NeiVika ss: kaise mujhe Tum mil gaye

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Posted: 1 years ago
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As I have said this underwhelming apology has filled me with frustration. & I was just looking for a way to vent it out. & I ended up writing this. Saumya said it is actually good & I should post it. So I am doing it. I hope She is right & you like it.



Prologue

Mahajan house

11 o' clock.Night.

YUVIKA was in her room, marching here & there frantically.. calling someone.

Isha came, she observed her for sometimes.

"Dii, why are you walking here & there? You look stressed..Kya hogaya?", asked Isha.

"Neil is not picking my call, I don't know what to do now!," answered YUVIKA still trying to contact him.

" Toh busy hoga...uss mein kya hai! Baad mein kar lega..Ek second ya phir aap dono mein kuch hua hai kya?"

"Isha kya bolun Abhi, woh hua yun ki...(YUVIKA narrated everything)

" Dii,Are you serious? Aap ne DJ ka saath dekar Neil Ko paraya bol dia,woh bhi Vidur uncle ke samne! Kya soch Rahi thi aap?"

"Isha,galti ho gayi mujhse,"said Yuvika her head down," but tum toh janti ho na Maine Aisa Kyun Kiya..."

"Whatever may be your reason but you have hurt him & now you are expecting him to pick up your call? Dhakkan ho kya!"

" Toh main kya Karun? Kaise jaun Neil se Milne. Vidur uncle bhi hoge", asked Yuvika.

"Toh balcony se jayiye, siddhi laga kar, jaise Neil ata hai..",said Isha with a mischievous smile.

"WHAT? Tujhe pata hai ki Neil yahan...",Yuvika was shocked.

"Mujhe sab pata hai ..Ab aap jaiye," said Isha with a smile.

Yuvika started running.

"Dii.."shouted Isha from behind.

"Kya?", asked Yuvika impatiently.

"Arre Dii, kuch official paper bag mein daal ke le jao...agar koi puche toh bol dena Vidur uncle se official baat karne Jaa Rahi ho .Toh koi dhundhne nahin jayega", answered Isha..

"Aww! My little sister. Itna smart kab se ho gayi.."Yuvika came back, picked up some papers,kept it inside her bag & then gave Isha a warm hug.

"Thank you,Isha"

"All the best,Dii"

They broke the hug & YUVIKA ran away.

Aur phir Sabse bachke chipte chipate ladder ki madad se balcony ke raste se woh ghus gayi inside Bharadwaj house.

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Part 1

Yuvika got inside Neil's room & was shocked.It was as if a big storm had just hit. Everything was scattered here & there. Room was in havoc..

Yuvika quietly kept her bag on the study table. She got nervous and anxiously started searching for him. She found him sitting in a corner, putting his head down between his knees & trembling. Something was breaking inside her looking at his state.

She slowly walked towards him, kneeled down before him & put her hand on his head.

"Neil..", she called.

Neil looked up stratled.

"Yuvika tum? Yahan kaise ayi tum,darwaja toh locked hai...," said Neil with a shocked expression.

"Woh mein balcony se ayi," replied YUVIKA.

Neil looked at the balcony & then at Yuvika who was looking at him with so much concern.

"Neil yeh kya haal bana rakha hai tumne..ye sab.."

Yuvika was about to put her hand on his face but was stopped mid-way by Neil.

"Yuvika, please jao yahan se..Abhi nahin.",said an expression-less Neil.

"Main nahin jaungi," she got up & made Neil stand up.

"Nahin...main nahin jaungi.Tum suno. Main jaanti Hun ki Maine tumhe hurt Kiya hai.But meri apni wajah thi.Main samajh Sakti hoon tum gussa the.."

"Nahin," Neil stopped her mid-way,"Tum nahin samajhti...Tum nahin samajhti mujhe kaisa laga jab mujhe pata chala ki DJ tumhare upar bandhook tane khada hai,tum nahin samajhti kitna bebas feel kar raha tha mein darwaje ke is taraf,kitna sehem gaya tha mein yeh soch kar ki shayad tum safe nahin ho... shayad mein tumhe kho.... Nahin samajhti tum! Din bhar tumhe dekhna toh dur tumhari awaz tak nahin sun paya! Mujhe kaisa lag Raha hoga yeh sochke ki DJ ab Apne acchepan ke natak ke saath hamesha tumhare aas-paas rahega.

TUM NAHIN SAMAJHTI", said Neil in a cracked voice.

