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Posted: 17 years ago
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Guys i wanted to write FF since the Heer and Prem love story stareted by couldn't do it becuase of my GCSE..lol..

Now, exam over so I want to start writing FF. Do you think I should? becuase there are already great FF so I don't fink anyone would give time for my one..😆.

I'll give you some idea of story-Prem and Heer ofcourse will get marry after let say 5 or 6 epi but it will be slightly different becuase Heer doesn't love him she hates Juneja Family.😕

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PART 1- PAGE 1

PART 2- PAGE 2

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: barisal

please ,start....nihaljan...
it,s great idea...

omg..i didn't expec this..lol..i mean..i don't really know anyone.in FF but still fankx..😳 bdw..m Roji..😳

ok i'll start..right now..😆

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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey how could you miss me?..lol..i still remember your Sanjeevani..1..it was best..but u stopped..it.. i hope you won't do it..in this one.. 😆 n don't worry abt d comment..lol..just write for me.. 😆 😆 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hey Rojiiiiii u dont even need to ask..
Ofcourse y wudnt we have time to read ur ff..
Your idea sounds interesting and we wud lub to read it..
And yaa there are many nice ffs already but the more the merrier naaaaaa😃
Waiting for u to starttttttt😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Thank you guys..

Part 1-Introduction

As in Balaji programme I'll start with puja..lol..

Tinkled the bell at the some corner of small cosy lounge room.

'Hey vaye(spelling??) Guru ap ko lakh sukar hain ki apne mero mankomana sunliya, phele yeh ki apne meri Ash ki shaadi uski pyar se jurdaiya aur dusri yeh ki maa select hogayi' her voice was sweet and melody like a cuckoo(lol).

'Heer mein chalti hoon' said by 50 years old widowed getting ready to go to Amristar temple for free from School(She is Teji)

Heer was the girl name she turned back with smile and prasad on her soft hand.

H(offers prasad and takes blessing):'Ma prasad toh loh..aur shaadi tak toh ajayegina?'

T smiles:'main koshish karungi aur Amristar jakar teri liye ladke vi dhoond aungi? kyun?'

H shyly: ma...aap trip k liye jaraheen hain..yaa..mere liye dulha dhoondne?

Both shares laugh and hugs..

T: acha woh Ashlesha ka phone aya tha..kheraheen thi tujhse kuch kam hain

H confused: theek hain...acha ma apne khayal rakhna

T hugs heer: tu vi..

Somewhere in the middle sarsoon ka khet heer was walking towards Ashlesha house but black SUV

'Splash' the mud at Heer salwar kameez..

'Oyee!!' shouts heer

Stops the SUV and driver on his white uniform comes out..and apologize saying'I'm really sorry woh bade saab ki tabyeed kharab hain..isliye..hum jaldi main hain aur yeh rakho(offers her money) nahin kapde kareedna'

Heer furious: kya samja hain..main paisi ki bhuki hoon...

'kya baat hain?'deep voice comes out inside from the SUV

Who's that? Preet? Prem? or..Manmeet?,,lol

SORRY FOR MISTAKE..i am not dat good in hindi...or describing things😳


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Posted: 17 years ago
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ohhhhhhhh pls atrt it na plsssssssssssssssss all i can say it start is as soon aspossible plssssssss
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Posted: 17 years ago
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it will be prem its a request nect time make a little bigger otherwise nice 👏 👏
i will be waiting
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: tanyaaaa26

it will be prem its a request nect time make a little bigger otherwise nice 👏 👏
i will be waiting

haha..yeh..make it longer..lol..plzz..n i fink..it's manmeet...coz..u're not goint to make them meet quick..😆
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Part 2

Well it's Preet he comes out from the SUV and to driver: wat's d prob?(Preet is the younger son of Juneja..and he is..really cool dude..lol...)

Driver: woh(point at heer) and explain everything

Preet(to heer): usne sorry boldiyaan hain to phir?(heer narrows her brows) village girl bhi attitude dekhani lagi...(he murmers)

Heer hears it and storms from there with angersss!!!!

