Fichain #3: Start Date 19 June (World building, Segment #10: pg - 16) - Page 3

Wah...its a great storyline...loving and enjoying it so much. All of you girls, Tia, Neha & Hinna have written your respective segments so well. Would have definitely tried something to write over here if I wasn't writing the other fic as I am not a pro writer like you people. But do tag me once you update next segments.

*tw: body ache*

Segment #4

"Are you ready to place your order?" Vamika's warm brown eyes looked up at the waiter who seemed to have gone into a trance. There was something so beautiful, almost divine in those almond eyes. She smiled gently. Even though she looked in her early thirties, she was around for a long time now, the dark magic swirled in her, keeping her from ageing, from her body decaying, and her mind from collapsing. She was using dark magic to maintain the balance of the universe itself. All is fair in love and war.

She thanked the waiter who kept a plate of waffles and a cold chocolate shake in front of her. "It's on the house," He smiled charmingly and walked away.

Vamika placed the straw between her lips and started at the table that was occupied not so long by Gustav and Karan.

Karam, the poor man looked so weak, like the universe itself was collapsing on him, like he was being consumed by dark matter inside him. But unknown to him, or Gustav, Gustav had created this collapse.

She could still feel the magic, even though it had been almost three months since Gustav had played a small, fatal trick on Karan. He hadn't just bugged Karan's phone, he had bugged the man's life, his destiny, and now it was collapsing on Karan and the people around him.

Gustav was not realizing it, but he was killing the man he was attracted to, and Vamika had to stop it. A small spell and Karan would know the truth, and Gustav would feel Karan's pain.

Vamika never understood Gustav, he had powers to change the world, but he used them for something as feeble as love. It was a different matter that his powers would kill people except him, but love was nothing compared to the universe and the purpose of people to serve the bigger greater good.

For Vamika, magic was her world, it had to be protected, and preserved, for the universe, so it pained her when people didn't realize its value, its beauty. She knew what it was to lose everything to magic, but the power it gave was like no other and she wished Gustav understood it. She hoped that her presence was alone enough for him to wake up from his infatuation.

Vamika placed the notes and left. The waiter blinked in surprise, no one had ever tipped him this well.

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Gustav winced in pain. It felt as if someone was pulling his veins together in a ball. He fell to the ground and Karan towered over him.

"Yeah, that happens sometimes. Doctors haven't reached a proper conclusion, but they say that it's like my cells are corroding."

Gustav looked at him in shock. Only one person could cause people's very being to disappear. Was she here?

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Vamika is based on Wanda and Ancient one from MCU and her motivations on young 17 year old Dumbledore from Harry Potter. You can continue it as you wish, but if you know these characters, you can flush out Vamika better. Since she was introduced in Miss T's post, she counts as lead/antihero/villain of this one, your call.

Badass women screwing the world, yes please!

Yay you continued

will read and comment soon😳

Vamika with her pancakes reminded me of the heart renderer from Six of Crows - Nina. She also has a similar vibe.

Baaki, I loved reading your part, it was super fun and interesting 😳

Beautiful updates, Shibz and Hinna 🥰

I have so much to write. This story is going in a fantastic direction. Good work ❤

This fic is so wow!! 😲

What a concept! I can't wait to see this story further, and I'm really curious about how Gustave's character shapes out.

Things are so grey here. Gustave bugging the phone, practically stalking Karan, and now accessing his phone and thoughts. Poor Karan! I'd die with so much breach of privacy 😩😩

Super curious about Vamika too, although looking at things rn, Gustave seems greyer to me than Vamika. Anti-hero vibes.

Please kick ass, Vamika! 😎

I wanna know how she and Gustave know each other and their dynamic

You guys have given this a great start! 👏

Originally posted by: oh_nakhrewaali

Aapko nahi lagta aap bahut zyada optimistic ho rahe?

By 'so much to write' I meant write as feedback 😂

Because your update was really good.

Baaki zyada optimistic hi ho rahi hu, no one hasn't even claimed a segment 😭😅

Originally posted by: DreamOfEndless

By 'so much to write' I meant write as feedback 😂

Because your update was really good.

Baaki zyada optimistic hi ho rahi hu, no one hasn't even claimed a segment 😭😅

Yeah, i meant with the story's progress. Hopefully someone will take.

Btw, what did you have in mind with the whole time loop concept?

Originally posted by: oh_nakhrewaali

Yeah, i meant with the story's progress. Hopefully someone will take.

Btw, what did you have in mind with the whole time loop concept?

I thought of someone stuck in time loop meaning, they are compelled to go through certain sequence of events everyday, without any change. Like how pendulum takes the same path no matter how many rounds it takes. Until the person (here Gustave) uses some kind of power to change this.

I know this story seems to be built on a complex concept. I’ll try to break it down for everyone, so that people can contribute and add their own creativity.

Originally posted by: oh_nakhrewaali

It's a brilliant concept, don't you think we'll mess up the laws of physics and stuff?

It's a story, not a research paper 🤣

So it's totally okay to mess up existing laws of universe. As long as whatever it is, it's consistent throughout the story.