Yuvika was shocked. She never realised how much impact she has on him! It shook her.

"Neil," said Yuvika with a trembling voice,"I don't understand,yes. But I know meri galti thi. I am sorry Maine tumhe call nahin Kiya,I am sorry Maine 'family matter' wali baat boli."

There was 15 secs of silence.

"Nahin, YUVIKA tum ne agar woh baat Kahi toh kuch galat nahin kaha.Why are you sorry?Hun hi kaun mein tumhara!"

A lone tear escaped from his eyes which he wiped frantically.

"Neil...nahin" Yuvika tried to stop him.

"But pata hai tum hamesha se mere liye meri family ho.." Neil stopped for a while," Yuvika I am not liking the way I am sounding.Please I don't want to be rude with you. Jao yahan se.."

"Nahin Neil, main batana chahti hoon ki tum meri family ho bcz I love..",she was cut off. Neil put his hand on her lips.Touched her forehead with his

"Nahin Yuvika. Aaj nahin. Today I am not in a state to absorb the enormity of these words." He immediately turned around.

But YUVIKA hugged him from behind," Nahin Neil please aise dur mat jao.Mujhe batao Apne Dil ki baat, please! Main sunungi" & she started crying.

"Pal bhar thehr jao Dil yeh Sambhal jaye

Kaise tumhe roka Karun,

Meri taraf ata har gham phisal jaye

Ankho mein tumko bharun

Bin bole baatein tumse karun

Agar tum saath ho.."

Two drops of tears escaped from his eyes.He was getting suffocated. Her genuine affection & care broke the dam inside him.

He quietly released himself & sat on a chair beside his study table & kept his head down on the table.He couldn't take it anymore

YUVIKA quietly went & sat beside him on another chair,kept her head on that table, turned her face towards him & started caressing his hairs with her fingers.

"Behti rahati....leher Nadiya si

Teri duniya mein

Meri duniya hai teri chahaton mein

Mein dhal jati hoon

Teri aadaton mein

Agar tum saath ho ."

Neil was about to get up but Yuvika dragged him down by his hand. Held him by his neck & pulled him for a hug & broke down.

"Main samajhna chahti hoon, Neil. What is bothering you? Please open up. Mujhe aise dur mat karo khudse," said Yuvika crying.

Neil could not see her like this,but he himself was not in a state to console her. He caressed her hair.

" Yuvika kya bataoon...mujhe khud nahin pata mein kya mehsoos kar Raha hoon..but situation kuch bhi ho main tumhe aise nahin dekh Sakta. Baad mein baat karenge.. please jao Abhi "

He wiped Yuvika's tears & got up.

Yuvika understood that Neil was disturbed, she wanted to console him but maybe he was not ready.

She was about to pick her bag,her eyes fell on a diary, looked like a personal diary.

She looked at Neil who was standing there looking at the opposite side. She just picked the diary & kept it in her bag & was about to go.

"Ruko YUVIKA"

"Haan, Neil," said Yuvika with a slight hope.

"Jaise ayi ho..waise mat jao. Dangerous hai.Main door se chalo.."

Yuvika was soo overwhelmed! How much can a man love a woman! He can't stop caring for her even when he himself is in so much pain.

"But , Vidur uncle?"

"Main Sambhal lunga, chalo"

He held her hand & took her along with him. Yuvika was just looking at him.

Vidur was not there.

Yuvika was leaving Bharadwaj house but she kept looking at Neil who was still standing at his door looking at her. Then gradually he went back & closed the door.

YUVIKA entered Mahajan house with tears in his eyes.

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Part 2

Yuvika entered her room.

She was still shaken. The enormity of Neil's love for her was too overwhelming..

"Neil, main nahin jaanti Hun Maine kya Aisa Kiya hai Apne life mein to deserve someone like you.But main jaanti hoon ki ab jab meri life mein Tum ho toh main tumhe kisi bhi keemat par for-granted nahin lungi.Tumhari life ki sari pain dur kar dungi mein,but ushke liye mujhe tumhe samajhna hoga."

She quietly opened her bag & brought out his diary.

"Sorry,Neil, main Aisa nahin karna chahti thi. Aur shayad yeh sahi bhi nahin hai but I don't know what else can I do now.So I have to do this."