Preet(to Driver): chale???? bhai ki tavyeed kharab horaheen hain...

(They came from Canada..so..)

House decorated with fresh fragrances flowers, designer lights, colourful curtains gives us the clue that there is function on the house...

Laugh echo on the room gathered by groups of girls.

Girl-Haye! Ash tu kitni soni lagraheen hain...

Girl2-kismat walaan hain..dulha raja..(evryone laughs)

Daljeet walks into room: woh log agaye hain..chalo kudiyaan!!(she stops seeing Ashlesha) haye kitni pyari lagraheen hain..kisiki nazar na lage(puts black dot) abh chale?

Ashelsa face isn't shown yet..lol..: nahin..ma mujhe shaadi nahin karni!!

Everyone freeze so does DJ: kya???

A furious: jab tak Heer nahin ati tab tak main shaadi nahin karungi..

Everyone shares laugh Girl 1 breaks: Heer ka phone tha..woh kisi kam se wapas ghar gayi hain..ajayegi..ash..niche chalona..plzz..humein vi dekhna..hain tere dulhe raja ko...

Ash blusesh: theek hain! ma..phirse phone try karna..plzz!!!

DJ smiles on how eachother can't live without eachother.

DJ along with other girls goes downstairs and everyone eye gets catched on Ashelsha..and start praising about her beauty and values.

Balwant makes an announcement:" ladies and gentleman!!! may i have your attention please..meri beti k khusiyaan main sameel honeki..liye..bohut sukriya..aur kal meri gudiyaan kisis aur ki amanat hojayegi..sahed..yehi..riti riwaz hain..(lol)..

mein bohut bhagesali..hoon ki..Chada saab ne..meri beti ko apne bahoon bananeki liye suikar kiya..thank you chada saab aur mein dawan karsata hoon ki..meri beti..apke ghar mein khuisiyaan spread karegi(tears on his eyes)

Chada saab walks towards Balwant:" doston..khus naseeb toh mein hoon ki hamare..barso ki dosti rishtey mein badalraheen hain..aur mujhe Ashlesha bohu k rup mein..mili...and guys enjoy the Mehendi+Sangeet!!!"

Suddenly dhol start to play on the background and eveyone joins the crowd..Chada and Balwant start doing Bhangra..lol.so does DJ..

Girls 1: magar tera dulha raja kaun hain? announcment mein kyun nahin kahaan?

Ashlesha laughs and points towards a guy: woh..hain..mera pyaar..

Manmeet!!!! shouts Ashlesha(he is wearing..same colour as Ash lengha..color sherwani..can't find his picxx..)

Manmeet joins the girls group: hookum karon..meri..Juliet!!!

Ash blusesh: Manu..ise milo..meri dost..Sonam(yeah sonam kapoor..lol) aur Ridhima(ridhima kapoor lol)

Manmeet: hello! magar tumare achi dost kahaan hain? umm Heer?

Ash furious: woh abhi tak nahin ayi..n how abt ur dost prem?

Manmeet: he's not feeling well..u know..pheli baar india ayaan hain..magar meet his brother (shouts out) PREET!!!!!

Preet makes his way towards them..

Preet: Hi girls(to Sonam and Ridhima.) and namaste to Bhabiji(everyone laughs)

Ash smiles: Preet tumare baremein..bohut suna..tha aj milbhi gaye..kyun?

Preet: this is not fair MC(manmeet chada)u told her about my so-called affair too?

Manmeet: yes..mere bhai.

Sonam: bateein baad mein..mehendi..lagane chale Ash? chalo wohi par antakshri..khelte hain..kyun?

Ridz: haan..chalo? Ash aur jijai!!

Preet: wat abt me?

M: haan tu vi chal..

They makes their way...

Outside the mansion..heer was running towards the door and bump into someone..who is it? Prem yaa..phirse Preet

Plzz tell me how it is..sorry heer and prem in..next epi..n sorry no heer and prem..today😭

Edited by nihalfan - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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😆 😆 oh god now it will surely be prem

nice dear
i will be waiting for nect

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