Shab-ae-ulfat os - Page 2

Tagging some friends on your behalf, Aliza.

Hi this is beautiful... look forward to the next part❤️

Noorie thanks for the tag otherwise would have missed reading such a lovely writing❤️🤗

Originally posted by: Noorie17

Hi Aliza!

Congratulations on your first OS!🤗It is a sweet story and a very nice first attempt. ❤️ I read your note. I appreciate that despite not being from India, you have written about the gruh pravesh ritual. 👍🏼

The surprise was wonderful! Very nice of Mukku to plan something special for MaAn!❤️ I liked the way you described the setting in the beginning of the OS with the fire crackers and the drone showering rose petals. 👍🏼And the best part was the house was on both Anuj and Anupama's names! ⭐️Mukku's gift, the bonding between MaAnvika as well as Samar, Kinjal, Pakhi and Anuj was all very endearing! ❤️Especially the papa buddy, dadda buddy part! ❤️Kudos to you for making Pakhi realize her father's toxic, controlling nature! 👍🏼Thank you for acknowledging the little note inte beginning.❤

Now I have some suggestions for you. Please dont mind dear.

1) Keep some space between the dialogues and the description. You could use quotation marks " " to make it easier for the reader to differentiate between the two.

2) Similarly, you could leave some space between sentences, use punctuation marks, divide the text into sections (since its a long piece), italicize the sentences that you want to highlight. All this will enhance the readability of the story.

Looking forward to reading part 2.

Noorie ❤️

Thank you thank you ☺️ noorie I am so happy that you like it thank you.🥰

I been waiting for your comment..

Thank you for your lovely and thoughtful compliment.

and you can say anything dear i've never mind.

and i just noted down your suggestion and guiding and definitely follow in next part as posible as i can,

thank you so much dear for guiding me 😊

Lots of love 💕

Originally posted by: Peppss

Hi this is beautiful... look forward to the next part❤️

Noorie thanks for the tag otherwise would have missed reading such a lovely writing❤️🤗

Thank you so much dear.❤️

I never thought you guys would shower so much love and appreciate my small effort thank you thank you so much 🤗😳☺️

Originally posted by: Kitty584

This was beautiful!!!!

Loved the masti, their bond, the emotional part everything❤❤

Do continue soon💫

Thank dear for loving my little effort🤗

I will post next part soon.😳

This is so good. Please update the next part

Its so wonderful n sweet os i really like it

Hello very good writing 👏👏👏👍 please continue next part