plus ''..

but somebody greet abhay maan after sometime heer reply

heer:-ok dad waise dad apne apne dost ka beta ka naam nahi bataya

abhay:-haan woh me jaldi me batana bhol gaya .uska naam...........

{tabhi waha kuch log aa jate hai and they start talking with Mr maan heer excuse herself }

heer ek table pe ja kar beth ti hai jo maan's ke liye reserve thi tabhi uska cell ring hota hai

she got the smile when she see the name she pick up the phone .but as the music was too loud so she imediately leave the hall

and come to the garden

here prem and harman enter in the party hall

prem is surrounded by the crowd they all r congratulating him for his sucess

as the crowd settled down prem moves toward his family

in the gardern anyone who looks heer can make out she is very happy

Heer:- (said) ya luv u too bye.

she end her call and enter the party hall

she find her dad and look he is talking with a family

as she reach there Abhay introduced her with the family

abhay:- Heer ye hai lalit and ye unki wife gayatri bhabhi mainey bataya tha mera friend aur ab to hum business partner bhi hai

last month hi hamne business merge kiya hai.or lalit and bhabhi ye hai meri beti heer

heer touches lalit aur gaytri ke feet for there blessing and both r impressed

lalit:-beta tumehe koi dekhkar keh hi nahi sakta ki tum aaj hi india aayi ho.

gaytri:- heer beta aaj to tum hum se phelhi baar mil rahi ho. warna abhi tak to hamne tumahra bare me suna hi hai.

chalo me tumehe apni family se introduced karati hoo.

she walk toward a group of people

gaytri:-heer isse milo ye hai mera chota beta Harman or ye hai heer

Harman:-hi heer

heer:-hi

abhay:-magar bahbhi jinki khushi me party hai woh kaha hai

gayatri:-are yeahi to tha

harman:-woh rahey PB

harman:-PB

prem turn and start walking toward the group

prem reaches the place where all the family member is standing .magar prem heer ne ek dusra ko nahi dekha hota hai

kyunki harman heer ko kisi se introduced kara raha hota hai

gayatri:- prem me tujhe abhay bahi sabh ki bari beti se introduced karti hoo.ash ko tu janta hi hai unki beti aaj hi india ai hai.

prem:-where is she mom

gayatri:-woh rahi

prem and gayatri walk toward heer

gayatri:-(to heer)beta let me introduced to my elder son.

heer turn

gayatri:- heer this is prem and prem this is heer

both prem and heer r shoked!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Edited by Shruti11 - 16 years ago
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hi frnd i dont know u will like this story or not but as i told u i write this ff 2 yrs back so it is a complete ff i will post all the parts soon till then tc bye

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Posted: 16 years ago
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shrutu main aagayi.. you have posted the fanfic & i'am here with my comments.. well shrut as i have always told you i love your writing.. they are simply rocking... very nice... the fanfic start was very cool.. interesting.... keep up the good work going.. i liked all the characters & their character sketches... you are a awesome writer.... gooddd...👏 shrutu yaar next part jaldi se post karna... i'am waiting for it eagerly..😊
Edited by sun_423 - 16 years ago
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plzz do cont. soon ...awesome story..so premeer know each oder already...ud soon ...
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Khwaish

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Recap:-prem won a young achiever award aur uski khushi me degai party me Mr maan introduced heer to all the junejas and

prem and heer r shocked to see each other

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Now:-there is lot of expression on both the faces any one who look them can tell they r confuse to see each other

then suddenly heer came into reallity and give him a social hug

heer:-hi prem what a surprise i cant' belive myself after such a long time.we see each other

{ prem also came into reality with a jolt}

prem:-hi heer yeah almost after 3 yrs

{abhay inturupt their conversation}

abhay:-kya tum dono ek dusra ko phele se jante ho?

heer:-yea dad mein prem ko london se janti ho. mein jab apna managment course kar rahi thi tab mein aur ye ek hi class mein the.