First page: THOUGHTS OF A LOST BOY

Yuvika caressed it with a lot of emotions. She started reading. Every page of the diary was like a window to Neil's soul.His every insecurities,his loneliness,his silent tears,his unfulfilled dreams,his disappointments,his vulnerabilities everything was in the form of words. When he missed his mother,when he was disappointed with his father,when he was attracted to her in Rishikesh,how he felt when he saw her in Delhi,how he felt when he saw her with Kartik,how he felt when Vidur was arrested,how proud he was of her every success, how excited he was when he first confessed his feelings; everything.

YUVIKA was laughing,smiling, crying & soo overwhelmed. She went through gamout of emotions.She never thought that his love for her was soo deep,so un-conditional,so selfless..Then she turned to last page.

"Mom,

Aaj aap ki bohot yaad aa Rahi hai. Maa- meri duniya bohot choti hai.Sirf papa hi meri duniya the, ab Yuvika bhi hai.Woh mere liye meri family hai..Aur aaj jab usne mujhe 'family Matter' bolke khud se paraya kardia toh mere andar kuch toot Gaya mom.! Mujhe pata hai, main jaanti Hun apni Yuvika Ko..woh kabhi Jaan buch kar mujhe takleef nahin degi..woh samajhdaar hai,jaroor kuch chal Raha hoga uske mind mein..par mujhe kyon nahin pata mom..

Mujhe kyon kabhi kuch pata nahin hota. Mujhe aaj tak nahin pata exactly kyon papa first time jail gaye the,kyon Maine aap Ko kho diya. Aaj mujhe yeh nahin pata ki Yuvika ke saath kya chal Raha hai ..

Main itna bada failure hoon ki meri life ke doo Sabse important logon Ko mujh par trust hi nahin hai.Woh mujhe is kaabil hi nahin mante ki mujhse apni baatein share kar sake.kya galti ho Rahi hai mujhse mom! Batao na, please! Mujhse tolerate nahin ho Raha hai..."

Now YUVIKA was sobbing hard. She realised what had she done! She had triggered his childhood trauma & abandonment issues.

"I am sorry, Neil. Maaf kardo mujhe. Ab mein kabhi tumhe takleef nahin dungi.Main sab thik kar dungi"

& She closed her eyes holding that diary & slept off.

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Part 3

Morning 6 o' clock. Alarm buzzed.

Yuvika woke up & realised that she had slept off with the diary only.

"Main sab theek kar dungi,Neil",she murmured.

Someone knocked the door.She opened it & found Isha.

"Dii ! Neil se baat Hui, ab Saab theek hai na!"

"No! Thik hua nahin but ho jayega"

"Koshish karte rahiye Dii! Zaroor hoga", Isha hugged her & went away.

Yuvika again started calling Neil. Entire day she tried to contact him.

She called him from her office too. But no result.

She came back & again looked for him.

Then she waited for him near the fountain with the hope that he would come. She was walking & someone closed her eyes from behind.

She recognised the touch immediately but could not believe it.

"Neil",she said.

Neil came to her front twisting his ears.

"Yuvika main zyada harsh ho gaya tha kal raat Ko.Bhayanak mood mein tha kal.Phir socha raat Ko, toh samajh Aya ki mujhe sirf tumpe Bharosa karna hai. Maaf kardo. I am sorry.Dekho kaan marod Raha hoon.."

Yuvika immediately held his hands.

"Neil!pagal ho!! Maafi toh mujhe maangni chahiye Maine kal ekk din mein itni galtiyan kar Dii..I am sorry.Tum maaf karo mujhe. Tumhe pata hona chahiye tha mere plan ke bare mein. I am sorry.." said Yuvika with sincerity.

"Noo..Yuvika it's ok." Yuvika kept her hand on his mouth.

"Shhh..let me finish what I could not speak last night. " She held his hands. " Tum meri Sabse badi khush-kismati ho..aur abb tumhe pakar main selfish ho gayi hoon, Tumhe hamesha ke liye bandhna chahti hoon Apne saath.Tum soch nahin sakte tum mere liye kya ho! Aur kabhi mat sochna ki tum failure ho.. Tumhare saath Hoti hoon toh mein special hoo jati Hun..socho tum kitne special hoge.Tum kabhi mujhe apnne aap se dur mat karna bcz I can't function without you. I can't."

"I LOVE YOU NEIL BHARADWAJ..I love you"

Tears were rolling down her face. Neil was in tears as well, he knew what she was going to say but still it was magical. He cupped her face," I have brought something for you." Then he brought out an anklet from his pocket.

