Challenge to Creative: use your creative talent

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi friends , while reading since the begining .........i always feel that we keep telling creative and writer should have done this and that instead of doing this stupidity...........
so i came up with this idea..........it is like compo writing in english paper😆😆😆
as we all are upset the way creative has shown rani rescueing yudi. we all have no problem with suspence and grip the track had created .........but the last week creative has messed up big time.......so like writer i will write the outline ...............and as creative.........you have to create scene out of that outlines...........and show to creative that you people have more talent than them............no need to use beautiful language or,elobarating language........
so outlines are
- yudi get abducted ( by any one)
-rani rescue him
- yura reach just on time next day when RN getting raj tilak
-yudi become king
so basically the track we are unhappy with that rani rescue yudi so now show your talent .......and write in your own words that wha tkind of scene creative should have shown...........instead of rani following rudraksh and using payal and kids..........you can add your own imaginative object ...........anything
ok i will give you example:
rani searching for yudi and yudi looking for rani........and the way yudi was abducted but goons till that point i am fine
yudi is behonsh in car and they give him some injection so yudi lost complete consciousness...........rani sees from far yudi abduction and she look for her mobile and she remember that she forgot in room while running away from yudi while saving herself from color
rani run after car shouting......that is very obvious reaction but she realsied that she could not run after car and she try to look for gaurds but she could not find anyone........and she sees car with driver so she ask him to follow that yudi's car......but in way car had puncture😆😆😆
so she leave the care and look for other mean and by that time yudi's care go far and she find taxi and she inform her own car driver to inform in palac ebut in palace Cr just shut drivers mouth
and in taxi when rani looking for yudi's car....she reach near forest and that taxi drive rrefuse to go with her and she decide to go ahead😉😉
and she find the place and yudi hear her ankle sound and get concious😳😳
rnai try to sneak in place but she also get abducted and goon tie her too and yudi is maha angry on that and struggle and releash some how and have great fight with goons and by the time they releas it is dark out side and yura lost way in forest so yudi decide that they will spend night in forest till morning........and we have excellent emotional scene there 😉😉
and by dawn they try to look for way and they find some help and lift and they rech palace just on time
so this is something form me now all of you write..........as we all keep bashing that creative has no mind and sho wall nonsense scenes so now we have to shwo them that it was nonsense
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wo ho Beena. I like this idea. The outline is there, lets all of us see how we can fill it in.....I'll be back!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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beena di, I'm really sorry... u asked for a short scene but it became long!!!!!😲 I ask u all to forgive me b4 itself as it is not upto the mark... this is my first try so pls forgive me!!!!!!

Rani saw Yudi being kidnapped and ran inside to inform saksham and take his help but noticed that he was playing holi with niharika. She decided not spoil their fun and started running behind the car. She stopped the taxi and asked the driver to follow the car moving ahead. But as their taxi got held in check-post, the car had vanished from sight. In the meantime the taxi driver refuses to go further as the road ahead is not proper. Rani is in a confused state and gets super tensed!!!! Now that she had heard where they would take him she decided to go by the short-cut and runs in cross roads to reach the place behind the temple as soon as possible.

Yudi in the car had seen Rani coming and wanted to call out for her but was unconscious.

Rani had reached the place and started searching. Her anklet's sound is making him realize that she was nearby and peeps out to find her just outside the place but facing opposite direction, Yudi had his mouth was tied from making any sound. He somehow wanted to convey her that he was just behind her!!! Rani suddenly turns and is relieved and shocked at the same time. Relieved because she found him and shocked because he was tied and is about to shout out for him but notices he was trying to tell her something through his eyes!!! She understood that he was asking her not to shout as the goons were still present. She removes her anklets and holds it tightly so that it does not create any sound. She silently walks behind him removes all the ropes but abruptly stops. Yudi turns back just on time to notice that she was captured by one of the goons. The fight starts and the hero eventually wins by beating them all up!!!! Rani runs up to him to wipe the blood flowing from the forehead and then they hug tightly. Finally Rani unable to control herself starts crying and Yudi kisses her forehead and consoles her!!!! They try to return back to the mehal and find its already late night and decide to spend their night there. Yudi makes her wear the payal again and they spend a romantic night unaware of what happened to RS!!!!

In the morning they return exactly the time when RN was getting crowned. People surrounding spotted him stopped the crowning ceremony. CR declares yudi as the king!!! RN fuming, Rumi frowning and CR with her duplicate smile on makes Yudi wear the crown and Rani standing beside him feels proud of her husband!!!!!

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Posted: 16 years ago
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excellent rosh
and it is no ttoo long and it is wondrful
so all girls.........common like we keep somplaining so we have to show that we have better ideas
nisha i will wait for you version and i know it must be beautiful
monu i want to see your funny version too
and simra our star...i want to see your romatic
and darhs your sensible and
everyone ....at least few lines
will do
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Great start Roshni!!! Ok, here i m with my story.

Yudi is kidnapped. She is shocked to see that. She runs behind car. But after few minutes car disappears. She is now confused where to go and how to find Yudi. Then she remembers goon was talking about taking him to one temple on old hill. She immediately runs to palace, she takes her car and asks driver to follow another car.