Gayatri:-yeh to bahut accha hua ki tum dono ek dusre ko jante ho. prem chal ab to heer ko company de waise bhi

bechari bahut bore ho rahi thi .ab jao jake iska introduction bakio se karao

{ prem is feeling really akward but remain calm. prem introduced her to all the business associates

when introduction is done heer and prem came to a side}

heer:- prem mujhe to ab bhi vishwas nahi ho raha ki tum mujhe aise mile

prem:-even mujhe bhi vishwas nahi ho raha

heer:- prem can i ask u something . why u never reply to me ?

prem:-........................................................(silent)

heer:-tumne jawab nahi diya prem

{tabhi ek announcement hoti hai and both pay their attention to that side they call prem and heer on the stage}

lalit:-jaisa ki ab sab jante hai ki aaj ki party mere bete ki award jitne ki khushi me de gayi magar there is one more reason to celebrate

woh ye hai ki aaj mere best friend and business partner ki beti heer aaj hi india aai hai business sambhalne ke liye
so i want to raise the toast to both prem and heer.
and now everyone move toward the dance floor

{every one moves toward the dance floor except prem heer Harman and ash who arrived a minute ago}

Harman:-hi bhoot

ash:-mujhe bola

Harman:-aur nahi to kya tumahre siwa mujhe yeah pe sab insaan dekh raha hai.

ash:- Harman i will kill u

Harman:-lo ab to tum bhooto wala kam bhi karne lagi. waise bhi to tum ne upper se lekar neeche tak white kapre phene hua hai upper se itna makeup

bilkul bhoot lag rahi ho.

{ ash is wearing a white evening gown and looking really beautiful magar Harman ko tease karna main kafi intrest aata tha

that's why he was saying all this }

Harman:- heer ek baat batao tum ek booht ke saath kaise rah leati ho

{ heer just smile she and prem r enjoying there conversation}

ash:-apne comments apne paas rakho waise bhi agar me chaho to ye pe khare sare boys mere saath dance karne ko tayaar ho jayenge

Harman:-woh isliye ki unko apni jaan bahut payari hai bhala koi ek booht ko kaise mana kar sakta hai.

{just then gayatri arrived}

gayatri:-ab bas bhi karo tum dono jab dekho tab ladte rehte ho

gayatri:-jao tum log jaa kar dance karo

{ Harman and ash go toward the dance floor while prem and heer remain there}

gayatri:-are prem aur heer tum log bhi jaa kar dance karo

{they both try to make excuse but veena force them so they also go towards the dance floor}

song in backgrownd

wada raha ....

wada raha pyaar say pyaar ka

ab hum na hongey juda.........

wada raha pyaar say pyaar ka

ab hum na hongey juda.........

yeh .....meri dhadkanein sun raha hai khuda.....

chahey tumey kis qader mera dil tum ko nahi ha pata ...

yeh.... meri dhadkanein sun raha hai khuda.....

wada raha..........yeh wada raha.........

dono jahan ko bulaoon mey essi lagi hai

tujh say lagan

chahey kaho issey awargi chahey kaho issey deewanapan

dil ney kaha dil ney suna....

mey ney tumhey dilbar chuna..

ab duriyan na rahi dermiyaan

kya rang laye wafa........

yeh meri dhadkaneein sun raha hai khuda........

wada raha yah wada raha.....

dekha tumey to essa laga

mujh ko mila manzil ka pata

chalana hai hum ko ab sath mey

tum say jura mera raasta ....

mey ney li hai qasam

paoon tumey janum o junum ..

sajdey kiya shaam o saher

maanga hai tum ko sada.

yeh.meri dhadkanein sun raha hai khuda.....

haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan

wada raha pyaar say pyaar ka ...

wada raha ....

wada raha pyaar say pyaar ka

ab hum na hongey juda.........

wada raha pyaar say pyaar ka

ab hum na hongey juda.........

yeh .....meri dhadkanein sun raha hai khuda.....

wada raha yeh .

wada raha ....

pyaar say pyaar ka..

wada raha yeh wada raha....

{ prem and heer dance on the song but sujal is feeling awkward he made and excuse to heer and go toward the bar and drink a glass of wine}

{ maan's r leaving early kyunki heer aaj hi wapis ai thi aur woh bahut hi tired thi. maan's and Juneja greet each other

.and heer say bye to prem and he also reply.they leave}

{after the party prem is sitting on the bed in his room and writing something}

"aisa kyun hota hai jis chera ko hum bhol jana chathe hai woh hamray samney aa jati hai"

"jin yaado ko hum peeche chod dena chate hai woh saath aa jati hai"

"jin khwaisho ko hum mar dena chahte hai woh jinda ho jati hai"

"nahi me aisa nahi hone donga me un khwaisho ko zinda nahi hone dunga"

"un khwaisho ke liye ab mere paas koi jagah nahi hai"

{he shut the diary and went back in the memory 6yrs back in the place called london}

Flashback:-

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Edited by Shruti11 - 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sun_423

shrutu main aagayi.. you have posted the fanfic & i'am here with my comments.. well shrut as i have always told you i love your writing.. they are simply rocking... very nice... the fanfic start was very cool.. interesting.... keep up the good work going.. i liked all the characters & their character sketches... you are a awesome writer.... gooddd...👏 shrutu yaar next part jaldi se post karna... i'am waiting for it eagerly..😊

thx sur for ur reply ur reply give me boost to write
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Originally posted by: nitzi

plzz do cont. soon ...awesome story..so premeer know each oder already...ud soon ...

thx so much for ur reply
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khwaish

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Recap:- prem and heer know each other . there is small fight between Harman

and ash gayatri force both the couple to dance floor. after the party prem write

something and went back in the memories.

