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Originally posted by: ThaneOfElsinore

It's a nice and simple story, Shirsha. 😊 Now that I've read some of your writings, I felt this has your signature simplicity in it.

As a reader, I do suggest you add a bit more background to Linda and Cynthia's friendship. Although I think you wished to keep it short and within 500 words and therefore, you probably didn't add more details. But I think if you're planning to expand this, you could emphasise more on Cynthia's dejection and make it more immersive. I mean there's just one dialogue that tells you that she feels low and insulted amongst humans. You could show and give her an inner monologue perhaps to elaborate her sadness. You could also give us a reason: an anecdote, any strict futuristic laws, etc. to make her sadness more convincing.

Finally, subtly infusing Cynthia's robotic nature through her unique perceptions or interactions could add another layer to her character. You know, that would create more effect that even if she has robotic mannerisms, she is able to feel as deeply as humans. That would make the story more impactful.

But these are just my personal suggestions! 😊 I loved reading another one of your stories!

Thanks for your feedback! No, I'm not planning to expand this story. I was only practising Bengali story writing.

Originally posted by: ThaneOfElsinore

I know you're being serious, Shirsha and I also understand the fear of dogs. But your statement in this context feels too deadpan sarcastic, if seen objectively. I'm finding it too funny.

I don't know how to write sarcastic comments. It's a unique form of humour and only some people possess this skill. I was being serious only.

Originally posted by: ThaneOfElsinore

It's a nice and simple story, Shirsha. 😊 Now that I've read some of your writings, I felt this has your signature simplicity in it.

As a reader, I do suggest you add a bit more background to Linda and Cynthia's friendship. Although I think you wished to keep it short and within 500 words and therefore, you probably didn't add more details. But I think if you're planning to expand this, you could emphasise more on Cynthia's dejection and make it more immersive. I mean there's just one dialogue that tells you that she feels low and insulted amongst humans. You could show and give her an inner monologue perhaps to elaborate her sadness. You could also give us a reason: an anecdote, any strict futuristic laws, etc. to make her sadness more convincing.

Finally, subtly infusing Cynthia's robotic nature through her unique perceptions or interactions could add another layer to her character. You know, that would create more effect that even if she has robotic mannerisms, she is able to feel as deeply as humans. That would make the story more impactful.

But these are just my personal suggestions! 😊 I loved reading another one of your stories!

Your idea of futuristic laws is interesting. Actually, I wanted to emphasize on the fact that humans look down upon robots because they can't procreate. I wanted to show how procreation is very important to human beings and they consider them less valuable who are incapable of that. You're right about Cynthia's monologue. I couldn't add a lot of details due to word limit. Also, I never wrote a science fiction story before. Science fiction writing was completely unfamiliar to me. That's why there're many areas for improvement in the story. As far as robotic mannerisms are concerned, I wanted to show robots don't have their typical robotic mannerisms in 3075. They're very similar to humans in that futuristic world.

https://www.indiaforums.com/article/veteran-actor-tinnu-anand-threatens-to-hit-stray-dogs-with-hockey-sticks-versova-police-demand-apolo_222115

Another dog news today! This one looks serious though

Originally posted by: Shirsha

I don't know how to write sarcastic comments. It's a unique form of humour and only some people possess this skill. I was being serious only.

Sorry, This feels like a backhanded compliment but hum bhi besharam sudrenge nahi

Originally posted by: ThaneOfElsinore

Par ab toh Ganja ka kalank lag chuka hai. Who will collect this baggage called Param?

That’s right! shrapit / maili ho chuka hai aur isliye value bhi bohot kam hua hai Restoration to past glory might not be possible but haan he can try

Idk if I am making sense. Sorry writing in half sleep

Originally posted by: missFiesty_69

Sorry, This feels like a backhanded compliment but hum bhi besharam sudrenge nahi

So true. As someone who actively engages in sarcasm, this compliment felt so much like a deadpan roast

Youtube is full of videos with thumbnail - Vaibhavi is all set to return. One side RR ki chutti ho rahi hai and on the other side Vaibhavi retun ho rahi hai. Wow! people really are making a business out of this in and out of actors from a show.