Its urgent for her to inform in palace. She tries to contact RS on his cell phone. But as he is busy in holi festival, he didnt notice those call. Rani gives up and tries to call Saksh but she found same case. RN notices that Saksham phone is ringing. RN picks up and phone. Rani tries to convience message but RN pretends that she is not able to listen anything. After that RN swtiches off his phone and place it back. Here CR notices RS phone and she deletes all miscall by Rani.

Rani is trying her best to make call to palace. She is continuously asking driver to increase speed so that they could catch another car. But as they have entered to deep jungle, mobile has no coverage. Now its again difficult for her to inform it to palace. But her chase is successful and she can see another car. She again asks driver to increase speed and chase other car. Goons understands that someone is following them. They too increase speed. Now there is enough distance between two cars so goon can utilize it to stop
Rani. They stop the car, few goons get down and breaks up some bottle on road and immediately get into car. Goons drives away. Rani's car is punctured now due to glass on road.

In palace, drama is going on who will be next king?

Rani decides that she will follow short-cut to reach temple. She asks driver repair car and inform back to palace about the incident. She starts walking in jungle to reach that place as soon as possible. She is really finding it difficult to walk through path. She is getting
bruises on her body but she is not caring for this. The only thought running in her mind is she needs to reach to Yudi.

Its afternoon, Rani is still walking in jungle to reach to temple. Heat in atmosphere, taking her too tall. She is walking for an hours without having food and water. She is about faint down due to March heat and thurst. But she controls herself. For her Yudi is more important than herself. Her condition is forcing her to take rest for a while. But she is determined and still decides to continue her walk so that she can reach to Yudi as early as possible.

In palace, RN, CR, RuMi drama is going on and Nandini reveals her motive.

Its almost evening and Rani is almost near to temple. May be another hour and she will be near temple. Her condition is too bad that she is really found difficult to walk one step more. But her love for Yudi is her inspiration.

Rajtilak gets delayed due to sunset. RN is angry on this and waiting when she will be crowned as queen. She is going out for some work when she notices one driver running hurrily to palace. Its same driver to whom Rani has asked to leave message to palace. RN stops him and asks him his motive. He tells RN about situation, but RN cleverly manages to make him unconsious and asks goons to keep driver in same state till Rajtilak happens.


Its a dark, when Rani reaches near to temple. Her anklet voice made Yudi realize that she is around.She is shocked to see that goons has tied Yudi. She wants to run to Yudi, but all goons are surrounding him. She takes out her anklets and pack it in empty tin around. She throws tin in other direction so that goon will run to that voice. Same happens. Rani now runs to Yudi quickly. Yudi asks her why she took so much trouble to come here. Rani replies him that for her Yudi is more important than anything else. She comes near to Yudi and tries to remove rope which is tied on his hands. But she is not able to help out.

Yudi suggest her to pick up knief and cut down the rope. She immediately picks up knief and tries to cut down the rope. Her half work is done when goons enters and shocked to see Rani helping Yudi. They immediately run near her and hold her. They are badly taking Rani away from Yudi. Rani is shouting loudly "kuwarji". Yudi is not able to watch all this and he is trying to get rid of rope. Rani is still crying which makes one goon to slap her. Yudi is now ultimately angry and with all his efforts he gets rid of the rope.

He fights back with goons. They both are safe now. Rani is really happy to see yudi is safe.
she throws herself in his arms. She is crying imagining how pathetic for her to stay away from Yudi for a day even. Yudi consoles her and tells her that everything is fine now. He wipes her tear and asks her to smile now. She smiles back. Now Yudi tells her that they need to reach palace as soon as possible.

As its night, they both are finding it difficult to walk through jungle. But their support for each other is enough to overcome any difficulties. It takes them early morning, to reach to highway from temple. Now Rani is all tired and she is not able to walk a step more. Yudi tells her that they will look for some vehicle to reach palace. They wait for few minutes but didnt find any vehicle. After an hour they found one tempo on highway. Driver agress for lift and they both get into it. In tempo, Rani is still tired and resting on his
shoulder. Yudi has covered her in his arms to give assurance that he is with her.


They reaches on time before RN could get crowned and Yudi become king

Edited by darshana23 - 16 years ago
bsingapury thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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excellent darsh and wonderful scenerio.......with full logic too that as immediat reaction..rani run after car and than she took driver along with her......and when their car was puntured by goons she was half way could nto return back...........so has no other option but to go ahead and now she was according to her sense near to her destination and her worry was yudi as most priority
and she send driver back that' also very logical so mean time she go ahead atleast driver can bring help from palac ebut in palace RN or Cr whoever handle driver so no body could help yudi
and than fight and their return back
now see this scene of your sound so realistic and very intresting too
that's what i am trying to tell though they wanted to show rani saving yudi ok show that...........but with full logic not with magic
excellent rosh adn darsh both of you have given fantastic colours to outline
shivkundan thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Beena don't think it is a challenge to creatives it is a lesson they should learn. They should pick up at least few ideas from here then they will get more viewers
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Posted: 16 years ago
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good going gals.....i enjoyed this much more than original track

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