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6 yrs back at the age of 20. prem london me apne Business ko sambhal ke saath

hi woh apne managment ka course bhi kar raha tha.

Flashback:-

a Ferrari stop infront of a house and the person who was sitting in the

driver seat give a loud horn aur tabhi ek admi jaldi se bahar aata hai

person:-kya yaar kitni der lagate ho preet itna time to ladkia bhi nahi lagti

preet:-shutp prem mujhe sirf thori hi der hui hai aur agar tum isi tarah bolte raha

to hume jaroor der ho jayegi .

prem:-lo tum to aisa kha raha ho ki jaise saari galti meri hai .meine late ki hai.

preet:-ab bas kar aur chup chap chal

{ prem start driving }

prem:-kya baat hai preet aaj to kuch jaada hi smart lag rahe hai?

{ preet was wearing a blue jeans with white t-shirt and blue jacket and looking

really cool}

preet:-ha ha tabhi to sari ladkia mujhe chodkar tera peeeche bhagti hai.waise

apne ko dekh aaj to pakka sari ladkia tere peeche padne wali hai;

{ prem is wearing a black jeans with a black high neck t-shirt and a black jacket

.he has geled his hair and have a killing smile on the face. in short he is looking

hot and handsome. girl just droll in his way .but he has never show any intrest in

any of the girls}

preet:-ek baat kahu prem ladkia tera peche baghti hai or tu ladkio se baghta hai

aisa kyun??

{ prem just smile}

preet:-bata na prem

prem:-actually these girls r not my type

preet:-so Mr prem juneja hum jaan sakte hai ki aap ko kis type ki ladki chaiye

prem:-yaar kabhi is bare me socha nahi

preet:-lo aur agar kabhi tere type ki ladki tere samne aa gayi to tu ause kaise

peechane ga?

prem:-mujhe use peechna nahi padega mera dil mujhe baata dega ki woh wahi

hai jo sirf meray liya hai.

preet:-come on prem tabhi bhi kuch to soacha hoga tum apni is dream girl ke

baare me.

prem:-hmmmmmm woh aisi hogi jiski ek muskurahat mere chere pe muskurahat

le aaye. jiski batein mera jeevan me mithas ban ke ghul jaaye.jisko dekhne ke

baad kuch dekhne ka maan na kare.jiski aankho me dub jaane ka man kare.jiske

chere pe aisi masumiat ho jo mera jeevan kay sare dukh door karde .jiski aahat

se hi mera din banjaye aur jiske naam ke aage kisi ka naam na yaad rahe.jiski

kashish mujhe uski traf le jaaye.aur pyaar payaar who mujhsey aisa kareygi jaisey heer ne ranjha se kiya tha

preet:-woh mujhe nahi pata tha ki tu itna romentic ho ga.

{ prem give a cute smile}..

dekh baato baato me hum log pahuch bhi gaye

prem:-chal ab chal party ke liye late ho rahi hai.

{ prem and preet r going to promp night as they enter one girl standing on the

entrance give them a colour band to tie on the wrist }

preet: prem meine suna hai ki aaj bahut se surprises hai is party mein .aur log to

ye bhi kah raha the ki ye party hum saalo (yrs) tak yaad rakhe ge.

prem:-dekhte hai aakhir kya hai aisa is party mein ki humlog ise kabhi bhi nahi

bhol paayeinge.

{they enter the party hall.aur jaisa in dono expect kiya tha all the girls standing

there try to get there attention but both of them neglect them and reach toward

there friend circle}.

prem:-hi guys whats up?

friends:-hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

preet:-hey kuch pata hai aaj ka surprise kya hai?

nick:-no idea bro.everything they kept as a secret.even they dont tell us whats

the main theme.

prem:-lets wait and watch.