"Yeh Payal meri maa ki hai. Papa kehte hai iski awaaz se poora ghar gunjta tha..Aur jab maa gayi toh bohot dino tak mein iski awaaz sunta tha,isi umeed mein ki maa ayegi. But jab bada hua aur realise hua ki maa kabhi nahin ayegi toh iss awaz se bohot Dard hone Laga aur maine ise band karke rakh diya.Now I think I am ready for these sounds again."

Yuvika was too emotional to respond.

Neil kneeled down.

"May I?", he asked YUVIKA.

Yuvika nodded her head & Neil made her wear those anklets & kissed her ankles...

"I love you, YUVIKA"

Suddenly they heard thunderstorm. Neil got up.

"YUVIKA baarish! Tumhe yaad haii jab Rishikesh mein baarish hui thi tum kaise peacock ki tarah Pankh faila ke nachne lagi thi.Itna khush Maine tumhe kabhi nahin dekha",said Neil still reliving those memories..of their Rishikesh days.

"Neil! Main aaj usse zyada khush hoon"

Neil looked at YUVIKA,she stretched her hands,Neil kept his hand on her & two drops of rain fell on his hand.Both of them looked up.Let those rain drops kiss their face.

Neil dragged her towards himself & held her back, gradually slided his hand towards her waist.A shiver ran down her spine. She embraced him..& started swinging

" Badale rashtein jharne aur naadi

Badle deep ki Tim Tim

Chede zindagi dhun koi nayii

badle barkha ki rimjhim

Badalegi rituein adaa

Par mein rahungi sada usi tarah

Teri baahon meiin bahein daal ke

Har lamha har pal

Kaise mujhe Tum mil Gaye

Kismat pe aye na yakeen"

"Thank you, Neil, thank you for giving me hope"

"Thank you YUVIKA for giving me life"

Both of them laughed & were peacefully dancing in eachother's arms.

YUVIKA closed her eyes & remembered her father & thanked him & almighty for sending a man like Neil Bharadwaj to her life. He is her biggest blessingsmiley27.

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Ohh so now I am feeling light. Thanks for readingsmiley27. Hope it worked out.

Thanks Saumya for encouraging again..smiley27

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Now please do give it a try. Waiting for your feedback.

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Asmi, mereko iss SS ka 90% chahiye tha show mein😭😭🥺 lekin kamina swastik nahi diyasmiley7

Par Tumne mere wish puri kar di thank you 😭❤️

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I am ALWAYS right! smiley14 Maine kaha masterpiece hai, to hai baat khatam.

Also, tell them by encouragement you mean I forced and threatened you because I did. smiley37

This SS made my Sunday. Warna bland jata. And honestly, ye is hafte ke Vanshaj se laakh guna achha tha. I told you it's criminal to not post it. Yaha sabka Sunday boring ja rha hoga, unless some people do have a life. smiley36

As I said earlier, I liked how Neil despite all this hurt could only think about Yuvika. But that's Neil for you. What I loveed was Yuvika going through so many emotions for Neil. This isn't highlighted enough in the story. So thank you girlfriend for writing this. Aur likho, I am getting greedy now smiley36

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oh my God , uff kya tha ye , i am in cloud 9

agar iss ss ka kuch part vi show mai dikh jata to kya problem thi makers smiley7

and for review , i am unable to write anything , currently i am feeling like Yuvika when she was reading Neil's diary crying , smiling , overwhelmed smiley31

makers fukk off , we have born writers here and our born writers can write 100000000 infinite times better story than you idiots

and atlast lots of loveeeeeeeeeee for writing this beautiful sssmiley27smiley31

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Thank you Saumya smiley31

For encouraging this ARTIST to share her ART with us , she thinks soo deep smiley27

Neil writing diary uff! Such a great addition

This thought itself is soooo beautiful ❤️

I mean why only girls writes diary in fictions?

The guy putting down his vulnerabilities in a diary makes sooo much more sense smiley32

I can literally visualise everything specially Neil asking her to go through the main door not balcony smiley14

I loved this smiley42

I have read so many NeiVika fictions today that I am FULL, I don't have words which actually can do justice to these pieces of WRITINGS.

Soooo overwhelmed right now

You guys are awesome smiley31

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Originally posted by: samIHA04

Asmi, mereko iss SS ka 90% chahiye tha show mein😭😭🥺 lekin kamina swastik nahi diyasmiley7

Par Tumne mere wish puri kar di thank you 😭❤️

Aww! Thank you so much. ..smiley27

I just couldn't digest the way the makers let this go....Glad that you liked it..

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