{they r enjoying themselves when they listen an announcement }

announcer:-well guys aap log soach rahe hoge ki aaj ki theme kya hai .even ur

more curious to know what r the special surprises.so here is our theme.

that is MADE FOR EACH OTHER as u all know we have lots of indian student so

we decide that this party is to be held in indian style the food is indian the

music is indian . even the host is indian {everyone laughs}

so guys and for the surprise we r distributing each of u a Mask plus u have a

band of some colour on ur hand now the same colur band is given to the

opposite partner. now u have to do that u have to find ur partner in 1 minute and

the person who find it partner in minimum time will be awarded and they

will be the first person to start the dance.

"kyunki khete hai ki bina dekha jo hammare kareeb aa jaye woh hamaray liye

hota hai usko hamaray liye banaya jata hai. woh hote hai made for each other".

so guys be ready i know it is difficult because ur partner can be anywhere in the

hall .but guys play it will be fun.

so ur time start now.

{ prem ko koi maan nahi tha ye game khelna ka par preet ne use force kiya tha

isliye woh yeh khel raha tha as he was walking infront of the stage he bump into

somebody.the person is also walking backside without looking .he see a girl

wearing a black trouser with a black halter neck top with a broad belt and uske

baal khule hui the he cannot see her face because she is wearing a mask.}

suddenly music stop and he hear that the announcer said that we have found the

couple they found each other in 20 sec so i call on the stage the MADE FOR

EACH OTHER couple the couple in black .he was shock usne to notice bhi nahi

kiya tha ki jis ladki ke saath woh abhi takraya hai woh uski game partner hai

woh dono stage pe pauchte hai aur unko game jitne ke liye gifts milte hai aur

sabse kaha jata hai ki woh apne mask remove karke apne partner ke saath dance

floor pe aaye.aur jis couple ne abhi prize jita hai woh unko lead karega. prem

remove his mask and wait for the girl to remove her mask she hesitate a bit but

then she remove her mask.

prem usko dekhta hai rah gaya and he skip his heart beat uske hair light golden

colour ke the uski eyes honey brown she has a fair complexion aur uski smile.

prem has no words to describe her .sujal ne aaj tak itna innocent aur khubsoorat

chera kabhi nahi dekha tha.

as music start and they move toward the dance floor

song in background:-------------------------

Aankhon Se Kaajal Ki Tarah

Phoolon Se Khushboo Ki Tarah

Dilo Ko Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

O Jaana Yeh Kya Kiya Tumne

Aankhon Se Kaajal Ki Tarah

Phoolon Se Khushboo Ki Tarah

Dilo Ko Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Zikr Tera Hawaon Se Jab Bhi Kiya Karte Hain

Yaadon Mein Teri Khushboo Ka

Hum Mazaa Liya Karte Hain

Palkon Se Neendon Ki Tarah

Neendon Se Khwaabon Ki Tarah

Dilo Ko Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Chura Liyaa Hai Chura Liyaa Hai

Tumne Chura Liyaa Hai

Aksar Yeh Sunte The Hum

Ishq To Hai Deewaanapan

Tum Se Milke Jaan Gaye

Sach Kehte The Log Sanam

Hoto Se Hasi Ki Tarah

Hasi Se Khushi Ki Tarah

Dilo Ko Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

O Jaana Yeh Kya Kiya Tumne

O Jaana Yeh Kya Kiya Tumne

Chura Liyaa Hai Tumne

Chura Liyaa

they dance really well as ki un dono ne phele se hi aik dusro kay step malum

ho

tabhi ek announcement hoti sorry guys for the disturbance ab hamray dusray

surprise ki baari hai well jab aap log dance kar rahe the tab hum aapko judge kar

rahe the kaun kiskay saath kitna aacha perform karta hai aur kitna aacha lagta

hai and we have decided to give the award to two couple first is the couple who

won the previous game and second couple is the couple in blue.

the couple r prem and heer and preet and meher unko gift milte hai aur jaise

hi woh log side me aate hai they made introduction

preet:-hi mein preet aur ye mera twin bro prem but still I m 4 min younger

meher:-hi mein meher aur ye meri sis heer

prem:-friends to heer woh thori der sochti hai and

heer:-friends

both the couples smile

Present:---

prem came into reality and realize the present sistuation and said

nahi mein aisa nahi hone donga woh mera past hai me use apne aaj mein shamil nahi karoonga aur jo usne kiya uske baad uskay liye koi jagah nahi hai na hi mera zindagi mein nahi mera sapno mein nahi mera dil mein .

kyun heer kyun kiya tumne aisa aakhir kyun aaj tumne khud aapne ko

mujhse bahut door kar liya.

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guys tell me should i continue or not

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